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    The document discusses the importance of using evidence to support claims. It provides examples from the play Twelve Angry Men, where a juror uses evidence like timing recreations to convince others of his view that the defendant is not guilty. The document also discusses a class debate where a student's claim is rejected because it lacked evidence. Overall, the document argues that evidence is needed to prove what you say is true and can influence how others view your arguments.

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    The document discusses the importance of using evidence to support claims. It provides examples from the play Twelve Angry Men, where a juror uses evidence like timing recreations to convince others of his view that the defendant is not guilty. The document also discusses a class debate where a student's claim is rejected because it lacked evidence. Overall, the document argues that evidence is needed to prove what you say is true and can influence how others view your arguments.

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    AlejandroChavez

    DerekHenson
    ELA
    September24,2015

    ShortEssay

    Sometimeswebelieveorsaysomethingthatothersmaynotfindtrue.Toprove
    youridea,youhavetouseevidencetobackupyourclaim.Thiscanbetrueinmany
    situationsandcanevenbeusefulforrebuffingsomeoneelse'sclaim.Youcanprove
    thatwhatyousayorbelieveistruebyusingevidence.
    Withevidence,youcanmakepeopletakeyourideasandacceptthem.Inthe
    play
    TwelveAngryMen,
    juror8findsevidencebyrecreatingthetimeawitnesstookto
    seethemurderer.Therecreationprovesthetimementionedbythewitnesswasfalse
    andthathedidn'tseethemurdererrunout.Thisevidencemakeshisclaim,thattheboy
    isnotguilty,muchmoreconvincing.Thiscausessomejurorstotakehisside.The
    evidencehadaninfluenceonwhetherornottheybelievedjuror8sstatement.
    Tohaveevidencetobackupyourclaim,youhavetorevisitthemostinsignificant
    details.Intheplay,thejurorsthatwerenotinfavorofjuror8sdecision,lookoverdetails
    andtheyendupprovingthatsomeoftheevidencethatwasdiscussedearlierinthe
    playwasmissingvitaldetailsthattheyusedtocounterjuror8sclaim.Juror4says,The
    trackisstraightinfrontofthewindowSotheeltrainwouldhavemadealowrumbling
    noise.ElTrainsscreechwhenevertheygoaroundcurves.Sotheoldmancouldhave
    heardascreamBecauseofthesedetails,somejurorschangedtheirvotetoguilty.
    Intheclassdiscussion,weusedevidencetomakepeopletakeoursidewhenwe
    discussedthequestion,Isitbettertoletaguiltymangofreeortokillaninnocentman.
    Aclassmaterebuffedanotherone'sclaimswhenherealizedthatherclaimwasbased
    offanassumptionthathadnoevidence.Shementionedthatifguiltymanwassetfree,
    hewouldkillmorepeople.Myclassmatenoticeditwasanassumption.Hementioned
    thatandthatmadeherclaimobsolete.Thiscausedpeoplethatbelievedinherclaimto
    believeinmyotherclassmatesclaim.

    Evidencehelpedaclassmateconvinceeveryoneabouthisideas.Intheplay
    TwelveAngryMen,
    itsavedthelifeofaboychargedformurder.Italsohadanimpactin
    reallifebyallowingaclassmatetohaveanadvantageinadiscussion.Youcanprove
    whatyousayorbelieveisbyusingevidence.

    Introduction
    AIntroducesreadertoyourpapercatchestheirinterestinsomeway
    BClear,concise,andrelevantclaim(thesis)

    A3
    B3

    Comments:SolidIntro
    BodyParagraphs
    AClear,concises,relevanttopicsentences
    BContexthelpsreaderunderstandevidence
    CStrong,clear,relevantevidencetosupporttopicsentenceandthesis
    DAnalysisthatclearlyexplainsHOWyourevidence/examplesupports
    yourtopicsentenceandthesis

    A3
    B2
    C1.5(2)
    D1.5(2)

    Comments:Yourfirstparagraphisgreat.Dothatwithyourotherparagraphs.
    Conclusion
    ARestateyourthesisinsomewayasyouwrapupyouressay
    BLeavethereaderwithsomethingtotakeawaythatisrelevanttotheir
    ownlife(whatshouldtheylearnorrememberfromreadingyourpaper?)

    A3
    B3

    Comments:

    Conventions
    ALimitmistakes
    Spelling
    Grammar
    Punctuationespeciallycommasplices
    Awkwardwording
    BOverallclarityandcoherence
    Eachsentencemakessense
    Eachparagraphmakessense
    Theentireessaymakessensealltogether

    A2

    B2

    Comments:

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