Malnutrition children in Eastern and Southern Africa Argument Sketch Essay Sarah Alshammari Prov-106/AC6 March, 5, 2014

S.Alshammari 2 Malnutrition Children in Southern and Eastern Africa After investigating, eavesdropping and researching different possible topics to conduct my research on, I chose "malnutrition children in Eastern and Southern Africa" to be my topic of research. Having the right nutrition means you are more likely to be healthy and strong both physically and mentally because nutrition is the state of being physically well. Unlike malnutrition, which is the opposite of nutrition, it makes you are less likely to succeed due to lack of nutrients in the body. Malnutrition is faulty nutrition due to inadequate or unbalanced intake of nutrients or their impaired assimilation or utilization Merriam Webster (2013).
Comment [MF1]: Malnourished.

What is Nutrition Nutrition is a worldwide issue whether it is lack of nutrition or obesity. According to Improving Child Nutrition Tens of millions of children around the world are vulnerable to the ravages of life-threatening, severe acute malnutrition. Slowly, treatment is expanding but still too many children remain out of its reach. About one third of under-five mortality is attributable to nutrition UNICEF (2013). Do we have enough food? The problem is even though we have enough food to feed every person on this planet, children in some parts of the world are dying from starvation every day for not having enough to eat, or having food that lacks nutrition and does nothing to help the children grow immune to diseases. Feeding malnutrition children should be an important issue because many of us have been donating to charitys to feed the poor for years; yet the problem has not been solved. It is our basic right to know why the donations sent to Africa over the past years did not change the
Comment [MF2]: Malnourished is the adjective. Malnutrition is the noun. Before the word children, you should use the adjective.

S.Alshammari 3 situation. Should aid fund new methods of providing food such as Urban Farming to solve the problem and feed children?
Comment [MF3]: This is somewhat nave. First, in some cases, we have improved conditions for childhood malnutrition in developing nations. In other cases, aid may have helped but new issues of severe drought, other natural disasters, civil wars and increased prices of commodities contributed to why this problem persists. It is also odd that you mention urban farming in your research question for the first time in the paper.

Urban Farming What is Urban Farming? It is simply being able to harvest and produce food in a city or in overpopulated towns that would not typically be suitable to grow food; it could either be a small space in a yard or an old sack of potato. Urban farming is a sufficient way to save money and ensure having food. Although, many believe childhood nutrition is important in developing nations; this paper argues that urban farming assures that the malnutrition children in Eastern and Southern Africa will be fed all year long, which will keep the children and their families from getting poorer. According to a video on Why Poverty?, about urban farming that shows a glimpse of the daily life of Morris a father of six from Kibera, one of the greatest slums in Kenyas capital, Nairobi . Morris lives a challenging life, but through Urban Farming and the amazingly creative use of old potato sacks, Morris is now able to feed his family. Through urban farming Morris and his family are now well fed all year round. Therefore, Urban Farming made it easier for Morris to save money and he is now able to insure that his family is well fed. Offering sacks with soil that is good for harvesting to African families as a new form of aid may help end the hunger problems and insure African children food and nutrition.
Comment [MF6]: What are the challenges with urban farming? Why hasnt it caught on if it is such a panacea for childhood poverty (as you claim). Comment [MF7]: Center this heading Comment [MF5]: This sentence needs revision. Also, you really need to find more sources. This is a 2:15 minute video on urban farming (should not be used as a major source because it is far too short). I know it had an impact on you (a really good thing!), but you havent been able to add to your sources on this after several weeks. Please see my comment #8 below for a possible source with references. Comment [MF4]: Possibly. There are still other factors that my contribute to their poverty.

Conclusion In conclusion, the reason I chose urban farming as a source to help the poor is because it is a low hanging fruit aid. The term low hanging fruit is used to describe the things that are affordable and can be obtained with little effort. However, after researching I found out that Urban Farming has many definitions and uses, and the term urban farming may not be what I

S.Alshammari 4 will focus more on. Therefore, I will look more into Jeffry Sacks work with the institute of earth to narrow down my topic and get the specific information I need to narrow my research.
Comment [MF8]: Have you tried the GMU library databases? What kinds of key words are you using? How about this source and the list of reference the author provides at the end: http://www.prb.org/Publications/Articles/2013/ur ban-agriculture-poor-africa.aspx

S.Alshammari 5 References 1. Banerjee, A. V., & Duflo, E. (2011). Poor economics: A Radical Rethinking of the Way to Fight Global Poverty. New York,NY: Public Affairs. 2. (n.d.). Morris' bag. Retrieved from Can you feed your family out of a bag ? website: http://www.whypoverty.net/en/video/morris-bag 3. malnutrition.1862. In Merriam-Webster.com. Retrieved March 3, 2014, from http://www.merriamwebster.com/dictionary/malnutrition?show=0&t=139380643 1 4. (2013). Improving child nutrition. The Achievable Imperative for Global Progress, -124. Retrieved from http://www.unicef.org/publications/files/Nutrition_Report_final_lo_res_8_April.p df 5. (2003, April 13). The big picture. Retrieved from Nutrition website: http://www.unicef.org/nutrition/index_bigpicture.html
Comment [MF10]: I did not see a reference for this in your text. How did you use this? Comment [MF9]: No numbers please.

S.Alshammari 6 PROV 106: Research Methods Argument Sketch Evaluation and Instructor Feedback

Student Name: Sarah Alshammari Grade: 83/100 I love this topic! You do a wonderful job of defining terms and concepts for your reader. The biggest problem with your research is that you havent been able to find other useful sources on urban farming (other than the very short video from Why Poverty? that is really too short to be used as a main source for your research). I provided you with a source that you might find helpful. At times, some of your statements are a bit nave--because you are trying to influence your reader without having a deeper understanding of this complex topic. I encourage you to continue with this topic and your research. Be flexible with the research question, claim and reasons as you continue to increase your knowledge.
Introduction: 40 points*
States specific topic and problem Gives useful background information about the topic and problem Explains why topic should be important to audience States an appropriate research question Strong Evidence 40-30 pts 10 8 Some Evidence 29-25 pts Little / No Evidence 24-0 pts

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Comments: 32/40 Nice job providing definitions of concepts. The background you provide is not well connected to the problem or research question. You really need to find better sources on urban farming. Comments: 11/15 See my comments in the text.

Body: 15 points*
States specific and appropriate claim(s) States specific and appropriate reasons Paraphrases information from credible sources to support claims and reasons.

Strong Evidence 15-13 pts 4 4 3 Strong Evidence 20-18pts

Some Evidence 12-10 pts

Little / No Evidence 9-0 pts

Conclusion: 20 points*
Restates the problem, research question, claim and reasons using different language from introduction Explains how thinking about topic has developed and refers to outline feedback Gives thoughtful next steps for research

Some Evidence 17-14 pts 5

Little / No Evidence 13-0 pts

5 6 Some Evidence 12-10 pts

Comments: 16/20 Please see the source I provided on urban farming. The author provides references for Tanzania. Perhaps you focus on that country. Comments: 14/20

Word Count and APA Format: 15 points

Meets word count. Sketch uses APA Template with appropriate headings and subheadings

Strong Evidence 15-13 pts 7

Little / No Evidence 9-0 pts

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Provides reference list in APA format with few errors. All sources from approved list. 7 Strong Evidence 10-9 pts 10 Some Evidence 8-6 pts Little / No Evidence 5-0 pts

Language: 10 Points
Has few grammar and spelling errors that do not affect reader comprehension

Comments: 10/10 Very few issues noted in yellow highlight (for revising)