Revision Strategy

1. State the thesis clearly, as I didn't make it clearly in my introduction

paragraph.
2. Revise the sentence to let it make sense.
3. Comma goes inside quotation marks
4. Changed casted to played
5. Replace at the beginning and it to be specific and precise
6. Correct verb form errors
7. Give more details about the mug
8. Rewrite the sentence to fix language problems
9. Explain how the scenes are used in the film, and why they are related to the
thesis.