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Observation

Change

Impact

Green Eggs and Ham,

Paul Bunyan, and The
Dentist and the
Crocodile

Professor Zack,
suggested that I either
pick all poems or all
stories.

Green Eggs and Ham,

No David, and if you
give a Pig a Pancake

This untied the ideas

that I had in my head in
order to have a solid
flowing paragraph.

The structures of these A peer suggested that I

stories are in a random change my focus on the
order as well as is made sentence.
up of various topics and
ideas.

The authors structured

their stories in a random
order and filled it with
various topics and
ideas.

This helped reorganize

my thoughts in the intro
and i was able to focus
more on my topic other
than derive from it.

Focus 1-Paul Bunyan

You suggested that I
Focus 2-The Dentist and change my Focus to my
the Crocodile
Ideas.

Idea 1-Simplicity
Idea 2-Difference
Idea 3-Randomness

This helped to change

up my entire paper and I
believe this made it a