Be pty Bees’ Crs Teen erty Ears Papo? See TOU a eat] teen Circ Ces chiridren had Cr as eras Ce eee U.S. penal Petes eet hcd 300,000 to more pet es ned million prisoners returning to their Tey Pera Peet ey Oe) oS Sr eh Pere ier: pec ‘Thesis 2: Mass incarceration has affected our society. Thesis 3: Mass incarceration continues to be a growing problem in the U.S. and effects the society as a whole by negatively impacting families and communities 3. Smart Thinking feedback consisted of me fixing the following things: Make the thesis more specific, Present the significance of the issue, & Cite sources properly. I fixed these things, and when my proofteader said to cite sources properly, she was talking about the URL’s in the text. So I went ahead and fixed those, shortening them like I was told. This helped me improve my essays structure and formality. I was aware that my thesis needed to tell about the specific point Iwas going to make, but for some reason I did not put that in there previously. So after fixing it it was more specific. However I forgot to take out the first phrase “as a whole,” because I use it twice. My revised thesis should be: Mass incarceration continues to be a growing problem in th US. and effects the society by negatively impacting first the families, then the communities, an finally the society as a whole