17 April 2016

Dear Scott,
While writing this essay I found my most difficult task apart from staying focused on
writing was flow. Transitioning has always been difficult, but especially establishing a structure
during a compare and contrast essay. It was hard for me to find an effective method. I realize a
learning point was to make sure the first sentence of the next paragraph relates to the prior one
in some way, but also it is introducing a completely separate observation. I was wondering to
what extent I succeeded in this and how to fix it if I did not. I am proud of my writing when I
make observations I have not thought about in earlier drafts or even in earlier brainstorming. I
include in my paper and observation about another reason to use rhyming in rap music by
stating, The audience is now aware that contradicting words such as success and distress and
less and blesses rhyme accordingly to each other. Therefore they can continue to ponder a
further message. This was important to me because i dug further and i hope to make this part
of my writing a lot stronger than what it is now. At times I also feel like my introduction may
seem too long, Do you think I went to long setting up the audience, background, and common
usage of these genres before getting into the actual conventions? I thought it was vital to
understand why these conventions are used and why it is important they are used correctly.
According to writing strategies we were supposed to be working on, I do feel like i have a
stronger grasp on what elements are considered crucial in creating a genre even if it is not
conventional. The rhetorical function of a convention was a little bit harder to figure out, but i
believe it ties in alot with its intended audience. In my peer reviews a fellow student suggested i
add more commentary about letters and i attempted to do so.
My questions for you are mostly on structure: how can I improve flow using transitions ? Is the
conclusion merely a summary of all the points I make in the entire essay ? and how to introduce
the argument without going too long ?
Sincerely,
Tanya Reyes