The Research Report: Preparing the Final Document

Day One: RevisionGlobal Issues

After youve printed your own revision of your draft, email a clean, printed copy to your adult
advisor along with this file of questions. Ask him or her to respond to the questions below, save
the file and email it back to you.
Upload to the Dropbox a copy of the draft you share with your adult advisor and the completed
questions. Clearly mark the copy as a draft. (20 points for draft and completion of advisors
feedback below)

ADVISORS FEEDBACK

1. The thesis of this paper is: It is ok.. yet a little vague at times

2. As I read this paper, I think the two or three strongest pieces of supporting evidence or
arguments for this thesis are:All the scientific information though it is all so confusing..

3. The strengths of this research paper are: That it is a neat subject!

4. The questions that occurred to me as I read this paper are: Where is the organization and
proper resource citing/References

5. In my opinion, the two most important things to consider in the revision of this paper are:
Grammar and fluidity

6. My comments about the documentation of sources (use of quotation marks, citation of

titles/authors/page numbers, format of long quotations, etc.) in this paper are: It isnt very
good you need to do allot of revising.

7. Any additional comments or suggestions:

This could be a good research paper Lauren you just need to do allot more revising then I
am sure it will be great.