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Statement of Purpose Berkeley
Statement of Purpose Berkeley
Statement of Purpose Berkeley
by Craig Reeves
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combine these 2
sentences
name the
group?
name the
program
scholars or researchers
name one in
your thesis
your early Ps, in which you describe your research and that of
specific scholars at Berkeley, are good beginnings. Develop
these, and minimize the speculative Ps that begin to water down
your purpose.
GENERAL COMMENTS
82
Instructor
/100
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Coordinate ideas should be expressed in parallel f orm. All expressions that are similar in
content and f unction should be expressed similarly.
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word choice
Look up this word, you'll f ind it doesn't mean what you--or spell check--did.
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word choice
Look up this word, you'll f ind it doesn't mean what you--or spell check--did.
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scholars or researchers
Unclear
Your construction of this sentence clouds your meaning.
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Pro
Check all your pronouns. If it's not obvious to whom they ref er, make it obvious by using
specif ic noun again.
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best to stick with one or two examples to develop f ully and clearly.
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f used sentences
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Problem in Parallel Form:
Coordinate ideas should be expressed in parallel f orm. All expressions that are similar in
content and f unction should be expressed similarly.
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your early Ps, in which you describe your research and that of specif ic
scholars at Berkeley, are good beginnings. Develop these, and minimize the speculative Ps that
begin to water down your purpose.
8 2 / 10 0
85 / 100
Write f ormally and inf ormally, in-class and out-of -class, f or a variety of audiences and purposes.
ABSENT OR BELOW
BASIC
(60)
DEVELOPING
(70)
PROFICIENT
(85)
ADVANCED
(100)
PERSUASION (30%)
85 / 100
Compare, evaluate, synthesize, and communicate caref ully, objectively, and persuasively the relative merits
of alternative or opposing arguments, assumptions, and cultural values. Integrate this evaluative work into
a persuasive argument.
ABSENT OR BELOW
BASIC
(60)
DEVELOPING
(70)
PROFICIENT
(85)
ADVANCED
(100)
85 / 100
Organize, f ocus, and communicate ones thoughts clearly and ef f ectively to address a rhetorical situation.
Employ IMRAD organizational pattern where appropriate.
ABSENT OR BELOW
BASIC
(60)
DEVELOPING
(70)
PROFICIENT
(85)
ADVANCED
(100)
70 / 100
Recognize, evaluate, and employ the f eatures and contexts of language and design that express and
inf luence meaning and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural dif f erences.
ABSENT OR BELOW
BASIC
(60)
DEVELOPING
(70)
PROFICIENT
(85)
ADVANCED
(100)