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Sarah Freeze-Writing 2 Portfolio Revision Document
Sarah Freeze-Writing 2 Portfolio Revision Document
Zack De Piero
Writing 2
March 16, 2015
Revision Document
An observation or
question I received
from De Piero or a
classmate:
When researching a
specific subject, readers
should not favor one source
over the other because both
types present information
differently through their
style, tone, and
conventional moves. It is
valuable for readers to see
different approaches of the
same information because
it enhances their
understanding.
According to
Rosenberg, Academics
write to join scholarly
conversations (93),
therefore
One suggestion,
though: it would likely
enhance your piece if
you introduced who
Rosenberg is. (Why
listen to what this
person has to say,
otherwise?) De Piero
According to Karen
Rosenberg, an
accomplished published
writer, Academics write to
join scholarly
conversations (93),
therefore
This is all
finendandy, Freeze,
but Im wondering:
what are you arguing
here? Whats the point
I hand-drew a comic
strip for my younger
genre.
When a person
drives on the freeway at
seventy-five miles per
hour, he or she will
have little time to read
much else. However, I
also included more
information in smaller
font because the
billboard may be
located next to a slow
country road where
drivers may be able to
read for a longer period
My younger genre
(comic strip) did not
have color in it.
expected in childrens
reading so I decided to
add it.
the delay was long
(2545 min) play did
not regain its initial
intensity (Hall et al.).
Putting measurements
in parenthesis draws the
readers attention to
them, as compared to
writing out the numbers
in words. Hyperlinks
are also used
Elaborating more on
the quote shows that
the quote has a purpose
and is valuable. Also, it
supports what I am
trying to prove in my
essay.
Breaking up paragraphs
is a necessary thing to
do when writing essays
because it gives the
reader a chance to slow
down and identify and
understand the main
ideas. It can also be
annoying to read such
extensive paragraphs.
Gotcha, this is a
nicenclear thesis
statement. The only
question I want to ask
you is: do you think
itd help your reader if
they knew what
specific rhetorical
features/conventions
you were going to be
analyzing? De Piero