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Sam Pull
Mr. Griffin
Tech Prep 12
6 December 2011
"My Papa's Waltz"
by Theodore Roethke
The whiskey on your breath

Commented [a1]: This word makes me think about

Commented [EE2]: Makes me think, drunk. Drinking.

Could make a small boy dizzy;

Commented [a3]: This word makes me think about

But I hung on like death:

Commented [EE4]: This makes me think about Whiskey = smell

liquor breathe

Such waltzing was not easy.

Commented [EE5]: This makes me think about Holding on to

someone/something
Commented [EE6]: This makes me think about, Why wasnt it
easy?

We romped until the pans

Commented [EE7]: This makes me think about Fighting? Or

helping him stand?

Slid from the kitchen shelf;

Commented [EE8]: This makes me think about, Slid? As in

leaving from or scraping bodies on the shelf while leaving. Someone
cant stand straight

My mother's countenance
Could not unfrown itself

Commented [EE9]: This makes me think about, asking myself

what was her look on her face and why give such a look?
Commented [EE10]: This makes me think about her emotion.
Why feel such a way?

The hand that held my wrist

Commented [EE11]: This makes me think about, body parts.

Was battered on one knuckle;

Commented [EE12]: This makes me think about, maybe the

guy was working hard. Reason why his knuckle was battered.

At every step you missed

Commented [EE13]: This makes me think about, feet. Missing

every step as in clumsy.

My right ear scraped a buckle.

Commented [EE14]: This makes me think about, on the right

side. He must be on the right side.

You beat time on my head

Commented [EE15]: This makes me think about time. What

about time? Are you unconscious?

With a palm caked hard by dirt,

Commented [EE16]: This makes me think about a dirty palm

over a shoulder. As the other person holds him up.

Then waltzed me off to bed

Commented [EE17]: This makes me think about night time.

This must have been occurring during the night.

Still clinging to your shirt.

Commented [EE18]: This makes me think about pulling his own

shirt.

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