Dear AJ,

In your introduction, you outlined the parameters of your paper

very well and described your topic clearly. In terms of what should be
included in the introduction, you did not leave out much at all. I think
that you could include more about who exactly participates in this
conversation like the discourse community maybe- and also possibly
some information regarding the time frame of your articles and how
that affects the audiences perception of the conversation. Your
definition of hedge funds and what they serve the purpose of is very
direct and easy to understand for people reading the paper. Im not
sure if this is important, but I would look into whether or not you need
to include periods when abbreviating United States. You have some
weird things going on with the spacing where your hanging indents
begin. The spacing seems off. In your annotations, I like the
organization/setup that you chose to keep constant throughout all of
them. However, I felt that some of the annotations lacked detail about
the actual content and that you could include more about the specific
ideas brought up by the author of that article. Once you start
specifying what each article is about, it will be easier to explain how
each annotation is relevant to the conversation of the discourse
community.

Sincerely,

Andrea Wertz