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Specific Teaching Points Mentor Text The Relatives Came
Specific Teaching Points Mentor Text The Relatives Came
1. Sentence comes from my read-aloud so students are familiar with the text
2. Sentence needs to contain a grammar feature we have just learned about
3. Sentence needs to contain new features that we haven’t yet studied to increase our knowledge base
and help us become more inquisitive about our observations and to help us look at author’s writing
craft.
Name the specific technique by naming exactly what works well in writing and why and how to replicate it in
your own writing.
Writing Examples from Picture Name the Craft: What is the author doing in this
Strategy Book Writing picture book? Why am I teaching this
to this student? How will it help my
students as writers?
Effective It was in the summer of I notice that Rylant is “It was in the summer of the year when
Leads the year when the writing a lead that the relatives came. They came from
relatives came. They includes the season in Virginia. They left when their grapes
came from Virginia. the setting. were nearly purple enough to pick, but
They left when their not quite.” is an effective lead for where.
grapes were nearly Rylant mentions a specific place and time
purple enough to pick, of year to help the reader understand the
but not quite. setting. We know it is a farm since the
grapes are growing. These specific
details help to build the visual images the
readers need.
Setting They left at four in the Tell the time of day The reader knows it is a long trip home
Effective morning when it was still because of this very specific detail
Conclusions dark, before even the describing the early morning start.
birds were awake.
Effective And the relatives drove I notice that Rylant “And the relatives drove on, all day long
Conclusions on, all day long and into circles back to the and into the night, and while they
the night, and while they beginning of the story. traveled along they looked at the strange
traveled along they houses and different mountains and they
looked at the strange thought about their dark purple grapes
houses and different waiting at home in Virginia. But they
mountains and they thought about us, too. Missing them. And
thought about their dark they missed us.” is an effective
purple grapes waiting at conclusion because Rylant has the
home in Virginia. But characters returning to their mountains of
they thought about us, grapes in Virginia, but still remembering
too. Missing them. And the relatives. It is a summarizing of the
they missed us. book, we have to go to our own home,
but we will miss our relatives. Rylant
has written specific details to convey her
message.