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my initial
WP
submissio
n:
(a phrase,
sentence,
paragraph,
idea, move,
punctuatio
n, piece of
evidence,
etc.)

An
observatio
n or
question I
received
from De
Piero or a
classmate
:

The change(s) I
made to what I
initially wrote:
(ie, the
change[s] I made
to column 1)

How this
change
impacts
my paper:

Social justice
journalism has
been around
since the
beginning of
times.
Throughout
the existence
of man, there
has always
been someone
trying to
expose
injustices

Do you
need to go
this far
back? Also,
Id like you
to find
more of an
attention
grabbing
hook.

Social justice
journalism has many
sides, some more
agreeable than others.
Some deliver their
opinions more
eloquently and some
even more pleasantly
than others. As
readers, we are
exposed to all kinds
of journalism from
annoying Fox ranting
to outrageously
random VICE
articles.

I tried to
incorporate
a more
attention
grabbing
hook to
begin my
paper in a
stronger
and more
effective
manner. I
wanted my
audience to
be more
interested
since the
beginning
of the
paper
rather than
boring
them and
making
them
believe the
rest of my
paper was
as boring
as my hook.

The Black
Lives Matter
movement has
been featured
in many
mainstream
news sources
such as The
New York
Times, Fox
News, and
MSNBCit

However, I
need more of a
specific,
driving thesis
statement.
What, exactly,
are you going
to be arguing
here?

it has been portrayed I specified

what the
in both positive and
news
platforms
negative ways by
were
accomplishi
these different media ng by the
way
outlets--articles in
portrayed
the issue
support have created presented.
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