Freshman Fears and Realities - Comparison and Contrast Essay Point by Point

Name: Trystan Myers

Mrs. Babcock
English 9 Honors, Block : 3B
Date:
Title of Piece: Freshman Fears and Realities
Introduction paragraph, including thesis statement:
INDENT Hook:the

only thing we have to fear is fear

itself.fear is an irksome emotion caused by the thought of
something being dangerous. When an individual finds something
to be harmful, the brain reacts and sends messages to your
nervous system; causing physical responses.
Bridge:(Sent.2-4)

But, with fears comes realities. people are not scared

of the dark, they are afraid of what is inside of it. With every fear there is a
harsh or relieving truth.

Thesis:Many people experience fear the night before attending

High school,but, in reality, high school is not as horrible as it may
seem

Freshman Fears and Realities - Comparison and Contrast Essay Point by Point

Body Paragraph # 1 Topic: Fears

INDENT! Assertion (general statement supporting the COMPARISON part of your thesis) When the last days of summer comes,
Freshman start dreading the future days of your high school
EV #1 (Fears + bullies): The biggest fear that students have when starting high school is the phobia of having bullies.
that people will start pushing them in lockers and steal your school supplies.
COMMENTARY (3-4 strong sentences that explain how EV #1 supports the Assertion) Freshman think that once they walk right in the door,
they will get beat up or stuffed in a locker. Once in your class you will have seniors that will be shooting spitballs at
your face. That one person who pushes you around and gets you in trouble.
EV#2 + Transitional Adverbial Clause (In addition to+EV2 Personal insecurities): When you are present for your first day of
school, most new students may have a troubling social gain.
COMMENTARY (3-4 strong sentences that explain how EV #2 supports the Assertion) Along with being in a new school, you may not
know anyone you share the classroom or the lunchroom with. Also, you may also not know how to talk to new people,
unable to make friends. You also may not be fitting in, making others reject you as a person.

Body Paragraph # 2: Topic: Realities

INDENT! Assertion (Trans. Adv. Clause + previous Assertion idea + Assertion 2 idea) Although, with fears comes realities. Every
ones fears all come with a few realities.
EV #1 (Fears + Realities of bullies): All bullies want to do is feel good about themselves. They were either bullied or
they have problems of their own.
COMMENTARY (3-4 strong sentences that explain how EV #1 supports the Assertion): All a person need to do is ignore the said bullies.
Also, stay away from bad activities. Drama is a bad place to be in the middle of. Drama should be stayed out of.
EV#2 + Transitional Adverbial Clause (+EV2 _____________________):
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Conclusion:
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Similarities and Solutions from Assertion 1:
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