Year 13 Short Film First Edit Peer Assessment Feedback

Mark: 1= Minimal

2= Basic

3= Proficient

Strengths cite specific

examples from text, where
appropriate

Any questions you have e.g.

where areas are unclear or
dont make sense

Suggested
changes/improvements/
developments

Mark

Cinematography
E.g. Framing and variety of
shot types for specific
effects.

- Good use of CU shots to

portray emotion (when he
reads the note)
- I also like the idea of a
split-screen.

- Why does he fall back on

to the bed at the end? Is it
related to the car crash/has
he fainted?

Mise-en-scene
E.g. How suitable are
choices made, considering
genre, audience and
narrative?

- Clothing/location is good:
everyday clothing conveys
ordinary person
- Doesnt give away his
personality, works well with
him not knowing who he is.

Editing
E.g. is meaning clear to
audience? Have transitions,
captions, etc. been used
appropriately and
effectively?

- I think the finding of the

note adds a
creepy/mysterious element
to the narrative intriguing.
- The phone call is effective
in adding mystery and
raising enigma codes.

When it flashes to him in

the car, you could make the
transition quicker to create
more impact.

Sound
E.g. music/dialogue/
ambient sound/voiceovers
are these recorded and
edited appropriately?

- The content of the phone

call is good.

Music will help to create

mood/atmosphere as well
as help to tell the story to
the audience influence
how they feel at certain
parts.

Specify any additional areas

The positioning is

Could change font to make

4= Excellent

Year 13 Short Film First Edit Peer Assessment Feedback

to focus on:
Positioning of titles

conventional.

Mark: 1= Minimal

2= Basic

3= Proficient

it appear more interesting.

4= Excellent