POINT OF VIEW I
1. The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few
feet of rock and began to pick his way towards the lagoon.
Though he had taken off his school sweater and trailed it now
from one hand, his grey shirt stuck to him and his hair was
plastered to his forehead. (William Golding, Lord of the Flies)
2. The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few
feet of rock and began to pick his way towards the lagoon. He did
so hastily, as if afraid of some imminent danger. Though he had
taken off his school sweater and trailed it now from one hand, his
grey shirt stuck to him and his hair was plastered to his forehead.
3. The boy lowered himself down the last few feet of rock and
began to pick his way towards the lagoon. He was afraid that he
might be followed. He was hot and, although he had taken off his
school sweater, he felt sweat trickling down his forehead.
4. The boy lowered himself down the last few feet of rock and
began to pick his way towards the lagoon. They might be
following him, he thought, and hurried. Damn heat! Although he
had taken off his school sweater, he felt sweat trickling down his
forehead.
5. He looked away again, but this time only for a second or
less, and when he turned to her she thought she saw a touch of
irritation. Had she sounded condescending? She saw his eyes
again, green and orange flecks, like a boy's marble. When he
spoke he was perfectly pleasant. (Ian McEwan, Atonement).
6. He looked away again, slightly irritated by her remark.
When he turned to her she guessed that she had upset him. She
realised she may have sounded condescending. She saw his eyes
again, green and orange flecks, like a boy's marble. When he
spoke his anger had gone away, and her smile told him that she
too was pleased.
7. He looked away again, but this time only for a second or
less, and when he turned to her she was playing with the tassels
of the tablecloth. Then she rose and, with hands that trembled
faintly, poured him a cup of tea. His green eyes smiled at her
tenderly, and she smiled back.
POINT OF VIEW I
1. The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few
feet of rock and began to pick his way towards the lagoon.
Though he had taken off his school sweater and trailed it now
from one hand, his grey shirt stuck to him and his hair was
plastered to his forehead. (William Golding, Lord of the Flies)
2. The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few
feet of rock and began to pick his way towards the lagoon. He did
so hastily, as if afraid of some imminent danger. Though he had
taken off his school sweater and trailed it now from one hand, his
grey shirt stuck to him and his hair was plastered to his forehead.
3. The boy lowered himself down the last few feet of rock and
began to pick his way towards the lagoon. He was afraid that he
might be followed. He was hot and, although he had taken off his
school sweater, he felt sweat trickling down his forehead.
4. The boy lowered himself down the last few feet of rock and
began to pick his way towards the lagoon. They might be
following him, he thought, and hurried. Damn heat! Although he
had taken off his school sweater, he felt sweat trickling down his
forehead.
5. He looked away again, but this time only for a second or
less, and when he turned to her she thought she saw a touch of
irritation. Had she sounded condescending? She saw his eyes
again, green and orange flecks, like a boy's marble. When he
spoke he was perfectly pleasant. (Ian McEwan, Atonement).
6. He looked away again, slightly irritated by her remark.
When he turned to her she guessed that she had upset him. She
realised she may have sounded condescending. She saw his eyes
again, green and orange flecks, like a boy's marble. When he
spoke his anger had gone away, and her smile told him that she
too was pleased.
7. He looked away again, but this time only for a second or
less, and when he turned to her she was playing with the tassels
of the tablecloth. Then she rose and, with hands that trembled
faintly, poured him a cup of tea. His green eyes smiled at her
tenderly, and she smiled back.