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08 ENG Skellig Essay 18ChaseL
08 ENG Skellig Essay 18ChaseL
Chase Lee me (169). This shows that Michaels demeanor has changed about school and life and that a conflict man v. self has begun between Michael and himself. Michael is ready to help Skellig, and Skellig did not intentionally help Michael but Skellig helped him by making Michael a social person. In conclusion to the essay, Michael helps Skellig by feeding him food, the baby of sister of Michael helps Skellig with bringing him to life and Michael finds ways to inspire Skellig to move on past his grudges. These all relate to the theme that when you help someone else, he or she will reward you with something far greater than what you originally gave. For instance the story, The Little Red Hen, used this universal theme. The characters that did not help the Little Red Hen with certain tasks and in the end did not receive anything in return. I know that this relates to my theme because the other characters did not help The Little Red Hen and as a result they did not get a greater prize. This universal theme shows that with people that help one another shall receive something greater in return.
Chase Lee
you need to use paragraphs consistently you need to order your ideas better and organise them into a more appropriate structure you have some logic in your arguments but you need more you include very few quotes you use body paragraphs but are missing an introduction or a conclusion your ideas are generally organised but need to be further developed to enhance their impact. you have logic in your arguments you are beginning include quotes as evidence you use paragraphs including an introduction, a conclusion and body paragraphs your work is mostly well organised, clear and coherent your arguments are logical and thoughtful
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you have included obvious ideas and some that dig deeper you have used relevant examples to show a good understanding You relate your examples to your main ideas You use relevant terminology
grammar and syntax are mostly varied and used correctly although there may be the occasional lapse your use of vocabulary and sentence structure is nearly always appropriate and generally varied. You use formal register consistently
Chase Lee
accurately and appropriately you have included insightful ideas that dig beneath the surface meanings you have used many relevant examples to show a perceptive understanding You effectively relate your examples to your main ideas you use relevant terminology in a sophisticated and appropriate way
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Stay on topic (do not include unnecessary information) Explain, using quotes, how the author develops the theme Persuade the teacher of your pointof-view (interpretation) Use appropriate terminology (e.g., protagonist, antagonist, conflict, theme, mood) You have answered the unit question, How can we explore human commonalities and different perspectives through themes? Explain how the theme is universal
you generally include quotes as evidence you use the introduction, grammar and syntax are used conclusion and body paragraphs correctly with very infrequent errors purposefully your use of vocabulary and you have consistently organised sentence structure is always your work with sophistication appropriate and greatly varied. your arguments are clear, you have mastered the use of coherent and presented in a formal register perceptive and persuasive manner you correctly include quotes as evidence State the title of the book and Use third person in the the author in your introduction introduction and body paragraphs State your thesis and Use first person (I. . .) ONLY in supporting arguments in your the conclusion to show your introduction personal response Include a conclusion Avoid using slang and Separate your ideas into contractions different body paragraphs Use present tense Organise your body Edit for spelling and punctuation paragraphs with a topic Underline the title sentence, supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence Organise your argument logically i.e. use PEE (point, evidence, evaluation) Include direct quotes from the novel to support your argument Include the page number in brackets after the quote
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