Fletch is not a giant Panda bear, butat he likes honey and sarfing.

At night he

Comment [LR1]: Mitch, you dont need

a comma here
Comment [LR2]: Mitch this is to
correct was to spell Surfing

watches and dreams of starsts, in thed day he comes to class. He is good at

Comment [LR3]: Mitch, instead of

using a comma here, put and in to join
the sentence.

fisics, and maf, butat he talks a lot. he talks so much, the teacher always gets

Comment [LR4]: Mitch this is the

correct way to spell Physics
Comment [LR5]: Mitch this is the
correct way to spell Maths

mad at him. bat Fletch always listens butand soon forgets, so he gets in trouble

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again. Fletch is my frend, becose we both like lemonade.

Comment [LR6]: Mitch, this is the

correct way to spell Friend

Fletch - Mitch I like the way

Comment [LR7]: Mitch, this is the

correct way to spell Because

you have used a capital

Mitch You need a

letter for Fletchs name.

Mitch, you need to put an s on the end

capital letter here.

Well done

of get, so it becomes gets.

Mitch, Instead of putting a comma here,

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try to join your sentence using that.

He talks so much that the teacher

always gets mad.

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Well done Mitch, I can see that you are

using capital letters for Fletchs name

and also to start your sentences. I am

proud of you for putting all your full

stops in the correct places. I can see

that you have worked hard to write

this paragraph.