SLO

Write for a
specific
audience
and
purpose.

Absent or
Below Basic
Audience's
needs are
often not
recognized:
terms and
ideas need
explanation
and language
needs
adjustment
for the
audience.
Purpose (to
argue a
position
persuasively)
isn't clear or
achieved.

Developing
Shows some
attention to
audience's
needs,
sometimes
defining
necessary
terms and
ideas and
using
audienceappropriate
language.
Purpose (to
argue a
position
persuasively)
may be
unclear at
times, and it
may not be
achieved
convincingly.

Proficient

Advanced

Usually shows
attention to
audience's
needs, defining
necessary terms
and ideas and
using audienceappropriate
language.
Purpose (to
argue a position
persuasively)
may be implied,
but it's clear and
achieved.

Shows
sophisticated
attention to
audience's
needs, defining
necessary terms
and ideas and
using audienceappropriate
language.
Purpose (to
argue a position
persuasively) is
clear and
achieved with
style.

Comments
Every term that I did not
understand, you
explained perfectly to fit
into what you were trying
to say. You also kept your
paper easy to read but at
times got a little
repetitive with your
words (used beavers,
could have said animals,
mammals, etc). In
addition, you weakned
your arguement by
saying you agree with
the counter argrument
you presented on page 4.

Find,
evaluate,
select,
synthesize,
organize,
ethically
cite, and
present
information
from a
variety of
sources
appropriat
e to their
disciplines.

Compare,
contrast,
and
synthesize
carefully
and
objectively
the relative
merits of
alternative
or
opposing

Omits or uses
incorrectly
MLA- or APAstyle
parenthetical
citations,
quotation
marks, and
works cited
list. Drops
quotations
and ideas into
text without
introducing
source.
Frequently
uses
irrelevant or
unpersuasive
sources or
relies
exclusively on
one source.

A few errors in
MLA- or APAstyle
parenthetical
citations,
quotation
marks, and
works cited
list. Often
includes
sources
without
introduction in
cases when
introduction is
necessary.
Sometimes
relies too
heavily on a
single source
or uses
irrelevant or
unpersuasive
sources.

Correctly uses
MLA- or APAstyle
parenthetical
citations,
quotation
marks, and
works cited list.
Usually
introduces each
source fully (as
necessary)
reader knows
who did the
research or
communicating,
for whom, and
why. Use of
sources is
usually diverse,
relevant and
persuasive.

Correctly uses
MLA- or APAstyle
parenthetical
citations,
quotation
marks, and
works cited list.
Introduces each
source fully (as
necessary)
reader knows
who did the
research or
communicating,
for whom, and
why. Use of
sources is
always diverse,
relevant and
persuasive.

Citations are all great

and you did not rely too
heavily on any one
source. You also had a
good variety of sources
as well.

Fails to
support
claims with
relevant
reasoning
and/or
specific
evidence.
Objectivity
and a
controlling

Attempts to
support
claims with
reasoning
and
evidence, but
specificity
and/or
objectivity
may be
lacking. A

Usually
supports the
controlling idea
and paragraph
claims with
relevant,
thorough, and
insightful
reasoning and
specific
evidence.

Supports the
controlling
idea and
paragraph
claims with
relevant,
thorough, and
insightful
reasoning and
specific
evidence.

You definitly talk about

using beavers to help fix
California's drought, but
you also go off on a huge
tangent about salmon. I
understand that the
beavers help the
population of salmon, but
you are trying to
persuade the reader to
introduce beavers to help
the drought, not help

idea may be
lacking.
arguments,
assumption
s, and
cultural
values.

Organization
al devices
(controlling
idea,
Organize
headings,
ones
subheadings,
thoughts
topic
and
sentences,
communica transitions)
te them
4 clearly and may be
persuasivel absent,
unrelated to
y to
the prompt,
address a
or illogically
rhetorical
connected.
situation.
Ps contain
multiple
topics or are
disorganized.

controlling
idea may be
missing or
implied.

Usually
maintains
objectivity.

Maintains
objectivity.

salmon. Unless you can

tie it all in as an
additional bonus.

Organizationa
l devices
(controlling
idea,
headings,
subheadings,
topic
sentences,
transitions) fit
the prompt,
but may be
vague, too
broad, or
inconsistenly
or illogically
linked. Ps
may not be
unified.

Clear
organizational
devices
(controlling
idea, headings,
subheadings,
topic
sentences,
transitions) fit
the prompt
and tie ideas
and topics
together
adequately. Ps
are usually
unified.

Clear, specific
organizational
devices
(thesis, topic
sentences,
headings,
transitions) fit
the prompt
and tie ideas
and topics
together
logically and
seamlessly.
Paragraphs are
unified.

The way you organized

your paper was good
overall but as before, you
kind of went on about the
salmon for a while.
Maybe you would want to
present all your beaver
stuff first and end with
the salmon stuff just as
an added benefit to
introducing beavers to
California.

Recognize,
evaluate,
and
employ the
features
and
contexts of
language
and design
that
express
5 and
influence
meaning
and that
demonstrat
e
sensitivity
to gender
and
cultural
differences
.

Spelling,
syntax,
diction, or
punctuation
errors
impede
readability.
Lanuage
may reflect a
gender or
cultural bias.
Design may
be
unconventio
nal and
ineffective.

Spelling,
syntax,
diction, or
punctuation
errors often
impede
readability or
otherwise
distract from
meaning.
Lanuage may
occasionally
suggest a
gender or
cultural bias.
Design may
be
inconvention
al or
ineffective.

Spelling,
syntax, diction,
or punctuation
errors are few
and do not
distract from
meaning.
Lanuage
respects
gender and
cultural
differences.
Design is
conventional
and effective.

Outstanding
control of
language,
including
effective
diction and
sentence
variety.
Lanuage
respects
gender and
cultural
differences.
Design is
conventional
and effective.

Still have a few commas,

missing as well as some
run off sentences that
you might want to clean
up. I spent a little more
time trying to figure out
what you were trying to
write instead of being
persuaded by your
writing.