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Kim PROV103/Access Short speech #2 Lets move to my first point, the traditional dessert. This is not a topic sentence. You need a full sentence. My first point is the dessert of -Tang Yuan. Although it has many traditional desserts that Chinese eaten; Tang Yuan is the one of important dessert. According to information I found at Virgin Atlantic Blogs article, How to Celebrate Chinese New Year in Shanghai, by Moderator Maxine January 2012 I am unsure as to what you mean by this. First of all, blogs are not acceptable citation. I believe that Prof. Steele covered this in class. First of all, in her 2013 book, Sharkless Shark Fin Soup, Donna Kay Lau recommends that last edited November by Community Manager Katie, in the paragraph of Eat traditional Jiao zi and Tang Yuan Shanghainese also like to chow-down on tang Yuan (glutinous rice balls) during festival time. This sounds like a blog about where to go to eat Tang Yuan, However, you need to tell us about the dessert. What does it mean? What color is this? How many? You need to introduce us the traditional dessert. Why is THIS traditional dessert? Information that you provide needs to support topic sentence. Tngyun is made from rice flour. It can be either small or large, and filled with sesame seeds or unfilled. Eat this is the day that means officially ends the celebrations.

Secondly, on December 19, 2012, Citizen Journalist MALAYSIA 1,200 eat into Malaysian Book of Records by Thomas Tan, A total of 1,200 participants came together for the most number of people eating Tang Yuan. All in all, I learned new information about where that people can buy the Tang Yuan which is traditional and hot place during New Year. I'm not sure if this is the original topic sentence. Make sure that you say the same thing in different words. All of all, Tang Yuan not only made by the different ways, but also for reminds Chinese is end of the day for Spring Festival.