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Reverse Outline - wp2
Reverse Outline - wp2
Paragr
aph
Final, Revised
Submission
What You
Added/Omitted
and Why
#1
Because my
thesis statement
made the
paragraph so
long and hardly
connected to
the rest of the
paragraph, I
decided to
remove the
thesis and make
it a paragraph
of its own. By
removing the
thesis I was able
to get better
flow through the
paragraph and
not have the
paragraph
switch from
topic to topic.
#2(Thes
is
Stateme
nt)
This second
paragraph I
dedicated to my
thesis rather
than jumping
into my body
paragraphs. The
thesis statement
had major
improvements
the main one
being a more
writing based
argument. I
changed my
thesis by first
including both
conventions and
moves as part of
my argument,
defining both. I
defined both
terms to make
my argument
more clear and
to steer away
from confusion.
Also I decided
that in this