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Fear or Love? Argumentative Essay: Planning and Rough Draft
Fear or Love? Argumentative Essay: Planning and Rough Draft
Argumentative Essay
Planning and Rough Draft
Machiavelli in The Prince notes, It is better to be feared than loved if you cannot be
both. This quote has inspired leaders of both thought processes. Now that you
have successfully debated and researched the topic, write an argumentative essay
on the topic: If a leader cannot be both feared and loved at the same time, which
style is most beneficial? Your essay must have at least three claims to support the
central argument.
Reminders:
Lead: set up a problem, give a fact, introduce with a story, statistic, shocking
statement.
Body of Introduction: put background information
Thesis: include counterargument, argument and claims (they are optional); has to
be one sentence; don't make it to wordy.
Body Paragraphs: Remember to write the claims and counterclaims in an order that
makes sense.
Closure:
Plan:
Argument:
Claims with
support/explanation/sourc
e
Counterclaims with
support/explanation/sourc
e
Rebuttal with
support/explanation
1. Yet, it is better to be
feared because as a
whole, he would not have
been killed and could
have made many more
accomplishments during
the rest of his life.
3.Nevertheless, some
disagree because they
believe that although
Lincoln did not free all of
the slaves, he freed most
which was still a great
accomplishment.
According to civilwar.org,
On September 22, 1862,
Lincoln had issued a
preliminary proclamation
that he would order the
emancipation of all slaves
in any state (or part of a
state) that did not end
their rebellion against the
Union by January 1,
1863. This shows that at
the time, the
Emancipation
Proclamation freed most
of the slaves that followed
the orders given.
government had no
controlthe Southern
states currently fighting
against the Union. This
shows that while
attempting to free all of
the slaves, Lincoln failed
to do so because he
never had the chance to
realize the Emancipation
Proclamation didn't free a
lot of the enslaved
people.
Rough Draft:
Niccol di Bernardo dei Machiavelli was an Italian Renaissance historian,
politician, diplomat, philosopher, humanist, and writer. He has often been called the
founder of modern political science. He was influenced by many great people such
as Leonardo Di Vinci and Aristotle. Machiavelli once noted in his book The Prince
that It is better to be feared than loved if you cannot be both. He noted that being
feared gives you more power and it shows what a strong person you can really be.
This statement that this powerful person had made is absolutely true if somebody
can not be both feared and loved, being feared would definitely give a person a
better path. Being a feared leader is better than being a loved leader because that
leader would have a less chance of getting killed and they would have more power.
To Begin, it is better to be a feared leader because that leader would have a
greater chance of not being assassinated. For one, a killer might be scared of the
consequences if he were to kill a feared leader. Also, the leader might be protected
which could make it harder for the killer to reach the leader. If the leader was a
loved man or woman, the killer would have no fear of the consequences for killing
he/she and the leader would be easy to reach. For example, Mahatma Gandhi was
loved and he was killed in 1948 for his great accomplishments and achievements.
According to ushistory. org, This Indian holy man was gunned down on the streets
of New Delhi by a university student turned activist, it was a tremendous blow not
only to India, but to the entire world. A holy man who had most likely not even
heard of the man who killed him was assassinated because of his ways and kind
teachings that the college student did not approve of. On the other hand, People
who argue that it is better to be loved say that although he was killed, he still
accomplished great things in his life and for the most part he was loved. According
to nationalgeographic.com, Gandhi led a 200 mile Salt March so that the people of
India could make and gather their own salt. His goal was for the people of India not
to buy salt from the British. They argue that since this was one of his great
accomplishments, he died for a great cause. This may be true, yet, it is better to be
feared because as a whole, he would not have been killed and could have made
many more accomplishments like these during the rest of his life. According to
eiu.edu, The greatest accomplishment of Gandhi was his lifelong fight for the
independence of India. Although his death did not allow him to follow through with
it. This proves that although he accomplished great things before his death, he still
would have been able to follow through if he was not killed. In summation, it is
better to be a feared leader because it is less likely you will be killed.
Secondly, it is better to be a feared leader because that leader would would
have more land and the ability to expand it. like Julius Caesar. While Julius Caesar
was a feared man, he expanded Romes territory and he gave them much more land
to live and adapt on. According to www.pbs.org, His vision and power had
expanded the Roman Empire to become far more than a collection of countries.
Instead, it was a diverse society and enormous marketplace in which people across
Europe, north Africa and the Middle East could trade and travel under Romes
protection. The main region he conquered was Gaul, which makes up most of
present-day France, Switzerland, Belgium and northern Italy. These are the land
that Julius Caesar conquered while he was feared. Being feared was an advantage
because none of the countries put up a hard fight when he attempted to conquer
them. On the contrary, people who argue that it is better to be a loved leader say
although he expanded land and the empires borders, he was still assassinated by
his own council. According to eyewitnesstohistory.com , That was the moment for
the men to set to work. All quickly unsheathed their daggers and rushed at him
Under the mass of wounds, he fell at the foot of Pompey's statue. Everyone had
some part in the murder, and there was not one of them who failed to strike his
body as it lay there, until, wounded thirty-five times, he breathed his last. They
argue that his need to conquer land got him killed and ended his ability to continue
his great accomplishments for the Roman Empire. Although Julius Caesar was
murdered, he still expanded their land which made a huge impact on the Roman
Empire. Additionally, while he did not have the ability to continue his great
accomplishments, he still did much for Rome. According to history.com, The
statesman and general Julius Caesar (100-44 B.C.) expanded the Roman Republic
through a series of battles across Europe. This shows that although he was killed,
he was able to spread the land and do what was meant to be done. All in all, it is
better to be a feared leader because it allows you to expand land.
Finally, it is better to be a feared leader because it is easier to achieve and
accomplish goals. For example, Abraham Lincoln was a loved man by many and
failed to accomplish his main goal in life because he was killed. If Abraham Lincoln
was feared he would have had an easier time abolishing slavery. According to Sarah
Pruitt, the historian, Since Lincoln issued the Emancipation Proclamation as a
military measure, it didnt apply to border slave states like Delaware, Maryland,
Kentucky and Missouri, all of which had remained loyal to the Union. Lincoln also
exempted selected areas of the Confederacy that had already come under Union
control in hopes of gaining the loyalty of whites in those states. In practice, then,
the Emancipation Proclamation didnt immediately free a single slave, as the only
places it applied were places where the federal government had no controlthe
Southern states currently fighting against the Union. This shows that while
attempting to free all of the slaves, Lincoln failed to do so because he never had the
chance to realize the Emancipation Proclamation didn't free a lot of the enslaved
people. Being feared could have prevented this because Lincoln would have been
able to continue his work without the risk of getting hurt. Nevertheless, some
disagree because they believe that although Lincoln did not free all of the slaves, he
freed most which was still a great accomplishment. According to civilwar.org, On
September 22, 1862, Lincoln had issued a preliminary proclamation that he would
order the emancipation of all slaves in any state (or part of a state) that did not end
their rebellion against the Union by January 1, 1863. This shows that at the time,
the Emancipation Proclamation freed most of the slaves that followed the orders
given. While people who believe that being a loved leader is better makes a valid
argument, one cannot deny that the Emancipation Proclamation did not in fact free
all of the slaves. According to pbs.org, He Emancipation Proclamation did not free
all slaves in the United States. Rather, it declared free only those slaves living in
states not under Union control. This shows that he did not free all of the slaves
and did not accomplish his life goals. All in all, being a feared leader is better
because it is much easier to accomplish your goals.
In conclusion, it is better to be a feared leader because they have a less risk
of getting assassinated, they have more land and it is a better way to achieve goals.
People like Mahatma Gandhi and Abraham Lincoln could have led better lives if they
were feared leaders; but somebody like Julius Caesar had lead a great life due to his
feared ways.