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22talk Back 22 Uwrt
22talk Back 22 Uwrt
1. Write a paragraph or two that summarize(s) your overall reaction to your peers
comments in light of how you felt your original essay met the goals of the
assignment. Was your primary reaction surprise? Agreement? Something else?
Explain.
3. Next, for each major revision suggestion, please restate them (in your own words)
and briefly explain either how you plan to incorporate the suggestions into your
revised draft or why you feel a certain suggestion would not serve to improve your
essay. You are also encouraged to note which suggestions you found most/least clear
and helpful. Please note that resisting revision suggestions is perfectly acceptable as
long as you can provide a logical rationale behind your decision. For example, if you
feel a certain decision you madeas iseffectively fulfills the goals of the
assignment and serves your intended audience/purpose, make sure you explain why.
You might discuss your plans or anything that would hinder you from making these
revisions.
One major revision suggestion I received from both my peers and my teacher was
to revise my conclusion. I plan to do this by elaborating on my sponsors and
providing more detail to how my experiences have shaped me. Im going to
literacy.
A comment from my instructor that I didnt find clear or I didnt understand was,
I worry that this narrative simplifies literacy, and perhaps it wouldnt if you
critiqued parts of your own story. Its not that Mrs. Morris is negative. You
obviously find her to be a powerful figure in your literacy development, but there
are a lot of assumptions made about who you are and what you do based off of the
alphabet and pronunciation, etc. I dont understand what this comment is telling
me to do to improve my literacy memoir.