Harriet writes:

“All paragraphs must have a Topic Sentence at the

beginning except the first paragraph which has a
Thesis Statement at the end instead.”

Compare

a)
Shakespeare is one of the greatest writers in the
English language. Over the span of his lifetime he
wrote in a variety of genres including comedy,
tragedy, and historical plays. Accordingly, he is
widely regarded to be as one of the most innovative
and creative playwrights to emerge. This essay will
demonstrate how Shakespeareʼs use of visual
suggestion is paramount in creating the dramatic
effect of his plays, with specific attention paid to
Macbeth, King Lear and Julius Cesar.
b)
Shakespeareʼs use of visual suggestion is
paramount in creating the dramatic effect of his
plays. Through a variety of key visual effects,
contrasting night and day, good and evil, rich and
poor, demonstrated here with reference to
Macbeth, King Lear and Julius Cesar, Shakespeare
manipulates the tempo and intensifies the way we
react to the events that unfold before us on stage.
Focussing in particular on a number of select
passages from these plays, it will be clear that
visual suggestion is one of the central features of
Shakespeareʼs dramatic technique.