Nowadays, many children are not as fit and healthy as children used to be in the

past. What are the causes? How could it be solved?

Nowadays, the subject of health has been the focus of the debate. Among these
related concerns, children's health is viewed by many to be of utmost importance. It
goes without saying that whether this issue can be solved properly is of vital
importance on community.
There are several reasons why there is an increasing trend of unhealthy children in
our society. First and foremost, the advancement of technology exerts detrimental
effects on unhealthy lifestyle of children. This is because modern children are
usually indulge in online games or watching movies. As an example, most of
Malaysia children are suffered from obesity because of spending too much time
sitting in front of computer screen. Therefore, young people are not only did not
involve in outdoor activities, such as playing football and basketball, but also are fall
prey to eyes sight diseases. It is thus understandable how the proliferation of
technology hazardous to the health of juveniles.
In order to tackle this issue, it is paramount importance that the government should
take preventative measures on the rise of unhealthy younger generation. In fact,
authorities should strive hard to promote physical games both in school and in the
society. For instance, Singapore's government has gained a reputation of
introducing various community programs, such as walking culture and volley ball
competition among the citizens. Hence, with less time spending on computer games
and watching videos, greater are the possibilities of young Singaporeans are able to
regain their healthy lifestyles. Thus, involving in outdoor activities can be seen as a
measure to combat the health problems.
In conclusion, with mutual effort and collective will, such measures could really
contribute to alleviate the healthy problem among the teenagers, which must be
tackled properly to achieve a harmonious and healthy society.

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