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Final Portfolio 2
Final Portfolio 2
Essay #1 Revisions
I had to make a lot of revisions to this
essay. There was so much information
to include that I lost track of what my
thesis was. In my essay, it seemed as
though there was more than one thesis
statement. So in my revised essay, I
introduced my sources as well as
properly cite them. Also I changed my
thesis to accommodate the information
in my essay. Lastly, I explained some of
the statements in my writing to make
more sense and better go along with the
rest of my essay.
Essay #2 Revisions
I did a lot better on this essay then I did on
my first essay. The revisions that I made
centered around grammar and introducing
my sources. I had a lot of minor grammar
issues that I fixed and I went back and
introduced my sources. In my first essay, I
also had to work on introducing my
sources. I also had more than one idea in
one paragraph, so I made new paragraphs.
Strengths/Weaknesses
My writing has definitely improved from last
semester and even from when I first entered Kubler
s class last semester. I still have a very long way
when it comes to perfecting my writing. However, I
noticed that my MLA formatting has improved and I
have it pretty much memorized now. Also I have
gotten a lot better with my quote sandwiches. In
fact, I believe my quotes are the strongest in my
essays. I am able to introduce a quote and make
sure that I explain its relevance to my claims and
statements. My introductory paragraphs have
increased in length and I have been utilizing Kubler
s guide to writing a strong introduction paragraph.
On the hand, my weakness still exist. I really need
to work on introducing my sources and sticking to
one claim. I need to narrow down my thoughts and
make sure that they are cohesive. I tend to confuse
my reader sometimes. I should start outlining my
essays better and more detailed.