Draft Edition Improvements The text boxs show how I have improved my draft to make my final edition.

I have now included the name of the Magazine as this is a typical convention that is needed in all Magazine articles.

I have removed the bold font on due to air and have left it on the day and time as this is the most important piece of information.

I have added extra facts and statistics as this would help to make the documentary more credible.

The title has now been edited into a more exciting font.

I have removed the divided line to make the appearance look more professional and not so much of an eye-sore.