Meng 1

Revision Strategy

Rewrite the topic.
Rephrase many terms and correct grammar mistakes.
Restate this sentence so I can introduce the scholar before I cite from his work
Delete useless part to make it precise and concise.
Cite the information from the book to make it more powerful and believable.
Explain that Dove got an award of his contribution in the detective genre to show that he is an
expert and I can believe his words.
Delete some information about Dove to make it concise.
Delete the same part and make the two paragraphs into one.
Include a thesis statement, as I combine three paragraphs into one intro paragraph.
Split one paragraph into two, I need a transfer at the beginning of the new paragraph.
Fix word choice errors and make it concise and brief.
State where the scene occurs.
Rephrase the sentence so the information can be introduced clearer.
Introduce Leroy Panek when I mention him the first time cut down the information.
Introduce another scholar into the conversation and compare what he says about the interaction
of the genre with the reader.
Need a topic sentence that introduces the new idea and transitions from the last one.
Cut down the information and combine the two paragraphs.
Introduce another scholar into the conversation and compare what he says about the interaction
of the genre with the reader.
Delete some paragraphs that have too much information and cannot be fully explained.
Meng 2
Introduce another scholar and explain the similarities.
Relate the conclusion back to Holmes.
Reorganized the Work Cited page.