The Art of Writing SOP

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The Art of Writing SOP

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Contents
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Chapter 1 Websites related to writing SOPs

Chapter 2 General guidelines for writing an SOP
Chapter 3 221 SOP Examples and Reviews
The material presented in this ebook is a compilation of the material in the thread
http://www.pagalguy.com/forum/prep-resources/1501-the-art-of-writing-sop.html
The objective of this ebook is to help students prepare SOPs for institutes such as
IIMB, IIMK, FMS, IIFT, GLIM, IITD, etc
This ebook contains 221 SOPs and their expert reviews. SOPs were written by students applying
to institutes such as IIMB, IIMK, FMS,etc. SOP experts in PaGaLGuY.com later reviewed these
SOPs and gave tips for their improvement. These reviews give an excellent insight into what
makes a great SOP.
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Chapter 1 Websites related to writing SOPs
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http://www.pagalguy.com/forum/prep-resources/1501-the-art-of-writing-sop.html
http://www.statementofpurpose.com/
http://www.accepted.com/grad/
Chapter 2 General guidelines for writing an SOP

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1) Brevity is the wit of soul. Don't go off on a tangential. Each sentence should directly affect the
question being asked. Don't attempt to "build" a story. Don't beat around the bush. Be to the
point and direct. After each sentence you write, ask yourself "Is this reqd. ? Does it answer the
question ? Is it relevant ?"
A) eg. "I have conducted XYZ, ABC, PQR etc. etc. in college". Now your resume/certificates
might also reflect that. So go on to something like "My experiences in conducting various
competitions from software programming to trivia quizzing, have given me very useful insights
into managing a diverse team and the necessity of cross-functional exposure".
B) Try clubbing together 2 or more sentences into 1 to create a more direct "punch". eg. "In
college, I managed to be in the top 10%ile of my graduating class. It was tough to juggle my
academics and exta-curriculars. But at the end of the day, I managed to do both of them with
distinction". could be "Juggling academics and extra-curriculars, have helped me hone my skills
of time-management, prioritizing......."
2) Be more direct, dramatic and use active voice instead of passive. For example, something like
"I was afflicted with a rare disease as a child and the doctor had said I would never be able walk"
could be ""You will never walk, run or play like other children" this was what the doctor's
pronouncement was, as I stood stunned in my chair in the children's ward at Nanavati Hospital."
3) Never used hackeneyed words/phrases etc. they loose charm and everything seems affected.
For example, a cursory glance around the posts, and I seen everyone has written "esteemed"
institute etc. Frankly it has lost its appeal and value. Stick to being obedient, not subservient.
4) Always get the spellings, grammar etc. doubly checked. The worst thing you can do to
yourself is write "....in the enterance exam......." And yes, British english, not American please.
The idea is to stick to the point and answer the question : Why MBA ? Why me (why not, say,
Chandoo) ? Why you (ie. IIM-B) ? Why now ? (believe me its imp - Why not last year ? Why
not next year ?) etc. etc. Also be specific about your goals (not to the point of saying I want to be
the CTO of Infy by 2020 :mg: ) and tell them you know what the college is good in (ie.
specialization) and what you have thought of doing (you can always change it later, unless its
SPJIMR).
FMS specific guidelines

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Re-read your SOP and answer the following questions (putting yourself into the shoes of FMS
faculty)
1) How does the first para (including the quote) and the second para tell me anything about
applicant's career goals? What would the faculty think? My guess "The applicant has wandered
too much and doesn't know how to write to the point. Also we have NOT asked his
biodata/achievments (past) but his goals (future) which he seems to have missed completely"
2) How does the third para helps me in getting to know the career goals of the applicant? My
guess about faculty's thoughts "Oh come on this guy wants to tell me, what management is and
what manager does...too bad i am still groping to find his career goals
3) How does the fourth para tells me about the applicant's choice of FMS? Faculty's thoughts --
Oops..I still dont know what the applicant's goals are but it seems he has written all the cliche
statements about how FMS is great...(I know it boy...thats why I am teaching here :mg: )..oh
finally in the last line i seem to get that the applicant wants to "manage business". Does that lead
me anywhere? Oh now I need a strong coffee dose to read zillion other SOPs....
The FMS SOP structure should follow :

1) Your career goals
2) What you need to do to achieve those goals
3) Explaining that MBA is a logical step for achieving your goals
4) Why MBA from FMS
What I want to do --> The current skills I have --> What other skills I need to acquire to achieve
what i want
-->Why and How FMS can help me acquire those skills --> What can I give back to FMS.
Chapter 3 221 SOP Examples and Reviews
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SOP1 - IIM B
“The mind is the limit. As long as the mind can envision the fact that you can do something, you
can do it-as long as you really believe 100 percent. “
- Arnold Schwarzenegger
I foresee myself as a global entrepreneur in the future. I dream of becoming an enterpriser from
the skills and knowledge obtained from a reputable management institute and from the
experiences gained throughout my career, as a student as well as an employee.
With a robust technical background and an active participation in the extra curricular activities, I
feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to
excel in all aspects. I was the Chief Organizer of many events such as PECOFES ’03 and
GENESIS ’04 and I am the Editor of the College magazine. These experiences have given an
insight into my capabilities as a competent manager.
For achieving my career goals, I need to back my graduate degree with formal management
education so that I can enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical / practical
skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence. With its
cutting edge management theories and practice, esteemed faculty, latest technologies and a
highly rated student exchange program, IIM B is my natural option.
I am confident that my strategic and analytical abilities along with the PGP at IIM B will help me
achieve my dream.
SOP1 - Review1
- Arnold Schwarzenegger
The Arnold thing is the only novelty. Otherwise somehow the quote seems kind of hackeneyed.
I foresee myself as a global entrepreneur in the future.

OK
I dream of becoming an enterpriser from the skills and knowledge obtained from a reputable
management institute and from the experiences gained throughout my career, as a student as well
as an employee.
SENTENCE IS TOO LONG, LOSES IT COHESION AND READABILITY. SPLIT IT IN 2
SENTENCE. "OBTD FRM A REPUTABLE MGMT INSTI" CAN BE REPLACED BY "FROM A
QUALITY MBA PROGRAM". ALSO, "EXPERIENCES GAINED THROUGHOUT MY
CAREER.........AS AN EMPLOYEE" CAN BE REPLACED BY "VARIED EXPERIENCES
GAINED, BOTH AS A STUDENT AND A PROFESSIONAL"
With a robust (ROBUST ??) technical background and an (REPLACE : AS WELL AS
THROUGH) active participation in the extra curricular activities (SOUNDS BIT DULL,
LACKS "PUNCH") , I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give
me the opportunity to excel in all aspects (ITS KINDA VAGUE, DOESNT SEEM VERY
CLEAR). My experiences in organizing many events such as PECOFES ’03 and GENESIS ’04
have given an insight into m4y capabilities as a competent manager. (AGAIN, NO NEED TO
MENTION THE EVENT NAME, UNLESS ITS SOMETHING LIKE OLYMPIC GAMES
:mg:)
For achieving my career goals, I need to back my graduate degree with formal management
education so that I can enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical / practical
skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence.(VERY
NICELY PUT AND COMPLETELY ADDRESSES THE QUESTION) With its cutting edge
(BLEEDING EDGE SEEMS TO HAVE MORE "PUNCH" AND "SHOCKVALUE" :)
)management theories and practice(SINGULAR ??), esteemed (CUT THIS ESTEEMED
THING, SOUNDS FAKE, ESP IF U GO THRU A 1000 ESSAYS EACH HAVIN THE SAME
WORD) faculty, latest (BETTER ADJECTIVE) technologies and a highly rated student
exchange program, IIM B is my natural option.
I am confident that my strategic and analytical abilities along with the PGP at IIM B will help me
achieve my dream. (HOW ABOUT SOMETHING WHICH WOULD LEVERAGE YOUR
WORKEXP ?)
SOP1 - Review2
- Arnold Schwarzenegger.
And in my mind, I foresee myself as a global entrepreneur in the future. I am sure that the skills
from a reputable management institute and the experiences as a student as well as an employee
would sculpt me into a successful enterpriser. With a robust technical background and an active
participation in the extra curricular activities, I feel that a management degree will enhance my
innate qualities and give me the opportunity to excel in various fields. I was the Chief Organizer
of many events such as PECOFES ’03 and GENESIS ’04 and I am the Editor of the College
magazine. These experiences have given me an insight into managerial field and I am confident
of becoming a competent manager.
For achieving my career goals, I need to strengthen my graduate degree with formal management
education. This will allow me to enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical and
practical skills, which will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence.
With its cutting edge management theories and practices, esteemed faculty, latest technologies
and highly rated student exchange program, IIM B is my natural choice. I am confident that the
PGP at IIM B will enhance my strategic and analytical abilities that will help me immensely in
achieving my dream.
SOP2 - IIM B
Success is the power to drive change. It is the pursuit of this success, at the helm of a world-class
company, that has driven me towards seeking the PGP-M at the esteemed IIM B. With its
eclectic student community, the largest student exchange program and a strategic location at the
hub of technological activity in India, IIM B offers a unique oppurtunity to enrich oneself with
myraid perspectives, while also imbibing management principles from the best in the field. For
my part, I have prepared myself for this significant step-up in my career by consistently aiming
at and achieving an all-round development of my personality. A successful academic jaunt,
culminating in a 11th rank at University in the BE finals, and an active participation in extra-
curricular field, which included being part of the college cricket team and the students' council
and the college magazine editor, have sublimated their own set of values and lessons. These, in
combination with my experiences in a company which is truly driving change - Reliance
Infocomm, and the experiences/knowledge that IIM B can offer should help me have an exciting
career as a successful manager
SOP2review
Good One Chris.. :D :D Just make them into 2 paras.. easy on the eyes!!! :D :D But ya.. the flow
is good.... All the very best... See if u want to use some quotes about dreams... ambition etc etc...
goto quoteland.com !!!
SOP3 - IIT D
Technical and management aspects of life are cross functional and are conjoint entities.As I am
about to complete my technical education, my natural inclination is towards improving my
knowledge and skills by accquiring a management degree. Management is key to the success of
any organization and this aspect has always appealed to me, because it requires a
combination of creativity, strategic and analytic ability - all qualities that I feel I possess.
I dream of graduating as an able manager, from a reputable institute like the Indian Institute of
Technology, Delhi with its world class infrastructure, superior industry interaction, richly
experienced faculty,excellent management research base and its special emphasis on
Entrepreneurship Development.I hope to carve a niche for myself in being an entrepreneur and I
am sure that I will excel under the excellent facilities and exposure offered by IIT Delhi
SOP3reviewed
I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand.
With a robust technical background, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate
qualities and give me the opportunity to blend in both aspects. I am confident that my creative,
strategic and analytical abilities will aid me in becoming an able manager. Indian Institute of
Technology, Delhi – One of the pioneering institutes with world-class infrastructure, superior
industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and excellent management research base appeals
to my professional interests. Its special emphasis on ‘entrepreneurship development’ will
definitely cater to my long-term aspirations of becoming a global entrepreneur. I wish to carve a
niche for myself in the corporate world and sincerely hope that the excellent facilities and
exposure at IIT Delhi will assist me in realizing my dreams.
SOP4 – Any Bschool

[not reviewed]
It is said "Any sufficiently advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic." I agree

completely agree with Arthur C. Clarke on that. I strongly feel that the Technology is what
drives a company and it is through efficient management of technological resources a company
can grow ten fold within a short span of time.
* Having completed my bachelors in Engineering (if IT mention it!!), this field has always
fascinated me. My astute thinking and strong analytical abilities have helped me in topping my
class/ branch (if nothing – don’t mention academics.. show it where it exists!!)
* After my degree studies, I started working with an IT firm. This opened up a fascinating world
of science and technology to me. Being in a junior position, it always struck me how inefficiently
technology was managed. It has been more than a dream to understand the subtle nuances of this
field and make a career in this field.
Your esteemed institution with its…. (Talk about infrastructure – faculty – students – alumini –
whatever u consider important!! -> pls visit the website & spend atleast an hour on it jotting
down whats what!!)… Graduating from here in flying colours is something that I have dreamed
of and hope to achieve through sincere hard work & dedication.
Etc etc… Make it a lil personal.. let ur dreams/ heart talk….okie????!!!!
SOP5 - FMS
[not reviewed]
The 4-year integrated M.Sc(Tech) Finance programme, that i'm presently doing in BITS PILANI
has given me a good foundation in the field of finance. At the same time, the freedom and the
flexibility attached with the course allowed me to explore my other interests through the projects
and electives. So, at the end of 3 years, thanks to this programme, i have done courses in various
disciplines like engineering, computer programming (Unix, C, PL/SQL, OOP (Java) ),
mathematics and management. I've also done a course each on Legal Environment of Business,
Corporate Taxation, Dynamics of Social change and Public Administration, apart from the
regular courses in finance. Though i have been helped by these courses to get broad viewpoint, i
have no practical experience in the field of finance. I am currently doing a 6 month internship in
the human resource development department of the central bank of india, mumbai but even here
my project is based on software application and no way related to finance.
So now, as the time has come for me to enter the corporate world, i feel the need to equip myself
with practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with
confidence. I believe that the MBA programme from FMS, with its intimate faculty and
oppurtunities to work on projects in real life, will add value to my skills as a manager. After
completion of the programme from FMS, i see myself in the field of investment banking, where i
plan to assess my potential and strive towards actualizing it.
SOP6 - IIM B
[not reviewed]
Lao Tse said, “Take a step towards your goal. The journey of a thousand miles begins with one
step”. My career goal is to own a technology-driven firm and I believe a management degree to
be the first step towards attaining it. In my view, the key to being a successful entrepreneur lies
in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals and a comprehensive understanding of
the functioning of an organization.
I have been a boarder since I was six years old. Having to cope on my own from such a tender
age, I have cultivated a sense of independence coupled with an adaptability to respond to
transient environments. Moreover, my experience as a hostel boarder has instilled in me an
aptitude for teamwork which helps me to gel with any set of individuals effectively.
My drive to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic records. I was ranked first in class
in standard X and XII board exams, and this trend has continued throughout my undergraduate
studies at IIT Kharagpur. Besides being consistently ranked 1st in my department, I have had
ample scope to organize and participate in various extra-curricular activities. Apart from heading
various dormitory teams, I also served as the Governor of “Alankar”, the annual literary
publication of IIT and was responsible for designing its online version. In my final year, I was a
member of the Steering Committee for Ideon 2003, the IIT techfest. It was the final decision-
making body responsible for the staging of the whole event right from logistics to actual
planning and execution. I was also selected for a summer internship at Georgia Technology
University, where I headed a multinational group of eight, which gave me further grounding in
managing people and group conflicts.
My inter-personal skills and aptitude for teamwork coupled with my career goal, earmark
management as the ideal career option for me. I sincerely believe that IIM B, with its emphasis
on “development of global managers” using management practice, would provide me the
requisite platform for realizing my ambition.
SOP7 - General
The value of an idea lies in the using of it", remarked Thomas Edison. I have always believed in
the power of ideas. Coming from an engineering background I have always been fascinated by
the application of ideas to the betterment of our lives. Working in a "knowledge" industry has,
however, made me realise that there is many a slip between the cup and the lip. Shaping a great
idea into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills and intimate
knowledge of business. These are also the pre-requisites that I require for taking up roles that
affect, directly, the strategic business decisions of an organsation. I believe that your esteemed
institution, with its world class faculty, infrastructure and students can provide me with the skills
and knowledge, required to fulfill my objectives.
SOP7review
hey Vishal.. Thats one of the NEAT essays i have seen till date... :D :D Very TRUE... Very
nice...It has a good ring to it... See if u can tune it up a lil bit more.. try to elaborate on ur dreams
etc etc...As u have said... try to bring in ur backgroud.. link it up to what u have done till date..
what u wanna do.. where u see urself & why IIMB for all these!! I really cant help u here...
U are almost there.. U just need to tune it up a lil bit & it will be fine... :D :D
SOP8 - IIM B
I have always been inspired by Steve Jobs to start a company which is at the cutting edge of
technology and makes a difference to lives of people around me. I chose to pursue engineering
from a premier institute like IT-BHU so that I can learn about technology.
But during my time in the engineering college and also during my summer internships, I realized
that just begin at the forefront of technology does not guarantee success in today’s world. As
David M. Ogilvy pointed out “ In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a creative
original thinker unless you can also sell what you create. Management cannot be expected to
recognize a good idea unless it is presented to them by a good salesman.”
I have been trying to inculcate in myself the various qualities needed to be a successful manager.
I have been a part of the various events happening at my college at various levels rite from my
first year. In my final year, I have been part of organizing committee of “Autochondriac ‘04” and
“Spardha ‘04”. In both of these events I was overseeing the publicity and co-ordination between
various members. I believe this gave me some experience in managing people and groups.
I believe that IIM-B, with its world class faculty, infrastructure, competitive environment along
with its location in the “Silicon Valley” of India will help me achieve my career objective. I
would be learning the nuances of management as well be close to the best things happening in
the technological field in India giving me a broader prospective.
SOP8review
Listen.. dont u think u are using too many big wigs names here.. I would rather be happy with u
quoting somethings.. but ppl... Hmmm... not really sure about this!!! I would rather U talk more
about ur dreams & what u wanna do thing... I can work on this if u are sure that U need
these guys in ur SOP!!! Let me know...
SOP9 - IIM B
[not reviewed]
My ambition is to setup a software solutions company down the line fifteen to twenty years. I
want to work as a manager with reputed organizations at various levels for considerable amout of
time to gain the required expertise and networking abilities.
With this goal in my mind, I have done diploma and engineering in computer science. Later
while working as a software engineer with Xinthe Technologies, I have realized the importance
of a formal management education. It can help me in honing my quantitative, qualitative,
analytical and interpersonal skills which are necessary for a budding manager. IIM-B can help
me in reaching my goals through its excellent faculty, infrastructure, curriculam (especially
Enterpreneurship courses) and high quality intake.
My past achievements such as State First Rank in ECET'99, National level prizes in software
competitions and my organizational abilities and leadership skills prove that, given a chance to
pursue PGP from IIM-B, I would strive to be best there too.
SOP10 - IIM B
To manage you need to learn and listen.

iim-b can allow me an intense and proactive
interaction with a diverse and lively peer group to
enable me to learn from them.I believe the competitive
dynamic and fulfilling environment, with the chance
to be tempered by the master craftsmen of the art of
management will enable me to pursue my aim in the
ocean that is management successfully. listening to
them will help me shape my career.
SOP10review
Confucius said, "I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand." And I strongly
believe that to manage efficiently, action is important, which comes from learning and listening.
This learning and listening is what I seek for in IIM-B.
IIM-B gives me the opportunity to work in an intensive and proactive environment. I am eager to
interact with a diverse and lively peer group. I feel that the learning, which comes form a
competitive, dynamic and fulfilling atmosphere, will enable me to take up challenging roles in
the field of management. It has been my dream (talk about ur dream – working in a senior
positions in what.. maketting.. finance etc etc OR staring ur own firm etc etc) and IIM-B is my
first step towards achieving my dreams.
SOP10corrected
the learning, which comes form a competitive, dynamic and fulfilling atmosphere, will enable
me to take up challenging roles in the corporate world.
to this end i have already completed my bachelors in business mgt. i have tried to hone my skills
to the corporate world and would like to perfect them at iim-b
SOP11 - SJPIMR Template

[not reviewed]
"Through my experience as a software developer, I have observed that any organization requires
strong leadership from upper management to succeed. For this reason, I want to be part of that
leadership someday. My MCA training however, has not prepared me to deal with the broad
strategic issues faced by executives. I need outstanding general management skills and
leadership development to help me effect a successful transition from technical expert to
visionary business leader. SPJIMR's rigorous MBA program, in particular the Information
Management track, will give me a thorough understanding of how to lead an organization while
sharpening my ability to analyze technological innovations in the context of strategic planning,
organizational design and global competition."
SOP12 - General
During most of my academic life, I have been studying various concepts related to science and
technology. Hence I did not have much opportunity to learn concepts related to business and
economy. Learning such concepts is essential in today’s rapidly changing corporate scenario.
Considering that I see my self as an entrepreneur after about 15-20 years, this knowledge will be
very useful. A MBA would be one of the most suitable ways to gain more exposure to these
concepts.
Also a MBA would mean an opportunity to interact with a variety of people, coming from varied
backgrounds. As some of my batch mates may have work experience, they can give me valuable
inputs about the industry .All this would certainly contribute to an overall development of my
personality and my soft-skills.
One of my short term goals is to work in a renowned firm, preferably in the consumer electronics
industry and most companies coming to this campus certainly do fit in my scheme of things.
Hence an MBA from this institute will certainly lead me towards a better future.
The balance between conceptual learning and industrial practices as well as the sensitivity of the
curriculum towards new trends in managerial practices are some features that attract me towards
this program.
SOP12r
learn business and economy still this line doesnt seem fit here
SOP13 - IIMB
When I go higher up in my career as team leader, apart from managing the technical aspects of
the project I will have to build teams, make critical decisions, communicate with customers who
are from different geography and culture and co-ordinate with other teams. When the growth
extends to managing huge projects and clients, I will also have to work on other functional
aspects like budgeting, managing larger teams, resource planning, operations management,
delivery, focusing issues from customer’s perspective, manage joint ventures and partnerships,
etc.
Also, my Vision to create employment for at least 1000 people and the promising opportunities
that I could foresee in the technology arena through my experience in the Communication
Software Industry, inspire entrepreneurial desires in me. With my experience in the industry, I
feel that I have acquired the requisite amount of knowledge in the nitty-gritty of software product
design, development and testing and now it’s time to take the next step in fulfilling my lifetime
goals.
Being from technical background, I perceive the need to undergo formal management education
which would equip me with the right abilities to tackle the challenges that I may face while
growing up in my profession and give me the opportunity to come closer with like-minded
people from whom I can share and learn.
SOP13r
As I go higher up in the corporate ladder first as team leader then as a project manager, apart
from managing the technical aspects of the project, I will have the responsibility of building
strong teams, making critical decisions, communicating with distinct customers from different
backgrounds and coordinating with other team members to work towards a common goal. I feel
that as the growth encompasses huge projects and clients, I would be working on other functional
aspects like budgeting, managing larger teams, resource planning, operations management,
delivery, focusing issues from customer’s perspective, manage joint ventures and partnerships,
etc.
Also, I envision creating employment for at least 1000 people by generating promising
opportunities in the technology arena through my experience in the Communication Software
Industry. This inspires my entrepreneurial desires. With my experience in the software industry, I
feel that I have acquired the requisite amount of knowledge in the nitty-gritty of software product
design, development and testing and now it is time to leverage my skills and gain some
managerial education.
Being from technical background, I perceive the need to undergo formal management education
which would not only equip me with the right abilities to tackle complex challenges that I might
face later in my profession but also give me the opportunity to network with like-minded people
from whom I can share and learn.
SOP14 - FMS
I've always been fascinated by computers and took admission in BE (Information Technology) to
get an in-depth knowledge of the software world. During the five-months of my training program
in last semester of graduation, I worked for a software development firm and we developed an
ONLINE BILLING SYSTEM for the company. Apart from the development of the project, the
workings of the company interested me a lot, but by observation I found certain voids, which if
filled could take the company to a much higher position. This experiences helped me realize
what potential an Software-Management amalgam held. This is the time when I decided to
establish a firm if my own and to make it a benchmark of quality and technology.
To fulfill this goal, what I need is concrete knowledge base and experience. To establish my
knowledge base I need a university with outstanding faculty and one which believes in teaching
through practical field work, thus making Faculty of Management studies with its faculty from
different sectors and of high strata of the corporate world the best choice. I believe that FMS'
rigorous MBA program, in particular the "Information Technology Management" track, will give
me a thorough understanding of how to lead an organization while sharpening my ability to
analyze technological innovations in the context of strategic planning, organizational design and
global competition.
Having my own firm is a dream that I’ll realize slowly and steadily taking careful steps in the
proper direction, and hope to be standing at par with Mr. Narayan Murthy and Ms. Kiran M
Shaw someday.
SOP14r
Computers have always fascinated me and I intend to work on this fascination to build a strong
IT organization that will be a benchmark of quality and technology. I hope to stand at par with
Mr. Narayan Murthy, Ms. Kiran M Shaw and the likes.
My bachelor studies in ‘Information Technology’ have provided me adequate technical know-

how. Five months of my training program during last semester gave me an opportunity to
develop an online billing system for a software firm, which helped me in understanding the
nuances of software development. Though the workings of the company interested me a lot, I
found that certain voids existed, which if filled could take the company to a much higher
position. I realized the importance of a ‘Software-Management amalgam’.
To work towards actualization of my dream, I need management skills and practical business
exposure. Faculty of Management Studies with its faculty from different sectors and high
echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice. I believe that FMS' rigorous MBA
program, in particular the ‘IT Management’ track, will give me a thorough understanding of how
to lead an organization while sharpening my ability to analyze technological innovations with
regard to strategic planning and global competition. FMS would be my first stop towards
converting my vision into reality.
SOP15 - TAPMI
I am about to complete the basic degree in Electronics and Communications Engineering at DVR
College of Engineering and Technology, affiliated to Jawaharlal Nehru Technological
University, Hyderabad, India.
Right from school level, I have been identified as a promising student with deep interest in
Mathematics and General Sciences.
In my college, I am acknowledged to play a leading role in all the activities. I was the natural
choice of the management for each occasion when any event was organised. The college festival
EMBLAZON, the freshers’ meet AARAMBH for incoming students every year and such other
occasions can be cited as instances where I was called upon to shoulder the responsibilities as a
leader in organising the events and I acted as the emcee at the above mentioned events.
The cultivation of interpersonal skills during the course of pregraduate and graduate education
built upon the natural traits of character has elevated me to be one distinguished from the rest. I
have been acclaimed to possess adequate communication abilities, which spot me as a preferred
candidate when the occasion demanded. The camaraderie, developed over the years with my
peers as well as my faculty members focuses me as an outstanding member of any team. I was
actively involved in the NSS-Blood Donation Camps organized at our college.I was involved in
the organisation part of these Camps. I have been applauded as a developer of teams and a
mentor for juniors. I have been chosen as the Team Leader for the Anti Ragging Committee of
my College.
I was an outstanding student throughout my school days. I was elected as the Speaker
(Parliament) of the school.To cite an instance, during the Winter Session of the House there was
a lot of commotion over an issue and me along with the help of others in the Cabinet resolved the
issue.I was an active member in all sports activities at school and college.I also took part in the
ICSE Sports meet held at Hyderabad in 1998.
Having attained technical skills in my engineering course I aspire to obtain a degree in the field
of Management because that would equip me fully to face the challenges that I would come
across in my work field.My long term goal is to see myself as a successful manager in a top
notch company.
And for me to achieve the above I need to do a Management course and also my activities such
as participation in the organisation of events at school level and college level and also being the
Team Leader on several occasions make me believe that Management arena is where I belong to.
WHY THIS INSTITUTION AMONGST ALL OTHERS?
I am specifically interested in doing my course at TAPMI because of the Holistic Approach

provided towards Management Education. The presence of Extra Curricular activities and the
thought of working in teams make me all the more interested in joining TAPMI.After my two
year stint at TAPMI I am certain that I will be able to fulfill my long term goals to perfection.I
am confident that your institution will provide the stimulation and support environment that I am
eagerly looking for.
To sum up, an PGDM Degree from a reputed institution such as yours would equip me with
specialized skills to propel my career in the desired direction.
SOP15r
I am about to complete (will be graduating with) the basic degree in Electronics and
Communications Engineering at DVR College of Engineering and Technology, affiliated to
Jawaharlal Nehru Technological University, Hyderabad, India.
Right from school level, I have been identified as a promising student with deep interest in
Mathematics and General Sciences.
In my college, I am (was) acknowledged to play a leading role in all the activities. I was the
natural choice of the management for each occasion when any event was organised. The college
festival EMBLAZON, the freshers’ meet AARAMBH for incoming students every year and such
other occasions can be cited as instances where I was called upon to shoulder the responsibilities
as a leader in organising the events and I acted as the emcee at the above mentioned events.
The cultivation of interpersonal skills during the course of pregraduate (shld it be

undergraduate!?) and graduate education built upon the natural traits of character has
(distinguished me from others) elevated me to be one distinguished from the rest. I have been
acclaimed to possess adequate communication abilities, which spot me as a preferred candidate
when the occasion demanded. (With good communication skills, I was always the preferred
candidate ). The camaraderie, developed over the years with my peers as well as my faculty
members focuses me as an outstanding member of any team. (Delete this!!) I was actively
involved in the NSS-Blood Donation Camps organized at our college.I was involved in the
organisation part of these Camps. I have been applauded as a developer of teams and a mentor
for juniors. I have been chosen as the Team Leader for the Anti Ragging Committee of my
College.
I was an outstanding student throughout my school days. I was elected as the Speaker
(Parliament) of the school.To cite an instance, during the Winter Session of the House there was
a lot of commotion over an issue and (with the help of other Cabinet members I was able to
resolve the issue) me along with the help of others in the Cabinet resolved the issue.I was an
active member in all sports activities at school and college.I also took part in the ICSE Sports
meet held at Hyderabad in 1998.
Having attained (gained) technical skills in my engineering course I aspire to obtain (for a degree
in Mgt) a degree in the field of Management because that would equip me fully to face the
challenges that I would come across in my work field. My long term goal is to see myself as a
successful manager in a top notch company.
And for me to achieve the above I need to do a Management course and also my activities such
as participation in the organisation of events at school level and college level and also being the
Team Leader on several occasions make me believe that Management arena is where I belong to.
(I belong)
WHY THIS INSTITUTION AMONGST ALL OTHERS? (hope this is not a part of the SOP.. if
it is, dont give a seperate heading!!)
I am specifically interested in doing my course at TAPMI because of the Holistic Approach

provided towards Management Education. The presence of Extra Curricular activities and the
thought of working in teams make me all the more interested in joining TAPMI.After my two
year stint at TAPMI I am certain that I will be able to fulfill my long term goals to perfection.I
am confident that your institution will provide the stimulation and support environment that I am
eagerly looking for.
To sum up, an PGDM Degree from a reputed institution such as yours would equip me with
specialized skills to propel my career in the desired direction.
SOP16 - FMS
"I am seeking, I am striving, I am in it with all my heart." - Van Gogh.

My long-term career goal is to manage and adapt organizations for a global & changing
environment and also to engineer such changes. I also yearn to have a life long association with
education.
I have always had a propensity towards management, be it organizing blood donation camps at
college or as a secretary of the annual intercollegiate fest during engineering at KREC. Precisely
why I opted for a management trainee post at L&T in lieu of software jobs as was the trend.
At L&T, based on performance and potential, I have been rated consistently for past three
years as among the top 5 % talent under L&T's prestigious Management Leadership Plan.
This apart from bolstering my confidence has provided me with wide ranging assignments in
international projects, an overall initiation to business environment, good foundation in
teamwork, analytical and practical problem-solving skills. An MBA from a top notch school like
FMS with its highly acclaimed curriculum, interaction with some of the best faculty and fellow
students, and the academic rigor in general, is I believe a natural step toward getting a broader
and more focused knowledge of business concepts, decisions making, global best practices etc
and inline with my career objectives. My multicultural and multinational industrial experience,
will I believe help me understand and correlate the theoretical aspects better.
SOP16r
"I am seeking, I am striving, I am in it with all my heart." - Van Gogh.
My long-term career goal is to manage organizations that will adapt swiftly to a global changing
environment and to engineer such positive changes.
I always had a strong inclination towards management, be it in organizing blood donation camps
or acting as ‘Secretary’ in intercollegiate fest during college. That is precisely why I opted for a
management trainee post at L&T in lieu of a lucrative software job, as was the general
trend. At L&T, based on my performance and potential, I have been consistently rated
amongst the top 5 % talent under L&T's prestigious Management Leadership Plan for the
past three years. This has bolstered my confidence by providing challenging assignments in
international projects, an overall initiation to business environment, good foundation in
teamwork and strong analytical problem-solving skills.
An MBA from a top notch school like FMS with its highly acclaimed curriculum, exceptional
faculty members and fellow students, rigorous academic programme will help me in getting
focused knowledge of business concepts and shrewd practices, which is inline with my career
objectives. I am confident that my multicultural and multinational industrial experience will help
me understand and correlate the theoretical aspects better to deliver innovative solutions in the
competitive business environment.
SOP17 - FMS
The world is changing rapidly. I have realized that the more I learn the easier I'm able to adapt to
the change. I want to be an innovative leader with vision. My career goal is to lead a team of
dedicated employees who will succeed in their chosen field.
I hold a Bachelors degree in Electronics engineering from Anna University, which gave me the
opportunity to work at Infosys. Having worked at Infosys for more than a year has helped me to
understand that learning is a never-ending process. My tenure at Infosys taught me that to be a
leader I had to have a sound knowledge of management basics and people management skills.
The knowledge base at FMS is a definite advantage that will foster my growth. The chance to
work with like-minded people with burning ambitions would be an added advantage. I'm certain
that when I complete my education at FMS, I will be armed with the right knowledge that will
help me to attain my goal.
SOP17r
The world is changing rapidly. I have realized that the more I learn the easier I'm able to adapt to
the change. I want to be an innovative leader with vision. My career goal is to lead a team of
dedicated employees who will succeed in their chosen field.
I hold a Bachelors degree in Electronics engineering from Anna University, which gave me the
opportunity to work at Infosys. My experience here has taught me two lessons. First is that
learning is a never-ending process. The second is that to be a leader I had to have a sound
knowledge of nuances of management, specifically people management.
The knowledge base at FMS is a definite advantage that will foster my growth. The chance to
work with like-minded people with burning ambitions would be an enormous learning
experience. I'm certain that when I complete my education at FMS, I will be armed with the right
knowledge that will help me to attain my goal.
SOP18 - FMS
I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand - Confucius. Every organisation
needs a strong leader to lead from the front and for that one has to be innovative and able to
adapt oneself to changes. Developing such qualities go beyond theoretical learning and therefore
should be balanced with some exposure to the “real world”. My goal to direct and inspire a team
of committed employees in future requires understanding people and such an experience, I’m
sure I can gather from an esteemed institution like FMS.
I chose to be a commerce graduate to develop some theoretical knowledge of the subject and
now I would like to gain knowledge in depth about the practical aspect of the same relating to a
specialized field. My enthusiasm in learning new skills and acquiring up-dated information in
every field combined with the School’s curriculum and hands-on experiences combined with the
international associations and internships provide this balance which is confirmed by the success
of its alumni. I believe that such an institution will help me explore my interest,
equip me with the right capability to tackle challenges that I will face later in my career and
thereby change my vision into reality.
SOP18r
"Every organisation needs a strong leader to lead from the front and for that one has to be
innovative and be able to adapt oneself to changes. Developing such qualities go beyond
theoretical learning and require real-world exposure. My goal is to direct and inspire a team of
committed employees in this rapidly changing world. "
Okay so far
This necessiates me to understand people and such an experience, I’m sure I can gather from an
esteemed institution like FMS.
Frankly the above sentence doesn't make sense. It doesn't go down with the preamble.
"Though I am a commerce graduate with a modest educational background I lack some

important skills and experiences in specialized fields like finance and marketing where I have
only limited theoretical familiarity through my curriculum. "
No one is a master but no need to be so explicit about it. Rather than saying what you don't
know. Tell them what you want to know !
"I am an enthusiastic person and enjoy learning new skills and acquiring up-dated information in
every field, as they help me enrich my experiences, explore my interest, and give me a job with
bright prospects for the future."
I can correct grammar and sentence structure only when I understand what is being talked about.
Try reading the above sentence and tell me if it makes any sense to you, it didn't to me atleast !
"Also the emphasis on teamwork, interaction with your world-class faculty and international
connections make the program more fascinating and valuable. At the end of my two years in
your institution I am sure I will emerge more equipped and ready to pursue my goal than I am at
present."
Talk to the guys at the instis to see what are the key drivers of the insti. I would probably use
those instead of using words like "international connections" (with Dawood in Karachi ? j/k
:mg:) which frankly sound hollow to me. Try to hit those points hard. Also the end conclusion
should stop at "my goal" don't include "than I am at present"
Work on the above and get back. I will try fine-tuning it then.
SOP18rr
I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand - Confucius. Every organisation
needs a strong leader to lead 1) from the front and 2) for that one has to be innovative and able to
adapt oneself to changes. Developing such qualities go beyond theoretical learning and 3)
therefore should be balanced with some exposure to the “real world”. 4)My goal to direct and
inspire a team of committed employees in future requires understanding people and such an
experience, I’m sure I can gather from an esteemed institution like FMS.
5) I chose to be a commerce graduate to develop some theoretical knowledge of the subject and
now I would like to gain knowledge in depth about the practical aspect of the same relating to a
specialized field. My enthusiasm in 6) learning new skills and acquiring up-dated information in
every field combined with the School’s curriculum and hands-on experiences combined with the
international associations and internships provide this balance which is confirmed by the success
of its alumni. I believe that 7)such an institution will help me explore my interest,
equip me with the 8)right capability to tackle challenges that I will face later in my career and
thereby 9)change my vision into reality.
1) seen anyone "lead from back" ....lead implies leading from front isnt it?
2) Rewritten as : Being able to innovate and quickly adapt to any potential changes are the
essential traits of a leader.
3) change it to " requires an "
4) Rewritten as :My goal to inspire and lead a team of committed individuals require an expertise
in inter-personal skills. I believe that an esteemed institute like FMS will help me gain such an
expertise.
5) change it , it is too crude
6) bad sentence structure. Read it aloud and you would realise. Its way too long and repetitive
use of 'combined' makes it boring
7) what is this?? change it to 'FMS'
8 ) Only one capability?? make it capabilities
9) you dont change a vision to reality. Replace it with "thereby actualizing my vision to reality"
SOP19 - FMS
Liar’s poker, a brilliant novel on investment banking by Michael Lewis was my introduction to
investment banking and I’ve been captivated ever since. I aspire to work with a leading
investment bank. With technology forming an indispensable part of the contemporary finance
world, I envision a techno-managerial career for myself by leveraging my two years of work
experience as an assistant systems engineer at Tata Consultancy Services Ltd. I believe an MBA
would be a bridge between my aspirations and reality( too cliche ).
Without discounting the importance of the academic knowledge given in the classrooms, an
MBA is important to me for the other intangibles like the highly intellectual milieu and the
exchange of thoughts that takes place between people. The rigorous induction procedure at FMS
ensures that. Picking up a line from the FMS brochure “ the difference is due to the people” – I
hope to learn from the vast community of teachers, students and alumni of the institute.
SOP19r
The begining lines are very good.

I think the line you picked up from the brochure is extremely good. This is what an SOP is all
about, being specific to the college. Most SOPs look like they could have been used for ANY
college.
IB is not a techno-managerial career. You are contradicting yourself. Instead of saying what you
learned in TCS put it as what you got as "real-time" exp.
Don't start the second para with "without discounting....." say something like "Over and above
blah-blah....I think xyz is also needed"
SOPrr
1)Liar’s poker, a brilliant novel on investment banking by Michael Lewis was my introduction to
investment banking and I’ve been captivated ever since. 2)I aspire to work with a leading
investment bank. With technology forming an indispensable part of the contemporary finance
world, I envision a techno-managerial career for myself by leveraging my two years of work
experience as an assistant systems engineer at Tata Consultancy Services Ltd. I believe an MBA
would be a bridge between my aspirations and reality3)( too cliche ).
4)Without discounting the importance of the academic knowledge given in the classrooms, an
MBA is important to me for the other intangibles like the highly intellectual milieu and the
exchange of thoughts that takes place between people. The rigorous 5)induction procedure at
FMS ensures that. Picking up a line from the FMS brochure “ the difference is due to the people”
– I hope to learn from the vast community of teachers, students and alumni of the institute.
1) If the novel introduces you to IB, then it is obviously about IB...isnt it implied? The sentence
can be changed to
Liar’s poker, a brilliant novel by Michael Lewis was my introduction to investment banking
2) The second and third sentence can be merged as follows. Also third line is toooooo long....
[You can incorporate the suggestions from Arun...i am not aware of what IB exactly is and why
it is NOT a techo-managerial job.. Arun can explain a bit here]
With technology forming an indispensable part of the contemporary finance world, I envision a
techno-managerial career for myself with a leading investment bank. I also plan to leverage my
two years of work experience as an assistant systems engineer at Tata Consultancy Services Ltd.
3) Nope...a perfect fit
4) Bad start ..change it
5) I doubt whether only the induction procedure will help you build your "other intangibles "...it
has to be the complete program....
SOP20 - FMS
My long term goal is to become top executive of a firm where decisions taken by me becomes its
crucial lifeline. The firm could be well entrenched or a start up. I desire myself to be known as a
person who in spite of all odds is able to take right decisions, exactly when it is most desired. I
want to inculcate within me all the qualities that are prerequisite for such aims. I have a firm
belief that these qualities could be learnt and developed with proper training and guidance.
I seek admission at this institute as I believe that my zeal if pursued in the proper atmosphere like
that of yours will definitely bring out the best I have to offer. The institute is known to provide
students the opening to develop and apply functional, management and cross-cultural skills and
concepts in global business contexts. It would also help me achieve my long term intellectual
aspirations and goals. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the program offered at your
institute. It is with this in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life.
SOP20r
My long term goal is to become a part of the strategic management of a firm, where I am taking
crucial decisions. The firm could be well entrenched or a start up. I want to be known as a person
who, in spite of all odds, is able to take right decisions.
The second sentence is a repetition
I want to inculcate within me all the qualities that are prerequisite for such aims. I have a firm
belief that these qualities could be learned and developed with proper training and guidance.
I seek admission to your institute as I believe that my zeal if pursued in the proper atmosphere
like that of yours will definitely bring out the best I have to offer.
Make it a more meaningful sentence by changing the structure.
I wish to develop and apply functional, management and cross-cultural skills and concepts in
global business contexts thereby helping me achieve my long term intellectual aspirations and
goals. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the program offered at your institute. It is
with this in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life.
SOP20rr
Ability to appreciate problems and take decisions needs as much a sound knowledge base as
confidence to deal with them. I aspire to become a part of strategic management, where my
primary role is to take crucial decisions that would shape the future course of the firm. I want to
inculcate within me all the qualities that are prerequisite for such an aim. I have a firm belief that
these qualities could be learnt and mastered with proper training and guidance.
I seek admission to your institute as I believe that my zeal if pursued in the proper atmosphere
like that of yours will definitely bring out the best I have to offer.
FMS encourages its students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership right from the
day they join the institute. The institute is known to reward initiative, novelty and thinking
outside the box. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the program offered at your
institute. It is with this in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life.
SOP20rrr
Ability to focus on problems and to take appropriate decisions to deal with them, needs a sound
knowledge base and a high level of confidence. I aspire to become a part of strategic
management team, where my primary role is to take crucial decisions that would shape the future
course of the firm. I want to inculcate in me all the essential qualities that are prerequisite for
such an aim. I have a firm belief that these qualities could be learnt and mastered with proper
training and guidance.
I seek admission to a challenging and competitive environment of FMS that will definitely bring
out the best I have to offer. I am drawn towards FMS because of its unique concept of
encouraging students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership right from the day they
join the institute. The institute is known to reward initiative, novelty and thinking outside the
box. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the MBA program. It is with this aim in
mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life.
SOP21 - FMS
"We are told never to cross a bridge until we come to it, but this world is owned by men who
have 'crossed bridges' in their imagination far ahead of the crowd." These thoughts of Anon have
always inspired me to strive for excellance and innovation.
On my path to pursuance of excellance, I became the state topper from Gujarat. This gave me the
opportunity of getting into an esteemed institute like REC Surathkal. The competitive peer group
and highly experienced faculty here inculcated in me a confidence in my creative, strategic and
analytical skills. With this confidence, I cherished to get into the industry and prove my mettle
there. Through Infosys I got this break and got to face the real world of business.
However my stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys has made me realize that Industry is not all about
Technology. An industry is based on two important pillars of Technology and Management.
Without sound management, technology is like gold in a mine. A manager is the one who can
polish this gold and make it worth its value. My experience in SCM packages made me realise
the various knitty gritties of Supply chain and whetted my appetite for a sound functional
knowledge.
Thus I need to complement my Techological skills with an MBA from am esteemed institute like
FMS. An MBA from FMS will equip me with sound management practises which will fill in the
hiatus in my professsional career. I am sure that FMS, with its world class infrastructure,
superior industry interaction, richly experienced faculty,excellent management research base and
its stress on Leadership, Excellance and Innovation can help me in facing the real industry with
aplomb and confidence. In FMS, I find an avenue which can unleash my leadership qualities and
hone them to help me in managing business with a positive attitude and confidence.
SOP21a
"We are told never to cross a bridge until we come to it, but this world is owned by men who
have 'crossed bridges' in their imagination far ahead of the crowd." These thoughts of Anon have
always inspired me to strive for excellance and innovation.
And WHO THE HELL IS ANON ?? :mg::mg::mg::mg::mg:

Looking into the future is having a vision and being proactive. Striving "for excellance (sic) and
innovation" are not.
On my path to pursuance of excellance, I became the state topper from Gujarat. This gave me the
opportunity of getting into an esteemed institute like REC Surathkal. The competitive peer group
and highly experienced faculty here inculcated in me a confidence in my creative, strategic and
analytical skills. With this confidence, I cherished to get into the industry and prove my mettle
there. Through Infosys I got this break and got to face the real world of business.
Kunalbhai tamme gujarat topper hatha ?? :) Aur haan duniya ka har organization ke pehle
"esteemed" lagane ki zarrorat nahi bhai. Baaki the whole effect looks kinda exaggerated. Im
sorry to say but REC Surathkal is def up there in the top. But if you had said the same for
something like IIT-Kanpur Computer Science dept it would have looked better. In your case,
give some example maybe to buttress your argument.
However my stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys has made me realize that Industry is not all about
Technology. An industry is based on two important pillars of Technology and Management.
Without sound management, technology is like gold in a mine. A manager is the one who can
polish this gold and make it worth its value. My experience in SCM packages made me realise
the various knitty gritties of Supply chain and whetted my appetite for a sound functional
knowledge.
Make it more concise like "However my stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys has made me realize that an
industry (??) is based on two important pillars of Technology and Management."
Your experience with SCM sounds as if its force fitted with the preceeding lines. Talk about just
ur exp with SCM and how it helped you figure out the "business side" of things. Just a
suggestion.
Thus I need to complement my Techological skills with an MBA from am esteemed institute like
FMS. An MBA from FMS will equip me with sound management practises which will fill in the
hiatus in my professsional career. I am sure that FMS, with its world class infrastructure,
superior industry interaction, richly experienced faculty,excellent management research base
 and its stress on Leadership, Excellance and Innovation can help me in facing the
real industry with aplomb and confidence. In FMS, I find an avenue which can unleash my
leadership qualities and hone them to help me in managing business with a positive attitude and
confidence.
Frankly apart from the spelling mistakes (its "excellence" btw) I don't see anything "technically
wrong" with the whole thing. But the wordings sound so very boring. The "esteemed insti" line
esp :mg:
SOP22 - FMS
They say, "U hav an apple. ur friend has an apple. If u exchange them, u still have only 1 apple
each. But u have an idea and ur friend has an idea. If u exchange it, u both have 2 ideas each".
Success in life is thus all about evolving continuously through observation and interaction and
ultimately realizing one's true potential.
I am a man with technical aptitude and an interest in management. My BTech in electronics and
communication stream has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills. I believe that
specific technical knowledge is not sufficient to shoulder the challenges of the dynamic business
world. Business is a multi faceted activity requiring knowledge of accounting, commerce,
economics, law, human psychology and various other skills. Hence an MBA study comes as an
obvious choice to me aiming to be a true and responsible corporate professional with a great
sense of Management, leadership and mentorship.
What will I get at FMS
-> A COMPETITIVE ENVIRONMENT where we will be pushed to our potential and Relatively
small batch size will ensure magnified individual attention.
-> A large closely knit and mutually beneficial NETWORK OF USEFUL CONTACTS which is
greatest source of expanding one's business opportunities, domain, and ideas.
->COST TO RETURN RATIO which is highest in the country and its STRATEGIC
LOCATION in NCR which is fastly developing into a major hub for commercial activity in the
country.
SOP22r
They say, "U hav an apple. ur friend has an apple. If *u exchange them, u still have only 1 apple
each. But u have an idea and ur friend has an idea. If u exchange it, u both have 2 ideas each".
And u crib about the words limitation ? :mg: Frankly change this. Doesnt give the needed
"impact".
Success in life is thus all about evolving continuously through observation and interaction and
ultimately realizing one's true potential.
Sounds okay to me if you can think of a better starting. I am a man with technical aptitude and an
interest in management. My BTech in electronics and communication stream has given a strong
foundation to my analytical skills.
Congrats !! You happen to be the millionth guy who SOP has these "being a Btech has given my
analytical skills" crap !!! :mg: :mg:
I believe that specific technical knowledge is not sufficient to shoulder the challenges of the
dynamic business world. Business is a multi faceted activity requiring knowledge of accounting,
commerce, economics, law, human psychology and various other skills. Hence an MBA study
comes as an obvious choice to me aiming to be a true and responsible corporate professional
with a great sense of Management, leadership and mentorship.
I understand these are all valid points but somehow it sounds as if I have heard them a million
times before. Maybe from the same SOPs you have tepofied
So keep the same spirit but try to write in your own words. The sincerity should shine through.
What will I get at FMS

-> A COMPETITIVE ENVIRONMENT where we will be pushed to our potential and Relatively
small batch size will ensure magnified individual attention.
-> A large closely knit and mutually beneficial NETWORK OF USEFUL CONTACTS which is
greatest source of expanding one's business opportunities, domain, and ideas. * *
*->COST TO RETURN RATIO which is highest in the country and its STRATEGIC
LOCATION in NCR which is fastly developing into a major hub for commercial activity in the
country.
I don't think I would put it point-wise. Be more poetic and weave it into a sentence.
SOP23 - MDI
“Things haven’t changed much here for few thousand years”
But one right mould can change it forever. Change is far more profound than what we can sense.
To meet these changes and the challenges in this competitive environment, with a decisive
victory; a quandary emerges as to how to canalize and direct this. This best exemplifies my
purpose for further graduate study from Management Development Institute.
My aim in life is to create and manage one of the world’s most competitive and successful
corporate houses. Cherishing these dreams in my mind, I have chalked out my academic life. My
graduation in B.Com (Accounting Honors) and C.A. Intermediate have given me a relatively
sufficient academic base to provide aesthesis to my dreams. Though finance has been my forte, I
feel that a further study in new areas along with a diverse exposure at this school would surely
add to my academic, managerial and interpersonal strength.
This program will be the ideal bridge from my present state to my desired goal since it offers
extra-ordinary learning opportunities by converging basic business fundamentals with the
advance learning and developing entrepreneurial skills necessary to be a successful corporate
leader.
SOP23r
“Things haven’t changed much here for few thousand years”

Somebody said it.. or u feel so!! If its ur thought, then combine it with the next para.
But one right mould can change it forever. Change is far more profound than what we can sense.
To meet these changes and the challenges in this competitive environment, with a decisive
victory; a quandary emerges as to how to canalize and direct this. This best exemplifies my
purpose for further graduate study from Management Development Institute.
this what??? Quandary? Victory?? I would rather u re-write a clear one... I am not able to pin
point what u are trying to say!!
My aim in life is to create and manage one of the world’s most competitive and successful
corporate houses. Cherishing these dreams in my mind, I have chalked out my academic life. My
graduation in B.Com (Accounting Honors) and C.A. Intermediate have given me a relatively
sufficient academic base to provide {{aesthesis}} to my dreams.
Wrong word!!
Though finance has been my forte, I feel that a further study in new areas along with a diverse
exposure at this school would surely add to my academic, managerial and interpersonal strength.
Instead of schools, write MDI pls!
This program will be the ideal bridge from my present state to my desired goal since it offers
extra-ordinary learning opportunities by converging basic business fundamentals with the
advance learning and developing entrepreneurial skills necessary to be a successful corporate
leader.
business fundamentals with advance learning and development of entrepreneurial skills..
SOP24 - FMS
“Death Equalizes Life” – At end irrespective of ones material possessions, enjoyments, everyone
becomes equal again. This sums up my life vision. Career goal has to be in tune with life goal. I
want to maximize my contribution to the society and to myself. In this life, I have to achieve the
highest state of perfection. Career would act as step towards that life goal. Now coming to
career, I look myself as global, flexible person suitable for all kind of work.
Technology is useless without application. After acquiring technical knowledge, its time for me
to get business domain knowledge. I visualize an end to coding jobs in next decade with software
tools doing 99% of work of coder. Acquisition of business knowledge will not be an option but
compulsion in future.
Marketing is life of any activity. I have marketing experience in my college days selling time
shares worth in lakhs to clients and I remember how I and my clients enjoyed conversing over
any topic under sun helping me click the deal.
My commerce background helps me appreciate accounts and its value. My interest in people
helps me understand and empathize with them easily. I have observed how people dynamics
changes with environment and need to handle it effectively.
Summing up, my abilities in understanding people, familiarity with finance and commerce(
Bcom + C.A.Inter ), and my specialization in technology(MCA) makes me a suitable candidate
for generalized management. FMS with its many advantages over other institutes definitely can
catapult me towards my career and life goals.
SOP24r
1)“Death Equalizes Life” – At end irrespective of ones material possessions, enjoyments,

everyone becomes equal again. This sums up my life vision. 2) Career goal has to be in tune with
life goal. I want to maximize my contribution to the society and to myself. 3)In this life, I have
to achieve the highest state of perfection. Career would act as step towards that life goal. 4)Now
coming to career, I look myself as global, flexible person suitable for all kind of work.
5) Technology is useless without application. After acquiring technical knowledge, its time for
me to get business domain knowledge. I visualize an end to coding jobs in next decade with
software tools doing 99% of work of coder. Acquisition of business knowledge will not be an
option but compulsion in future.
6)Marketing is life of any activity. I have marketing experience in my college days selling time
shares worth in lakhs to clients and I remember how I and my clients enjoyed conversing over
any topic under sun helping me click the deal.
7)My commerce background helps me appreciate accounts and its value. My interest in people
helps me understand and empathize with them easily. I have observed how people dynamics
changes with environment and need to handle it effectively.
Summing up, my abilities in understanding people, familiarity with finance and commerce(
Bcom + C.A.Inter ), and my specialization in technology(MCA) makes me a suitable candidate
for generalized management. 8)FMS with its many advantages over other institutes definitely
can catapult me towards my career and life goals.
My take on your SOP :
1) Why this philosophy? What are you trying to tell? What does "equal" means?
2) Does NOT relate with why you are an MBA aspirant? Does MBA a prerequiste for social
contribution?
3) A discontinuity ....what kind of perfection? (its too high a funda, which atleast I am NOT able
to understand)
4) Is this your career ==> "doing any kind of job" ? Boy you need to do a real introspection
5) Come on ...why there is a need to predict the future..... your last line indicates that since it is
anyway going to be a compulsion (as per you) thats why you want to get business
knowledge.....you are conveying a bad impression
6) Atleast the FMS question does NOT ask for your experience, then why elaborate on sth which
is NOT asked....this entire para does not give anything to the reader...(Remember he is much
more expert in "skimming" and "skipping" techniques than any of us and he has hundreds of
other 'relevant' SOPs to read)
7) So what?? You are NOT suppossed to convince the reader entirely here that you are suitable
person for MBA in their institute...lets keep that for the PI....he is asking for what your career
goals are and how this particular program (& institute) will help you in achieving it.
8 ) Expand this...what is FMS has that aligns with your goals. (I feel that it is best NOT to
compare various institutes, atleast in the SOP)
SOP25 - FMS
An idea has the potential to change the life of millions. But an idea, besides needing the technical
know how, also needs the skills to handle the complex real life situations. The technical
knowledge can tell where to enter but not how to handle intricate issues? I have always dreamed
about implementing ideas to real life.
An urge to be an entrepreneur, to successfully marry science with a commercial enterprise,

which can also benefit the mankind, has always been a fascinating thought. I want to make this
dream into a passion, a reality that can be a success. An inclination towards managing things and
organizing events, groups such as founding of entrepreneurship club in the college further
convinced me that I should go in this field. A brief stint with a firm to inculcate the subtlety of
business and then standing on my own is what I envision for myself.
An MBA from FMS can help me in learning the nuances of management, besides learning
various courses, which can’t be covered in a technical college. FMS has the advantage of having
a relatively small but cohesive group. It also has a vibrant and active student alumni network. It
has the perfect setting for incubation of an idea.
SOP25r
An idea has the potential to change the life of millions. But an idea, besides needing the technical
know how, also needs the skills to handle the complex real life situations. The technical
knowledge can tell where to enter but not how to handle intricate issues? I have always dreamed
about implementing ideas to real life.
Very well written, seems to be from the heart and honest. Just 2 things :
(a) "?" after issues
(b) ideas "to" real life
An urge to be an entrepreneur, to successfully marry science with a commercial enterprise,

which can also benefit the mankind, has always been a fascinating thought. I want to make this
dream into a passion, a reality that can be a success. An inclination towards managing things and
organizing events, groups such as founding of entrepreneurship club in the college further
convinced me that I should go in this field. A brief stint with a firm to inculcate the subtlety of
business and then standing on my own is what I envision for myself.
(c) Sentences too long.
(d) Im not too sure about the grammar of "groups such as founding of entrepreneurship club in
the college "
An MBA from FMS can help me in learning the nuances of management, besides learning
various courses, which can’t be covered in a technical college. FMS has the advantage of having
a relatively small but cohesive group. It also has a vibrant and active student alumni network. It
has the perfect setting for incubation of an idea. *
(e) Cannot help noticing that all your sentences start with the same "an"
(f) learning "though" rather than "besides"
(g) drop the technical college thing........steer clear of negatives

(h) "FMS has the advantage of having a relatively small but cohesive group." seems kinda
well........for lack of better word - not cohesive :mg:
Apart from that one of the best essays I have read in a while :)
SOP26 - FMS
When I joined the Industrial Engineering course at College of Engineering, Thiruvananthapuram

all I wished for was to get a ?software job? during my final year. But when I was introduced to
some of the facets of management as part of my course I realized that management is my career
destination.(I KNOW THIS NEED TO BE REPHRASED...SUGGESTONS PLZZ...MEBBE
CONNECTING THIS WITH THE QUOTE) However, what I learn as part of my undergraduate
course is just the tip of the iceberg. In order have a deeper insight of the corporate world, I need
join a top management post-graduate programme in the country.
The message from Prof.Bhalla, says that Fms provides its students with the opportunities to be
leaders, team players, managers and above all responsible corporate citizens. It is this
opportunity which I need to attain my dream career, to be placed high on the corporate ladder
and be part of the strategic decision making process of an organization. FMS being the oldest
management institution in the country will provide me the best chance of realizing my dreams.
SOP27 - FMS
I have learnt some of the most valuable and unforgettable lessons while working and interacting
with fellow students in my university. I have always been awestruck with what can be achieved
while working as a team. Following my undergraduate studies has been one of the most
enriching experience of my life, and I wish to further that experience.
I want to be a good manager, a person who can inspire everybody around him to chase their
dreams with all the passion in one's heart. I want to have the confidence to take decisions on
behalf of the people who work with me and I want those people to have that kind of confidence
in me. I believe that at FMS, with its emphasis on teamwork b/w the students, faculty, staff and
alumni, I will have the opportunity to be a leader and a team player. From designing of my own
curriculum to managing of the recruitment process I will have numerous opportunities to hone
my skills and to develop the confidence that is so important in order to be a good manager.
SOP27r
I have learnt some of the most valuable and unforgettable lessons while working and interacting
with fellow students in my university. I have always been awestruck with what can be achieved
while working as a team. My undergraduate study has been one of the most enriching experience
of my life, and I wish to further that experience. (u want to continue ur undergrad... what u want
to convey is not conveyed here!)
I want to be a good manager, a person who can inspire everybody around him to chase their
dreams with all the passion in their heart. I want to have the confidence to take decisions on
behalf of the people who work with me and I want those people to have that kind of confidence
in me. I believe that at FMS, with its emphasis on teamwork amongst the students, the faculty,
the staff and the alumni, will give me the opportunity to be a leader and a team player. From
designing my own curriculum to managing the recruitment process, I will have numerous
opportunities to hone my skills in management and also to develop the confidence that is so
important in order to be a successful manager.
SOP28 - FMS
Money has always been very close to me .This is one which takes my imagination to the sky.
Though i dont have the requisite skills and a firm grounding the theortical concepts i often find
myself unequql for the challenges that lie ahead.Being from the engineering background from
the U.V.C.E Bangalore.During the graduation what started as a hobby to know more about
stocks and shares has now turned out to be overriding passion of my life .This is one thing which
now makes me to seriously considering a career in equity and stocks by been a investment
banker which is my career goal.Also the family business which is in distbution of Fmcg com has
helped me to build a sence of marketing. The hands on support of my uncle who is in stock
broking also helped to built on my passion.this is why i thought of doing MBA.
When i thought of MBA the first institute to my mind was FMS.FMS with a very small batch
size will give me the maxamim exposoure to bring out my skills .
SOP28r
I developed an intense passion for finance and monetary affairs during my formative years. It
was this passion that made me seriously contemplate a rewarding career in finance. I hope to
realize my aspirations in this regard in near future.
The 4-year rigorous engineering course that I have been pursuing has been an integral part of my
intellectual development. The Computer Science course
requires the student to possess analytical and logical abilities of the highest order.
These skills that I have developed over the past 4 years are indispensable for a career in finance
as well.
Cross-functional knowledge of different aspects of management is my forte.Hailing from a

business background,I have had hands-on experience of equity trading as well as distribution and
marketing of FMCG products.My IT education has bestowed me with rudimentary knowledge of
Systems as well. Ten years down the line, I see myself as a high-flying number-crunching
Investment Banker.
On the flip side, I do not have a firm grounding in the theortical aspects of Management. As a
result , I often find myself unarmed when I think about facing the challenges ahead of me. This is
where FMS comes into the picture. Pursuing a management course in FMS shall undoubtedly
help me in gaining the requisite theoretical knowledge as well as the soft skills that are critical
for any manager with high aspirations.
SOP29 - FMS
Belonging to a marwari family, business has always fascinated me. As a child I always dreamt of
managing a business of some widely used product. In my unempirical childhood-mind, this
product happened to be cement. Why Cement? Because I used to see a lot of construction-work
happening and felt that this world cant do without cement. Though with age, the cement part has
vanished but the desire of managing a big company still remains. However, to be able to achieve
this target, I need to have a strong grounding on the various facets of management and I am sure
an MBA can help me achieve this objective.
As a state topper from Gujarat and Engineering from REC, Surathkal, my academic performance
has given me enough confidence to be able to handle the responsibilites and challenges of a
manager with aplomb and confidence.
My industry experience includes a stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys where I am working on SCM
packages. With this experience I have got to learn a lot about the IT Industry, supply chains of
manufacturing companies and the role played by sound management in the success of an
organisation. This has whetted my appetite ever more for an MBA.
With an MBA from FMS, I am sure I will be able to fulfill my long-cherised dreams. My
interaction with a few almunae of FMS has given me enough confidence to achieve these targets.
With the stress given on leadership skills and innovation in FMS, I look myself as a successful
manager with the confidence to lead a team of people and contribute to the success of an
organisation.
SOP29r
Belonging to a marwari family, business has always fascinated me. As a child I always dreamt of
managing a business of some widely used product. In my unempirical childhood-mind, this
product happened to be cement. Why Cement? Because I used to see a lot of construction-work
happening and felt that this world cant do without cement. Though with age, the cement part has
vanished but the desire of managing a big company still remains. However, to be able to achieve
this target, I need to have a strong grounding on the various facets of management and I am sure
an MBA can help me achieve this objective.
(a) Cut out the 1st sentence........start with "As a child....."

(b) "unempirical childhood-mind" ?? what does it mean ?
(c) Your first 4 sentence sound very colloquial. You may keep the same concept of cement but
make it more prosaic.
(d) "sound grounding on various facets of management" kinda boring but then ....... :)
As a state topper from Gujarat and Engineering from REC, Surathkal, my academic performance
*has given me enough confidence to be able to handle the responsibilites and challenges of a
manager with aplomb and confidence.
(e) My superior (some other word ?) academic peformance has given.......blah blah. Im sure they
have a copy of your resume where you have nicely highlighted this.
(f) But still academic performance and responsibilities and challenges of a mgr are quite
different. Doesnt gell.
My industry experience includes a stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys where I am working on SCM
packages. With this experience I have got to learn a lot about the IT Industry, supply chains of
manufacturing companies and the role played by sound management in the success of an
organisation. This has whetted my appetite ever more for an MBA.
(g) "includes 1.5yrs in Infy" im sure u have other exp too. Just to check.
(h) change "about the IT Industry, supply chains of manufacturing companies and the role played
by sound management in the success of an organisation" to "about the role played by sound
management in the success of an organisation, specifically in the IT Industry"
With an MBA from FMS, I am sure I will be able to fulfill my long-cherised dreams. My
interaction with a few almunae of FMS has given me enough confidence to achieve these targets.
With the stress given on leadership skills and innovation in FMS, I look myself as a successful
manager with the confidence to lead a team of people and *contribute to the success of an
organisation.
(i) Ideally should be "these" long cherished dreams. I mean should be a continuation from your
cement dream.
(j) interaction shouldnt give you "confidence" rather should make you more aware of the insti
and how well you "fit" into it.
SOP30 - FMS
I always envisioned myself as playing the leading role in the success of an organization. Success
of an organization requires a perfect blend of technology and strong, self-motivated leadership.
Besides, I have a strong inclination towards the analytical and reasoning aspect of learning. So
my natural choice for graduation was Engineering. During my graduation my goal transformed
into passion as I honed my skills of working in a team and managing and participating in various
events (both technical and cultural) with an attitude of creativity to produce new ideas and
approaches. Thus, the next logical step would be to complement my technological skills with an
MBA.
It is my dream to do my MBA from FMS, the institute which gives not just the environment and
opportunities, but also the freedom. Freedom to explore, to be bold and most importantly, to be
creative. This holistic approach is very well reflected in the fact that FMS has included “self-
development courses” in the orientation phase of its course structure. The pedagogy of FMS to
encourage students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership right from the day they
join inculcates a strong sense of self-motivation. This I feel is the perfect foundation for a strong
inspired leadership, and so I am looking forward for an opportunity of a lifetime, an MBA from
an institute which does not put boundations on creativity and learning.
SOP30r
I always envisioned myself as playing the leading role in the success of an organization. Success
of an organization requires a perfect blend of technology and strong, self-motivated leadership.
Besides, I have a strong inclination towards the analytical and reasoning aspect of learning. 1)So
my natural choice for graduation was Engineering. During my graduation my goal transformed
into passion as I honed my skills of working in a team and managing and participating in various
events (both technical and cultural) with an attitude of creativity to produce new ideas and
approaches. Thus, the next logical step would be to complement my technological skills with an
MBA.
2)It is my dream to do my MBA from FMS, the institute which gives 3)not just the environment
and opportunities, but also the 4)freedom. Freedom to explore, to be bold and most importantly,
to be creative. This holistic approach is very well 5)reflected in the fact that FMS has included
“self-development courses” in the orientation phase of its course structure. The pedagogy of
FMS to encourage students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership right from the
day they join inculcates a strong sense of self-motivation. This I feel is the perfect foundation for
a strong inspired leadership6), and so I am looking forward for an opportunity of a lifetime, an
MBA from an institute which does not put boundations on creativity and learning.
A good one. Crisp and to the point.
A few things you can look into for improvement
1) Is it possible for you to break it in two equally lengthy sentences?

2) Replace it with " I aspire to pursue my MBA from FMS"
3) Check the idiomatic usage (I am not sure about it)
4) Club it together (make it continuous). Also check out the grammatical structure.
5) replace it with "reflected by the “self-development courses” in the orientation phase at FMS"
6) Put a full stop here
SOP31 - FMS
During my last three years in the knowledge industry I was immensely touched by the love and
the respect I got from my students and a immense sense of self satisfaction once they actually
tasted success with my help. However at some points of time I also felt aggrieved when some
constraints like time and resources actually came in the way of imparting the best quality
available. It is that point of time that I decided to do a course which will give me insights into the
intricacies of running a business while not losing touch with my teaching and knowledge skills.
That way I will be able to take a much more active role in finding a perfect balance between
constraints and quality as well as derive high profitability out of it. Five years from now I see
myself leading a knowledge and training providing institution which will be numero uno in this
field not only in terms of healthy financial figures but also helping thousands of people achieve
their career objectives.
The part time MBA program of FMS caters for my requirements perfectly. FMS which has a
well researched academic curriculum and exceptionally knowledgeable faculty strength will
surely help in getting the right mix of concepts and theory as well as business acumen as I
remain in touch with my basic skill of teaching and research. The enviable track record of FMS
since its inception in producing hugely successful corporate leaders gives testimony in my firm
believe in the institution helping me achieving my objectives.
SOP32 - FMS
Rome was not build in one day. It is a multi-step process. My Degree in Engineering was the
first step towards achieving my vision, a vision of becoming an entrepreneur to reckon with in
the Software Development industry. I want to serve the society by way of leading a company
engaged in creation of wealth which benefits the nation and society at large besides fulfilling my
own needs.
I believe that my stint at FMS will help me in developing my managerial skills and hone my
business acumen. I believe that studying with a small batch of around 90 people will ensure a
high level of camaraderie between us, the students, which will facilitate free flow of information
and ideas among some of the best minds. It will also inculcate in me Teamwork,
Communication, Interpersonal skills and the right kind of competition that will motivate me to
perform to my utmost potential. The pedagogical approach followed combined with the
fieldwork and case studies with a strong emphasis on concepts will encourage my intellectual
curiosity and open my mind to the adventure of ideas.
I believe that I will learn smart and innovative ways of managing in today’s radically
unpredictable business environment and the ways to innovate, communicate and respond in real
time and to move ahead with control, confidence and agility.
SOP33 - SPJAIN
Q1.) What are your Principal interests, if any, outside your academic pursuits and/or career?
How have they influenced your personality?
I have been actively involved in sports, namely cricket and Table Tennis. They have enabled me
to channelize my energy towards achieving my goal. It has given me the mental strength and a
strong feeling of competitiveness. It has taught me a lot of things - to believe in my abilities, to
adopt a never say die attitude, to take initiatives, and the ability to fight back from difficult
situations. I have realized the importance of focus, hard work, team-work, dedication, patience
and perseverance. These qualities, I believe, have been instrumental in bringing out in my
personality the importance of strategizing to achieve the success.
SOP33r
Frankly, too many points. Im lost !! You have mentioned *every* good point in the book to get
those extra brownie points. By the time I am done, I am like
"Wheew.... I don't know what kind of guy he is. I don't know how his doing something like
cricket and TT has helped him"
Q2.) If you had the freedom, what career or activity would you like to pursue in life?
Throughout my life there has been no pressure on me regarding my career choices. The decision
to pursue a career in management is purely a conscious one and out of my free will. Through this
career, I want to surge ahead in the corporate fraternity, to have a greater sense of achievement
and to attain a greater self esteem. I want to serve the society by way of leading a company
engaged in creation of wealth which benefits the nation and society at large.
SOP33r
Ok. But mention even your undergrad i.e that you did even your engg/bsc/bcom/ba out of free
will.
But if I were you I would say something like maybe a poet/writer/scientist etc. Im sure all of us
have an inner urge to do something "different". This would help in bringing out your personality.
In that aspect your answer seems "tame".
Q3.) Describe an incident from the recent past when you had to overlook ethics to get your work
done?
After passing from one of the premier colleges of India I was expecting to have offers of a good
position in the software industry immediately upon graduation. But I realized that having an
Electronics background was a disadvantage especially during the slow software market in 2003.
Setting aside my ethics of not asking a favor from anybody, I had to ask my relatives and friends
for assistance to find a suitable job for me. Ultimately I was able to find the job of my choice
without any help that gave me a deep sense of self satisfaction.
SOP33rr
Finding a job using your network is name of the game dude. What is unethical about it ? Infact
one of the top 3 reasons to do an MBA (atleast outside India) is the network that you build. Infact
Peter Drucker rates it as the numero uno must-haves in his power list of "what it takes to be
successful in life". He calls it the Rolodex Power.
Q4.) If you had a choice, what attribute of your character would you like to change?
I have an apparent inability to give attention to details. This characteristic can be detrimental in
certain situations where it is important to give due consideration to various facets of a situation.
However, I believe that this requires an experience of some real life situations. I am making due
efforts to overcome this by not hasting my decisions and giving due consideration to various
aspects.
SOP33r
Basically you are the Mr.look-at-the-large-picture guy, which isn't too bad if you are going to do
an MBA. Maybe you should focus on how you gloss over some points and in the end you
misinterpret things.
Q5.) What is your understanding of the term “values”? Mention three values that you implement
in your daily life. Illustrate at least one with an example?
Values for me are the principles and the ethics which are inculcated in a person through his
upbringing. For me hard-work, compassion and non-violence are the values which I implement
in my daily life. I feel sympathy for people who live in distress and in poverty. When In college,
we had a boy in his teens working in the canteen. I, along with some of my friends, was able to
convince his parents about the importance of primary education. I also took the initiative to
ensure that his education (next 4years bole toh till what std ?) was taken care of by generous
sponsorships from our whole class.
SOP33r
Im sorry but non-violence sound outright crappy :)
Q6.) Describe a situation where you as an individual, set your sight on a difficult target and saw
it through to completion despite obstacles?
During my high school, I realized the importance of hard work. I wanted to get admission into
one of the premier colleges in India. Inspite of setbacks, inspite of having to deal with adverse
circumstances beyond my control I never gave up and after burning the midnight oil for months
together I was able to get an AIR 226 in Delhi College of Engineering, one of the top- rung
engineering college in the country.
SOP33r
Boss, you were dangerously off-track in your original version.
Q7.) Give an example of how you worked effectively in a team to accomplish an important task.
In my final year of college I was part of a team of three students who were chosen to do an
original project work on newly launched microcontrollers. There was little information about the
product available since it was new. We had just one source- the product details of the company.
But we were determined and worked very hard towards interpreting the details. We
complemented each other extremely well and worked as a cohesive unit. After brain-storming on
the different modules of the project, many possibilities of implementation, and the best ways to
complete the project in the stipulated time, we were able to complete the project successfully in
the stipulated time through our hard work and team work.
SOP33r
As mentioned above, Im not going too much in finding out faults. Im working on an overall
perspective. So far this is the best question you have answered.
Q8.) Provide an accurate and detailed description of the job responsibilities at your Current/Last
place of employment.
I currently work for Xansa India Limited as a Technical Systems Trainee. It is a UK based BPO
and IT Services Company which creates and delivers IT services and solutions. After a month of
initial training, I was inducted in a project for a client Boots, a UK based pharmacy and retail
store company. We are a team of four people responsible for delivering the solution to the client.
We are currently designing an intranet based application for them. I have the responsibility of
coding some of the part of an application, documenting the program specifications and making
appropriate test cases for the application.
SOP33r
I think you have described the company more elaborately than your own job requirement. Does it
require interacting directly with the client ? Do you report to the manager or the lead ? Does your
job involve working long hours and over weekends ? Do you mentor new people inducted in the
team ? Is there any knowlege management initiative ? There are countless of things you can
mention here.......pick and choose the ones you have done and best describe you.
SOP34 - FMS
It has been said that while the Japanese expend 9 months in planning and just 3 months in
successful execution, the rest invariably do it the other way, there by invariable laboring more
than required. In today’s competitive world there is no place for complacency and inefficiency.
I believe, poor project management and execution, which till now was directly affecting the
bottom lines, has now made the difference between those who survive and those who perish.
Also projecting and utilizing India as just a low cost talent basket shall back fire especially when
other low cost countries perfect their English language skills.
This is where I want to make a difference.( or This is where I see myself playing a critical role.).
A Management perspective with a grasp of technology will enable me to deliver high quality
services/products.
As a part of my work experience I have been able to prove my grasp of technology, handling of
crisis, working with latest technologies and driving a team.
What drives me to the MBA FT course at FMS is the healthy faculty-student ratio. I believe FMS
can bring to my disposition a global perspective and broaden my horizons. This is what I need to
achieve my dreams.
SOP34r
It is said that while the Japanese expend 9 months in planning and just 3 months in successful
execution, others (if it is a saying then, dont change it!!) invariably do it the other way, there by
invariably laboring more than it is required. In today’s competitive world there is no place for
complacency and inefficiency.
I believe, poor project management and execution, which till now was directly affecting the
bottom lines, has now made the difference between those who survive and those who perish.
Also projecting and utilizing India as just a low cost talent basket shall back fire especially when
other low cost countries perfect their English language skills. (U sound like a CNBC reporter...
Are u sure u want to say this - this long...!)
This is where I see myself playing a critical role. A Management perspective with a grasp of
technology will enable me to deliver high quality services/products.
I dont see the connection between the 2nd & 3rd para...Bring about some connection pls.
How will u play a critical role etc etc
As a part of my work experience I have been able to successfully prove my grasp of latest
technology, crisis management and team building skills.
What drives me to the MBA FT course at FMS is the healthy faculty-student ratio. I believe FMS
can bring to my disposition a global perspective and broaden my horizons. This is what I need to
achieve my dreams.
SOP35 - General
My experience in a coaching centre over the last three years has given me an immense sense of
self satisfaction. I am touched by the love and the respect I get from my students and the feeling
of exhilaration that surfaces when I see them succeed is beyond explanation. However at times, I
feel sad when some constraints like time and resources actually came in the way of imparting the
best quality (quality what?? teachin?) available. To cover these loop-holes, I have decided to do
my masters in management that will give me insights into the intricacies of running a business
while letting me not to lose with my teaching and knowledge skills. I wish to find a perfect
balance between constraints and quality and get high profitability out of it. Five years from now I
see myself leading a knowledge and training institution which will be numero uno in this field
not only in terms of healthy financial figures but also in helping thousands of people achieve
their career objectives.
SOP36 - FMS
Challenges have always been a driving force in my life and have motivated me in performing
better at anything I do.I find no greater challenge then,than pursuing my dream of making it to
the top echelons of the corporate industry.A more immediate
and logical step therefore, would be to become a manager- someone not only a part of the
decision making heirarchy, shaping the future course of a firm ,but also someone who can inspire
everybody around him to chase their dreams with all the passion in their heart.
Though a integral part of my intellectual development and helping me hone my anlytical and
logical skills,I think my technical education degree will never quite make the grade in giving me
a stimulating,challenging and growth oriented career.This,I have come to believe is the
prerogative of an MBA degree and hence is my ernest zeal in pursuing it.
This is where FMS comes in.With its world class faculty and infrastucture, and more importantly
its focus on leadership and creating an environment of excellence,team spirit and professional
integrity,I believe FMS is the place to pursue my dreams- a place where this ugly catterpillar can
change into a butterfly,ready to take on the world.
SOP36r
*Challenges have always been a driving force in my life and have motivated me 1)in performing
better at anything I do.I find no greater 2)challenge then,than pursuing my dream of making it to
the top echelons of the corporate industry.A 3)more immediate
and logical step therefore, would be to become a manager- 4)someone not only a part of the
decision making heirarchy, shaping the future course of a firm ,but also someone who can inspire
everybody around him to chase their dreams with all the passion in their heart.
*5)Though a integral part of my intellectual development and helping me hone my anlytical and
logical skills,I think my technical education degree will never quite make the grade in giving me
a stimulating,challenging and growth oriented career.This6),I have come to believe is the
prerogative of an MBA degree and hence 7)is my ernest zeal in pursuing it.
* 8)This is where FMS comes in.With its world class faculty and infrastucture, and more
importantly its focus on leadership and creating an environment of excellence,team spirit and
professional integrity,I 8a)believe FMS is the place to pursue my dreams- a place where this
9)ugly catterpillar can 10)change into a butterfly,ready to take on the world.
1) replace it by "to give out my best" (why NOT use the superlative degree :mg: )
2) replace it by " a challenge"
3) Nope your more immediate goal is to enter FMS.Remove it
4) replace it by "someone who is"
5) A negative statement reagrding your undergrad studies....gives a really bad impression. You
might change it to
My technical undergraduate studies have been an integral part of my intellectual development.

They have helped me to hone my anlytical and logical skills. But I believe that ..........(Now write
a statement which indicates that this has not prepared you for managerial position)
6) Remove it
7) replace it by "my earnest zeal to pursue it."
8 ) Remove this line..does not convey what you want to ....
8a) replace it by "believe that FMS"
9) 'Tiny' is a better word than 'ugly'
10) replace it by "be metamorphosed into a beautiful and large butterfly"
SOP37
To accomplish great things, we must not only act, but also dream; not only plan, but also
believe."-Anatole France
Even as the ebullient sixth-graders trooped out of the computer lab after the first class of the
session, one young lad stayed back to pester his teacher with more questions about the sublime
machine and its seemingly limitless potential. That was my formal introduction to the world of
computers, and my fascination for them has grown ever since. I was convinced that I wanted to
have a career in Information Technology by the time I reached 10th grade.
I have a dream – to own an indigenous software solutions company that takes up innovative
ideas and converts them into marketable products and services, generating wealth for its
stakeholders and lasting value for its clients.
My first step towards this goal was gaining grassroots level experience and technical know-how
while working with two indusrty leaders – Infosys and Oracle.
The next logical step will be completing a professional management programme from a reputed
institution, so that instead of relying only on intution I can leverage established scientific
methodologies to solve the problems in management of an organisation.
Throughout my college life, I made a conscious effort to hone my people and organisational
skills via a wide variety of activities ranging from participating in social service initiatives to
organising the departmental seminar. In today’s competitive world, these ‘soft’ skills are a must-
have for any aspiring entrepreneur.
FMS, with all its advantages of a premier management institute, also gives its students a chance
to leverage the inputs from the other departments and faculties in the university. These inter-
disciplinary interactions will help any student in broadening his vision beyond mere academic
pursuit of management principles. Also, the relatively small batch size, flexibility of the
curriculum and ample opportunities for students to experiment and learn are factors that will
definitely enhance the personality of its students. Thus, FMS emerges as my first choice B-
school
SOP37r
"To accomplish great things, we must not only act, but also dream; not only plan, but also
believe."-Anatole France (This quote does NOT go well with the following content...my
suggestion remove it...not because I do not encourage quotes but because it does not go well
here)
Even as the ebullient sixth-graders trooped out of the computer lab after the first class of the
session, one young lad stayed back to pester his teacher with more questions about the sublime
machine and its seemingly limitless potential. That was my formal introduction to the world of
computers, and my fascination for them has grown ever since. I was convinced that I wanted to
have a career in Information Technology by the time I reached 10th grade. My dream is to own
an indigenous software solutions company that takes up innovative ideas and converts them into
marketable products and services, generating wealth for its stakeholders and lasting value for its
clients.
My first step towards this goal was gaining grassroots level experience and technical know-how
while working with two indusrty leaders – Infosys and Oracle. The next logical step will be to
complete
a professional management programme from a reputed institution, so that instead of relying only
on intution I can leverage established scientific methodologies (controversial --> Is management
a logical/scientific method? make sure you can defend this in PI) to solve the problems in
management of an organisation.
Throughout my college life, I made a conscious effort to hone my people and organisational
skills via a wide variety of activities ranging from participating in social service initiatives to
organising the departmental seminar. In today’s competitive world, these ‘soft’ skills are a must-
have for any aspiring entrepreneur.
(Are you trying to convey that you are suitable for being an entrepreneur. is it necessary at this
point.... keep this for PI)
FMS, with all its advantages of a premier management institute, also gives its students a chance
to leverage the inputs from the other departments and faculties in the university. These inter-
disciplinary interactions will help any student in broadening his vision beyond mere academic
pursuit of management principles. Also, the relatively small batch size, flexibility of the
curriculum and ample opportunities for students to experiment and learn are factors that will
definitely enhance the personality of its students. Thus, FMS emerges as my first choice B-
school.
SOP38 - FMS
“Life is growth, and, after some time, growth is life”.

The zeal to explore is the only spark and catalyst to the process of growth and continued learning
is its only proof. The “hunger to know”, therefore, is the ruling principle from which all others
emanate.
From being the principle representative of school for public speaking, to leading it as the Head-
Girl and finally holding the post of Secretary of the Commerce Union at college, it is this
principle and objective that has acted as teacher, motivator and propeller. Furthering this journey
of intellectual and personal growth is the challenge to widen and deepen my understanding of
management thought and the intricacies if the contemporary business environment.
Flexible curriculum, the touted student-faculty proximity that stretches beyond the classroom,
corporate mentoring by stalwarts from a valuable alumni network and collaborative and
exchange programmes with various institutions abroad reaffirm my faith in FMS. From making
an impact through the mike on an audience at school, to influencing a global people through
business leadership, I trust FMS to guide me in this journey of learning, and therefore, Growth.
SOP39 - FMS
“What I do is imp coz I’m giving it a day of my life. What I achieve must be worthwhile coz the
price is high.”
The measure of perseverance in the pursuit of excellence determines “achievement”. I aim to
build an exemplary culture of corporate excellence, thought-leadership and adaptability to the
ever-changing business environment. It is the passion for living my potential coupled with the
hunger to learn that drives me towards zeroing in on FMS as the first step to realizing this dream.
Being the Head-Girl and Secretary at school and college respectively introduced me to the
challenges of leading and building a team. Building on the profound academic insight given by
graduation in Commerce, working at GE Consumer Finance further solidified my comprehension
of management challenges. It is from here that I plan to work at equipping myself with the
diverse range of skills and intimate knowledge of business.
The emphasis on learning though live projects, collaborative and exchange programmes with
international institutions, vast community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary students, the
“rewarding network of academe and alumni”, flexible curriculum, rigorous induction process,
and the impetus on “self-discovery” reinforce my faith in FMS to be the Business School of
choice.
SOP39r
1)“What I do is imp coz I’m giving it a day of my life. What I achieve must be worthwhile coz
the price is high.”The measure of perseverance in the pursuit of excellence determines
“achievement”. 2)I aim to build an exemplary culture of corporate excellence, thought-leadership
and adaptability to the ever-changing business environment. It is the passion for living my
potential coupled with the hunger to learn that drives me towards zeroing in on FMS as the first
step to realizing this dream.
Being the Head-Girl and Secretary at school and college respectively introduced me to the
challenges of leading and building a team. Building on the 3) profound academic insight 4)given
by graduation in Commerce5), working at GE Consumer Finance further solidified my
comprehension of management challenges. It is from here that I plan to work at equipping
myself with the diverse range of skills and 6)intimate knowledge of business.
7)The emphasis on learning though live projects, collaborative and exchange programmes with
international institutions, vast community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary students, the
“rewarding network of academe and alumni”, flexible curriculum, rigorous induction process,
and the impetus on “self-discovery” reinforce my faith in FMS to be the Business School of
choice.
1) Do NOT write short forms like "coz" etc....also this quote does not relate well with the content
2) Which business environment? My personal suggestion...dont use flowery language...you will
NOT be given points for writing jargons, but will be graded on your clarity of thought and
conciseness of expression, which I feel is missing here
3) Be throughly prepared then to be grilled on this in PI
4) replace it by "Building a profound academic insight during my"
5) replace it by "alongwith working"
6) replace it by "an intimate"
7) Break this down into minimum of two sentences....better if three..
SOP40 - FMS
Three years of Bachelor of Management Studies (BMS) has developed in me a keen interest in
finance as a subject. It is this interest which made me contemplate a career in finance. I envision
myself as a part of strategic decision making process of an organization. On a long term
perspective I would like to be a consultant.
My interests in literature, music and travel have helped me gain a broad perspective. I have
excelled in projects, desk research, workshops, class discussion and also other extra curricular
activities. Academically I have had a consistent performance throughout. Certain assignments
have helped me understand the necessity of good organization structures and appreciate the
significance of systems .The time limitation on each assignment has inculcated in me the
importance of time management. At the same time, having to defend my analyses and
recommendations during discussions and presentations has taught me to think rigorously and
creatively. Extensive use of computers for analysis and preparation of presentations and reports
has made me computer savvy. All these experiences have developed my interpersonal and
communication skills.
I have only been able to gain an insight into the field of management, and could not study
specific business and technology - related issues in depth. To do so, I need a better understanding
of the various facets of management; the interlinkages between different functional areas and
between different business entities. I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on technical
and analytical skills and general management orientation. I hope to become a part of this
dynamic culture which will help me gain a diversity of experiences, network with a variety of
people, to accept challenging assignments and complement all with a respected management
degree.
SOP40r
Three years of Bachelor of Management Studies (BMS) has developed in me a keen interest in
finance as a subject. It is this interest which made me contemplate a career in finance. I envision
myself as a part of strategic decision making process of an organization. On a long term
perspective I would like to be a consultant.
(a) "has developed a keen interest for finance in me" - rephrased it for clarity also "as a subject"
sounds as if your not interested in other aspects
(b) "part of the strategic"
(c) if long term is being a consultant than is being part of the strategic team short term ?
My interests in literature, music and travel have helped me gain a broad perspective. I have
excelled in projects, desk research, workshops, class discussion and also other extra curricular
activities. Academically I have had a consistent performance throughout. Certain assignments
have helped me understand the necessity of good organization structures and appreciate the
significance of systems .The time limitation on each assignment has inculcated in me the
importance of time management. At the same time, having to defend my analyses and
recommendations during discussions and presentations has taught me to think rigorously and
creatively. Extensive use of computers for analysis and preparation of presentations and reports
has made me computer savvy. All these experiences have developed my interpersonal and
communication skills.
(d) broad perspective of what ? it sounds incomplete try add to it.
(e) "Academically I have had a consistent performance throughout". Consistently poor ? :mg:
Change to "I have performed above average consistently through out my academic life"
(f) Something that seems as if I can trim the last few sentences. But I am not able to put a finger
on it right now. Will look into it later if reqd.
I have only been able to gain an insight into the field of management, and could not study
specific business and technology - related issues in depth. To do so, I need a better understanding
of the various facets of management; the interlinkages between different functional areas and
between different business entities.
(g) "I have only been able to gain an insight into the field of management, and could not study
specific business and technology - related issues in depth."
(h)How were you able to gain the insight ? Through the previous paragraph right ? Then try to
make it more cohesive.
I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on technical and analytical skills and general
management orientation. I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will help me
gain a diversity of experiences, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging
assignments and complement all with a respected management degree.
Otherwise everything else sounds good !
SOP41 - FMS
They say the difference between dreams and reality is the desire. Since my childhood I have this
dream of running a big corporate house. And this dream has taken the form of my career goal
now. Someday I would like to start a consultancy firm and take it to great success
levels(read...gettin it listed on the stock exchange). But before that I would want to hone my
skills working in a company where I can contribute to its growth and gain the market
experience.(Q...i dont have any exp as of now....shd i still write this????)
After completing my Bachelors in Engineering, I have to come to realize that to get a strong
foothold in the market, one needs to have a good managerial aptitude as well as the business
acumen.
This is where, FMS as an institution comes in. With its world class infrastructure, I will be able
to develop my managerial skills. I would also benefit being in the company of scholarly peers
and the knowledgeable teachers. The vast network of alumni that the FMS has will also provide
us with deep insights on the paths they treaded.
After completing my MBA from FMS, Ill be armed with the right knowledge which will help me
in achieving my goal.
SOP41r
They say the difference between dreams and reality is the desire. Since my childhood I have had
this dream of running a big corporate house. And this dream has taken the form of my career
goal now. Someday I would like to start a consultancy firm and take it to great success
levels(read...gettin it listed on the stock exchange)- delete it!!. But I need to hone my skills by
working in a company where I can contribute to its growth and gain the market experience.(Q...i
dont have any exp as of now....shd i still write this????) - its ok!! write it
After completing my Bachelors in Engineering, I have realized that to get a strong foothold in
the market, one needs to have a good managerial aptitude and shrewd business acumen. This is
where, FMS as an institution comes in. With its world class infrastructure, FMS will help me
develop my managerial skills. I wish to benefit from scholarly peers and knowledgeable
teachers. The vast network of alumni will provide me with deep insights on the paths they have
treaded. After completing my MBA from FMS, I will be armed with the right knowledge which
will help me in achieving my goal.
SOP42 - FMS
“Give me a lever long enough and a fulcrum on which to place it and I shall move the world”.
This quote made by Archimedes
aligns well with my life-objectives. I dream to be a significant player in the Indian corporate
sector, in years to come. My
career objective is to lead a giant firm, managing individuals with burning ambitions, have a
strong say in the market and
serve the society by creating wealth and opportunities.
As I am about to complete my engineering, I am aspiring to effect a successful transition from
being a technical expert to a
visionary business leader. So I need to blend my robust technical knowledge to formal
management education, the two being
conjoint entities. My aim is to be “jack of all and master of one” – later for which I can take
pride and feel contented. My
drive to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic records.
To foster an atmosphere of intellectual excitement among entire university community is unique
with FMS. With intellectually
rich and small-sized batches, superb industry interaction, experienced faculty, vibrant alumni and
excellent research base,
education here is both an opportunity and a privilege. I am confident of contributing
meaningfully to the MBA program in FMS.
I find FMS to be ‘my lever and fulcrum’ which can hone my business acumen and make me all
set ‘to move the world’.
SOP42r
This quote made by Archimedes aligns well with objectives. I dream of being a significant player
in the Indian corporate sector. I wish to lead a giant firm, manage individuals with high
ambitions, have a strong say in the market and serve the society by creating wealth of
opportunities.
As I am about to complete my engineering, I am aspiring a successful transition from being a
technical expert to a visionary business leader. So I need to blend my robust technical knowledge
to formal management education, the two being conjoint entities. My aim is to be “jack of all and
master of one” – later for which I can take pride and feel contented. - Delete this pls!
My drive to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic records. FMS provides an
atmosphere of intellectual excitement. Intellectually rich and small-sized batches, superb
industry interaction, experienced faculty, vibrant alumni and excellent research base, FMS
education is both an opportunity and a privilege. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to
the MBA program in FMS.
SOP42r
1)This quote made by Archimedes
aligns well with my life-objectives. I dream to be a significant player in the Indian corporate
sector, in years to come. My
career objective is to lead a 2)giant firm, managing individuals with burning ambitions, have a
strong say in the market and
serve the society by creating wealth and opportunities.
3)As I am about to complete my engineering, I am aspiring to effect a successful transition from
being a technical expert to a
visionary business leader. So I need to blend my robust technical knowledge to formal
management education4), the two being
conjoint entities. 5)My aim is to be “jack of all and master of one” – later for which I can take
pride and feel contented. 6)My
drive to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic records.
7)To foster an atmosphere of intellectual excitement among entire university community is
unique with FMS. With intellectually
rich and small-sized batches, superb industry interaction, experienced faculty, vibrant alumni and
excellent research base,
education 8)here is both an opportunity and a privilege. I am confident of contributing
meaningfully to the MBA program 9) in FMS.
1)I dont see how this quote aligns with your goals, until I read the last line.... Isnt something out
of place?
2) replace it by "multinational giant, to manage and drive a team of dedicated individuals with
burining ambitions, to have a significant influence on the contemporary market and
simultaneously to serve "
3) No need to write this...it is anyway clear from your porfile
4) cut this out
5) Does not give the intended impact....either remove it or re-write it
6) Unnecessary....no one asked you to tell about your qualities
7) A sudden discontinuous statement (re-write it)
8 ) replace it by "at FMS"
9) replace it by "at/of FMS"
SOP43 - FMS
To want to be what one can be is purpose in life – Cynthia Ozick.

My career goal is to be at the helm of the corporate world. In the three years of my college
education, business management is just one of the 13 subjects. I want to do my post graduate in
business management as I love this subject. I want to be a CEO or a Managing Director of a
reputed concern. I like to be an effective player in the corporate world. This needs a sense of
determination, leadership qualities, team skills, creativity, diligence and a lot more.
Like a galleria, all these qualities can be acquired and augmented at FMS. With a healthy
student-faculty ratio, quality education, world-wide exposure, field projects etc., it also helps to
gain practical experience through internships. The business environment is full of competitions.
To face this boldly, I need to equip myself with powerful weapons. Only a formal management
education can equip me with the weapon of knowledge required to face the multi-faceted
business environment. Therefore the right choice would be an MBA from FMS.
SOP43r
To want to be what one can be is purpose in life – Cynthia Ozick.

My career goal is to be at the helm of the corporate world. In the three years of my college
education, business management is just one of the 13 subjects. I want to do my post graduate in
business management as I love this subject. (I would not say this!) I want to be a CEO or a
Managing Director of a reputed concern. I like to be an effective player in the corporate world.
This needs a sense of determination, leadership qualities, team skills, creativity, diligence and a
lot more.
Like a galleria, all these qualities can be acquired and augmented at FMS. With a healthy
student-faculty ratio, quality education, world-wide exposure, field projects etc., it also helps to
gain practical experience through internships. The business environment is full of competitions.
To face this boldly, I need to equip myself with powerful weapons. Only a formal management
education can equip me with the weapon of knowledge required to face the multi-faceted
business environment. Therefore the right choice would be an MBA from FMS.
SOP44 - FMS
Being from technical background, I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within
an organization go hand in hand. Management is life of any activity. Shaping a great idea into a
reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills and intimate knowledge of
business. I strongly feel the need to undergo formal management education, which would equip
me with the right abilities & skills to grow up in my profession, which I pursue and provide
me the opportunity to interact with variety of people. My career goal in life is to become a
person who could handle any typical business situation. One who could manage his life and
people around himself. I want to be a good manager, a person who can inspire everybody around
him to chase their dreams with all the passion in their heart. I want freedom to explore, to be
bold and most importantly, to be creative.
FMS being a reputed and esteemed institute with superior industry interaction, richly
experienced faculty, excellent management research base and its stress on Leadership,
Excellence and Innovation can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence.
Also it offers for the development of one’s potential, which will help me to build right attitude
towards managing my skills and therefore, achieving my goal.
SOP44r
Being from technical background, I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within
an organization go hand in hand. Management is the life of any activity. Shaping a great idea
into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills and intimate knowledge
of business. I strongly feel the need to undergo formal management education, which would
equip me with the right skills to pursue my desired profession and provide me the opportunity to
interact with various people. My career goal in life is to become a person who could handle any
typical business situation confidently. One who could manage his life and people around him. I
want to be a good manager, a person who can inspire everybody to chase their dreams with all
the passion and enthusiasm. I want the freedom to explore, to be bold and most importantly, to
be creative.
FMS being a reputed and esteemed institute with superior industry interaction, richly
experienced faculty, excellent management research base and its stress on Leadership,
Excellence and Innovation can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence.
Also FMS helps in the development of one’s potential, which will help me to build right attitude
towards managing my skills and therefore, achieving my goal.
SOP45 - FMS
"Our generation has had no Great Depression, no Great War.

Our war is spiritual. Our depression is our lives." these are the wordz i wrote
When we rehearsed in a friend's garage.during my years as an guitarist in the band
i felt Learning to play an instrument was difficult;
learning to play an instrument while learning how to play with a
band was a test of sheer endurance and willpower. However, through
persistence, patience, teamwork my playing
ability developed rapidly.this experience made me a firm beliver to think that
Technical and management aspects of life are cross functional and are conjoint entities
As I completed my technical education in information systems,I strongly feel that both these
aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With a robust technical
background, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give
me the opportunity to blend in both aspects. I am confident that my creative,strategic
and analytical abilities will aid me in becoming an able achiever.therefore I
dream of graduating as an able manager, from a reputed institute like
FMS under the guidance of richly experienced faculty and excellent management
research.where the knowledge base will definitely foster my future growth.
I hope to carve a niche for myself in being an able leader.
SOP46 - FMS
the world is chging rapidly and the more i learn , the more ill b able to adapt to the chges. my
long term goal is that i want to b a leader of hardworking and sincere men. i want to establish my
own business empire . im pursuin my btech in com sci frm ipu and in these 4 years of dealing
with people of diff bckgrds ive learnt that a sound knowlwdge of management especially people
management is a prerequisite to sucess. software knowledge coupled with nuances of
management will help me to carve out my own niche.
to b able to achieve my goal , to learn about management as a whole i need a b scholl thats the
best in its own way. the knowledge gained at fms wil help me in fostering my growth. fms has
advantage of having a small and cohesive grp and a vibrant alumni n/w. the holistic approach of
this esteemed institute is reflected in the fact that it included" self development courses" in the
orientation phase.
so im looking at the oppurtunity of a lifetime , an mba frm fms were there are no boundaries on
creative thkin and so an mba w/o boundaries so that i can open my wings aftr 2 years and aim
higher and higher in professional environent.
SOP46r
The world is changing rapidly and the more i learn, the more i will be able to adapt to the
changes. My dream is to establish an entire business empire. My long term goal includes leading
and driving a team of hardworking and dedicated individuals. While pursuing my undergraduate
studies I have experienced handling people from various background. I have realized that a
sound knowlwdge of management especially people management is a prerequisite for sucess.
Technical knowledge in software coupled with ability to handle any nuances of management will
help me to carve out my own niche.
I have realized that to be able to achieve my goal and to learn about overall business
management, I need to enter the hallowed portals of FMS, one of the country's best business
schools. The knowledge gained at FMS wil help me in fostering my overall personal as well as
professional growth. FMS has the distinct advantage of having a small and cohesive group and a
vibrant alumni network. The holistic approach of this esteemed institute is reflected in the fact
that it included "self development courses" in the orientation phase.
I believe that it is an oppurtunity of a lifetime pursuing an mba from FMS, where there are no
boundaries on creative thinking. I believe that i can open my wings after two years and aim
higher and higher in my professional endeavor.
SOP47 - FMS
"Prediction is difficult, especially the future" - Niels Bohr.

Difficult it may be, but the anxiety about the unknown makes it worth the effort. And, to what
extent the prediction stays true, becomes a testimony of the expertise.
Number crunching and analyzing data has been my hobby and passion since an early age. And
now, I look forward to a career in actuarial studies and market research. My father's being an
investment consultant, and his earlier associations with banking and finance, attracted me
towards similar disciplines. The desire to apply my analytical skills led me to engineering -
during which, I came across an elective course in Operations Research. Its tremendous potential
fascinated and motivated me towards a course in management.
In the corporate world, my sincerity and optimism will hold me in good stead. But, before that, I
want to be equipped with practical managerial knowledge. For this, I regard FMS as the ideal
institute – not just because of its stature, but also because of its emphasis on ethics; hands-on
pedagogy, which makes an exemplary teacher, as I experienced during my final year project. No
doubt, it also makes sound business sense, considering the ROI factor!
SOP47r
"Prediction is difficult, especially the future" - Niels Bohr.

Difficult it may be, but the anxiety about the unknown makes it worth the effort. And, to what
extent the prediction stays true, becomes a testimony of the expertise.
Number crunching and analyzing data has been my hobby and passion since an early age. And
now, I look forward to a career in actuarial studies and market research. My1) father's being an
investment consultant, and his earlier associations with banking and finance, attracted me
towards similar disciplines. The desire to apply my analytical skills led me 2)to engineering -
during which, I came across an elective course in Operations Research. Its tremendous potential
fascinated and motivated me towards a course in management.
In the corporate world, my sincerity and optimism will hold me in good stead. But, before that, I
want to 3)be equipped with practical managerial knowledge. 4)For this, I regard FMS as the
ideal institute – not just because of its stature, but also because of its emphasis on ethics;5)
hands-on pedagogy, which makes an exemplary teacher, as I experienced during my final year
project. No doubt, it also makes sound business sense, considering the ROI factor!
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Good one... I liked it... Simple and neat.....
Few suggestions for improvement
1) You dont intend the possessive case... do you? Better replace the entire sentence as follows
"Being a child of a successful investment consultant, attracted me towards a similar disciplines

of banking and finance."
2) Doesnt convey appropriately.... replace it by
"to prusue my undergradutaion in engineering studies."
3) replace by "equip myself"
4) replace by "To achieve this"
5) Unclear due to improper sentence construction
6) About the last line...I am NOT sure whether it will be OK ....but yes it is definetly a sound
reason for opting FMS.... and I believe FMS is proud about it too(their website claims that)..also
its a HATKE reason from other SOPs :mg: ....Just change the sentence to convey the proper
meaning....you can re-write it like following:
" Considering my financial penchant, it really makes a strong business sense to pursue my post
graduate studies at FMS with its highest Return On Investment across the entire globe. "
SOP48 - FMS
Being an ENGG. grad my strong points have always been to solve practical problems with a high
degree of accuracy and empirical estimations.
Towards the end of my class i started to set face the bigger question of life"What i want to
be"and then i decided to do an MBA and aspire to become future business manager/leader.
MBA provides me an opportunity to holistically look at business entity and powerfully harness
my ability to understand the technical core of it. A cross functional exposure to diff. domains wat
being an Engg i look for.
I want to do MBA in Marketing as understanding the Tech details of the product under
consideration as well as the consumers requirement, comforts & discomforts would make
me effective business solution provider supplemented by my empirical ability which is
omnipresent in any business enterprise.
Being at FMS which offers not only a regular program but also a residential campus wud help in
1) Appreciating the imporatnce of interpersonal skills, team building which r essential

prequisities 2 succees in corporate world.
2) Well established curriculum designed with emphasis on adequate exposure to real business
world involving corpoarte and alumni participation.
3)Excellent palcements.
Thus its resonable to conclude . an MBA at FMS completes my individual's academic goals
& widens my professional scope in today's dynamic world.
SOP49 - FMS
My undergraduate study has enriched me with a lot of invaluable lessons. More than the
technical knowledge that I've garnered in this time, it is the priceless communication skills and
real-world challenges that I've faced that have convinced me to pursue a higher education degree
in Management. I was at the forefront of the organization of a mammoth cultural event("Carpe
Diem - '04") and a national-level technical event("Navachaitanya - '04") spanning 3 days and 12
fields of engineering. These events have given me the confidence to work in a team, to meet
deadlines, to work under pressure, to trust in myself to have the ability to overcome the worst
obstacles and to come out successful.
I believe I have what it takes to be a manager, to be both a great leader and team player. My
experiences have taught me skills that if sharpened with cutting-edge education at a high-profile
B-School would make me a good manager. I want to have the confidence to take decisions for
my team and I want my team to have confidence in me. This can only be achieved with a sound
knowledge in the functional areas of management, by learning the structured principles of
teamwork, by interaction with a wide variety of departments and faculties, by looking beyond
books/classrooms and by a constant proximity to the best in the business. FMS, then, is the
perfect place to realize my dream. FMS has all these qualities and thereby is the institute that can
give me the tools to take on business in the real world.
SOP50 - FMS
My philosophy of life is that the journey should be as interesting as the destination. Growth of
personality, outlook, confidence and maturity are as important as meeting career objectives.
Technical education has helped me to become aware of the technical tools available to support
business, and to develop an analytical and disciplined approach to problems. As Secretary of the
Rotaract Club, which has more than 400 members, I learnt how to lead people, tackle pressure,
sell ideas and manage time. Industrial training at Electrosteel Castings, and Sify Corporation for
2 weeks each has given me a broad idea of the way in which organizations work.
I strive to create a professional, challenging, dynamic and growth based environment around my
workplace. The ever-increasing need of professionalism in Indian corporations, as the global
markets are opening up, presents a great opportunity to do the same.
It is this understanding of technology, confidence in my leadership skills and urge to meet people
and challenges that an MBA course best suits my skills and aspirations.
FMS is the ideal business school for me because of its world class faculty, flexible curriculum,
and its inter-disciplinary environment and most importantly its relatively small batch size.
SOP51 - SPJAIN
If you had a choice, what attribute of your character would you like to change?
Generally, in my school days, whatever responsibility I used to take up, I used to make sure that
I perform it to my utmost satisfaction. But after getting into business, I realized that I had to
delegate the task among my co-workers and see that everyone performs to their level best. This
transformation would take a little more time. The next attribute that I would like to change is that
I am a person who appreciates tasks being performed in a perfect manner. This quality makes me
expect my co-workers to perform to their best. It really puts me down when I see them not
performing to their level best.
This is a question about negative attributes, then why expose more than one? I think you need to
refine you language a bit.
What is your understanding of the term “values”? Mention three values that you implement in
your daily life. Illustrate at least one with an example.
“Values”, I believe, are the foundation on the basis of which a person’s life is built. A man
without any values is the one who is playing a lost game.(this line not needed) Firstly, I believe
in never giving up hope. The minute I lose my faith is the minute to my downfall. I always
remember that it is easy to lose hope than holding on to it. Secondly, I believe in the power of
thought. I firmly believe that if I really want something very badly and it is worth achieving, I
would achieve it. I might have to shift my entire strength towards it. Thirdly, I believe that hard
work should be respected. Thereby I am far off from piracy of books. The writers take so much
pain to put down their thoughts. Just in order to respect their efforts, I buy second hand original
book, borrow from my friends or if worth it, buy a copy myself.
I think you are being unnecessary verbose.... you need to be precise not only in terms of
language but also in terms of content.
Describe a situation where you, as an individual, set your sight on a difficult target and saw it
through to completion despite obstacles.
This was what had happened when I was in XIIth Std. I felt that the only difference that I could
be in a better college depends on my score in my board examination. Therefore, I started
working hard to see that I score really good marks. As my best subjects were Computer science
and Commerce, I wanted to maximize my score in those subjects. Just a month before the board
examination, I came down with a viral fever. It was difficult to concentrate on my revision
exams. I had to devote a little less time to my papers, which resulted in getting 80% in revision
papers. But I knew that I could really do better and didn’t lose my hope. I got well in a week. On
the day of the exam, I did my best. I really feel that hard-work works. After a month I got my
results and I was very happy that I had scored centum in both the papers.
I think I should explain you by re-writing this essay as to how you need to re-work on your
language and avoid being too wordy.
In India, board examination, especially XIIth std, is considered extremely crucial, since a high
score guarentees admission into a good graduation college. I set a goal to surpass my own
academic excellence uptill now. This was a harder job, considering the amount of competition
and the diverse level of education provided to different students. With just a month before the
board exams, I had a severe viral attack, which rendered me incapable of pursuing my daily
study schedule. Even with all these obstacles, I did not lost hope and faith in my capabilities. I
did my best during the exams. When the results were declared, I was pleasently surprised to see
that I managed to score 100% in two papers with, exceptional marks in rest.
This might NOT fit exaclty, but notice a continuous flow and NO content wise repetition in the
essay. I suppose you can re-write all the essays better now.
SOP52 - FMS
I foresee my career as one that would be intimately connected with people, their unsatisfied
needs as well as their potential and changing needs. In pursuance of the above I would have to
acquire a holistic understanding of fantasy and behaviour as they interact in the marketplace and
also, develop an insight into the subtly inter-related influences of cultural, social and
generational changes on consumer behaviour and how it shapes our marketing practices.
Possessing thorough knowledge of marketing, especially marketing research would be essential
to substantiate this vision into a reality.
Pursuing a management degree at a reputed school as the Faculty of Management Studies would
doubtlessly endow me with the basic technical and managerial skills. But, more importantly, the
flexibility the institute offers in terms of the curriculum and learning methodologies inspires an
increased sense of responsibility and a desire to understand mistakes and learn from them.
Increased independence brings along with it a spirit of adventure and nurtures a creative mind,
two qualities which are absolutely indispensable in the realm of marketing.
SOP53 - MICA
1. state briefly how people who know you would describe you.What would they
say about your interests, achievements, special traits , stengths and weaknesses?
ans.--- I m known among friends as a gregarious girl who gives her best till
the last , Belives in not just hard work but also smart work , actively participates in both
technical and
cultural extra curricular activities , has very good organisational skills and believes in team work.
Her biggest strength is her ability to give the best and most creative and innovative ideas.Has the
quality of spontaneous
creativity and is passionate for doing new creative things. Her weaknesses
comprise impatience at times and sleflessness , which at times backfires.
2.Briefly state your academic and career interests in communication and how
would the programme be helpful to you??
ans--The filed of communication always excites me.My goal is to be a successful career woman
in the field of advertising or marketing
. The major reason being strong inclination for creativity.Besides, the"people factor" associated
with
advertising also attracts me.It is about influencing and convincing people which requires a
perfect blend of Emotional quotient and
intelligence quotient which i feel , i possess.MICA, being the numero uno in this field is my
dream institute.It is the pioneer C-school,
which focusses on creative comunication and synthesizesprofessionalism through an impeccably
structured curriculum covering the whole
gamut of skills reqd in integrated marketing communications.
3.state briefly your extra curricular interests.please indicate what you read, how you spend your
leisure time,
and other extra curricular activities that you have been involved with??
ans-- I have immense interest in working creatively on a given concept or idea.i thoroughly
analyse it covering all the aspects and try to present it
with an innovative approach to leave an impact.This has helped me in winning many
prizes(some at state level as well) in events like on the spot paper collage,
face painting , funny algorithms , theme dance choreography, and theme based drawing
contests.i m very keen in participating in all kinds of extra curricular activities.
i spend my leisure time in a variety of ways like painting , with friends and at times ,
contructively- i sometimes teach my house hold maid's son in my leisure time.
SOP54 - GRE
Four years ago, when i had to choose my career path, i chose mechanical engineering. why?
i had a conviction that this was an area which would never fall short of innovations and felt that i
could enjoy working in it.Fortunately, this conviction has only strengthened with time.
During my graduation i found that it requires not only good fundamentals but also an amazing
amount of flexibility of thought to succeed in this profession. I realised that mechanical
engineering is the closest we can come to merging knowledge, innovation and practicality. For
me the beauty of this idea can be guaged by the fact that an idea as simple as a one-way valve
finds itself irreplaceable in a design as grand as a rocket engine, surely one of the prime
examples of human ingenuity.
In this vast field of mechanical engineering, i have found my niche in the areas of fluid
mechanics and thermal engineering. These interest me because they represent one of the most
challenging questions still facing us; how to predict the behaviour of fluids? There is a lot of
experimental work being done in this area in almost all major universities around the world. The
focus ranges from design of heat engines to missile bodies. The only constraint is the availability
of good resources, both in terms of hardware and specialists.
In my graduation, I did not face either of the two problems. My supervisor, Dr. S.A.Khan
personally took our group to the aerospace experimental laboratory of Prof. E.Rathakrishnan at
Indian Institute of Technology (IIT), Kanpur. It is the best researching facility in India and we
did our project experiments there. Both Dr.Khan and Prof.Rathakrishnan are the premier
researchers in Gas Dynamics in India. It was a real eye opener for me because I realised that I
needed better researching facilities for further studies.
After working in one of the best facilities in India, it is natural for me to look abroad for higher
studies.This leads me to the university of XXXX. It really is an automatic choice because you
have some really good research work going on in the deptt. of mechanical engineering.
Researchers like Prof. X are rated quite high in their own fields, currently pursuing projects in
which i would be very much interested. To be honest, it would be quite an honour to work with
people like them.
Also, coming from Aligarh Muslim University, one of the oldest and finest educational
institutions in India with a chequered, century-old history, makes me look for great traditions in a
prospective university. And the University of XXX fits the bill.
SOP54r
Four years ago, when i had to choose my career path, i chose mechanical engineering. why?
Okay, sounds different. Whets the apetite. But can you use more hit-you-in-the-face approach ?
If you don't know what it is don't worry, even I cannot explain :mg: Just that it seems a little
placid.
i had a conviction that this was an area which would never fall short of innovations and felt that i
could enjoy working in it.Fortunately, this conviction has only strengthened with time.
Frankly, even a janitor's job is full of challenges if you think about it :P So I think that to say that
*only* mech has the innovations is not too great an idea. And also you need to validate why you
"enjoy working in it". If you have written that below.......well Im getting there :)
During my graduation i found that it requires not only good fundamentals but also an amazing
amount of flexibility of thought to succeed in this profession. I realised that mechanical
engineering is the closest we can come to merging knowledge, innovation and practicality. For
me the beauty of this idea can be guaged by the fact that an idea as simple as a one-way valve
finds itself irreplaceable in a design as grand as a rocket engine, surely one of the prime
examples of human ingenuity.
If this thing is original then I welcome you to join us in the informal SOP editing committee :mg:
Seriously I think this piece is cool.
In this vast field of mechanical engineering, i have found my niche in the areas of fluid
mechanics and thermal engineering. These interest me because they represent one of the most
challenging questions still facing us; how to predict the behaviour of fluids? There is a lot of
experimental work being done in this area in almost all major universities around the world. The
focus ranges from design of heat engines to missile bodies. The only constraint is the availability
of good resources, both in terms of hardware and specialists.
Wheew !! You are not giving me an opportunity to nitpick ! :gm:
In my graduation, I did not face either of the two problems. My supervisor, Dr. S.A.Khan
personally took our group to the aerospace experimental laboratory of Prof. E.Rathakrishnan at
Indian Institute of Technology (IIT), Kanpur. It is the best researching facility in India and we
did our project experiments there. Both Dr.Khan and Prof.Rathakrishnan are the premier
researchers in Gas Dynamics in India. It was a real eye opener for me because I realised that I
needed better researching facilities for further studies.
Okay dude, say something wrong so I can nitpick :mg:
After working in one of the best facilities in India, it is natural for me to look abroad for higher
studies.This leads me to the university of XXXX. It really is an automatic choice because you
have some really good research work going on in the deptt. of mechanical engineering.
Researchers like Prof. X are rated quite high in their own fields, currently pursuing projects in
which i would be very much interested. To be honest, it would be quite an honour to work with
people like them.
Also, coming from Aligarh Muslim University, one of the oldest and finest educational
prospective university. And the University of XXX fits the bill.
Okay so finally you gave me some work :gm:
(1) "After working in one of the best facilities in India, it is natural for me to look abroad for
higher studies."
Rather put it as - some stuff I can do only there. Don't take the india comparison thingy.
(2) "It really is an automatic choice because you have some really good research work going on
in the deptt. of mechanical engineering. Researchers like Prof. X are rated quite high in their own
fields, currently pursuing projects in which i would be very much interested."
rephrase to "univ XXX becomes an automatic choice because of the research work going on at
the department of mechanical engineering by profs like prof. I am very excited to get involved in
.......blah blah"
(3) "To be honest, it would be quite an honour to work with people like them. "
Your being honest true but putting it as a seperate sentences doesnt look too cool.
(4) "Also, coming from Aligarh Muslim University, one of the oldest and finest educational
prospective university. And the University of XXX fits the bill."
Chequered history ? Baap kyon yeh sab bol raha hai :mg: I think I get what you are trying to
convey but this sentence really doesnt bring it out.
SOP55 - IITD
"It’s not only weakness needs support. Strength needs it far more" - Madame Swetchine. This
has always leaded me to improve on my weaknesses and utilize my forte to achieve my goals at
every stage of life. Myself, being amiable, a good team worker, a good communicator, a leader,
one who likes being a pioneer in doing things, one with ability to convince others. While
working as a consultant for two years with Kanbay software Pvt Ltd, one of the top notch
software consultancy companies, I have been trying to further hone up these skills and have
learned various functional areas of corporate world.
I believe that to achieve my long term goal of being an entrepreneur, in addition to qualities
mentioned above I need to equip myself with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in
facing the complex business environment with confidence.
So my strengths require aid of knowledge of the subtle nuances of management aspects of an
organization to help me to achieve my goal. Indian Institute of Technology, Delhi – One of the
pioneering institutes with its world-class infrastructure, superior industry interaction, renowned
and experienced faculty, and excellent management research base appeals to me.
I hope, nay I am confident that two year MBA program at this esteemed institute would take me
places.
SOP55r
1)"It’s not only weakness needs support. Strength needs it far more" - Madame Swetchine. This
has always leaded me to improve on my weaknesses and utilize my forte to achieve my goals at
every stage of life. 2)Myself, being amiable, a good team worker, a good communicator, a
leader, one who likes being a pioneer in doing things, one with ability to convince others. While
working as a consultant for two years with Kanbay software Pvt Ltd, one of the top notch
software consultancy companies, I have been trying to further hone up these skills and have
learned various functional areas of corporate world.
3)I believe that to achieve my long term goal of being an entrepreneur, in addition to qualities
mentioned above I need to equip myself with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in
facing the complex business environment with confidence.
4)So my strengths require aid of knowledge of the subtle nuances of management aspects of an
organization to help me to achieve my goal. 5)Indian Institute of Technology, Delhi – One of the
pioneering institutes with its world-class infrastructure, superior industry interaction, renowned
and experienced faculty, and excellent management research base appeals to me.
6)I hope, nay I am confident that two year MBA program at this esteemed institute would take
me places.
1) The quote does not go well here and it surely lack the punch you intended
2) The sentence structure and content is BAD......you seem to have every good quality in the
book..... you can break this into two sentences as below
I am an amicable person with good communication skiils and a excellent team worker. My
leadership abilities stems from my involvement in pioneering things and an ability to convince
others
3) Break it into two sentences
4) The structure of sentence is wrong...you can re-word it something like this

I believe that to achieve my goal, my current strengths need addition of the knowledge of various
cross-functional areas of business and an understanding of the nuances of managing an
organization.
5) Too cliched....re word it and add some unique thing about IIT-D
6) Spruce up this sentence
SOP56 - IITKgp
"Whether you believe you can do a thing or not, you are right." This is something my father has
kept repeating to me whenever I’m in a tough situation and it has always helped me achieve what
I’ve set out for myself. I believe that one’s destiny lies in one’s own hand and that there is
nothing unachievable once you set your sight on it.
My Engineering degree has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills since architecture
with the creativity also involves lot of understanding of the complex structures and the
application of basic math skills. I had also been working part time with my family firm, NRK
Enterprises for two years before joining it full time around 9 months back. I have also assisted in
establishing a enterprise wide data collection and management system at Divyesh Desai and
Associates, an Architectural firm. I have been doing a lot of freelance interior and architectural
projects along with all this.
More than what I’ve studied in school and college, it has been these experiences that have
shaped the person that I am today. This blend has given me a broad perspective and a good
understanding of life and a goal to aim for. Among other things, I have this diversity of
experiences to offer to IIT Kharagpur.
SOP56r
(1) Remove the Divyesh Desai dna NRK part, no point using the SOP like a reusme. Anyways
they would get to know these details. So just say got a lot of real-time exposure or something.
(2) The last para sounds kinda incomplete. I mean it should drive home the point. The finishing
lines are like the final overs of an ODI, they more or less give the feel to the reader on the WHY
part.
SOP57 - IITD
To do an MBA from an institute of repute is my dream for long. I always possessed the qualities
like decision-making, teamwork and communication skills. I also acquired some analytical and
reasoning skills during engg. And by the time I completed it I have become emotionally more
mature.
During my job I realized that a good manager should possess certain fundamental managerial
skills to prosper. I find MBA at IITD best to develop that business acumen. With the ongoing
research and a good industry interface it keeps students at par with the current developments.
The expertise and diverse background of the faculty ensures holistic development of the student.
Studying at IIT means interacting with some of the best brains of India. Moreover Delhi quickly
being a hub for corporate world makes IITD best place to study.
SOP58 - IITD
The growing challenge in today’s business environment is to manage an enterprise in the face of
ever increasing complexity and unpredictability due to both internal and external factors. To
succeed in this environment, one not only requires a detailed understanding of corporate
workings, people and the business scenario, but also an ability to visualize the impact of one’s
decisions.
Being a boarder since the age of twelve, has inculcated in me the trait of adaptability to respond
to transient environments. An Engineering degree has enhanced my analytical skills. Working
with Tata Motors for the past two and a half years has given me an insight into the complexity
and dynamics of a world-class organization.
MBA course sets to equip individuals with a competitive edge with the development of strategic
thinking being of central importance. The MBA course curriculum at IIT Delhi is a melting pot
of ideas meant to nudge participants towards making a mature judgment.
SOP59 - General
Having completed my Bachelors of Engineering in Electronics and Telecommunication and

gaining a work experience of a year and a month thereafter, in a MNC IT company, I now look
forward to pursue a management degree from a premier institute. Taking into consideration, the
larger picture and my long term aspirations, I very strongly feel that technology and management
go hand in hand and they share a symbiotic relation with one another. Hence, my decision to
pursue MBA.
I completed my graduation from ******** in ^^^^^. The college education has given me a
plethora of technical knowledge and made my thinking process very much analytical and logical.
The art of analyzing problems and arriving at their logical solutions has become a much easier
process than before. After graduation, I worked for a year and a month with ****** . ****** is a
global IT consulting company which provides high-quality, high-value solutions to the
insurance, banking, lending, credit card, and capital markets industries. The experience with
****** was definitely one of it’s kind and also my first tête-à-tête with the corporate world. The
company, being a very open and transparent organization, provided a lot of healthy and positive
interaction between all levels of management.
The corporate experience, together with my educational background, has made me realize my
potential and motivated me to go ahead with my plans to pursue MBA from a premier B-school,
which would ultimately enable me to hone my skills as a manager and a team player. This will
eventually make my career-growth as well as personal development follow a focused and
streamlined path, and make me climb up the various rungs of the corporate ladder rather
smoothly and with poise.
SOP60 - IITD
"What I am today is a consequence of choices I made yesterday; what I

shall be tomorrow will depend on choices I make today"
I strongly believe that the course of one's life is determined by the

efforts one puts in, in the choices one has made. Throughout my
journey towards excellence I have always tried to take the best choice
& put in the best in terms of efforts. Whether it be topping my school
in IX standard or being the Head Boy in XII or being the coordinator
of IEEE Quiz ENIGMA or being the main coordinator of ALGORHYTHM, the
inaugural fest of CSI in JAMIA or being the Joint Secretary of CSI Jamia
Chapter I have always tried to make full use of choices I undertook to
develop my faculties.
As a first step towards realizing my vision of being the CEO of a

professionally well managed IT firm, I joined Jamia Millia Islamia for
my graduation in Comp. Engg. & after having undergone a four year
course in technical studies, as a next step I would like to undergo a
management course in systems.
IIT Delhi, with a Management course focusing on systems & especial

emphasis on analytical problem solving skills will than be an ideal
destination for my Post Graduation.With its diverse students
background, the highly qualified faculty & the competence & the strive
for excellence that naturally associates with an IIT, IIT Delhi I
believe is the place that will best cater to my ambition.
SOP61 - IITD
"Dreams when put into action causes miracles."
I strongly believe that just having a dream is not enough what is

required is the conviction in that dream, the courage to act upon that
dream & the persistence to keep working when the dream seems
impossible.
Whether it be topping my school in IX standard or being the Head Boy

in XII or being the coordinator of IEEE Quiz ENIGMA or being the main
coordinator of ALGORHYTHM, the inaugural fest of CSI in JAMIA or being
the Joint Secretary of CSI Jamia Chapter I have always had conviction in
my dreams & tried my best to convert those dreams into reality.
As a first step towards realizing my dream of being the CEO of a

professionally well managed IT firm, I joined Jamia Millia Islamia for
my graduation in Comp. Engg. & after having undergone a four year
course in technical studies, as a next step I would like to undergo a
management course in systems.
IIT Delhi, with a Management course focusing on systems & especial

emphasis on analytical problem solving skills will than be an ideal
destination for my Post Graduation.With its diverse students
background, the highly qualified faculty & the competence & the strive
for excellence that naturally associates with an IIT, IIT Delhi I
believe is the place that will best cater to my ambition.
SOP62 - IIMB
Write a short essay on yourself. You may wish to talk about your background, significant events,
accomplishments, extracurrics, relationships with friends and family, career plans and how
PGPM from IIM-B fits into your dreams and ambitions. Please make sure that your essay forms
a coherent whole.
I come from a middle class family, rich in values and traditions. My father is an executive at
NTPC while my mother is a home maker. It is from them that my learning in life started. They
inspired me to develop an all-round personality and seek pleasure in whatever I do. My
cheerfulness also stems from the happy environment that I have been brought up in. Apart from
trying to maintain a decent academic record throughout, I have actively taken part in multiple
extracurrics like quizzes, debates, skits representing both my school and college at various events
like the All India University meet. Since my Head Boy days till QRIOSITY”-2003,2004, I have
also been very much into organizational activities. From Don Bosco, Delhi to D.P.S-Farakka to
Jadavpur University-Kolkata, I think I have learnt how to adapt to different situations and
people.
Upon self-introspection ,I have observed that challenges always inspire me to give in my best. It
is this love for challenges that drives me towards IIM-B. With the world class faculty and the
rich experience that it has in imparting high quality education, it would be my privilege to be a
part of the PGPM program at IIM-B. Not only will it expose me to challenges of various kind,but
also help me master the art. The sound knowledge base that I would develop will surely help me
in the corporate world,with the IIM-B name making me stand apart from the rest.
SOP63r
Will just give you few pointers....
1) Your SOP lacks the 'punch'....It will be 'just' another SOP

2) Few unnecessary lines....(thats a waste of precious space from SOP point of view) ....e.g It is
from them that my learning in life started. This is true with everybody...so what....
3) My cheerfulness also stems from the happy environment that I have been brought up in.Thats
a very bad sentence....the first thing that strikes me after reading this is
" Hmm...so cheerfulness is not this guy's quality....anyone who will be brought up in a HAPPY
environment would be cheerful...... bad....ain't there many people who are cheerful despite
difficulties in life"
4) The second paragraph is loads of BS.....you missed the entire question
Where is
a) significant events, accomplishments?

b) relationships with friends and family?
c) how PGPM from IIM-B fits into your dreams and ambitions.?
You didnt described any of these......
Sorry......but this is just another run of the mill SOP
You need to work on the content as well on the language....(see previous pages of this thread
...and especially look at the language used by Arun and Simba)
SOP64 - TISS
I believe in the character of "Ardhenarishwar" soft outside fire inside, constant learning and
subsiquent application is the most important virtue of a Human Being. For me Loving, Caring,
Creating and Adventuring are four most important wheels on which life moved, this is most
important than being a successfull Entrepreneur or an expert in any field. My prep for IIT JEE
was an eye opener as i had to travell by cycle 18 Kms at a stretch
The poverty of the slums through which i moved, suffering of the people, young naked children
playing in open air. It was a painful yet enlightening transformation. I realized success is
measured by no. of smiles that i can bring on their faces. I pledged to make positive changes in
the life of 1000 people.
My 4 years in MERI was another learning experience to stay away from my parents, to live in a
highly disciplined environment, to livbe harmoniously with people from various cultural
backgrounds, and most importantly to accomplish the task in all circumstances were the lessons I
learned the hard way. I learned that it is a collective growth which is of prime importance.
SOP64r
You forgot to mention the exact question asked and the word limit... anyway here goes my
inputs...
1) Do a spell check and grammer correction. (I found few errors)

2) Also break your sentences....a lenghty sentence makes the reader sleepy
3) Remove redundant lines...for example
My prep for IIT JEE was an eye opener as i had to travell by cycle 18 Kms at a stretch.
What is the use of this sentence except to eat away the precious space.....Your intention is not
clear.... Do you want them to know that you "prepared for IIT JEE and for that you travelled 18
KM at a strech"...(useless information...if you are an IITian then they already know this...if you
are not then it tells them about your failure...and if you want them to know that during your
travel you experienced the poverty...then why mention the prep part....)...........you might mention
this in the interview....
4) Word the sentences properly so that it is crystal clear what exactly you intend to convey
5)
I pledged to make positive changes in the life of 1000 people.
Why only 1000....why not 100000?? Probably what you meant was
I pledged to make positive changes in the life of atleast 1000 people.

I repeat...word you sentences carefully so that they convey what you want them to convey....
6) Your one single sentence make the entire last para....break it into short and succinct
sentences....
7) BTW if this is an SOP, then it is also supposed to mention
a) What are your goals (short term & long term) and ambitions
b) Why TISS
c) How does this program aligns with your goals
I am not entirely sure what TISS expects...current students or alums on PG might help you...
SOP65 - IIMB
“The roots of true achievement lie in the will to become the best that you can become” these
words by Harold Taylor define my philosophy in life. I believe that for me to achieve my
potential, I must pursue a field that excites me. My interactions with the field of management, in
the form of case studies, business plan competitions and literature, have been thoroughly
stimulating and have strengthened my conviction to pursue a career in the same.
An avid blogger and a voracious reader, my belief in the power of ideas stems from my
upbringing, particularly because of my brother, whom I see as my idol. Coming from a family
having strong belief in the values of humility and altruism I have tried to contribute my bit to
society as a teacher and mentor to homeless children.
My experiences in organizing various competitions in college and being part of the editorial team
of the college magazine have given me useful insights into managing diverse teams and have
hardened me as a manager.
With a stress on Global as well as Local, Current as well as emerging, conceptual as well as
Analytical, IIMB will equip me with all the essential ingredients for effective management.
SOP65r
“The roots of true achievement lie in the will to become the best that you can become” these
words by Harold Taylor define my philosophy in life. I believe that for me to achieve my
potential, I must pursue a field that excites me. My interactions with the field of management, in
the form of case studies, business plan competitions and literature, have been thoroughly
stimulating and have strengthened my conviction to pursue a career in the same.
Well...to be honest.... I would straight away reject you with this SOP.... you seem to have written
the SOP in a casual manner ......and nothing can irritate the SOP reader than a casual attitude on
part of the applicant....especially when he/she have hundreds of other (better) SOPs to read.....
[Ain't this thing been stressed enough in the last few pages of this thread]
The impression after reading this para is .... you want to do PGP course from IIMB simply
because it "excites/stimulates" you...........
You will be grilled like hell on this....
Where are your ambitions which makes your decision to pursue the PGP course as a logical
step.... (this too have been stressed so many times....)
An avid blogger and a voracious reader, my belief in the power of ideas stems from my
upbringing, particularly because of my brother, whom I see as my idol. Coming from a family
having strong belief in the values of humility and altruism I have tried to contribute my bit to
society as a teacher and mentor to homeless children.
My experiences in organizing various competitions in college and being part of the editorial team
of the college magazine have given me useful insights into managing diverse teams and have
hardened me as a manager.
With a stress on Global as well as Local, Current as well as emerging, conceptual as well as
Analytical, IIMB will equip me with all the essential ingredients for effective management.
Hey ...the SOP is always about you...you future plans, how you going to achieve it and why this
course and why this b-skool.... In your SOP EVERYTHING is missing.....
The things you have written about your interests...you "idol" brother...your family values..your
blogging...all this is secondary....[I believe that today almost all people who are applying to
bschool are blogger...so whats different... everyone would have one "idol" in their family...so
what.... everyone have strong family values...]...Its not clear what differentiates you.... WHY
YOU...why not any other TOM, D*** or HARRY :mg:
Sorry to be harsh...but I would just throw your SOP out of the window....
SOP66 - IIMB
I see life as a journey and not as a destination. A journey that began with my birth but will not
end with my death. A journey followed by utmost passion, and at the same time carefully guided
by the strong ethical and moral values. Engineering provided me an opportunity to add various
dimensions to my personality. As a treasurer Audio & Lights club I learned to manage things and
shoulder responsibility. My academic projects taught me group dynamics and importance of time
management. I dream to reach a position of responsibility and dignity where I can freely exercise
my creative and analytical skills to create an impact on society and make my journey immortal.
IIM-B, being a pioneer institute, will provide me the requisite skills and the competitive
advantage to reach such a position and thus will become a major milestone in my journey
SOP67 - IIMB
I will be graduating with the basic degree in Electronics and Communications Engineering from
DVR College of Engineering and Technology, affiliated to Jawaharlal Nehru Technological
University, Hyderabad.
During engineering, I was selected by the college management to organize most events such as
the “EMBLAZON”, the freshers’ meet and so on. Recently, I was also selected to serve on the
“Anti-Ragging Committee”. I was also actively involved in organizing the NSS-Blood Donation
Camps organized at our college. My active participation in the above mentioned events helped
me to enhance my inter personal skills to a great level. During my course of Engineering I have
developed on the technical front and now I would like to learn Management to be a part of the
decision making team of an organization.
The attitude and the knowledge level that is built up in the students of an institution plays a
pivotal role in the way a person handles his work pressure. The world class infrastructure and the
excellent student-faculty interface at IIM would provide me the desired stimulation and support
environment. To sum up, my two-year stint at a world class institution such as IIM Bangalore
would equip me with the necessary skills to propel my career in the desired direction.
What influenced you to choose a career in management?
The crucial aspect of timely decision making by the executive body ultimately leads the
organization onto the success path. The main source of inspiration for me has always been the
fact that I have always wanted to be a part of the executive team which takes vital decisions to
lead the organization on the success path.
SOP68 - IIMB
My career goal is to become a business leader, to lead a s/w organization and play key role in its
growth. I’ve the technical knowledge but I lack an understanding of the business environment.
An mba from iim b will provide me a sound grasp on the business fundamentals and enhance my
analytical skills which will make me a better decision maker. Also at IIM b I will learn from the
best faculty and work in a highly competitive and challenging environment which will groom me
for the future. I am a focused and proactive person and always strive for excellence in my
endeavours.I’ve excelled in academics throughout my schooling. In college I’ve maintained a
judicious balance b/w academics and extra curricular activities. I’ve won scholarship for my
academic performance and also honed my leadership and communication skills by engaging
myself in event organization, presentations etc. I believe that by blending both my present skills
and the knowledge i will gain at IIM B , I'll be able to carve out a successful career.
SOP68r
1) Never use abbreviations (e.g s/w for Software or b/w for between)
2) Always write IIM, Banglore (not IIM b or IIM B)
3) Do a grammer and spell check
4) Your structure of SOP seems to be okay...but the choice of words does not convey
your passion for the course or institute....
5) There are some redundant sentences...(waste of space), for example I’ve excelled in
academics throughout my schooling.
This statement is unnecessary....they already know your academic details...isnt it? rest you can
speak in interview...this is not the place for it...
6) You have written too many generalised statements...its better to write specific details..example
I’ve won scholarship for my academic performance. Not very convincing...which scholarship?
When? Write details....
SOP69 - TISS
I believe in the character of "Ardhenarishwar" soft outside fire inside, constant learning and
subsiquent application is the most important virtue of a Human Being. For me Loving, Caring,
Creating and Adventuring are four most important wheels on which life moved, this is most
important than being a successfull Entrepreneur or an expert in any field. My prep for IIT JEE
was an eye opener as i had to travell by cycle 18 Kms at a stretch
The poverty of the slums through which i moved, suffering of the people, young naked children
playing in open air. It was a painful yet enlightening transformation. I realized success is
measured by no. of smiles that i can bring on their faces. I pledged to make positive changes in
the life of 1000 people.
My 4 years in MERI was another learning experience to stay away from my parents, to live in a
highly disciplined environment, to livbe harmoniously with people from various cultural
backgrounds, and most importantly to accomplish the task in all circumstances were the lessons I
learned the hard way. I learned that it is a collective growth which is of prime importance.
SOP69r
I believe in the character of "Ardhenarishwar", soft outside fire inside. Constant learning and its
subsiquent <subsequent> application is the most important virtue of a human being. I believe
that Loving, Caring, Creating and Adventuring are four most important wheels on which life
moves. <this is most important than being a successfull Entrepreneur or an expert in any field.
My prep for IIT JEE was an eye opener as i had to travell by cycle 18 Kms at a stretch> <These
lines are unnecessary. Why you need to mention IIT-JEE..... If you passed from IIT, then they
know it....and if you failed...it indicates your failure...>
<This statement is left hanging...complete it> The poverty of the slums through which i moved,
suffering of the people, young naked children playing in open air. It was a painful yet
enlightening transformation. I realized success is measured by<no abbreviations please> no. of
smiles that <Hey I am not going to do these grammatical and structural errors..'i' needs to be in
capital 'I' > i can bring on their faces. I pledged to make positive changes in the life of 1000
people. <Why 1000, why not 1000000??...you forgot to add the magic word 'atleast'>
My 4 <four> years in MERI <Write full college name> was another learning experience to stay
away <bad structure> from my parents, to live in a highly disciplined environment, to livbe
harmoniously with people from various cultural backgrounds, and most importantly to
accomplish the task in all circumstances were the lessons I learned the hard way. I learned that it
is a collective growth which is of prime importance.
1) Lots of spelling, grammatical and structural errors

2) Why you write "long" sentences I do not know... (example see last sentence).... why not break
them into short and sweet sentences.... its easy on the reader.
3) I do not find the answers to the questions
a) Why TISS
b) Why the particular course
c) What is your goal (ambitions...5 years down the line...10 years )
d) How does TISS fit into your scheme of life
The SOP is ofcourse about "you", but not about your experiences only...it is about your goals and
your logical step of pursuing this course....
You need to do a LOT to spruce up your SOP.... I suggest... give yourself 5 hours and study this
thread from first post to this one... and then start with your SOP.....My honest suggesstion....
SOP70 - FMS
"The entrepreneur is essentially a visualizer and an actualizer... He can visualize something, and
when he visualizes it he sees exactly how to make it happen."
-Robert L. Schwartz
Technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With an indomitable
technical background, a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the
opportunity to blend both of these aspects.
After graduating as a Computer Science Engineer, I got through Caritor India Pvt Ltd, (CMI
level 5 etc...) one of the leading Multi National Companies in the world. My innovative, strategic
and analytical abilities along with my leadership and decision-making skills helped me
experience a very fast career growth in the company. Within a barely short period of six moths of
joining as a fresher, I was entrusted the responsibility of a technical lead for a project at client
location in Florida, US.
My stint at the Client location not only was a boost technically but it further enhanced my
leadership qualities and gave me a good exposure to diverse cultures & methodologies followed
globally. I learnt how to interact with Customers worldwide, negotiate and manage resources and
adhere to strict deadlines on this onsite assignment.
Though I knew that I was doing well, I also realized that my career is soon going to be at a
standstill and in order to move ahead in the Corporate ladder, I need a MBA degree from a
reputed B School which would bridge this gap.
FMS – One of the pioneering institutes, and being one among the top B schools in the country
although being one of the oldest in India with excellent infrastructure, superior industry
interaction, highly experienced faculty and exceptional management research base appeals to my
professional interests. I wish to carve a niche for myself in the corporate world and sincerely
hope that the excellent facilities and exposure at FMS Delhi will assist me in realizing my
dreams and fulfill my long-term aspirations of becoming a global entrepreneur.
SOP70r
"The entrepreneur is essentially a visualizer and an actualizer... He can visualize something, and
when he visualizes it he sees exactly how to make it happen." -Robert L. Schwartz
no doubt, the intention of putting in a quote to start the SOP is a noble one, yet the choice of the
quotation isn't quite well explained. the quote starts off with an entrepreneur, while the rest of the
SOP doesnt mention entrepreneurship anywhere.makes i kinda superflous & redundant. either
you put in entrepreneurship somewhere..or just delete the stuff.
Technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With an indomitable
technical background, a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the
opportunity to blend both of these aspects.
tell me, where is the indomitable technical background mentioned? i am not sure what you mean
by indomitable anyway. if you want to mention a strong academic background, that would be ok.
but then, that will hafta be mentioned in the rest of the sop.
second, you talk about "enhance my innate qualities" & "blend both aspects". but which innate
qualities are you seeking to blend with ur engineering? from what you have written, doesnt it
appear as if a MBA is like engineering extended. you need an MBA to blend ur innate qualities
with ur technical skills..something that should have been done in the tech school itself. :)
After graduating as a Computer Science Engineer, I got through Caritor India Pvt Ltd, (CMI
level 5 etc...) one of the leading Multi National Companies in the world.
two things. first, remove "etc..."
& second, if possible, complete the sentence "one of the leading multinational companies in
____ ". that would be kinda more forceful
My innovative, strategic and analytical abilities along with my leadership and decision-making
skills helped me experience a very fast career growth in the company. Within a barely short
period of six moths of joining as a fresher, I was entrusted the responsibility of a technical lead
for a project at client location in Florida, US.
arent innovative, strategic, analytical, leadership, decision-making too many words in one
sentence. :mg: if i may make a suggestion, just remove the strategic part..or else, substantiate ur
case with something more. just a one line mention of what has happened after the first six
months in the company..for buttressing the existing points. however its not necessary.
My stint at the client location not only was a boost technically but it further enhanced my
leadership qualities and gave me a good exposure to diverse cultures & methodologies followed
globally. I learnt how to interact with customers worldwide, negotiate and manage resources and
adhere to strict deadlines on this onsite assignment.
well written. mind the caps though. i have only edited the capital letters.
just as an aside.. On "customers worldwide". arent u already working for a client? or are you
working for the client's clients as well ? :mg:
standstill
why do you feel this is not good work? you are negating all the power words that you had written
in the earlier paragraphs. can you explain the rationale behind this thinking a bit more ??
and in order to move ahead in the Corporate ladder, I need a MBA degree from a reputed B
School which would bridge this gap.
standard line. i guess its there in every resume. :D

professional interests. I wish to carve a niche for myself in the corporate world and sincerely
hope that the excellent facilities and exposure at FMS Delhi will assist me in realizing my
dreams and fulfill my long-term aspirations of becoming a global entrepreneur.
frankly, you have made too many assumptions and judgements about FMS without (or with ?? )
any knowledge. if, after reading this, the prof who is interviewing you asks "tell me what is the
management research done last year in FMS? " would you be able to answer this. dude, you have
said things that even i would be wary of saying, even thogh i am in FMS :mg: :mg:
infact, this whole fact about FMS can either be deleted or just streamlined. you could talk about
the extreme selection ratio of 400:1 or the only 60 open seats ..the idea is to say something you
know..rather than which you claim. hope you get my point. :mg:
overall, i feel that your sop doesnt have the real "you" in it. i still dont know what have u done,
what you are good at ..or what ae your objectives in life. could you add these to the SOP and edit
out other parts? i feel that would make the resume tighter and better to read
SOP70rr
"Technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With a strong
technical background, a management degree will both enhance my flair for interacting with
people as well as provide me with an opportunity to blend both of these aspects.
After graduating as a Computer Science Engineer, I got through a leading software services
company - Caritor India Pvt Ltd. My ability to innovative and think analyticaly along with my
leadership and decision-making skills helped me experience a very fast career growth in the
company.
Within six moths of joining, I was entrusted with leading a small team for a project at the client
location in Florida, US. This onsite project was not only a great learning experience technically
but it also honed my leadership qualities and gave me a good exposure to diverse cultures &
methodologies followed globally. I learned how to interact with customers worldwide, negotiate
and manage resources and adhere to strict deadlines .
standstill and in order to move ahead in the Corporate ladder, I need a MBA degree from a
reputed B School which would bridge this gap.(futher elabore this. What do you want to be ?
why will it be a standstill without an MBA ? Just mention that you feel that an MBA will (a)
equip you with the necessary skills and (b) give you a good boost in terms of brandname,
networking essential to growth as a manager)
professional interests. ( you have just mentioned stuff which looks bland and can be copied off
any page from their website. Give it a personal touch) I wish to carve a niche for myself in the
corporate world (again as i have mentioned before. how do you hope to do it. tie this together
with "why fms") and sincerely hope that the excellent facilities (dont talk about facilities in this
point just exposure is fine) and exposure at FMS Delhi will assist me in realizing my dreams and
fulfill my long-term aspirations of becoming a global entrepreneur.(there you go but how come
you never mention)
You had used words like "innate" and "indomitable" etc. Did you actually know the meanings of
the word or had just put them together ? I think you need to make the changes I have suggested
in the penultimate paragraph and club it together with what you have written in the last para. I
will finetune finally."
SOP71 - FMS
I envision myself playing a key role in the success of an enterprise. Success in today's business
environment, due to its ever increasing complexity and unpredictability, not only requires
creativity, analytical ability,
management skills but also a complete understanding of business.
My strong inclination towards analytical and reasoning aspects of learning made Engineering my
natural choice for Graduation. Juggling academics and extra-curriculars helped me hone my
analytical and management skills. By
the time i joined Oracle attainment of my goal transformed into a passion. My experience with
Oracle gave me an insight into the complexities and Dynamics of a world class organization. The
next logical step towards the
attainment of my goal would be pursuing a professional management course from an institute
that has a course structure aligned with the business requirements in today's scenario.
FMS emerges as my first choice B-School as the time perfected MBA course at FMS has an
unique combination of a flexible curriculum, a wide array of learning opportunities and a
conducive academic environment that distinguishes this program from others. It allows me to
explore, to be bold and to be creative. I am looking forward to an opportunity of a lifetime, a
MBA from FMS.
SOP71r
i think the essay is pretty good; focussed is the keyword. :) i am just formatting some part of
it..though i assume any Word application worth its download can do the same. :mg: :mg:
I envision myself playing a key role in the success of an enterprise. I believe that success in
today's business environment, due to its ever increasing complexity and unpredictability, not
only requires creativity, analytical ability, management skills but also a complete understanding
of business.
>>> would you like to specify the enterprise ? or just keep it open ?
>>> instead of starting like, " Success in ..." , a better approach can be "I feel that success in
today's...". makes it much more personal & authentic. again, thats what i feel :mg: :mg:
>>>management skills & understanding of business..hmm.. difficult to differentiate. can u really

differentiate between the two..or have put it because it sounds good ?
A strong inclination towards analytical and reasoning aspects of learning made me choose
engineering for graduation. Juggling academics and extra-curriculars helped me hone my
analytical and management skills. By the time i joined Oracle, attainment of my goal
transformed into a passion. My experience with Oracle gave me an insight into the complexities
and dynamics of a world-class organization. The next logical step towards the attainment of my
goal would be pursuing a professional management course from an institute that has a course
structure aligned with the business requirements in today's scenario.
>>>changed the underlined sentence. i think it sounds better this way, but its ur choice :)
>>>attainment of ur goal becane a passion..ok. but isnt every goal which is set, set with a
passion. i am talking about personal goals only. could be reconsidered :mg:
>>>overall, the first two paragraphs are pretty good. anybody who loves a structired essay would
take u in ASAP :mg::mg:
FMS emerges as my first choice B-School as the time perfected MBA course at FMS has an
unique combination of a flexible curriculum, a wide array of learning opportunities and a
conducive academic environment that distinguishes this program from others. It allows me to
explore, to be bold and to be creative. I am looking forward to an opportunity of a lifetime, a
MBA from FMS.
>>> here is where most aspirants go haywire. to be frank, whatever is written is purely hearsay.
specially this bit about "differentiates this program". now, u mention flexible curriculum, wide
array of learning & acad environment as differentiating factors. how do u jusify this ? AFAIK,
this reeks of a IIM A SOP rather than a FMS one. yes, this program is different..but the
pedagogy is different. infact, the second underlined statement is more true than the earlier one.
just relax, u dont hafta sell the FMS MBA program to the admission committee, u hafta sell
yourself :mg: :mg:
>>>last line (italized) looks like an ad jingle. u made an awesome sop. why ruin it with
histronics. be confident of ur first two paras..they are good enough to let u through :gm: :gm:
SOP71rr
I envision myself playing a key role in the success of an organization. I believe that success in
today's business environment, due to its ever increasing complexity and unpredictability, not
only requires creativity and analytical ability but also a complete understanding of business.
A strong inclination towards analytical and reasoning aspects of learning made me choose
Engineering for Graduation. Juggling academics and extra-curriculars helped me hone my
analytical and management skills. My experience with Oracle gave me an insight into the
complexities and Dynamics of a world class organization. The next logical step towards the
attainment of my goal would be pursuing a professional management course from an institute
that has a course structure aligned with the business requirements in today's scenario.
FMS emerges as my first choice B-School as the time perfected MBA course at FMS provides a
wide array of learning opportunities. The flexibility of the curriculum will allow me to explore,
to be bold and to be creative. I am confident that an MBA from FMS will give me the necessary
impetus required towards the realization of my goal.
SOP71rrr
1) I guess extra-curriculars does not make sense. Write extra-curricular activities.

2) You suddenly seem to capitalize the first letter in the middle of a sentence....
3) My experience with Oracle ==> Dont you mean your working experience with Oracle Corp.
or Oracle India Pvt Ltd or whatever.... Someone can read it as your experience with Oracle
Database Software :-) .... In an SOP NEVER use short forms/abbreviations.. Also its good to
give the number of exp (unless they are less than one) ....You can correct it as following:
Working for 'x' years in Oracle India Pvt Ltd provided me with an insight into the complexities
and dynamics of running a world class organization.
4) Correct the errors in the sentence as follows
The next logical step towards attainment of my goal is to pursue a professinal management
course from an institute that has a course structure aligned with today's business requirements.
5)
FMS emerges as my first choice business school since its time-perfected MBA course provides a
.....
6) If you write a sentence like this
The flexibility of the curriculum will allow me to explore, to be bold and to be creative.
It implies that you are well aware of the flexibilities offerred by the course and you can be asked
what are these flexiblities etc etc so be prepared... a safer sentence would be
I believe that the flexibility of the course curriculum at FMS will allow me to explore, to be bold
and to be creative.
7) This is minor but sometime important. Is the degree offerred by FMS is an MBA? If no then a
sentence like this
....an MBA from FMS.....
would cause them to ask unnecessary questions... I guess once someone was asked in some IIM
inteview whether he wanted to do an MBA? He replied in affirmative and then the next question
was IIMs dont give MBA degree... ....
I think the rest of it is good...
Just another small query...My personal opinion is that the first sentence
I envision myself playing a key role in the success of an organization
needs some modification......I am actually not very sure what that modification can be... In an
organization every body is a key player in the success... even a mere small technical lead in a s/w
company plays a key role.... so i guess you can change it to something like following if you like
it....
I envision myself leading at the highest level and playing a key role in the sucess of an
organization.
SOP72 - FMS
My natural curiosity has helped me develop an analytical bent of mind from a very early age.
After pasing out of Asia’s biggest school with a splendid academic record, I took up electrical
engineering in a prestigious university. My days at the engineering college went beyond
performing experiments and writing exams. I was exposed to the requirements of the modern
industry and realized that mere technical skills were not enough to survive in this competitive
world. It’s like power without control. In a practical scenario, the skills to manage resources is of
paramount importance. The choice of MBA as a career option followed naturally.
Looking back in retrospect, I feel fortunate that the activities that I have been involded with till
date – sometimes just for the sake of exploring a new thing- have actually sharpend the qualitites
which are requires of a manager. I was born to parents who were both working professionals.So,
from a tender age,I inculcated the indispensable quality of self reliance.I further developed a
sense of responsibility during my years of service with Tata Consultancy Services where I was
part of several mission critical applications. My trekking adventures in the high Himalayas as a
student also weathered me against adversity. With TCS, I had the privilege to volunteer in
various social activities and explore the nobler side of my persona.
Going forward, I would like to see myself as a leader leading change and driving growth. I look
to be a part of FMS to realize my dreams. With its highly acclaimed faculty,academic resources
and industrial programmes, not to mention its legacy of producing business leaders and
entrepreneurs, FMS is a class apart from the other B schools in India. Last but not the least,being
a part of FMS would enable me enjoy the enlightened company of a brilliant peer group, which
FMS ensures through its rigorious selection process.
SOP72r
1) SOP is not meant for boasting. So dont write "Asia's biggest school" and "prestigious
universtiy".... write actual names.... FMS faculty is much smarter than you and they are
voracious reader.. so they already know about Asia's biggest school and whatever university you
passed .....
2) Word limit seems to be your biggest problem... the SOP is way beyond 200 words (~ 300
words).
3) Your reasoning for MBA is way weired... it goes like "since to survive in competitive world
you need skills to manage resources and hence you are going for an MBA".... If I were a faculty I
could easily run through your defence :-) .... for completing the course at FMS you *require* the
skill to manage your resources anyway... and this is not a formal training FMS provide...
4) With 200 words its hard to narrate like a novel writer... you need to be precise like a business
writer... so sentences like
Quote:
My days at the engineering college went beyond performing experiments and writing exams OR
It’s like power without control.
unnecessarily eat up your precious space....
5) Also the thought process seem to be incoherent.... for example, you talk of working in TCS
and then you talk about trekking and then again you jump at what other thing you did while at
TCS.... Another example you talk about your goal of "being a leader leading change and driving
growth" and then you suddenly stop and talk about why FMS...
SOP72rr
I was born to working parents. So, from a tender age, I have developed a sense of responsibility
,self-reliance and above all, a liking for people. Accordingly, my dream job consists in being at
the forefront of critical decision making and an opportunity to enjoy diverse public interaction.
The choice of an MBA, as a career option follows naturally.
Having pursued science at the South point High school and later engineering at the Jadavpur
university, basic managerial skills-namely analytical and communicational- were a given for me.
Eighteen months with the Tata Consultancy services as an application developer has exposed me
to various CMM level 5 business processes and process improvement methodologies like Six
Sigma.To cap it all, I had the opportunity to handle various challenging real life crises while
organizing and participating in college fests, social activities and adventure sports.I believe that
the platform for a management career has been laid very nicely.
FMS, with its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes and its legacy of
producing business leaders and entrepreneurs is a natural choice for me. And above all, I deem it
an honour to be with the best minds in India, which FMS ensures through its rigorous selection
process.
SOP72rrr
I was born to working parents. So, from a tender age, I have developed a sense of responsibility
,self-reliance and above all, a liking for people.
What is the idea of starting an SOP with such a weired statement? I guess more than half of the
people applying to FMS might have working parents... so whats new? Not a good way to speak
about your qualities.....
Accordingly, my dream job consists in being at the forefront of critical decision making and an
opportunity to enjoy diverse public interaction. The choice of an MBA, as a career option
follows naturally.
I really could not understand how MBA as a career options follows naturally? There are umpteen
number of career options which would allow diverse public interaction...so why MBA? Also
could not understand how the qualities you mention in the first line lead to your "dream
job"....totally incoherent
Having pursued science at the South point High school and later engineering at the Jadavpur
university, basic managerial skills-namely analytical and communicational- were a given for me.
Extremely dangerous statement... dont say that some of the skills are "given for you"... FMS
faculy will just tear you apart on this one...
Eighteen months with the Tata Consultancy services as an application developer has exposed me
to various CMM level 5 business processes and process improvement methodologies like Six
Sigma.
So what? I could not understand the relevance of this.... these are quality processes (more
specifically software quality processes)... this has nothing to do with management......these are
not the tools used by managers but more specifically engineers/developers... (I might be wrong
here...but this is what my understanding is!!)
To cap it all, I had the opportunity to handle various challenging real life crises while organizing
and participating in college fests, social activities and adventure sports.I believe that the platform
for a management career has been laid very nicely.
You really are assuming too much.... if the platform for management career has already been laid
out nicely.. then why do MBA....I fail to understand your reasoning at all....
FMS, with its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes and its legacy of
producing business leaders and entrepreneurs is a natural choice for me. And above all, I deem it
an honour to be with the best minds in India, which FMS ensures through its rigorous selection
process.
Finally something which sounds good....
SOP73 - FMS
To be an entrepreneur of a business establishment that can contribute to the growth of the nation,
this has been my long cherished dream. It is my belief that the achievement of this goal requires
a detailed understanding of corporate workings, people and the business scenario both Indian and
global. I wish to work in a reputed company initially before venturing into starting my own
business establishment so as to enhance my knowledge in distinct sectors of an organization.
During the three and a half years, studying for Mechanical Engineering (Production and
Management) at NIT Calicut I have been able to have a sound knowledge in academics as well
as participate in extra circular activities.
The MBA(FT) offered by Faculty of Management studies would provide me with a firm
grounding in management fundamentals. It is my belief that the practical application of the
acquired knowledge at FMS itself will help me in achieving my goal. The eclectic mix of
students at FMS will also enhance my intellectual and inter-personal skills , fortifying the
qualities needed to face the challenges thrown up by the corporate world with confidence.
SOP73r
I am just re-writing the entire SOP to give you a feel of how the same sentences can be twisted
around to look nicer....
My long cherished dream has been to establish a business that can significantly contribute to the
growth of the nation. I believe that to achieve this goal, requires an understanding of the intricate
details about working of a business entity. It would also require understanding of the people and
the business scnearios both Indian as well as global. My short term goal after post-graduation is
to work in an established and renouned organization before venturing into my own establishment
to fulfill my long term goal.
During my three and half years of engineering studies at NIT Calicut, I acquired a sound
technical knowledge as well as participated in extra-curricular activities.
The MBA offerred by FMS, Delhi will provide me with a firm understanding of the business
fundamentals. I believe that the practical application of the knowledge acquired at FMS will
enable me to achive my goal. The eclectic mix of students at FMS will also enhance my
intellectual and inter-personal skills , fortifying the qualities needed to face the challenges
thrown up by the corporate world with confidence.
This is far from what you can actually submit. I wrote it just to show that sentences can be well
arranged to show coherency and clear thoughts.... there is still lot of sprucing up to be done on
this SOP before you can send it across.....so take another look at this from your standpoint... give
some thoughts.... and come back with the update....
SOP74 - FMS
Graduating from a premier institute VNIT Nagpur, I stepped in professional life, starting my
career as an Associate Consultant. While working on Morgan Stanley applications, I realized that
I display a passion for finance and money matters. During my brief stints in IT consultancy and
journalism, I came to understand that technical knowledge complimented with robust
management would propel an organization on success path. This realization has translated into a
decision to pursue a formal education in management with specialization in finance.
I was searching for an institute with state-of-the-art infrastructure, world-class faculty,

competitive and diverse peer group, a sensitive-to-change and flexible curriculum, a
commendable Exchange programme, , strong alumni network and an institute with a good
placement record. My search ended at FMS Delhi, which provides a perfect blend of all my
expectations. My enthusiastic involvement in various college activities, on-job trainings and
workshops and my impressive academics prove suitability of my candidature for the programme.
At FMS, I hope to undergo a rigorous MBA programme facilitating a holistic growth and
imbibing in me decision-making, problem solving skills, with regard to strategic planning and
global competition, suited for present-day complex business environment.
This would embattle me achieve my short-term goal of working in established financial
institutions, gaining experience and exposure. Eventually I would embark on a journey to see
fruition of my long-term goal of managing and guiding an organization founded by me .As
Disraeli said, “The secret of success is constancy of purpose”. I have taken another step towards
purpose of my life by seeking admission in FMS.
SOP74r
1) The SOP does not reveal coherency. The first para does not mention your goals, so its not
clear why you want to do an MBA in Finance. The last para talks about your goals...
2) The last line needs some tweaking... "purpose of life" is much bigger and greater than "long-
term goals"....
3) In your second para you are going overboard talking about FMS... do your research first...
FMS does not have "state-of-the-art infrastructure".. althought they have sufficient
infrastructure....what do you mean by sensitive-to-change curriculam?? Also if my personal
opinion is that this "search" thing is not very suitable....[My search ends at FMS....].... Its just not
giving me right gut feeling...(purely my personal opinion)....You can re-word it like "I was
looking for X,Y,Z qualities and FMS seems to be a perfect blend of all these expectation"
4) You could use your strong learning ability by mentioning that you mastered six languages.. I
would start an SOP from something interesting than the usual boring stuff.... like
One of my friend said, "Learning a new language is difficult.". I proved him wrong by mastering
six languages, which shows my passion and an exceptional learning ability.
5) Have yet not checked for spelling errors and grammatical mistakes
SOP74rr
After graduating from a premier institute VNIT Nagpur, I started my professional career as an
Associate Consultant (in organization & functional area??) . While working on Morgan Stanley
applications: Passport, MSPA, KeyContent etc. I realized that I have a passion for finance and
money matters. During my brief stints in IT consultancy and journalism, I came to understand
that technical knowledge complimented with robust management would propel an organization
on success path. This realization has translated into a decision to pursue a formal education in
management with specialization in finance.
1. changed the opening sentence a bit.

2. "During my brief..." & "formal education": it appears to me that from your job you have some
amount of professional managerial experience..which was quite lacking/unsupported in
depth/range which can be provided by a MBA course. is that right? if it is, you could remove the
first underlined part and replace it with your own professional experience recounting the bits
where you felt that you need a professional course in order to suceed at what you are/were doing.
:)

commendable Exchange programme, strong alumni network and with a good placement record.
1. the three underlined phrases are leading statements. you dont want the interviewer to grill you
on this. because, this is his/her home territory. they know it better than you. in any case, the SOP
is about you..not the insti. why waste breath (and words) on something that they already know.
2. Bold & Red Statements: actually, only writing these two would suffice. its always safe to
write about alumni because every insti retains good contacts with alums. (they are the ones who
make placements possible anyway :wink: ). also, everybody has such awesome placement
stats..feed them their own propaganda. trust me, nobody would ask you about placements. This is
true for every MBA/PGDM institute in the country :mg: :mg:
My search ended at FMS Delhi, which provides a perfect blend of all my expectations. My
enthusiastic involvement in various college activities, on-job trainings and workshops and my
impressive academics prove suitability of my candidature for the programme.
1. actually, a bit less about FMS & a bit more about YOU is needed in this SOP. so..all the
college activities that you have relegated to one-word wonders..could be expanded a bit. :)
1. whoa! please delete all such stuff ASAP. there just too much about the insti here. plus, words
like strategy do not even enter your lexicon till the second year :mg: ...and global competition ??
its just noise on the SOP, doesnt really contribute anything. infact, you have already said that the
insti offers you fulfillment of your expectations. why add more ?

1. embattle me :whatthat: :whatthat: i am a bit rusty in english, but this is not the word that you
are looking for.
2. aha! taking the entrepreneural route to MBA :mg: good! but be ready for questions on that. i
already wrote some stuff on the pm. basically, what is topping you from founding an
organization now? take our PG for instance..last time i checkd, he wasnt an MBA..still, he is an
entrepreneur and runs India's largest b-school portal :mg: :mg:
P.S. inspite of what i have written about SOP ..its still pretty good
SOP74rrr
Graduating from a premier institute VNIT Nagpur, I stepped in professional life, starting my
career as an Associate Consultant. While working on Morgan Stanley applications, I realized that
I display a passion for finance and money matters. During my brief stints in IT consultancy and
journalism, I came to understand that technical knowledge complimented with robust
management would propel an organization on success path. This realization has translated into a
decision to pursue a formal education in management with specialization in finance.
I started off my professional career with XYZ as an Associate Consultant. The work entailed
blah blah including working on Morgan Stanley applications (viz. ???). *Write a line about what
the work in MS was all about* This was when I realized that I had a passion/natural flair for
finance (I don't know if "money matters" fits....what do the others say ?). I also realized that
technical knowledge complimented with robust management is the key to an organization's
success.
*I don't know what the brief stint in IT consultancy and journalism is about...knock it off if not
needed OR elaborate on it.*

commendable Exchange programme, , strong alumni network and an institute with a good
placement record. My search ended at FMS Delhi, which provides a perfect blend of all my
expectations.
Hmm.......see FMS is known for being an old insti hence a very strong alum network. Apart from
that it has built a brand equity esp in the North. Because of this it has good placements. Finally,
the quality of students passing out is also good since the entrance requirements are stringent.
Apart from this everything else I have no clue but am sure is not top of the world. Quint might
throw some light on it :mg: So maybe you can spin your story around these points instead of the
others.
My enthusiastic involvement in various college activities, on-job trainings and workshops and
my impressive academics prove suitability of my candidature for the programme.
Hmm.....academic credentials yes but "enthusiastic involvement in various college yadda yadda
....." ??? I would suggest you change it something on the lines of "Not only did I exceed in
academics but also volunteered for various college activities." And "My real-world exposure is
not restricted to the work after college but also the on-job training I underwent". Obviously these
statements I am giving are raw so you might want to work on it.
Frankly this sentence somehow does not gel with the rest of the essay. This looks like a girl in a
miniskirt among a group of behenjis.

What is embattle ? :whatthat:

Last sound though a bit cliched sounds okay to me. I would like the Benjamin Disreli quote to fit
elsewhere. The penultimate sentence being a quote doesnt look great somehow.
SOP75 - FMS
I see myself at the helm of a growing organization in my years to come. I have approached my
studies with this purpose in mind. I did my schooling in Alpha Matriculation and passed out in
flying colours. I took up mechanical engineering at College of Engineering, Guindy (Anna
University). The past 3 years studying in mechanical engineering has nourished my creativity
and analytical skills. Besides Academics, I also involved myself in other activities. I was the co –
founder and organizer of “ApTiClub”, a small classroom club dedicated to help students excel in
aptitude tests and improve vocabulary and communication skills.
During my summer vacations, I had gone on industrial visits to companies such as Saint Gobain
and TVS – Lucas. These visits gave me a brief insight into the functioning of an organization and
made me realize the value of management to lead such an organization.
I have come to realize how much more I need to equip myself before I can truly become a great
professional. Technical knowledge and aptitude alone are not sufficient to transform me into the
leader I aim to be. I need to learn a lot more from a world class institute which can shape my
skills and mould me into a great leader. FMS exceeds my expectations from a top class
management institute and I would be proud to gain more knowledge from FMS.
SOP75r
I envision myself at the helm of an organization propelling it towards growth and sucess.
Alongwith strong analytical skills and creativity reflected by my exceptional academic results
during my schooling from Alpha Matriculation and engineering studies at College of
Engineering, Guindy (Anna University), I have good communication and inter-personal skills
which were further honed by being a co – founder and organizer of “ApTiClub”, a small
classroom club dedicated to help students.
During some industrial visits to Saint Gobain and TVS – Lucas, I received a brief insight into the
functioning of an organization that made me aware of the growing importance of management in
successfully leading any organization. I believe that to equip myself for achieving my long term
goal of leading an oragnization I need to enrich my present skillsets and hence a formal
management education is the next logical step.
..Add why FMS..
SOP75rr
My vision is to be at the helm of an organization propelling it towards growth and success. Being
the leader of a burgeoning firm demands an understanding of the people and the processes
involved in business. To achieve my goal, I have developed strong analytical skills and
creativity, reflected by my excellent academic results during my engineering studies at College
of Engineering, Guindy (Anna University). I also have good communication and inter-personal
skills, which were further honed by being a co – founder and organizer of “ApTiClub”, a small
During my industrial visits to Saint Gobain and TVS – Lucas, I received a brief insight into the
goal of leading an organization I need to enrich my present skills and hence a formal
FMS has a diverse and highly talented student community and a world class faculty, which
ensures a highly competitive and motivating environment. FMS also provides a good exposure to
current business trends – both Indian and global. Combined with a good alumni network and
impeccable placement record, FMS emerges as my preferred B School.
SOP75rrr
My vision is to be at the helm of an organization propelling it towards growth and success. Being
the leader of a burgeoning firm demands an understanding of the people and the processes
involved in business. To achieve my goal, I have developed strong analytical skills and
creativity, reflected by my excellent academic results during my engineering studies at College
of Engineering, Guindy (Anna University). I also have good communication and inter-personal
skills, which were further honed by being a co – founder and organizer of “ApTiClub”, a small
During my industrial visits to Saint Gobain and TVS – Lucas, I received a brief insight into the
goal of leading an organization I need to enrich my present skills and hence a formal
FMS has a diverse and highly talented student community and a world class faculty, which
ensures a highly competitive and motivating environment. FMS also provides a good exposure to
current business trends – both Indian and global. Combined with a good alumni network and
impeccable placement record, FMS emerges as my preferred B School.
First things first... please do not use "blue" or "red" colors while posting SOP... allow them to be
used by us only.... thanks.
Okay... few things which I can point straightaway....
1) There is difference in meaning between "envision" and "vision". The first one more or less
means "imagine", while second one is a much broader and longer thingie.... so the start of your
sentence now does not make sense.....
2) The second sentence unncessarily introduces noise... it is too impersonal... there is no need for
it...
3) The last paragraph talks about why you choose FMS, try to link it with your long term goal....
BTW you are close to finishing your SOP writing... I guess it now sounds much better than your
first version....and you have used a better and simpler english which is always preferred... if you
want to add some punch then you can have some starting quote which relates with your goal...
dont make it too fancy or out of whole context.....
SOP76 - FMS
University, Hyderabad. The attitude and the knowledge level that is built up in the students of an
institution plays a pivotal role in the way a person handles his work pressure. The world class
infrastructure and the excellent student-faculty interface at FMS,Delhi would provide me the
desired stimulation and support environment. The course would groom the mind in the right
direction by providing valuable insights into the organization part of a company and the various
innovative practices adopted. To sum up, my two year stint at a world class institution such as
FMS,Delhi would equip me with the necessary skills to propel my career in the desired direction.
organization onto the success path. The main source of inspiration for me has always been the
fact that I have always wanted to be a part of this top brass of an organization. At the end of the
day I would like to be a Senior Level Executive Manager rather than be a Technical Analyst.
SOP76r
University, Hyderabad.
1. the information given is a bit to prolix :mg: all this is already written in your application form.
dont hafta repeat it in the SOP. doesnt add anything to it anyway.
The attitude and the knowledge level that is built up in the students of an institution plays a
pivotal role in the way a person handles his work pressure. The world class infrastructure and the
excellent student-faculty interface at FMS,Delhi would provide me the desired stimulation and
support environment. The course would groom the mind in the right direction by providing
valuable insights into the organization part of a company and the various innovative practices
adopted.
1. "desired stimulation..." the question here is..for what ? basically, i fail to see any rationale
here. there is no reason for MBA & its written in too impersonal a fashion.A statement like "the
mind in the right direction" is very vague; basically after reading the first two paragraphs, i still
dont know why do u want to pursue post-grad studies, whats the motivation and what are the
rewards/gains expected from the course.
To sum up, my two year stint at a world class institution such as FMS,Delhi would equip me
with the necessary skills to propel my career in the desired direction.
1. again, nothing has been really said, so the sum up thingy doesnt hold here.
2. ok..if you talk about necessary skills which will propel your career, why not outline them out.
which skills are you looking to add. where does the course help you. am i being clear here or not
?
organization onto the success path.<<<<<<<>>>>>> The main source of inspiration for me has
always been the fact that I have always wanted to be a part of this top brass of an organization.
At the end of the day I would like to be a Senior Level Executive Manager rather than be a
Technical Analyst.
1. there is no connection between the first line & the rest of the para. infact, you could add this
one earlier, to the skills part, that you want to develop your decision-making skills.
2. if possible, could you outline which kind of organization are you targetting? thats not
necessary, but it might add substance to an otherwise generic set of statements.
3. ok. so you want to be a senior-level executive manager. what is the role of such a person, in
any organization? what does he do? why do you think a MBA degree is necessary to make a
jump from technical analyst to S-L Ex.Mgr.
4. overall, i would say that this SOP really wont do, friend. :) do browse through some of the
earlier SOPs written by people and ty to garner a general idea about the structure.Although SOP
writing isnt an exact science, i can encapsulate the fundamentals in the following points. if you
can address most of these questions successfully, we can have a workable sop.
SOP77 - FMS
To inspire and drive a team to achieve a common end,which can be a goal as small as organizing
a party or as large as taking a corporation to new heights, to learn from every experience that
comes my way, and to adventure into new ideas is my continuous aspiration.
A highly competitive,diverse peer group at RVCE, Bangalore provided me the first push in my
quest to become the best individual that I can become. My employment at Cognizant Technology
Solutions helped me learn how important soft-skills, adaptability and change management are to
the success of any system. I believe that a well structured MBA course and a competitive and
dynamic atmosphere, will help me to take up challenging responsibilities in management.
For inculcating a global perspective, I trust the emphasis on learning through live projects, the
flexibility in curriculum and collaborative and exchange programmes with international
institutions at FMS. A rigorous induction process gives me the edge of being in a lively,
diverse community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary students which is an ideal
environment for personal growth that will help in bringing out the best that I have to offer which
makes FMS easily a business school of choice.
SOP77r
My aspirations have always been to creatively pursue new ideas through inspiring and driving a
team of individuals, thereby taking the corporation to greater heights. This is reflected by my
penchant to lead even a small team for as inconsequential goal as organizing a party.
Working at Cognizant Technology Solutions is an absolute eye-opner allowing me to understand
the importance of soft-skills, adaptability and change management to the sucess of an individual
as well as of any organization.
I believe that to equip myself for handling the challenging responsibilities in an organization, a
well structured formal MBA course in a competitive and dynamic atmosphere is the next step.
FMS provides a gloabl business perspective through its emphasis on learning through live
projects, the flexibility in curriculum and collaborative and exchange programmes with
international institutions, which perfectly aligns with my aspirations. A rigorous induction
process ensures a lively and diverse community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary peer
group which is an ideal environment for personal growth that will help in bringing out the best
that I have to offer.
SOP77rr
To inspire and drive a team to achieve a common end,which can be a goal as small as organizing
a party or as large as taking a corporation to new heights, to learn from every experience that
comes my way, and to adventure into new ideas is my continuous aspiration.
I continuosly aspire to do XYZ such as A, B and C. Where XYZ explains what it is (frankly you
have written too many things to be threaded together cogently) and A, B, C being examples you
have used.
A highly competitive,diverse peer group at RVCE, Bangalore provided me the first push in my
quest to become the best individual that I can become. My employment at Cognizant Technology
Solutions helped me learn how important soft-skills, adaptability and change management are to
the success of any system. I believe that a well structured MBA course and a competitive and
dynamic atmosphere, will help me to take up challenging responsibilities in management.
"Best individual I can become" sounds a bit weird. Maybe my ear is not trained for it, but bounce
it off someone else. I would most certainly take it off.
Knock off "My employment" start with "At CTS, I learned...". Also success of any organization
(not system).
Take up "the challenging responsibilities" or just "challenging responsibilities" ? I don't know.
Just check it up. The former means "known" and latter is "unknown"
For inculcating a global perspective, I trust the emphasis on learning through live projects, the
flexibility in curriculum and collaborative and exchange programmes with international
institutions at FMS.
Exchange programs are fine but how does live projects enable you to have "global perspective"
A rigorous induction process gives me the edge of being in a lively,

diverse community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary students which is an ideal
environment for personal growth that will help in bringing out the best that I have to offer which
makes FMS easily a business school of choice.
Is it "edge of being in a lively....." ? See Im studying for GMAT so "being" is most definitely
wrong :mg: But I might be wrong !! Also "egdge of" sounds, and to quote OG, "unidiomatic"
:mg: Finally, "help bring out the best in me" sound better. And knock off the "which makes FMS
easily a business school of choice" part
Overall I think this is a pretty decent essay. Nothing fancy but more importantly nothing wrong
either.
SOP78 - FMS
“Growth itself contains the germ of happiness.”It’s the drive for growth that makes me wish to
have a bigger share in shaping business, to form and implement strategies that take corporations
to greater heights . My experience as a Software Engineer has made me aware about how a
company’s fortunes depends on the new dimensions and roles that it can envisage for itself and
how the role of the management in this context is of paramount importance. I have therefore set
upon the quest to acquire a profound understanding of managament and the subtle nuances
involved, as a first step to achieve my goal of leading a large corporation.
The communication and leadership skills that I honed during my time as School Captain and as a
member of the Corporate Football team should stand me in good stead when I embark upon a
managerial path. Yet the company I work for, HCL Capital Market Services, has gone a long
way in making me realise how important functional and financial knowledge are in bringing
about effective management. I clearly see that the intricate knowledge and fresh perspectives that
I would be able to acquire in pursuing an MBA from a renowned institute, will equip me with the
right resources for my endeavours.
FMS with its rich history, its commitment to thought leadership coupled with an interesting
pedagogy is a natural choice for any management aspirant. A dynamic and lively atmosphere
guaranteed by virtue of interaction with peers selected through a rigorous selection process is an
added incentive. The pursuit of academic excellence at such an institution will undoubtedly bring
out the best in me.
SOP78r
“Growth itself contains the germ of happiness.”It’s the drive for growth that makes me wish to
have a bigger share in shaping business, to form and implement strategies that take corporations
to greater heights .
1. mebbe its my running nose :wink:, but i really dont find any connection between the quote at
the start and the rest of the paragraph. i am sure that there is some really god thread of reason
running through it, but its not apparent here
My experience as a Software Engineer has made me aware about how a company’s fortune
depends on the new dimensions and roles that it can envisage for itself and how the role of the
management in this context is of paramount importance. I have therefore set upon the quest to
acquire a profound understanding of managament and the subtle nuances involved, as a first step
to achieve my goal of leading a large corporation.
ok. great english usage. but what does it mean ? apart from showing that you have a flair for
writing well, nothing more. u are joining a course..not a knight errand in search of a quest. if
there is something that you would like to explain about your quest, please do that. what i wish to
point out here is that the first part of the paragraph is sufficiently general and tells me in a vague
sorta manner, wht you have learnt while working. fair enough, even though it can be tightened a
bit. after that, you need to be specific. in a 200 word essay, there isnt really much space to build
up a scenario. :)
The communication and leadership skills that I honed during my time as School Captain and as a
member of the Corporate Football team should stand me in good stead when I embark upon a
managerial path.
the examples quoted arent quite the strongest indicators of communication & leadership. in the
former, you were quite young and in the latter, i dont think that there is much scope of
leadershop & teamwork. after all, its not a profesional football team. these are just hobbies.
better not put them on a SOP.
again, irrelevant language.. embarking
Yet the company I work for, HCL Capital Market Services, has gone a long way in making me
realise how important functional and financial knowledge are in bringing about effective
management. I clearly see that the intricate knowledge and fresh perspectives that I would be
able to acquire in pursuing an MBA from a renowned institute, will equip me with the right
resources for my endeavours.
too vague. basically, it just restates your learnings from the job. you've already said that earlier in
the SOP.
FMS with its rich history, its commitment to thought leadership coupled with an interesting
pedagogy is a natural choice for any management aspirant. A dynamic and lively atmosphere
guaranteed by virtue of interaction with peers selected through a rigorous selection process is an
added incentive. The pursuit of academic excellence at such an institution will undoubtedly bring
out the best in me.
fair enough, but then talking about FMS isnt the only thing that you hafta do in the SOP. after
reading through it, i cannot get the "real" you, in the SOP. just a set of generic/vague statements.
SOP79 - FMS
changes. Learning new thgs and inculcating them inside me is somthg which ive done
throughout my academic career. This includes the experiences which ive had in my engg life in
coordinating the literary and technical societies of my college to organizing fests, and quizzes
which has given me useful insights into managing a diverse team and the necessity of being a
good manager . juggling academics,with responsibilities of being a coordinator in college and
also completing a one year course in a foreign language helped me hone my skills in time
management, prioritizing thgs and sticking to schedules which is a must for a management
course.
My long term goal includes leading and driving a team of hardworking and dedicated
individuals. Number crunching and analyzing data has been my hobby and passion since an early
age. And now, I look forward to a career in market research and. analysis.I have realized that a
sound knowledge of management skills( both theoretical and practical) is a prerequisite for
sucess. Technical knowledge in software coupled with ability to handle any nuances of
management will help me to carve out my own niche.
I have realized that to be able to achieve my goals and to learn about overall business
management, FMS as the ideal institute – not just because of its stature, but also because of its
emphasis on ethics and hands-on pedagogy.
FMS has the distinct advantage of having a small and cohesive group and a vibrant alumni
network. The holistic approach of this esteemed institute is reflected in the fact that it included
"self development courses" in the orientation phase. No doubt, it also makes sound business
sense, considering the ROI factor!
higher and higher in my professional endeavor.
SOP79r
changes. <<whats the connection between this line and the next ? the line starts with learning,
but in the next sentence you talk about "changes making you learn" rather than the other way
round. >> Learning new thgs and inculcating them inside me is somthg which ive done
throughout my academic career. <<illustrate this. when have u done this in your career?? co-
ordinating activities is not a career dude." This includes the experiences which ive had in my
engg life in coordinating the literary and technical societies of my college to organizing fests,
and quizzes which has given me useful insights into managing a diverse team and the necessity
of being a good manager . <<same grouse, no connection with the ealrier line. its not written
badly, but it does not fit earlier comments. if you've talked about career at first, stick with it.
these are supplementary>> juggling academics,with responsibilities of being a coordinator in
college and also completing a one year course in a foreign language helped me hone my skills in
time management, prioritizing thgs and sticking to schedules which is a must for a management
course. <<actually the best line in the first para (no surprise because it comes from PsychoD's
comments :mg: ). it is better not because it has more "punch", but also, because it packs in the
"co-ordinating" part of the earlier sentence and hints at extra curricular responsibilities taken &
accomplished>>
My long term goal includes leading and driving a team of hardworking and dedicated
individuals. <<fair enough, but is it really ur long term goal..surely, you dont want to work all
life with people. mebbe you want to create something :mg: >>Number crunching and analyzing
data has been my hobby and passion since an early age. And now, I look forward to a career in
market research and. analysis. <<well frankly, you need to join some M.Phl in Maths or some
other course, they are more suited to the type of job that you want to do.>> I have realized that a
sound knowledge of management skills( both theoretical and practical) is a prerequisite for
sucess. <<<success of what? and how did ths realization dawn upon u :mg: ? >>Technical
knowledge in software coupled with ability to handle any nuances of management will help me
to carve out my own niche. <<u've already said that u want to do MR..then here you are again
going back to a generic statement. AFAIK, its not adding anything to ur SOP>>
I have realized that to be able to achieve my goals and to learn about overall business
management, FMS as the ideal institute – not just because of its stature, but also because of its
emphasis on ethics and hands-on pedagogy.<<better be prepared about this, boy :mg: do you
really understand tyhe meaning of hands-on pedagofy anyway :mg: :mg: ?? because, i dont
:wink:>>
FMS has the distinct advantage of having a small and cohesive group and a vibrant alumni
network.<<dude you dont know how correct you are here :) quite ok. the only line worth
salvaging, i must say :mg: >> The holistic approach of this esteemed institute is reflected in the
fact that it included "self development courses" in the orientation phase. <<two things. first, what
are these self-development courses and second, why do you need them ? if you dont know the
answer to either/both questions, then answer a third one..why write it then :mg: >> No doubt, it
also makes sound business sense, considering the ROI factor! <<weird/insigtful (?) statement
:mg:>>
higher and higher in my professional endeavor. <<basically nothing but noise, you can as well
delete it, and still it wont hurt the SOP>>
SOP80 - FMS
Jared Diamond in his book 'Guns, Germs and Steel' identifies the receptivity of society to
innovation as one of the main reason for it's development. I believe business organizations lead
the way in pioneering new ideas and I look forward to playing an important role in one such
organization.
Right from my school days, I have been fascinated by the various inventions and their impact on
mankind. In pursuit of developing a strong technological focus, I did my BTech at IIT, Madras,
which helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement.
After my BTech, I desired to get acquainted with the workings of a technological organization.
So I accepted an offer from Infosys Technologies. At Infosys, I was lucky to be in the same
project throughout my tenure as I was able to quickly master the technological aspects and focus
on some of the other aspects. I got the opportunity to see the project during various phases of
development and maintenance and perform different roles in the project.
Having obtained complete working knowledge at the level of an individual project, I now seek to
move on to a higher level. For this transition, I see the need for a MBA. As a leading
management institute in India, that has been producing world class managers for half a century, I
see FMS as an ideal institute for my education.
SOP80r
the way in pioneering new ideas and 1) I look forward to playing an important role in one such
organization.
2)Right from my school days, I have been fascinated by the various inventions and their impact
on mankind. 3)In pursuit of developing a strong technological focus, I did my BTech at IIT,
Madras, which helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement.
4) After my BTech, I desired to get acquainted with the workings of a technological

organization. So I accepted an offer from Infosys Technologies. At Infosys, I was lucky to be in
the same project throughout my tenure as I was able to quickly master the technological aspects
and focus on some of the other aspects. I got the opportunity to see the project during various
phases of development and maintenance and perform different roles in the project.
5)Having obtained complete working knowledge at the level of an individual project, I now seek
to move on to a higher level. For this transition, I see the need for a MBA. As a leading
management institute in India, that has been producing world class managers for half a century, I
see FMS as an ideal institute for my education.
Good start..atleast something fresh
1) .... but this line can be rewritten as :
and I envision playing an important role in such an organization.
2) Re-arranging gives it a better look...
I have always been fascinated by the numerous inventions and their impact on mankind, right
from my childhood.
3) Re-arranging it...
My gradutaion at IIT, Madras not only provided me a strong technological focus, but also helped
me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement.
4) From here onwards you suddenly go out of focus and you loose control over your writing....
You are not writing a story or a novel... so why waste precious space... your business like sharp
writing suddenly goes out of window .....dis-appointing....
5) This is totally weired reason for doing an MBA (seeking to move at higher level...what the
heck is this??) and also you sum up why FMS in a single line.... the depth of writing is suddenly
gone... and so is your fit with FMS.....again highly dis-apoointing....
After reading first few lines I thought this one is something which I would like...but down the
line you just go haywire.....
try once more....and give a solid reason to do MBA which you started with in the fist para....
SOP80rr
the way in pioneering new ideas and I envision playing an important role in such an
organization.I have always been fascinated by the numerous inventions and their impact on
mankind, right from my childhood. My graduation at IIT, Madras not only provided me a strong
technological focus, but also helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for
achievement. My tenure with Infosys has given me experience in implementation and
management of a technical project and also an opportunity to work in a cross cultural
environment. A thorough grounding in the principles of management would add finishing
touches in the development of core competencies needed to pursue my dream of getting into the
business of transforming ideas into reality. FMS, with its history of producing world class
managers for half a century and the unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its
alumni network as well as cross disciplinary expertise from the Delhi University in addition to
the excellent faculty, is an ideal institute for the education I seek.
SOP80rrr
the way in pioneering new ideas and I envision playing an important role in such an
organization.I have always been fascinated by the numerous inventions and their impact on
mankind, right from my childhood. My graduation at IIT, Madras not only provided me a strong
technological focus, but also helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for
achievement. My tenure with Infosys has given me experience in implementation and
management of a technical project and also an opportunity to work in a cross cultural
environment. A thorough grounding in the principles of management would add finishing
touches in the development of core competencies needed to pursue my dream of getting into the
business of transforming ideas into reality. FMS, with its history of producing world class
managers for half a century and the unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its
alumni network as well as cross disciplinary expertise from the Delhi University in addition to
the excellent faculty, is an ideal institute for the education I seek.
Good one... neat and clean... short and crisp... I like it.. .just change one sentence....
I belive that a thorough understanding of the principles of management is essential in the

development of core competencies needed to pursue my dream of getting into the business of
transforming ideas into reality.
Otherwise rest is fine.. a good SOP ....
SOP81 - FMS
“An Invasion of Armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come”-Victor Hugo
Innovation and Ideas are the key elements in the foundation of a successful organization.
Shaping a great idea into reality and turning it into a successful venture requires a diverse range
of managerial skills. My career goal is to be a part of a business empire which has innovation has
as its backbone and encourages the growth of an individual. Hence, the paramount necessity to
inculcate the required skills; skills I can learn from a top-notch institute like FMS.
My technical background has given me a strong analytical foundation, apart from drilling in the
importance of hard work, which is required in the face of robust competition. Also, exposure to
various workshops on leadership and time management while being a member of the
Entrepreneurship Development Cell of my college has given me an insight into various nuances
involved in management.
To quote a line from the FMS brochure,” the difference is due to people”- it is a statement which
I believe in, the power of a creative individual with sound managerial skills. The unique teaching
approach at FMS, which is a blend of fieldwork and case studies with a strong emphasis on
concepts, will encourage my exploration of new ideas. The emphasis on Excellence, Leadership
and Innovation at FMS will provide me with skills and knowledge required to fulfill my
objectives.
SOP81r
“An Invasion of Armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come”-Victor Hugo
1)Innovation and Ideas are the key elements in the foundation of a successful organization.
Shaping a great idea into reality and turning it into a successful venture requires a diverse range
of managerial skills. My career goal is to be a part of a business empire which has innovation has
as its backbone and encourages the growth of an individual. Hence, the paramount necessity to
inculcate the required skills; skills I can learn from a top-notch institute like FMS.
importance of hard work, which is required in the face of robust competition. Also, exposure to
various workshops on leadership and time management while being a member of the
Entrepreneurship Development Cell of my college has given me an insight into various nuances
involved in management.
To quote a line from the FMS brochure,” the difference is due to people”- it is a statement which
I believe in, the power of a creative individual with sound managerial skills. The unique teaching
approach at FMS, which is a blend of fieldwork and case studies with a strong emphasis on
concepts, will encourage my exploration of new ideas. The emphasis on Excellence, Leadership
and Innovation at FMS will provide me with skills and knowledge required to fulfill my
objectives.
BTW if this is your first SOP then kudos... you are more or less bang on target... a good
attempt...
1) This line is of no help.. remove it...

2) It is good to quote something from FMS brochure...but the second part of your sentence needs
to make some sense with the first part....
Otherwise a really good SOP....
SOP81rr
"An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come" courtesy Victor
Hugo. Idea and imagination, as I believe, is the driving impulse for mankind. Coming from an
engineering background, the exciting world of ideas, which influence humanity in some way or
the other, has been my area of interest. Working in a technical job (TCS) for the past couple of
years has made me realize the hitches of the corporate world. Great ideas are invaluable only
when they are presented and applied efficiently, more so when the stakes are high and
diversified. It demands theoretical and practical knowledge alongwith varying skills sets. These
are the essential qualities that I require, to make a difference in tough business scenarios where
strategy plays the role of a protagonist. I believe that FMS, one of the pioneering management
institutes with world-class infrastructure, notable industry interaction, highly experienced faculty
and excellent management research base can provide me with the skills and knowledge, required
to fulfill my objectives.
SOP82 - FMS
In this era of globalization, marketing plays a crucial role in determining the success of an
idea/product. With close to four year of experience in two widely varied lines (Field Sales at
Godrej and Software Development at Infosys), I want to leverage my experience to pursue a
career in the Marketing of Software Services. I view an MBA as the ideal vehicle, as it
complements my current skills and gives me a solid grounding in the fundamentals of Business
Management.
My stint at Godrej gave me the opportunity to study various industries and to interact with
people at all levels. This helped me to understand the decision making process in the corporate
world and allowed me to evolve as a negotiator. Infosys provided me with the opportunity to
work on high-end development projects for international clients. The tight schedules helped me
develop my skills in stress management and time management and my leadership skills.
With its world-class faculty and excellent pedagogy FMS would equip me with all the required
tools to enable me to achieve my goals. Also, as FMS attracts the best and the brightest minds, it
ensures a competitive peer group and am confident that FMS would provide the ideal
environment to bring out the best in me.
SOP82r
I envision myself playing an important role in the field of marketing of software services. I
believe that my four years of diversified experience in entirely varied areas, as in field sales at
Godrej <add full company name> and software development at Infosys Technologies Pvt. Ltd,
can be successfully leveraged to pursue a career of my choice.
My stint at Godrej gave me the opportunity to not only study various industries and to interact
with people at all levels, but also in understanding the decision making process in the corporate
world. The work experience at Infosys gave me a thorough understanding of the technical
domain. Also the tight schedules helped me develop my skills in stress management and time
management along with honing my leadership skills.
To complement my current skills and to give me a solid grounding in the fundamentals of
business management, an MBA is an absolutely ideal vehicle.FMS with its world-class faculty
and excellent pedagogy would equip me with all the required tools to enable me to achieve my
goal. Also, my diverse skills and penchant for learning complements the competitive peer group
that FMS ensures by attracting the best and the brightest minds.
SOP83 - FMS
"A man is a success if he gets up in the morning and gets to bed at night, and in between he does
what he wants to do." Bob Dylan
Why an MBA? Pardon the cliché, but at the end of the day I want to be successful and happy.
What I want is a creative challenge and sufficient skills to bring success within my reach. The
creative challenge that I am looking for can be best provided by a top level job in the field of
Marketing. I believe that my strengths enhanced by an MBA from FMS would equip me to reach
this desired level of achievement.
One of my biggest strengths is my keen desire to acquire knowledge that I try to satiate by
reading extensively. My thirst for knowledge has helped me become a successful quizzer; I have
represented my college as a team captain and also conducted various quizzes. These experiences
along with my involvement with the dramatics society in college have put to test my ability to
manage people who are undoubtedly the most valuable resource in a company today. I pursued a
course in Applied Organizational Psychology in IIT Kharagpur which deeply interested me and I
topped my class in the same. Further, I demonstrated the practical applications of this subject
when I single-handedly managed a crew of 56 people for a theatre production.
Micromanagement was necessary and I believe I was successful as I won the best director award
for the play.
I believe that my thirst for knowledge, ability to manage people, creativity and innovation
combined with my willingness to work diligently for what I wish to achieve will lead me up the
path to success and satisfaction. An innovative pedagogy and an emphasis on the practical
applications appeal to me. FMS is the institution that I believe would best meet my needs and
help me exploit my potential to the maximum.
SOP83r
"A man is a success if he gets up in the morning and gets to bed at night, and in between he does
what he wants to do." Bob Dylan
Why an MBA? Pardon the cliché, but at the end of the day I want to be successful and happy.
What I want is a creative challenge and sufficient skills to bring success within my reach. The
creative challenge that I am looking for can be best provided by a top level job in the field of
Marketing. I believe that my strengths enhanced by an MBA from FMS would equip me to reach
this desired level of achievement.
First of all, a great quote to start with. But the "Why an MBA ? Pardon the cliche'...." thing
though undoubtedly bold and out of the box, might also work against you. I, for one, would not
find it offending, but don't know how the adcom would view the same. Infact its an interesting
point as I amd deliberating the use of humour in my own essays for ISB and SBS. I tend to be
humorous (even in real-life) but need to make sure that the essays I write don't have anything to
do with rhetorics and sarcasm, and least of all sound frivolous.
BTW you might want to tone down the "creative" part. I mean, believe me, MBA marketing is
not a way to express your creativity. You can be creative in writing code, working in a call-
center, those most mind-numbing jobs you can think of. OTOH, if you are so creative why not
become a pianist ? a poet ? a writer ? Okay I know what you are talking about but just wanted to
drive home the point :mg:
One of my biggest strengths is my keen desire to acquire knowledge that I try to satiate by
reading extensively. My thirst for knowledge has helped me become a successful quizzer; I have
represented my college as a team captain and also conducted various quizzes. These experiences
along with my involvement with the dramatics society in college have put to test my ability to
manage people who are undoubtedly the most valuable resource in a company today. I pursued a
course in Applied Organizational Psychology in IIT Kharagpur which deeply interested me and I
topped my class in the same. Further, I demonstrated the practical applications of this subject
when I single-handedly managed a crew of 56 people for a theatre production.
Micromanagement was necessary and I believe I was successful as I won the best director award
for the play.
"One of my biggest strengths is my keen desire to acquire knowledge that I try to satiate by
reading extensively." what does "that" refer to ? keen desire to acquire knowledge (I know it is)
or one of my biggest strengths (but english grammar does not)
Also agar itna "thirst" hai toh why not Phd ? :mg: I know what you are saying but expect his
when you use the term thrice in your essay.
Dramatics and quizzing does not teach you test your ability to "manage people". Somehow this
argument does not seem to fit here.
"I pursued a course in Applied Organizational Psychology in IIT Kharagpur which deeply
interested me and I topped my class in the same" <<<<< Excellent example of putting stuff on
your essay which your resume cannot reflect. But unfortunately you don't build on it saying how
you can relate it to management. I know what it means but better you tell me.
Did you produce it (which would need the management part) or direct it ? Make it clear.
I believe that my thirst for knowledge, ability to manage people, creativity and innovation
combined with my willingness to work diligently for what I wish to achieve will lead me up the
path to success and satisfaction. An innovative pedagogy and an emphasis on the practical
applications appeal to me. FMS is the institution that I believe would best meet my needs and
help me exploit my potential to the maximum.
Well put last lines. Kind of summarizes what you have been talking all along. But again Why
FMS is not so strong.
BTW the pedagogy word is kinda weird. I mean I would immediately notice such words if I were
not Dr. Samuel Johnson himself :mg:
Otherwise pretty cool. Answers all except for Why FMS pretty convincingly.
SOP84 - FMS
Today, in a rapidly changing environment,an uncertain future awaits us, challenging our
capabilities. To meet these emerging challenges with a decisive victory, we must incessantly
strengthen our roots and stretch our reach. But a quandary emerges as to how to canalize and
direct this change within the structures, And the best riposte to this fix is "education". Like
Odysseus in his great work, Resolutions, Quoted.
"……. Follow knowledge, like a sinking star,
Beyond the utmost bound of human thought.

Perhaps beyond that utomost bound,
Is more Knowledge, and more
And more, and more!"
And this, perhaps, best exemplifies my purpose for doing an MBA; the pursuit of knowledge, the
need for erudition and the want of edification. Being an engineering student, shaping ideas into
reality has been my focus and an envisioned dream and I a management course will help me in
developing my competencies needed to pursue this.
FMS, with its history of producing world class managers for half a century and the unique
teaching approach- a blend of fieldwork and case studies with a strong emphasis on concepts,
will encourage my exploration of new ideas and provide me with skills and knowledge required
to fulfill my objectives.
SOP84r
Amazing how people just dont learn.... given the choice of your vocab, I guess rather than MBA
you need to think about being a nonfiction writer .... do you really think that using such
"uncommon" words give you an advantage .... you are totally wrong... the stress should me more
on content rather than anything else... and the SOP you have written lacks the most basic
content...the entire first para makes a good initial for a novel but not SOP... these are totally
impersonal statements...reading them doesnt give me an iota of hint about *YOU* as a person...
or whats your purpose...and the reason for your MBA seems to very very amusing... "pursuit of
knowledge, the need for erudition and the want of edification" ...why dont you go for a Phd then
(may be in psychology perharps or spiritual science)... may be you will get more knowledge
there....
also if I remember correctly, the first sentence of last para has been plagiarised from one of the
previous SOP...:mad: ...
I hate to say this ... but this is one of the worst SOP I ever saw...[If you see my comments.. I am
usually not harsh ]... you simply are way off tangential than what needs to be written... the
essense of SOP is to market yourself for the mba course in a business like crisp and to the point
language... (why do you think FMS has put a word limit... if they really wanted a flowery
language then they would have given unlimited space.....)...
SOP85 - FMS
Having graduated with a good academic record from South point high school and later from the
Jadavpur university with electrical engineering, I have developed strong analytical and
communication skills. Simulataneously I have inculcated the passion and the guts to excel in a
highly competitive environment. These qualities are further litmus tested in my job with the Tata
Consultancy services where I lead a team of developers in developing mission critical
applications for G.E.
However, I always feel an urge to be at the forefront of critical decision making that propels an
organization towards growth and success. With considerable industry exposure under my belt
and the urge to explore new boundaries still at its peak, I feel this is the best time to pursue an
MBA degree. I believe that an MBA from an acclaimed institute like FMS would be the ideal
stepping stone to a rewarding career in management.
With its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes and its legacy of producing
business leaders and entrepreneurs, FMS offers a unique blend of unmatched excellence. And I
deem it an honour to be with the best minds in India, which FMS ensures through its rigorous
selection process.
SOP85r
Having graduated with a good academic record in electrical engineering from Jadavpur
university , I have developed strong analytical and communication skills.
<<necessary line. edited it a bit. though definitely not eye-catching>>

<< somehow, the logic is not very strong in this case>>
<<edited school bit. felt it was unnecessary>>
Simulataneously I have inculcated the passion and the guts to excel in a highly competitive
environment. These qualities are tested in my job with the Tata Consultancy services where I
lead a team of developers in developing mission-critical applications for G.E.
<<edited the overall sentence>>

<<again..write ur mission critical applications>>
However, I always feel an urge to be at the forefront of critical decision making that propels an
organization towards growth and success.
<<if u are at the "team lead" state, u are already at the forefront of critical decision-making. >>
With considerable industry exposure under my belt, I feel this is the best time to pursue an MBA
degree and explore new boundaries.
<<this one's ok..agan, edited it to make it tighter>>
I believe that an MBA from an acclaimed institute like FMS would be the ideal stepping stone to
a rewarding career in management.
<<generic line>>
With its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes and its legacy of producing
business leaders and entrepreneurs, FMS offers a unique blend of unmatched excellence
with...???
<<question: name atleast two business leaders & entrepreneurs to come ot of this place :) >>
<<IIMA has produced more business leaders than FMS? then why write it here. try to use the
USP of an institute in the SOP. with due respects..this is definitely not FMS's USP>>
And I deem it an honour to be with the best minds in India, which FMS ensures through its
rigorous selection process.
<<sigh! ok. but no punch in the SOP dude. its quite ok..the way it is, but its very banal. though
its loads better than having a bad SOP :mg: >>
SOP85rr
Having graduated with a good academic record in electrical engineering from Jadavpur
university , I have developed strong analytical and communication skills.
Not a strong start as well not convincing reason as to how electrical engg got anything to do with
communication skills.....this has already been pointed by QuintEssence...but it seems you didnt
taken his suggestions into account.... so i guess even my suggestion would go unheard :mg:
Simulataneously I have inculcated the passion and the guts to excel in a highly competitive
environment.
How, why, where?
This, as well as the indispensable quality of motivating a team are tested in my job with the Tata
Consultancy services where I lead a team of developers in developing mission-critical
applications for G.E. (I cannot name the mission critical applications as it wud mean just naming
my project which is not useful.If you want, I can remove the line altogether)
The sentence structure doesnt give it a punch...it can be worded better ....just what I could come
up with instantly...
I lead a team of 'x' developers at G.E. that was involved in developing some mission-critical
applications. This taught me the indispensible skills of motivating the team during the most
desperate situations.
PS: 'x' ==> number of developers... leading a team of 10 people and 100 people is different and
unless the team you lead has less than 10, do mention the number of ppl.
However,I feel a continuous urge to be at the helm of an organization and propel it towards
growth and success.
Again why, when you are already at a lead position... same comment given by QE isnt it?:mg:
thats a natural question... so you can imagine that even the FMS faculty would pose a similar
query... be prepared.. is are not changing this line :mg:
I also believe that an MBA is one of those areas of education which best shapes up the overall
personality of an individual. This has prompted me to pursue a career in manamgement.
So you doing MBA to improve your personality...hmm...you know what i am going to say..aint
you?
With considerable industry exposure under my belt, I feel this is the best time to learn about the
fundamentals of business mangament and explore new boundaries.
With so much exp, your SOP is still punch less....something is really amiss...
With its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes , its diverse and brilliant peer
group shortlisted through a rigorous selection process and above all, its unmatched teacher
student ratio, FMS is an ideal place to master the skills required in business management. A
tenure of two years at this institute would be the ideal stepping stone to a rewarding career in the
corporate world.
Okish.....
I guess you need to *really think*, why you want to do MBA... i guess you are following the
herd and dont have solid reasons for doing MBA... you really need some introspection....
SOP86 - FMS
You live only once, but if you live right, once is enough. The same truth applies to one's career
decision because the career you choose is going to live with you through out your life & the
education you perceive was, is & will be your most loyal friend and which will help you achieve
your career goals.
I have been fortunate enough to be born in a family where equal emphasis is paid on sound
academics and good extra-curriculars.I have been a meritorious student throughout, managing
equally well at other fronts like literary works,dramatics etc. thereby grooming my inter-
personal, time-management and communication skills. Being an engineering student, shaping
ideas into reality has been my focus and an envisioned dream and a management course will help
me in developing my competencies needed to pursue this.
FMS ,as it mission affirms,aims at inculcating academic excellence and leadership in university
based management education in India through high quality teaching, research, case development,
innovative courses and pedagogy of learning and will be the best place for me develop my
competencies, will encourage my exploration of new ideas and provide me with skills and
knowledge required to fulfill my objectives.
SOP86r
Okay this one seems to be better than previous one.. but lacks the following :
1) Your long term goal is missing...[shaping ideas into reality is a vague statement... ]
2) Your reason for doing MBA is not very convincing...
3) The first para does not tell me anything about you...these are totally impersonal statements...
why waste precious space when you can write moer about yourself...
4) It is usually considered better if you can provide concerete examples of your extra-curricular
achivements.. (literary works,dramatics etc.. can you give some examples)
SOP87 - FMS
The field of Information Technology has always fascinated me and I had cherished to pursue my
Career in this field.
After graduating from Visvesvaraya National Institute of Technology, Nagpur I joined Tata
Consultancy Services Limited to pursue my dream. I am working with GE Commercial Finance
as my Client. My 15 months of experience in IT has shown me that management of resoureses in
IT Industry is the only way one can have an edge in this continously changing Industry. I have
aquired manegerial skills from my eduaction as well as My stay at TCS. However I need to fine
tune them and channelise them so that I can optmize my competencies and well as optimize the
output of the tem I will work with. For this I need to learn the skills from the best in the industry.
FMS is one of the best place in the country to sharpen one's skills and enhance one's capability in
Management of Information Technology. As such I want to pursue my MBA in FMS so that I
can be armed with all the skills needed to lead the IT Industry.
SOP87r
The field of Information Technology has always fascinated me and I had cherished to pursue my
Career in this field.
If this is for FMS then whats the deal about IT being your dream ?
After graduating from Visvesvaraya National Institute of Technology, Nagpur I joined Tata
Consultancy Services Limited to pursue my dream. I am working with GE Commercial Finance
as my Client.
Half this sentence is filled with long words that can also be found in your resume. Just say that I
joined TCS and GE comm Finan was my first client. Or something like that.
My 15 months of experience in IT has shown me that management of resoureses in IT Industry is

the only way one can have an edge in this continously changing Industry. I have aquired
manegerial skills from my eduaction as well as My stay at TCS. However I need to fine tune
them and channelise them so that I can optmize my competencies and well as optimize the output
of the tem I will work with. For this I need to learn the skills from the best in the industry.
A strong argument indeed for "Why MBA ?" Need to polish it a bit:
"Over a year of being in this industry has shown me that managing resources is one of the most
effective ways to have an edge in this dynamic industry. I have continuosly been exposed to
various management principles - both during my education as well as during my employment
with TCS. However, I need to fine-tune and channelise them so that I can optmize my
competencies and well as optimize the output of the team that I will work with. For this I need to
learn the skills from the best in the industry. "
Not the best I have done but atleast better than the earlier version :mg:
FMS is one of the best place in the country to sharpen one's skills and enhance one's capability in
Management of Information Technology. As such I want to pursue my MBA in FMS so that I
can be armed with all the skills needed to lead the IT Industry.
What is "As such I want to pursue my MBA ......." ??? Infact the last sentence sucks royally :mg:
Also knock of the caps in management.
SOP88 - FMS
“Dictionary is the only place where success comes before work” – a quote which has guided me
through my teenage and inspires me to leave no stone unturned till success is achieved. It is by
virtue of hard and smart work that I find myself equipped with all the qualities imperative for an
MBA from as prestigious a B-School as FMS.
Having completed my Bachelor’s degree in the field of Computer Science & Technology, I
joined the Indian software giant TCS to get the feel of corporate world. It’s truly fascinating to
discover this new world fresh from a college. As someone has truly pointed out” Its never too
late to learn” , I want to expand my knowledge base and pursue a career in the field of
management. I believe that FMS, one of the pioneering management institutes with world-class
infrastructure, notable industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and excellent management
research base is the right place for me to make my dreams come true. I see a capable and
inspirational manager in me in the coming times.
SOP89 - FMS
My BBM degree has helped me prepare for the academic rigors of the FMS
MBA programme. At my undergraduate level, where I specialize in
finance, I have taken a variety of different subjects like business
finance, statistics, accountancy, marketing, economics etc. This has
sharpened my quantitative skills and critical thinking abilities - not
to mention the important ability to work efficiently with limited
sleep.
Though my experience in college has been rewarding - both

personally and professionally, I realize I have only scratched the
surface. I would like to continue my education at FMS's MBA program.
Moreover, besides giving me theoretical and practical training, the
programme will strengthen my cross-functional abilities, an essential
quality in this field. In short, I desire the holistic view of the
business and financial community that an MBA education would provide.
I am very enthusiastic to apply here for a variety of reasons: a

student teacher ratio of 3:1 - the best among similar programmes in
India, the freedom and flexibility that comes as being part of the
university system, and finally a degree is awarded on completion (as
opposed to a diploma) – a fact that greatly enhances prospects for
further education.
SOP98r
The first paragraph you have entirely devoted to your under-grad subjects... this is way off
tangent than what an SOP should be... (unless these are some unique subjects...which i guess
they are not)... if you have a BBA degree then it would be by default known that you studies
these subjects....
When you write "quantitative skills and critical thinking abilities"...these would be written by
almost 90% junta... since most enggineering applicants would only mention these skills...I
assume that BBA applicants would be less(not sure though)... so why not write something which
is unique... you got an advantage of already studying business administration... so leverage it out
properly....-
Also writing something like "not to mention the important ability to work efficiently with limited
sleep." has many interpretations..... and it is not considered a "skill"....If you sleep less than what
your body requires due to work/study-pressure it is usually considered that you are less efficient
to finish your work/study during day time....There can be no convincing reason for having less
sleep :mg:
Also your reason for doing MBA is vague... (your entire second para is vague)
The reason you have given for choosing FMS seems to be better than what other people write...
So just re-do first two paragraph... BTW make sure you are prepared for explaining your "further
education" thingie.....:mg:
SOP90 - FMS
The illiterate of the 21st century will not be those who cannot read and write, but those who
cannot learn, unlearn, and relearn. - Alvin Tofler
The pursuit of quality education and the ability to use it as a riposte to todays' changning
environment is inevitable and I have been fortunate enough to be born in a family where extreme
emphasis is laid on it. Blending meritorious academics with laudable extra-curriculars has
shaped my inter-personal, time-management and communication skills.
Being an engineering student, I posess the ability to analyse and interpret the situations well and
envision the dream of shaping ideas into reality which can be used aptly in the field of
management as in the new era of dynamic and discontinuous change, every organization requires
continual reassessment of its routines to ensure that the decision-making processes, as well as
underlying assumptions, keep pace with the dynamically changing business environment.
FMS, with its high quality teaching, research, case development, innovative courses and
pedagogy of learning will be the best place for me to develop my core competencies, will
encourage my exploration of new ideas and provide me with skills and knowledge required to
fulfill my objectives.
SOP91 - FMS
No matter how good you get you can always get better and that's the exciting part. This quote by
tiger woods epitomizes the view I have of FMS and my own ambitions. A perfect match. After
obtaining a degree in engineering I joined Irevna research services (equity research) as a research
analyst. My experiences there convinced me that in spite of my creativity, versatility,
communication skills and a thirst for learning and excellence, I was an uncut diamond. To
achieve my full potential I need training which offers flexibility for my wide range of interests,
and excellent environment both in terms of faculty and peers which is matched by the program
offered. As David M. Ogilvy pointed out “In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a
creative original thinker unless you can also sell what you create. Management cannot be
expected to recognize a good idea unless it is presented to them by a good salesman.” And I
aspire to be the best of them with help from this program.
SOP91r
1) No matter how good you get you can always get better and that's the exciting part. This quote
by tiger woods epitomizes the view I have of FMS and my own ambitions. A perfect match.
After obtaining a degree in engineering I joined Irevna research services (equity research) as a
research analyst. My experiences there convinced me that in spite of my creativity, versatility,
communication skills and a thirst for learning and excellence, I was an uncut diamond. 2) To
achieve my full potential I need training which offers flexibility for my wide range of interests,
and excellent environment both in terms of faculty and peers which is matched by the program
offered. 3) As David M. Ogilvy pointed out “In the modern world of business, it is useless to be
a creative original thinker unless you can also sell what you create. Management cannot be
expected to recognize a good idea unless it is presented to them by a good salesman.” 4) And I
aspire to be the best of them with help from this program.
1) A blunder... if you are applying the quote to FMS, you are indeed hinting that FMS is good,
but it can get better... thats cockeyed
2) Weired reason for doing your MBA....
3) Too many quotes.... useless... remove it....
4) A disconnect...
SOP92 - FMS
The later years of the 20th century have witnessed a growing convergence of disparate streams
of human knowledge with their ever-greater dependence on each other. Among other
consequences, this has resulted in an appreciable change in the constitution as well as the scope
of many contemporary academic fields. And I want a merger of Technology and Management.
My bachelor study in Information Technology has provided me adequate technical knowledge.
However, my long term goals being managing and leading the organization that will have its say
and influence the other organizations. In short, it being an epitome of its category. Here the
management ladder will definitely place me cut above the rest. I have chosen FMS as an
institution compatible with my interests and goals. This coupled, with extensive facilities and a
learned faculty, all ensconced in the rich cultural backdrop of the city of Delhi, forms an ideal
milieu for my endeavors.
SOP92r
1) The later years of the 20th century have witnessed a growing convergence of disparate
streams of human knowledge with their ever-greater dependence on each other. Among other
consequences, this has resulted in an appreciable change in the constitution as well as the scope
of many contemporary academic fields. 2) And I want a merger of Technology and
Management.3) My bachelor study in Information Technology has provided me adequate
technical knowledge.4) However, my long term goals being managing and leading the
organization that will have its say and influence the other organizations. In short, it being an
epitome of its category. 5) Here the management ladder will definitely place me cut above the
rest. 6) I have chosen FMS as an institution compatible with my interests and goals. 7) This
coupled, with extensive facilities and a learned faculty, all ensconced in the rich cultural
backdrop of the city of Delhi, forms an ideal milieu for my endeavors.
1) Not a perfect way to build your story.. too many impersonal statements.. more onto
philosophical side.... not needed
2) Now what this means? Does this apply to your skills or aspirations.. i couldnt fathom what
you mean by this statement...
3) Finally something about you...Phew!!
4) First correct the grammatical mistakes and then make the intention clear... its pretty confusing
statment...
5) An extrememly bland way to say what you intend.
6) You need to show "how it is compatible"
7) What the heck "culture of delhi" to do with your MBA?
SOP93 - FMS
I will be graduating with a basic degree in chemical-bio engineering from Andhra University.
Apart from being a meritorious student all through my academic career, I have passion for arts
like Carnatic music and Bharatnatyam. I have also been a leader at my school and interacted with
lower grade students, helped in instilling confidence and inculcating discipline in them. This
shaped my personality into being an interactive and diverse woman.
In todays rapidly changing corporate scenario I understand the value of business management
apart from technicality. Having had a good grip in the technical details of my subject, I look
forward to shape up my skills in business management. I wish to make it to the top position in
the industry. I understand that it requires hard work, determination and emotional balance and I
am ready to be dedicating this and more to achieve my goal.
Being a fresher, I may need to have a closer interaction with faculty. The high student to faculty
ratio at this institute insures such an opportunity. FMS, being a premier institute in India in the
field of business management and with scholarly pedagogue, would definitely help me in my
way to fulfill my dreams and give the world my best.
SOP93r
I will be graduating with a basic degree in chemical-bio engineering from Andhra University.
Apart from being a meritorious student all through my academic career, I have passion for arts
like Carnatic music and Bharatnatyam. I have also been a leader at my school and interacted with
lower grade students, helped in instilling confidence and inculcating discipline in them. This
shaped my personality into being an interactive and diverse woman.
1. first-line, you have already mentioned this elsewhere in your application form.so, instead of a
bland line, try clubbing two sentences together to give it more punch. an example can be "
Coming from a chemical-bio engineering background, i've simulatneously inculcated a passion
for carnatic music & bharatnatyam."..or something of this sort.
->though i am not sure whether putting in a hobby in a SOP is beneficial or not. Unless you've
done it at some competitive level ..and been successful.
2. Were you the school captain..or had some specific post..or just a senior in general. if its the
former, write that.
3. there is a big difference between lower grade students & students of lower grade :mg: :mg: to
remove any confusion, say that you've instilled values like confidence & discipline in students
and you believe that all this diversity has made you a more active person.
In todays rapidly changing corporate scenario I understand the value of business management
apart from technicality. Having had a good grip in the technical details of my subject, I look
forward to shape up my skills in business management. I wish to make it to the top position in
the industry. I understand that it requires hard work, determination and emotional balance and I
am ready to be dedicating this and more to achieve my goal.
1. Some very weak/powerful arguments here..depending on how you look at it. Its weak because
its too generic..basically its the same old line of "supplementing technical knowldge with
management skills". nothig wrng with it..but its been used so many times that i doubt that they
would even bother reading this paragraph. On the other hand, if u really wish to be at the top in
ur industry..make sure u know all about "how" u are going to achieve that.
Being a fresher, I may need to have a closer interaction with faculty. The high student to faculty
ratio at this institute insures such an opportunity. FMS, being a premier institute in India in the
field of business management and with scholarly pedagogue, would definitely help me in my
way to fulfill my dreams and give the world my best.
1. underlined statement--> what is this ?? remove ASAP :mg:
2. the ensuing logic from the first line is specious.
3. Last lines..generic again :mg:
SOP94 - FMS
A Chinese proverb goes like :" I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand"; I
strongly believe that to manage efficiently, action is important, which comes from learning and
experience, which I propose to do at FMS. Coming from a engineering background,I have a
technical knowledge but a management degree with hone my other managerial and
leadershipqualities. My medium term career goal is to have a exciting career in the field of
financial services and for achieving my career goal, I need a formal management education.
My engineering degree along with a management one will go well with each other and help me
in imparting my technical and management skills in companies/firms effectively. FMS being one
of the premier B-school in India, backed by a strong faculty, excellent infrastructure, sprawling
campus.. I am sure that with FMS, I will be moulded into a successful manager and will help me
to realize my personal and career goals.
SOP95 - FMS-MS
“Man’s mind stretched to new horizons cannot go back to its old dimensions.”- Oliver Wendell
Holmes
I am always bubbling with ideas, but to be able to effectively shape them into reality, I need a
sound understanding of principles of management and develop cutting edge skills as an
innovator to make a remarkable difference to my work and achievements.
A Bachelor of Engineering in Information Technology has given me a strong grounding in the

technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. And working at Wipro Technologies,
has allowed me to gain an excellent insight into the working of the knowledge industry and
people involved here. Also it has helped me develop my capabilities as an effective
communicator and team player and handle the stress and tight time schedules which form the
part and parcel of any MBA graduate’s life.
I have considerable experience in organizing events and coordinating with people at different
levels. Have organized events at the Wipro-Shell collaboration meet, at college and school I have
organized debates, fashion shows, skits, dance performances. Also I ve been an active participant
in all these activities.
Only FMS offers the program, which develops business leaders with a clear focus at the service
industry. It’s world-class faculty, interactive corporate experience, vibrant student activity,
makes it my business school of choice. I wish to be a part or a learning process that will be
invaluable for the rest of my life.
SOP95r
Holmes
A good quote...but what is the relevance of this quote with what you wrote next....
I am always bubbling with ideas, but to be able to effectively shape them into reality, I need a
sound understanding of principles of management
What kind of ideas? It is way too general.... if these are busines ideas.. then what kind of
business ideas?....you need to mention something more concrete about what you want to shape
into reality.....hawa mein baatein kar ke nahi chalega :mg:... What are those ideas which need
"sound understanding of principles of management".....
and develop cutting edge skills as an innovator to make a remarkable difference to my work and
achievements.
If you care to read once again... this line does not gel well with the previous line....

technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. And working at Wipro Technologies,
has allowed me to gain an excellent insight into the working of the knowledge industry and
people involved here.
Good sentence....
Also it has helped me develop my capabilities as an effective communicator and team player and
handle the stress and tight time schedules which form the part and parcel of any MBA graduate’s
life.
What the heck do you mean by "part and parcel of MBA graduate's life".... if you already possess
the skills which an MBA gradutate have ...then why do an MBA?...Its okay to talk about the
skills that you bring at the table...but the beauty of first part of the sentence is spoiled by the last
part....
I have considerable experience in organizing events and coordinating with people at different
levels. Have organized events at the Wipro-Shell collaboration meet, at college and school I have
organized debates, fashion shows, skits, dance performances. Also I ve been an active participant
in all these activities.
So what....does that realtes anything with what is your "statement of purpose".... havent you
already mentioned this in your application form... so whats new....SOP is not the place to talk in
details about your extra-curicular activities..unless you want to show what you learn from these
which would be useful during FMS course or for achieving your career goals....
Only FMS offers the program, which develops business leaders with a clear focus at the service
industry.
Are you sure that this course is only offerred by FMS? May be there are some not-so-well-
known colleges which would offer a similar course... have you checked all the lists of colleges in
India and confirmed this.... If not then why you wanna take a chance.... Instead write that this
course has a got a different focus towards services industry.... which is what aligns with your
goal...(this is missing).....
It’s world-class faculty, interactive corporate experience, vibrant student activity, makes it my
business school of choice. I wish to be a part or a learning process that will be invaluable for the
rest of my life.
Okay....
I guess you can really spruce this up to the next level.... try to be more specific about your
goals...and somehow link the FMS course with your goals... you will come up with excellent
SOP... BTW dont change the language you are using...it is good... simple and crisp....
SOP95rr
Holmes
In the next five years, I visualize myself as a successful manager in the service industry learning
about new business domains, processes, improving upon the existing ones and adding value at
work every day. That is the idea I seek to pursue.

technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. And working at Wipro Technologies
for over a year, has allowed me to gain an excellent insight into the working of the knowledge
industry and people involved here. Also it has helped me develop my capabilities as an effective
communicator and team player and handle the stress and tight time schedules.
I seek to do MBA from FMS for I believe that it can provide me with the diving board, from
where to take off my dream career. Its close interaction with various departments of DU is bound
to offer a broader perspective of management and deeper understanding of intricacies. Moreover
it’s renowned faculty, strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my business
school of choice.
I wish to be a part of a learning process that will be invaluable for the rest of my life.
SOP95rrr
Holmes
In the next five years, I visualize myself as a successful manager in the service industry learning
about new business domains, processes, improving upon the existing ones and adding value at
work every day. That is the idea I seek to pursue.
Your goals are okay.. to be a "successful manager"...but is an MBA necessary for that... dont u
want to achieve something higher or bigger... I guess even without an MBA within five to ten
years you would be a successful manager....where exactly you look yourself after say 10-15
years...

technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. And working at Wipro Technologies
for over a year, has allowed me to gain an excellent insight into the working of the knowledge
industry and people involved here. Also it has helped me develop my capabilities as an effective
communicator and team player and handle the stress and tight time schedules.
Good...dont change it...
I seek to do MBA from FMS for I believe that it can provide me with the diving board, from
where to take off my dream career. Its close interaction with various departments of DU is bound
to offer a broader perspective of management and deeper understanding of intricacies.
Good sentence.. but the last one "deeper understanding of intricacies" ....intricacies of what??
[intricacies == barikiya]
Moreover it’s renowned faculty, strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my
business school of choice.
I wish to be a part of a learning process that will be invaluable for the rest of my life.
It is okay....good one...
SOP96 - FMS
“Too many crooks spoil the broth” may be true for cuisines, but diverse experience in different
sectors might definitely be a boon for a Consultant, which is my long-term goal. As a part of the
service industry throughout my career, I gained sufficient insights about the Manufacturing
industry, while working with Jabil circuits in the Manufacturing and the Quality departments and
then working in a support and enhancement project in MBT.
To achieve my long-term aspiration, I would like to lead a team of professionals directly
interacting with clients of various domains to develop their functionalities and later on to convert
their ideas into tangible assets. Also bridging the gap between IT and non-IT sectors is one of my
dreams. An MBA providing valuable business insights, intricacies and a management
perspective would go a long way in achieving my goals.
The flexibility of customizing programs as per student’s profile, the attitude of “believing in
doing… and in believing” through a host of practical and real life situations, the strong alumni
with constant industry interaction and the mutually beneficial peer-leaning at FMS would be the
ideal path to success.
SOP96r
“Too many crooks spoil the broth” may be true for cuisines, but diverse experience in different
sectors might definitely be a boon for a Consultant, which is my long-term goal.
Good start... simple and direct...
As a part of the service industry throughout my career, I gained sufficient insights about the
Manufacturing industry, while working with Jabil circuits in the Manufacturing and the Quality
departments and then working in a support and enhancement project in MBT.
Okay... what kind of insights you got... you should talk about that ....also the sentence structure
could be made more readable...
Working in the service industry with Jabil Circuits in the Manufacturing and Quality Department
and with MBT in a support and enhancement projects, gave me sufficient insights into.......blah
blah blah....
To achieve my long-term aspiration, I would like to lead a team of professionals directly

interacting with clients of various domains to develop their functionalities and later on to convert
their ideas into tangible assets.
Not very clear... you already talked about being a Consultant as a long term goal... and FMS
faculty is well aware with that term... if you want to add specific then reshuffle this line along
with first... and also bring some clarity into your statements...
Also bridging the gap between IT and non-IT sectors is one of my dreams.
Hey where does this popped up suddeny... and what would you mean by this... either write
something more about it....or remove it...
An MBA providing valuable business insights, intricacies and a management perspective would
go a long way in achieving my goals.
Okayish....
The flexibility of customizing programs as per student’s profile, the attitude of “believing in
doing… and in believing” through a host of practical and real life situations, the strong alumni
with constant industry interaction and the mutually beneficial peer-leaning at FMS would be the
ideal path to success.
Well you intention was good of writing something different here...but it has not come out
clearly... also this does not answer the "why FMS" very convincingly....
SOP97 - FMS
“Success is a ladder that can not be climbed with your hands in your pockets.” This defines the
reason and the will behind the drive to improve my ways and means of life.
My experience through working in the corporate environment has taught me a lot about the
complexities of the management involved in everyday work. Pursuing a degree in business
administration will teach skills to survive in this environment to get the best out people and
processes.
My goal for the short term is to develop a career in the field of marketing most preferably in the
FMCG sector. My experience in organizing events as a member of a technical society in college
and in the annual technical fest has helped develop an interest in the field of marketing. My long
term goal is work is as an independent consultant in this field, so that I have the independence to
decide the kind of work to do.
The vastly different style of pedagogy coupled with the best in class faculty provides for an
immensely invigorating study environment at FMS, in which to pursue an MBA. FMS also has
the advantage of being in the city seeing fast development with lot of corporates setting shop in
Delhi making the student industry interaction highly plausible and effective. The pursuit of
academic excellence at such your institution will undoubtedly bring out the best in me.
SOP97r
reason and the will behind the drive to improve my ways and means of life.[there seems to be no
connection between this line and the rest of your essay]
complexities of the management involved in everyday work. Pursuing a degree in business
administration will teach skills to survive in this environment to get the best out people and
processes.
My goal for the short term is to develop a career in the field of marketing most preferably in the
FMCG sector. My experience in organizing events as a member of a technical society in college
and in the annual technical fest has helped develop an interest in the field of marketing.[this is
not convincing. Experience in organizing events would foster ur interest in event
management.....maybe you would want to elaborate here] My long term goal is work is as an
independent consultant in this field, so that I have the independence to decide the kind of work to
do.[this field?...which field...also having independence to do the kind of work i want to do ' is a
very vague statement........Have you really thought about what you wish to do in the long term/]
immensely invigorating study environment at FMS, in which to pursue an MBA. FMS also has
the advantage of being in the city seeing fast development with lot of corporates setting shop in
Delhi making the student industry interaction highly plausible and effective. The pursuit of
academic excellence at such your institution will undoubtedly bring out the best in me.
SOP97rr
reason and the will behind the drive to improve my ways and means of life.
Okay...
complexities of the management involved in everyday work.
What kind of experience? How much? Care to give details...
Pursuing a degree in business administration will teach skills to survive in this environment to
get the best out people and processes.
So you want the degree for "surviving"... not a convincing reason... you would agree.....
My goal for the short term <"short-term goal" sounds better> is to develop a career in the field of
marketing most preferably in the FMCG sector.
most preferably...what do you mean by this.... dont hang in between.... either leave the
industry...or be specific.....
My experience in organizing events as a member of a technical society in college and in the

annual technical fest has helped <me> develop an interest in the field of marketing.
How? What role you played in the tech society?
My long term goal is work is as an independent consultant in this field, so that I have the
independence to decide the kind of work to do.
Okay the long term goal is okay...but there is no need to give such a silly reason... If I tell you
that the kind of work you do being an independent consultant will still not be decided by
you...but by other business/financial constraints...then?...
immensely invigorating study environment at FMS, in which to pursue an MBA.
Change the sentence structure...the content is good...but sounds awkward....
FMS also has the advantage of being in the city seeing fast development with lot of corporates
setting shop in Delhi making the student industry interaction highly plausible and effective. The
pursuit of academic excellence at such your institution will undoubtedly bring out the best in me.
Change the sentence structure...the content is good...but sounds awkward....

SOP98 - FMS
Apart from being a meritorious student all through my technological career, I have
simultaneously inculcated a passion for arts. I have a keen interest in carnatic music, which helps
me in keeping my mind fresh and creative. I have also been an active organizer at many school
and college functions. Being a house leader at my school, I tried to instill values like discipline
and confidence among students. I believe all this activity shaped my personality into being an
active and diverse woman.
‘The wheel turns and turns and turns: it never stops and stands still.’ The world is continuously
changing and learning is the only thing, which helps one to adapt to this perpetual change. I
aspire to carve a niche for myself in this Big World. To shape up my dream into reality and to
make it successful I require profound knowledge of business apart from proficient technical and
analytical skill. It is my dream to do such learning process from a ‘pioneering institution’ FMS,
which gives me not only the ambience and opportunity to prove myself but also the latitude to be
creative and nurture the entrepreneurial spirit in me. The way FMS links theory to practice and
its various programs, to ensure that its students are comprehensively ready to step into the
enterprising world, is fascinating.
SOP99 - FMS
The ability to convert ideas to things is the secret of outward success. I believe business
organisations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and provides a platform for successfully
harnessing these new ideas thereby contributing to the personal as well to the success of society
in larger perspective.
My technical studies have been an integral part of my intellectual development.They have helped
me to hone my analytical and logical skills. This has been substantiated by my decent academic
records and by my campus selection in two very reputed organisations.
So far so good.I have sight MBA as my next career goal as i believe this stand alone technical
skills will recieve a huge fillip if coupled with an excellent managerial skills.A thorough
understanding of the managerial fundaes will help a long way in understanding the bits and
pieces of management aspects and in the functionalities of the corporate world.Hence this MBA
degree will keep me in good stead in this competitive world and would surely help me in
realising my long term goal.
This decision of mine has brought me to FMS.I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on
technical and analytical skills and general management orientation.I hope to become a part of
this dynamic culture which will help me gain a diversity of experinces, network with a variety of
people, to accept challenging assignments and to above all complement them with a respected
management degree.
SOP99r
The ability to convert ideas to things is the secret of outward success. I believe business
organisations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and provides a platform for successfully
harnessing these new ideas thereby contributing to the personal as well to the success of society
in larger perspective.
What the heck this blabbering got to do with your "statement of purpose"??
me to hone my analytical and logical skills.
Okay
This has been substantiated by my decent academic records and by my campus selection in two
very reputed organisations.
We all know how campus selections are done at reputed organizations :mg:.... does not tell
anything to me that you are stud.....and you are not the only one who gets two jobs from
campus....
So far so good.
Cmmon...are you writing a story...whats this?...
I have sight MBA as my next career goal as i believe this stand alone technical skills will recieve
a huge fillip if coupled with an excellent managerial skills.
Poor choice of word...as well as sentence structure....
A thorough understanding of the managerial fundaes will help a long way in understanding the
bits and pieces of management aspects and in the functionalities of the corporate world.
Again poor choice of words...dont use colloquial words...
Hence this MBA degree will keep me in good stead in this competitive world and would surely
help me in realising my long term goal.
Okaish
This decision of mine has brought me to FMS.

Absolutely pathetic sentence....i am really shocked...:wow:
management orientation.I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will help me gain
a diversity of experinces, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments
and to above all complement them with a respected management degree.
Thank god..finally something which is good....
BTW your career goals are not vey clear here.....

SOP99rr
The ability to convert ideas to things is the secret of outward success. I believe that business
organisations lead the way in pioneering new ideas.Hence my aspiration is to be placed high up
in one of these organisations,utilize my ideas in its decision making and planning process,and
thereby become successful in life.
records and my active participation in extra-curricular activities.
I have sight MBA as my next career goal as i believe that the achievement of my goal requires a
detailed understanding of corporate workings,people and the business scenarios.I wish to get
myself equipped with all the business and corporate world skills before embarking on a journey
here.Thus an MBA degree from a reputed business school will keep me in good stead in this
competitive world and would surely help me in realising my long term goal.
a diversity of experiences, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments
SOP99rrr
The ability to convert ideas to things is the secret of outward success. I believe that business
organisations lead the way in pioneering new ideas.Hence my aspiration is to be placed high up
in one of these organisations,utilize my ideas in its decision making and planning process,and
thereby become successful in life.
nothing wrong with this per se :mg: but somehow the punch is missing. it sounds so... general.
try modifying some part of it, read some older sops. u will get an idea
records and my active participation in extra-curricular activities.
1. ofcourse. useless line

2. how,- when - where ?
I have sight MBA as my next career goal as i believe that the achievement of my goal requires a
detailed understanding of corporate workings,people and the business scenarios.I wish to get
myself equipped with all the business and corporate world skills before embarking on a journey
here.Thus an MBA degree from a reputed business school will keep me in good stead in this
competitive world and would surely help me in realising my long term goal.
1. I see MBA as a next career move (not goal)..etc
2. you havent really defined your goal earlier, you know. so how can u say that you want to
achieve that goal.
3. try writing your expectations from the course rather than giving generic results.
a diversity of experiences, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments
1. define define define.. :mg: plz understand, the bane of most sops is that they are just in-
between..neither statements of magnificent visions nor an accountant's :mg: report. take a stand,
dont be afriad of it
2. get some useful stuff about FMS to write..if you dont get that, dont write anything. but dont
wrte something you know nothing about..it shows :mg:
SOP100 - TAPMI
"'Atlas shrugged', a brilliant novel by Ayn Rand was my introduction to the world of business
and i've been captivated since. I aspire to be placed high up in the corporate ladder,and to be
involved in the decision making and planning processes of an organization.
It is my belief that the achievement of this goal requires a detailed understanding of corporate
workings, people and the business scenario - Indian and global.
I wish to enhance my knowledge in distinct sectors of an organisation and would like to bring
together this understanding for a sound growth in me as well the workplace I would be working
in.
The Post Graduate Programme in Management offered by TAPMI would provide me with a firm
grounding in these.The Holistic Approach provided towards Management Educationat
TAPMI,the presence of Extra Curricular activities and the thought of working in teams make me
all the more interested in joining TAPMI.After my two year stint at TAPMI I am certain that I
will be able to fulfill my long term goals to perfection.I am confident that your institution will
provide the stimulation and support environment that I am eagerly looking for."
SOP100r
"'Atlas shrugged', a brilliant novel by Ayn Rand was my introduction to the world of business
and i've been captivated since.
You are on a dangerous ground... Altas Shrugged is more about Ayn Rand's objectivism
philosophy rather than "business"....and it is entirely fictional....
I aspire to be placed high up in the corporate ladder,and to be involved in the decision making
and planning processes of an organization.
good...simple and neat...
It is my belief that the achievement of this goal requires a detailed understanding of corporate
workings, people and the business scenario - Indian and global.
Restructure the sentence....
I wish to enhance my knowledge in distinct sectors of an organisation and would like to bring
together this understanding for a sound growth in me as well the workplace I would be working
in.
What do you mean by "distinct sectors"...do you mean different functions .... also what this
"brining together this understanding" got to do with "sound growth in me and workplace"....
totally confusing....
The Post Graduate Programme in Management offered by TAPMI would provide me with a firm
grounding in these.The Holistic Approach provided towards Management Educationat
TAPMI,the presence of Extra Curricular activities and the thought of working in teams make me
all the more interested in joining TAPMI.
Pathetic sentence...also why capitalize "Holistic Approach"... "Management Education".... also
not strong reasons for showing interest in TAPMI... I guess the college is reputed enough to have
other distinguishing characterstics....so why not quote them... (you need to search for them first)
After my two year stint at TAPMI I am certain that I will be able to fulfill my long term goals to
perfection.
Really poor choice of sentence structure.......
I am confident that your institution will provide the stimulation and support environment that I
am eagerly looking for."
"Your institution"... who you are talking to? make it "TAPMI"
Does not make clear "why TAPMI" and how it aligns with your goals.....
SOP101 - FMS
"Leadership, A quality on display"

This was the comment about me by corporate Trainer at the end of psychometric test on my first
day of job. I have displayed my leadership skills at all stages of my life, be it arranging informal
student clubs or alumni meets.
Excellent academics coupled with Extra-curricular provided me an opportunity to get in to IT
corporate world, straight out of the college. I was absorbed into a globally spread out software
development team based on my robust technical knowledge and good soft skills. Being a part of
small team involved in every aspect of wireless device development, I experienced the intricacies
involved in dealing with customers and in the process I could hone my negotiation skills and
crisis handling abilities.
I foresee myself as an entrepreneur in consultancy arena. A technical graduation with one and
half years experience has put me on the right track towards my goal. A formal management
degree is a necessity for me to get into the field I aspire to be in.
FMS, being one of the oldest and finest B-schools in India, with its uniqueness such as relatively
small batch size and flexible curriculum fascinates me. I would consider it a privilege to be part
of this prestigious institution.
SOP101r
1) "Leadership, A quality on display". This was the comment about me by corporate Trainer at
the end of psychometric test on my first day of job.
"Leadership, A quality on display". It was the comment by our corporate trainer at the end of my
psychometric test on the first day of job.
2) I have displayed my leadership skills at all stages of my life, be it arranging informal student
clubs or alumni meets.
I have displayed my leadership skills at all stages of my life, be it organizing small informal
student clubs or the entire alumni meets on a large scale.
3) Excellent academics coupled with Extra-curricular provided me an opportunity to get in to IT

corporate world, straight out of the college.
<not needed..same thing mentioned in next line>
4) I was absorbed into a globally spread out software development team based on my robust
technical knowledge and good soft skills.
I was absorbed into a globally spread out software development team of a large organization
based on my robust technical knowledge displayed by excellent academics and good soft skills
shown by extra-curricular activites.
5) Being a part of small team involved in every aspect of wireless device development, I
experienced the intricacies involved in dealing with customers and in the process I could hone
my negotiation skills and crisis handling abilities.
I understood the intricacies involved in dealing with critical customers as a part of small team
involved in every aspect of wireless device development. This has honed my negotiation skills
and crisis handling abilities.
6) I foresee myself as an entrepreneur in consultancy arena. A technical graduation with one and
half years experience has put me on the right track towards my goal.
I foresee myself as an entrepreneur in consultancy arena. A technical education coupled with one
and half years of industry experience has put me on the right track towards my goal.
7) A formal management degree is a necessity for me to get into the field I aspire to be in.
I believe that a formal management degree is the next logical step in my scheme of venturing
into the desired field.
8) FMS, being one of the oldest and finest B-schools in India, with its uniqueness such as
relatively small batch size and flexible curriculum fascinates me. I would consider it a privilege
to be part of this prestigious institution.
FMS, being one of the oldest and finest B-schools in India, with its uniqueness of having a
relatively small batch size and flexible curriculum, fascinates me. I would consider it a privilege
to be part of this prestigious institution.
SOP102 - FMS
To me, there is only one form of human depravity - the man without a purpose." That quote from
Atlas Shrugged concisely states my attitude towards life as well as career. After having worked
in the software industry for more than two years now, I am ready to take a step forward towards
achieving my career goal of being a top CEO of the world. I’m fascinated by the enormous
progress India has seen in the last decade because of the outsourcing and particularly Information
Technology industry. I want to make it big in this industry which has enormous potential. I’m
looking forward to a managerial career in the IT industry and I see myself heading a globally
known software company one day. A formal education in management can go a long way in
helping me achieve my career goal. FMS being one of the oldest and most reputed institutes and
having vastly experienced and learned faculty is my preferred choice to pursue a management
degree. FMS has the unique advantage of being a part of the Delhi University and is strategically
located in the capital city. I would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution.
“To me, there is only one form of human depravity - the man without a purpose." That quote
from Atlas Shrugged concisely states my attitude towards life as well as career.
1. u wouldnt want to start of with negating a negative..depravity in the first line seems out of
place. no doubt, the quote is good..but try putting in a better one
After having worked in the software industry for more than two years now, I am ready to take a
step forward towards achieving my career goal of being a top CEO of the world.
1. CEO of the world? be realistic dude....goto HBS.
I’m fascinated by the enormous progress India has seen in the last decade because of the
outsourcing and particularly Information Technology industry. I want to make it big in this
industry which has enormous potential.
1. mostly redundant info. outsourcing & IT need not be the same, you know :wink:
I’m looking forward to a managerial career in the IT industry and I see myself heading a globally
known software company one day.
1. what stops you from having a managerial career in IT right now ?
A formal education in management can go a long way in helping me achieve my career goal.
1. how? outline the gains that you percieve from this course rther than making an assertion based
on ur opinion.
FMS being one of the oldest and most reputed institutes and having vastly experienced and
learned faculty is my preferred choice to pursue a management degree. FMS has the unique
advantage of being a part of the Delhi University and is strategically located in the capital city. I
would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution.
1. generic lines about FMS actually. you could replace FMS with IIM A or any other good b-
school and still the same words would hold. :)
SOP103 - FMS
Swami Vivekananda said, “Arise, Awake and Stop not till you have reached your goal”. My
long-term career goal is to successfully manage an organization and I believe that pursuing an
MBA degree from a reputed institute is the first step in this direction.
Academics have been my forte and my consistent performances since high school stand
testimonial to the fact. I was placed within the top 0.4% in the Andhra Pradesh engineering
entrance exam and secured an admission for the Electrical and Electronics Engineering course in
REC Calicut, one of the premier engineering institutions in the country.
Pursuing the engineering course in an REC helped in an all round development of my

personality. Apart from performing well in academics (I stood 3rd in a class of 65), I also
actively participated in extra curricular activities. I was selected to my college cricket team for
my leg spin bowling and batting abilities. I have held the post of Treasurer of the Telugu Cultural
Association, Calicut chapter. My interaction with peers with diverse backgrounds from all over
the country helped me get different perspectives.
Working in organizations like Delphi and Symbol enhanced my problem solving, analytical
skills and helped me become a good team player.
I learned that in a technology driven company, the technical and management aspects are
complementary for a successful organization. Having taken up roles of a project coordinator for
a few projects, I came to appreciate the significance of management in an organization. I
sincerely believe that the MBA course would enrich my skills in management and help me attain
my goal.
I believe that FMS, well known for academic excellence and a good reputation of producing
world-class managers, strong alumni network and a good placement record is the right institute
for the MBA education I seek.
SOP103r
SOP104 - FMS
An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come" courtesy Victor
Hugo. Idea and imagination, as I believe, is the driving impulse for mankind. Coming from an
engineering background, the exciting world of ideas, which influence humanity in some way or
the other, has been my area of interest. Working in a technical job as a software developer for the
past couple of years has made me realize the hitches of the corporate world. Great ideas are
invaluable only when they are presented and applied efficiently, more so when the stakes are
high and diversified. It demands theoretical and practical knowledge alongwith varying skills
sets. These are the essential qualities that I require, to make a difference in tough business
scenarios where strategy plays the role of a protagonist. I believe that FMS, one of the pioneering
management institutes with world-class infrastructure, notable industry interaction, highly
experienced faculty and excellent management research base can provide me the skills and
knowledge required to fulfill my objectives.
SOP104r
"An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come" courtesy Victor
Hugo. Idea and imagination, as I believe, is the driving impulse for mankind.
Good sentence..but grammatical mistakes...
Coming from an engineering background, the exciting world of ideas, which influence humanity
in some way or the other, has been my area of interest.
okay...
Working in a technical job as a software developer for the past couple of years has made me
realize the hitches of the corporate world.
What do you mean by hitches? What kind of projects you saw/lead which made you realise the
hitches.... simply being a coder wont give you much exposure to business side of an
organization....isnt it? so elaborate....
Great ideas are invaluable only when they are presented and applied efficiently, more so when
the stakes are high and diversified.
presented and applied?? or implemented?? confusing...."stakes are high"...what the heck...which
stakes??
It demands theoretical and practical knowledge alongwith varying skills sets.

"varying skill sets"...curious word... what do you mean... do you mean "variety of skill sets" ??
also what kind or variety of skills? You are just being vague....
These are the essential qualities that I require, to make a difference in tough business scenarios
where strategy plays the role of a protagonist.
Boy boy... why are you going for hi-fi words... without any connect between them....an absolute
no no statement....BTW even the intention/mearning is not very clear....
I believe that FMS, one of the pioneering management institutes with world-class infrastructure,
notable industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and excellent management research base
can provide me the skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives.
the usual run-of-the-mill sentence....BTW FMS does not have world-class infrastructure...
A so-so SOP....but can be improved a lot...
SOP105 - FMS
"Knowing is not enough, we must apply, willing is not enough, we must do.
My short term ambition includes getting into a premium B School and be a beneficiary of
excellent pedagogy and diverse interactions, And then get into a corporation where I will hone
my skills as a manager and learn the intricacies of management be it people management or
process management. My long term ambition is to have my own business to satisfy the
entrepreneur in me. I am a computer engineer with a decent academic record and hence my
logical and analytical skills are quite groomed. I used be in charge for the marketing of the
events in college and bring in sponsorships. This cultivated my interest in marketing and
motivated me to choose a marketing job in T.I.M.E. Bhopal, rather than going for a software job.
The experience at TIME helped me to look at marketing from ground level and it enhanced my
communication skills and developed a convincing approach of communication in me. I was
made the Centre Manager in eight months and was in charge for marketing and administration.
This gave me in hand experience of managing an organisation holistically. At this point, I
developed an interest in stock markets and with some stock market simulation games I was able
to learn about the basic functioning of stock markets and a company also. This captivated my
interest in finance and hence influenced me to pursue my MBA in Marketing and finance (dual).
FMS can help me by giving my raw capabilities a professional and corporate touch, which can
prepare me for the rigours of corporate world. And I am pretty sure that FMS with its sound
pedagogy, revered faculty and excellent infrastructure is more than capable of doing it. Also the
interaction with variety of people from India and abroad and the various co curricular activities
at FMS will result in an all-round development of my personality. The pursuit of MBA at your
esteemed institute will bring out the best in me…."
SOP105r
You want to stuff too much into the limited space...:mg:

Cut the quote...since not relevant...also cut the crap about short-term goal...since it is
obvious...your SOP in thier hands itself imply that you are looking to get into a B-school.....cut
also the crap continuing sentence after the short-term goal....
The start can be from your long term goal....
My long term goal is to become an entrepreneur. My gradution in computer science has

undoubtly sharpened by logical and analytical skills.
You are not writing your autobiography..."I used to be incharge of..blah blah blah...." cut this
crap... its more important as to what you learned from your marketing roles in cultural
fests...write that down....
You can write choosing the marketing domain over s/w job in a more effective manner... try to
restructure the sentence to give it some punch... atleast you got different exp than a usual techie...
so you are at an advantage... leverage it properly...
Why you made incharge of a center in eight months... make it sound like you did something
extra-ordinary and the result is your promotion to center manger....
Hey cut the entire crap of stock simulation games....no b-schools care about stock inverstors...
and unless you enter "real stock market" you dont understand the meaning of "burning
yourself"... there are hunderds of people who play such simulation games... so these are not the
skills with which you can impress the faculty....(it might back-fire on you if they start asking
questions about this during PI)....also "finance" functionality is not restricted to only stock
market, it is entirely different and wide....
In the last para... the sentence sturcture is not very impressive...change it....
Being a center manager you should have lot more to say in your SOP than this... you are not
using your exp properly.....
SOP106 - FMS
" If you can imagine it, You can achieve it;

If you can dream it, You can become it."
- William Arthur Ward.
I have always imagined myself getting the BEST ENTERPRENUR of the year award for my
dream project, my own technology-driven firm.
My zeal to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic record and my co-cullicular

activities. After getting distinctions in X & XII Board Exams I choose Computer Engineering
and completed the same with distinction. In Sports I took up BOXING in juinor college and went
on to represent North Mumbai at National level. My stint as the General Secretary of the
Dramatics group of our Degree College,where I lead a team of 15 people,gave me useful insights
into manpower and resource management.
The next milestone I achieved was getting into AMDOCS,the largest CRM and Billing company
in the world. AMDOCS being a global company,we had clients from all over the world and this
experience has made me understand the subtle nuances that go into the functioning of global
corporations.
Finally,to achieve my dreams your esteemed institution with its highly acclaimed cirricclum,
faculty from different sectors and high echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice
for me.
SOP106r
" If you can imagine it, You can achieve it;

If you can dream it, You can become it."
Pretty strong opening lines :mg:
My zeal to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic record and my co-cullicular

activities. After getting distinctions in X & XII Board Exams I choose Computer Engineering
and completed the same with distinction. In Sports I took up BOXING in juinor college and went
on to represent North Mumbai at National level. My stint as the General Secretary of the
Dramatics group of our Degree College,where I lead a team of 15 people,gave me useful insights
into manpower and resource management.
spelling of curricular.
Also, the distinction waalah funda is vague. Either you are a goldmedallist or you just mention
that you have a strong academic record and leave it at that.
The structure of the above paragraph would be more cogent if you put it as "Academically I have
done blah blah .........and on the co-curricular front I have excelled in boxing, dramatics". Now
anyone reading your resume is going to know that you represented North Mumbai yadda yadda
or GS of yadda yadda. So chop those details out.
Now since you have done this stuff, tell us what you have learned from it ? Was it time
management ? Was it ability to multitask ? Was it people skills (what you have mentioned) ? If
yes, then how does it tie to your becoming entrepreneur ?
Also, you were interacting with colleagues and peers right ? "Do you call them manpower ? Or
resource ? So why say "manpower and resource mgmt" ?
The next milestone I achieved was getting into AMDOCS,the largest CRM and Billing company
in the world. AMDOCS being a global company,we had clients from all over the world and this
experience has made me understand the subtle nuances that go into the functioning of global
corporations.
Next milestone ? I'm sorry but I missed out on the earlier ones ? :mg: Where have you mentioned
them ? Atleast write one point saying "My first milestone was......." then this is justified.
Also, AMDOCS being the largest CRM and billing co in the world or being a global company
has little to do with YOU as a person. So how did it help YOU ? Did you interact with clients ?
Did you meet tight schedules ? Did you have to put up with a grouchy boss ? :mg: Put YOUR
perspective into it.
Again, who does it tie back into your dream to become an entrepreneur ?
Finally,to achieve my dreams your esteemed institution with its highly acclaimed cirricclum,
faculty from different sectors and high echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice
for me.
Spell check karo yaar. As a punishment I am not going to review the last para and point out the
many glaring errors it has :mg: Now I know how I managed to piss off my school teachers :mg:
SOP106rr
" If you can imagine it, you can achieve it;

If you can dream it, you can become it."
Academically I have always been in the cream of my Alma matter, while on the co-curricular
front I have excelled in boxing and dramatics. Playing boxing at national level has taught me
never to get pushed down in life and to come up with renewed strength and energy when pushed
to the limits. My stint as the general secretary of our dramatics group, where I led a group of 15
people, showed me how difficult managing people and funds can be and awoke the manager
within me .
Being in AMDOCS the largest CRM and Billing Company in the world was a truly learning
experience. Handling clients from Australia exposed me to the concept of ‘glocalization’, i.e.,
being globally active but local to the specific need of the client. Having to cope with stringent
deadlines and tremendous work pressure has made me disciplined and further strengthened my
urge to pursue management.
I definitely believe that your esteemed institution with its highly acclaimed curriculum, faculty
from different sectors and high echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice for me
SOP106rrr
" If you can imagine it, you can achieve it; If you can dream it, you can become it."
- William Arthur Ward. I have always imagined myself getting the BEST ENTERPRENUR of
the year award for my dream project, my own technology-driven firm.
Good...
Academically I have always been in the cream of my Alma matter, while on the co-curricular
front I have excelled in boxing and dramatics. Playing boxing at national level has taught me
never to get pushed down in life and to come up with renewed strength and energy when pushed
to the limits. My stint as the general secretary of our dramatics group, where I led a group of 15
people, showed me how difficult managing people and funds can be and awoke the manager
within me .
Being in AMDOCS the largest CRM and Billing Company in the world was a truly learning
experience. Handling clients from Australia exposed me to the concept of ‘glocalization’, i.e.,
being globally active but local to the specific need of the client. Having to cope with stringent
deadlines and tremendous work pressure has made me disciplined and further strengthened my
urge to pursue management.
Okay...its good to talk about your qualities...but you are overdoing it... the entire above para talks
about what you learned....but it does not connect with how you are going to achieve you goal that
you mentioned earlier....I guess you can cut down some part here ... and tell how all these skills
can help you achive your goal...and what are the things which are missing ...which makes MBA
as the next step for you....
I definitely believe that your esteemed institution with its highly acclaimed curriculum, faculty
from different sectors and high echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice for me
since your goals and skills and why mba are not clear in the SOP... this line is not making much
sense here....
SOP107 - FMS
Ability to focus on problems and to take appropriate decisions to deal with them needs a sound
importance of hard work, which is required in the face of robust competition.
My experience working with a MNC call center and small scale industry manufacturing machine
tools has given me an insight into various nuances involved in management both globally and
locally.
to be part of this prestigious institution. Graduating from here in flying colours is something that
I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through sincere hard work dedication
SOP107r
Ability to focus on problems and to take appropriate decisions to deal with them needs a sound
Knock of "ability" in the first sentence. It should read "To focus on .....and to take... needs a
........"
"I aspire to be a part of the strategic mgmt team" instead of whatever else. Also you might want
to tell which sector or type of organization if you are clear about it.
"....where my primary role......." hmm.........rather keep it like "strategic mgmt team which would
require me to take crucial decisions" or ""strategic mgmt team where I would need to take crucial
decisions"
Also, "inculcate" not "inculcate in me"
"for this" instead of "for such an aim"
"can be" instead of "could be"
importance of hard work, which is required in the face of robust competition.
My experience working with a MNC call center and small scale industry manufacturing machine
tools has given me an insight into various nuances involved in management both globally and
locally.
Technical background = strong analytical foundation is too trite. See if you can cook up
something better.
Also, if I were you, I would love to rant about the customer focussed delivery that I had in the
call-center. Maybe you want to mention about the turnaround times, your performance, your
perception of client in global business etc.
to be part of this prestigious institution. Graduating from here in flying colours is something that
I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through sincere hard work dedication
"FMS, one of the oldest and finest Bschools in India, has fascinated me with its relatively
smaller batch sizes and a very flexible curriculum." Sounds better
"I would consider it a .............till the end" is almost anitclimatic. I think it kind of lets down the
tone you had set up by using banal words. Work on it, I am sure you will be able to come up with
something better.
SOP108 - GLIM
Please tell us how a management degree fits in your personal goal for the future.(400)
My Goal is to set up a software solution company five to ten years down the line, which would
be at the cutting edge of technology. In order to prepare myself for this, not only would I like to
get the formal education in management but I would also like to work with reputed organizations
at various levels of management so as to understand the practical aspects of management and
gain required expertise.
I did my engineering in computer science from a very reputed college SGSITS Indore, now a
deemed university, which gave me a sound understanding of science and technology.
I joined HSBC software development India Pvt Ltd as a software engineer straight from the
campus and have now worked for almost two years in this organization. This period has once
again highlighted the importance of formal management education, which will help me in honing
my quantitative, qualitative analytical and interpersonal skills, which are necessary for a budding
manager. My job in HSBC has exposed me to the ground realities of corporate world and taught
me to apply theory by finding feasibility and viability. HSBC being a huge organization has
exposed me to varied and diverse functions and taught me how a business runs.
In my view the key of being a successful entrepreneur is having a sound knowledge of business
fundamentals and comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization. I strongly
feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With robust
technical background, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give
me the opportunity to blend both the aspects.
Great lakes institute of management can help me in reaching my goals through its excellent
faculty, scientifically planned curriculum and high quality (experienced) intake.
Elective courses from fifth term onwards lay due emphasis on entrepreneurship development and
strategy making which will definitely cater to my long-term aspirations of becoming global
entrepreneur and with its excellent placement record, GLIM would give me a right launching
platform.
SOP108r
My Goal is to set up a software solution company five to ten years down the line, which would
be at the cutting edge of technology. In order to prepare myself for this, not only would I like to
get the formal education in management but I would also like to work with reputed organizations
at various levels of management so as to understand the practical aspects of management and
gain required expertise.
Why is G in goal capital ?

Since when have software solution companies been on the cutting edge of technology ? Give me
1 example. Think about it. Only the googles and the other product based companies can afford
making a claim like it. Also, what will be your USP ? Why Software why not anything else ?
Read some magazines, gartner reports etc. to give you food for thought.
A lot of questions are unanswered. This is NOT a FMS 200 word SOP. 400 words allow you
more time to build up a story. So tell us your goal.
I did my engineering in computer science from a very reputed college SGSITS Indore, now a
deemed university, which gave me a sound understanding of science and technology.
Have already read it up in your essay. Knock off this entire sentence.
I joined HSBC software development India Pvt Ltd as a software engineer straight from the
campus and have now worked for almost two years in this organization. This period has once
again highlighted the importance of formal management education, which will help me in honing
my quantitative, qualitative analytical and interpersonal skills, which are necessary for a budding
manager.
"I have been working in HSBC software development India Pvt. Ltd as a software engineer right
from the time I passed out from college, almost two years ago." sounds better.
"a budding manager" eh ? You just said you want to be an entrepreneur ? Where is that spin ?
Also what is "quantitative, qualitative analytical" (sic) ?
My job in HSBC has exposed me to the ground realities of corporate world and taught me to
apply theory by finding feasibility and viability. HSBC being a huge organization has exposed
me to varied and diverse functions and taught me how a business runs.
In my view the key of being a successful entrepreneur is having a sound knowledge of business
fundamentals and comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization. I strongly
feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With robust
technical background, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give
me the opportunity to blend both the aspects.
"taught me to apply theory by finding feasibility and viability" ???? What is that supposed to
mean ? :whatthat:
Talk about the blending part (techno-managerial function) in a more direct manner. Tell what
you want to learn and how it will fit into your entrepreneurial venture.
Great lakes institute of management can help me in reaching my goals through its excellent
faculty, scientifically planned curriculum and high quality (experienced) intake.
Elective courses from fifth term onwards lay due emphasis on entrepreneurship development and
strategy making which will definitely cater to my long-term aspirations of becoming global
entrepreneur and with its excellent placement record, GLIM would give me a right launching
platform.
This says "Why GLIM ?". If it can be addressed elsewhere you might want to stick to just "Why
MBA ?" here and give more convincing reasons as I have mentioned in my comments for the
previous paragraph.
SOP109 - GLIM
Assume that you are on the admission panel of great lakes. Which of your qualities would
compel you as panel member to offer yourself admission
Although my experience and knowledge does not suffice to answer this question but I strongly
believe that following are my qualities which would compel me as a panel member to offer
myself the admission
The burning desire to learn new things to grasp information and ability of convert this
information into knowledge, as at this stage there is no scope for spoon-feeding there could only
be the torch of knowledge to guide you through and it is you who has to make the path.
The flexibility to go through the grueling schedule of a B school, which would enable me to
succeed in highly competitive environment. Good interpersonal and communication skills and
the spirit to hail through difficulties, sustain the pressure, meet the commitments make me a
person who will ensure that the deadlines are met.
The ability to be energetic to not only carry myself through but to induce energy in other people
around gives me an edge as far as team work is concerned and supports my candidature.
And last but not the least being patient and good listener has always paid dividends to me, so
listening to people and respecting them for what they are and what they opine has become an
inseparable part of my personality.
These qualities I think would enable me to not only secure admission in a reputed institute like
yours but will also help me succeed throughout my life.
SOP109r
Although my experience and knowledge does not suffice to answer this question but I strongly
believe that following are my qualities which would compel me as a panel member to offer
myself the admission
Why do you want to say that you will not have enough experience and knowledge. I think
starting off an essay on a negative foot doesn't look nice. Just my $0.02
The burning desire to learn new things to grasp information and ability of convert this
information into knowledge, as at this stage there is no scope for spoon-feeding there could only
be the torch of knowledge to guide you through and it is you who has to make the path.
Excellent. Now give an example of when you did that. Was it something you learned through a
very difficult phase of the project when you had little idea about the scope, did you get to go
onsite for requirement gathering ? was it tough clients who were dealing with getting layed off
themselves hence unwilling to share info ? what was it that you can claim to say this ?
The flexibility to go through the grueling schedule of a B school, which would enable me to
succeed in highly competitive environment. Good interpersonal and communication skills and
the spirit to hail through difficulties, sustain the pressure, meet the commitments make me a
person who will ensure that the deadlines are met.
The ability to be energetic to not only carry myself through but to induce energy in other people
around gives me an edge as far as team work is concerned and supports my candidature.
So you have great teamworking abilities and communication skills. How can you substantiate it ?
Have you had to deal with people working across geographies ? a bad boss ? incompetent
subordinates ? how did you over come it ? what did it teach you ?
And last but not the least being patient and good listener has always paid dividends to me, so
listening to people and respecting them for what they are and what they opine has become an
inseparable part of my personality.
You are objective and a good listener (im sure my wife wished for those qualities in me :mg:).
Great ! Have you taught some place ? Have you had to deal with situations where it was
important to absorb knowledge ? Was there an experience that changed you into becoming like
this ? Share it.
These qualities I think would enable me to not only secure admission in a reputed institute like
yours but will also help me succeed throughout my life.
Good. But as I have mentioned above this is a very generic essay. It says nothign about the
person YOU. Give more examples and give it that personal touch.
SOP110 - FMS
I completed my bachelor's degree in science (Mathematics, Electronics and Computer Science)

from Bangalore university in 2004. Subsequently, I had taken up various MBA entrance exams
and applied to some B-schools(including FMS) in 2004. I had a score of 94 percentile on CAT
and 89 percentile on XAT, but unfortunately could not convert these scores and GD/PI calls from
TAPMI,MICA and NIRMA into a final admission offers. I have been working for the past four
months as a graduate trainee for IL&FS Depositry Services. Given my present qualifications and
background, I feel I need a qualification which would help me stand out
in the job market.
I feel a management course at FMS would help me achieve these goals. While a well-qualified
and experienced faculty, excellent infrastructure, and the brand value of FMS would be
invaluable, I also want to have the chance to interact with a varied spectrum of bright students
with various
backgrounds to add to my knowledge pool. I feel I have the requisite ability to leverage fully the
advantage offered by a management course at FMS, and hence want to pursue the same at your
esteemed institute.
SOP111 - FMS
Apart from being a meritorious student all through my technological career, I have
simultaneously inculcated a passion for arts. I have a keen interest in carnatic music, which helps
me in keeping my mind fresh and creative. I have also been an active organizer at many school
and college functions. Being a house leader at my school, I tried to instill values like discipline
and confidence among students. I believe all this activity shaped my personality into being an
active and diverse woman.
‘The wheel turns and turns and turns: it never stops and stands still.’ The world is continuously
changing and learning is the only thing, which helps one to adapt to this perpetual change. I
aspire to carve a niche for myself in this Big World. To shape up my dream into reality and to
make it successful I require profound knowledge of business apart from proficient technical and
analytical skill. It is my dream to do such learning process from a ‘pioneering institution’ FMS,
which gives me not only the ambience and opportunity to prove myself but also the latitude to be
creative and nurture the entrepreneurial spirit in me. The way FMS links theory to practice and
its various programs, to ensure that its students are comprehensively ready to step into the
enterprising world, is fascinating.
SOP111r
‘The wheel turns and turns and turns: it never stops and stands still.’ These lines from Anita
Desai's novel <put name of novel> wonderfully conveys the ever-changing world and learning is
the only thing, which helps one to adapt to this perpetual change. I aspire to carve a niche for
myself in this Big World <What big world?? it is vague... put something concrete..you need to
talk about your dreams... >.
My strong technical and analytical skills are reflected by excellent academic records. I have a
keen interest in carnatic music which not only allow me to remain energetic and creative, but
provides an entirely different dimension to my personality.
I believe that to shape up my dream into reality <assuming you did mentioned about your dreams
in the first para> I require not only strong technical and analytical skill but also thorough
knowledge of business aspects.
I believe that a ‘pioneering institution’ like FMS is the perfect platform to puruse my business
learning process. With an amazing student-faculty ratio FMS will provide me not only with the
ambience and opportunity to prove myself but also the latitude to be creative. I aspire to nurture
my entrepreneurial spirits during the course of study. The way FMS links theory to practice,
ensuring that it's students are comprehensively prepared to step into the enterprising world, is
fascinating.
This is still far from complete... you need to put properly 'what are your goals' and to modify it as
per the content you want to include....This is just what I can come up with instantly....
SOP112 - FMS
Leadership qualities are very important for an individual to survive in this highly competitive
world. All that matters is how effective a leader proves himself in implementing his skills. One
needs to learn special skills to hone his leadership qualities. My career objective is to become an
inspirational leader backed by thorough knowledge of management skills in my field of interest.
At present I am pursuing Computer engineering degree from the Sardar Patel College of
Engineering, Mumbai. I have participated and won in a no. of extracurricular activities. I have
been an active member in organizing intra and inter college festivals for our college. My
leadership abilities came to the fore when I was appointed the Magazine Secretary of our college
for the academic year 2004-05. This has helped me to develop analytical, reasoning,
organizational and leadership skills.
As John F. Kennedy has said “Leadership and learning are indispensable to each other”
Good leaders develop through a never-ending process of self-study, education, training, and
experience.The quality of leadership, more than any other single factor, determines the success
or failure of an organization.
Your innovative techniques of dealing with real time problems will help me to gain confidence
and empower me as an individual. The strong Alumni strength along with the location of your
institute gives me a great chance of interacting with the corporate world.
I feel a management course at FMS would help me achieve my objectives. While a well-
qualified and experienced faculty, excellent infrastructure, and the brand value of FMS would be
invaluable, I also feel that I have the requisite ability to take optimum advantage offered by a
management course at FMS, and hence want to pursue the same at your esteemed institute.
SOP112r
Leadership qualities are very important for an individual to survive in this highly competitive
world.
Does it really make sense...if everyone needs leadership skills...who will be the followers......A
good follower usually succeeds more than a poor leader.....
All that matters is how effective a leader proves himself in implementing his skills. One needs to
learn special skills to hone his leadership qualities.
Absolutely avoidable statements... remove it asap.
My career objective is to become an inspirational leader backed by thorough knowledge of

management skills in my field of interest.
You field of interest...which is?? hawa mein batein... give details buddy...
At present I am pursuing Computer engineering degree from the Sardar Patel College of
Engineering, Mumbai.
What does this convey...nothing...isnt the form you are filling have the same information...so
why waste space??
I have participated and won in a no. of extracurricular activities. I have been an active member in
organizing intra and inter college festivals for our college.
No short forms please.... also the sentence structure is weired... and what do you mean by active
member... every member is an active memebr...right? details required to corroborate ...
My leadership abilities came to the fore when I was appointed the Magazine Secretary of our
college for the academic year 2004-05. This has helped me to develop analytical, reasoning,
organizational and leadership skills.
How? When you say "leadership skills came to the fore"... you need to give examples...of what
you did... its all looks like bluffing....
As John F. Kennedy has said “Leadership and learning are indispensable to each other”
Good leaders develop through a never-ending process of self-study, education, training, and
experience.The quality of leadership, more than any other single factor, determines the success
or failure of an organization.
Oh my god...tu tou leadershio ke piche haath dho ke pad gaya :mg: ... what these statements tell
about yourself, your goals, your plan to do mba, your choice of FMS.....I guess nothing....so its
useles... isnt it?
Your innovative techniques of dealing with real time problems will help me to gain confidence
and empower me as an individual.
Your?? Whose?? If you mean FMS faculty...then you should talk about FMS and not the
individual faculty... What kind of real time problems? How do you know?
The strong Alumni strength along with the location of your institute gives me a great chance of
interacting with the corporate world.
replace "your institute == FMS". "Alumni = alumni".
I feel a management course at FMS would help me achieve my objectives. While a well-
qualified and experienced faculty, excellent infrastructure, and the brand value of FMS would be
invaluable, I also feel that I have the requisite ability to take optimum advantage offered by a
management course at FMS, and hence want to pursue the same at your esteemed institute.
Does not make much sense...why you want to complicate things for FMS faculty. Why not keep
simple sentences...everyone likes to read simple sentences....
SOP112rr
My career objective is to be part of a reputed organization in a position where I can make

significance difference to it backed by a thorough knowledge of management skills.
I want to succeed in this highly competitive world and that’s why I think a management course
(irrespective of the field) at FMS would help me achieve my objectives.
Studying in a premier institute like FMS will help me improve my leadership skills and gain
thorough knowledge of the world of business. It will teach me how to act and think like a
business person. It will help me gain confidence and empower me as an individual.
FMS has a high profile faculty and excellent infrastructure. The strong alumni strength along
with the location of FMS will give me a great chance of interacting with the corporate world.
Pursuing a course at FMS will help me gain confidence to deal with any complex business
situations. The current trends in placements at FMS are very encouraging and will help me gain
the right start at the beginning of my career.
I believe FMS will help me gain the desired skills to become successful in this world and that’s
why I want to join it.
SOP112rrr
My career objective is to be part of a reputed organization in a position where I can make

significance difference to it backed by a thorough knowledge of management skills.
ah dude! have u really said anything here at all. this is as global as global can be :mg: if u are not
comfortable discussing career objectives then dont put in a line just for the sake of it being there
:)
I want to succeed in this highly competitive world and that’s why I think a management course
(irrespective of the field) at FMS would help me achieve my objectives.
why & how would a management course help?
Studying in a premier institute like FMS will help me improve my leadership skills and gain
thorough knowledge of the world of business. It will teach me how to act and think like a
business person. It will help me gain confidence and empower me as an individual.
instead of giving general gyaan, why not say something specific?
FMS has a high profile faculty and excellent infrastructure. The strong alumni strength along
with the location of FMS will give me a great chance of interacting with the corporate world.
this bit is ok..but then its one of the easier biits to be put in a sop. :mg:
Pursuing a course at FMS will help me gain confidence to deal with any complex business
situations. The current trends in placements at FMS are very encouraging and will help me gain
the right start at the beginning of my career.
already written this earlier. plus, no need to talk about placements. they might start asking you
questions on it.
I believe FMS will help me gain the desired skills to become successful in this world and that’s
why I want to join it.
same lines written all over again dont help ur SOP. read some of the earlier SOPs posted to get a
general feel of writing.
SOP113 - FMS
My goal is to a better businesswoman than even I can imagine - to be among the best in the
world of finance. Tough times don’t weaken me, they make me grin and spur me on. I’m the one
who keeps her head on when everyone around me is losing theirs. I am not the kind of person
who’d be comfortable taking orders from countless people forever. No, I want to be at the top,
and am ready to work for it.
So, what can FMS do for me? FMS can teach me what risks are worth taking and which ones are
not. It can teach me how to make sense of myriad accounts and complex terms, and then use
them to my advantage. Studying in a premier academy like FMS will definitely help hone my
leadership skills, and my understanding of the world of business and finance. It will give me a
rich source of wisdom and knowledge to draw upon: an opportunity to learn from the some of
the best. It will teach me how to talk, act, and THINK like a businessperson. Best of all, FMS
will give me a world-class community I will always belong to.
SOP113r
My goal is to a better businesswoman than even I can imagine - to be among the best in the
world of finance. Tough times don’t weaken me, they make me grin and spur me on. I’m the one
who keeps her head on when everyone around me is losing theirs. I am not the kind of person
who’d be comfortable taking orders from countless people forever. No, I want to be at the top,
and am ready to work for it.
Okay..you need to do some grammer check...(I am not doing it)...The first line sounded me bit
weired... how can *your goal* is something which you yourself can not imagine. [We are not
talking about dreams...but goals]... Need to little bit modify the structure of the sentence....
Otherwise a good and different approach....but not very clear why MBA? Do you think for
becoming a "better businesswoman" requires MBA? Just need to add something which tells that
why you are looking for MBA
So, what can FMS do for me? FMS can teach me what risks are worth taking and which ones are
not. It can teach me how to make sense of myriad accounts and complex terms, and then use
them to my advantage.
Okay it is usually good to be different/unique....but not weired... what kind of risks you are
talking about? or what accounts?? what complex terms? Needs something more concrete than a
stylistic writing...need content...
Studying in a premier academy like FMS will definitely help hone my leadership skills, and my
understanding of the world of business and finance. It will give me a rich source of wisdom and
knowledge to draw upon: an opportunity to learn from the some of the best. It will teach me how
to talk, act, and THINK like a businessperson. Best of all, FMS will give me a world-class
community I will always belong to.
Wonderful....bang on target about why FMS? [although a generic para which could be applied to
any b-school...but better than the usual run of the mill sentences of "esteemed faculty", "world-
class infras" blah blah.....]
BTW I like you appraoch of writing in a different style...dont change that....
SOP114 - FMS
B. Quilliam has said ‘There is a fine line between dreams and reality, it's up to you to draw it’. I
believe that if one has the desire to succeed, all dreams can be achieved and with this belief at the
back of my mind, I aspire to start a business of my own.
After completing my B.E from BIT, Ranchi, the knowledge that I have acquired and the
experience that I have gained during my tenure at TCS has given me an understanding of the
various factors involved in efficiently running a high profile project. The highly competitive
environment has also helped me hone my time-management skills and acquire a quality-oriented
mindset towards every work that I do. The three Customer Satisfaction Awards that I have
received in the last two years are a testimony to that. The skills that I have acquired so far,
coupled with a thorough understanding of the principles of management, can transform my
vision into reality. FMS, with its rich history, commitment to thought leadership, corporate
interaction through live projects, and a strong alumni network, in addition to an excellent faculty,
is an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream.
SOP114r
No change needed..send it....congrats !!
SOP115 - FMS
" Learning "is an on ongoing process, it has no destination but miles to achieve!
FMS is an abode where learning is accompanied by pragmatic approach -the keyword to
success.The HEADY BLEND of both will phoenix- ENTREPRENEUR.
As an entrepreneur, i'm expected to venture multifarious tasks in corporate world.
FMS would instill in me the following ingredients :-
1)TEAM LEADER- in lml ltd as an mt . or team -worker,i'm fine tuning my skills to be a TEAM
LEADER. BUT TO BE TEAM LEADER I OUGHT TO MOTIVATE MY COLLEAGUES
WHICH REQUIRES "RIGHT MINDSET" WHICH WILL BE FOSTERED BY FACULTY OF
FMS VIA "LEARNING BY DOING PROCESS" & CONGENIAL TEACHER:STUDENT
RATIO OF 1:3.
2)PERPICACIOUS-"SURVIVAL OF THE FITTEST" is the buzzword of corporate sectorwhich

i realised in lmlltd.being keen-minded at fms will facilitate mine applying the awesome case-
study approach to real business bottlenecks , emperically.hence i'll surmount corporate glitches.
3)GREGARIOUS-As a team in lml ltd, my output aggrndized tremendously.FMS ensures

interaction not only within the batch mates to motivate me to preform to my utmost potentialbut
with strong alumni-network as well. thus it becomes conducive for me to enhance social circle &
keep abreast with latest corporate knowhow.
4)AWESOME PLACEMENTS-MANAGER IS AN ASSET to an organization as he is loaded

with skillsets required to accomplish goals.& thus the price-tag is obvious & fms has since its
inception (1954)spearheaded in PLACEMENTS.
SOP115r
" Learning "is an on ongoing process, it has no destination but miles to achieve!
FMS is an abode where learning is accompanied by pragmatic approach -the keyword to
success.The HEADY BLEND of both will phoenix- ENTREPRENEUR.
Why the caps ? Why are you shouting ?
"Miles to achieve" ?? Sure this is the orginal quote ?
"by a pragmatic...."
Phoenix ?? Wasn't that an Egyptian bird that rose from its own ashes. What is it got to do with
your entrepreneurship ???
As an entrepreneur, i'm expected to venture multifarious tasks in corporate world.

FMS would instill in me the following ingredients :-
"venture multifarious tasks" ?? Does that mean "play various roles" in simple english ? :mg:
1)TEAM LEADER- in lml ltd as an mt . or team -worker,i'm fine tuning my skills to be a TEAM
LEADER. BUT TO BE TEAM LEADER I OUGHT TO MOTIVATE MY COLLEAGUES
WHICH REQUIRES "RIGHT MINDSET" WHICH WILL BE FOSTERED BY FACULTY OF
FMS VIA "LEARNING BY DOING PROCESS" & CONGENIAL TEACHER:STUDENT
RATIO OF 1:3.
What is this thing with caps ? :crazy:
What is "lml ltd as an mt . or team -worker" ??
BTW knock off i'm and say "I am...."
"Learning by doing process" ??? Duh ?
2)PERPICACIOUS-"SURVIVAL OF THE FITTEST" is the buzzword of corporate sectorwhich

i realised in lmlltd.being keen-minded at fms will facilitate mine applying the awesome case-
study approach to real business bottlenecks , emperically.hence i'll surmount corporate glitches.
Did you even do a simple grammar check ? It is horrendously written ? You have not even taken
care to remove the space between sector and which in the first line.
3)GREGARIOUS-As a team in lml ltd, my output aggrndized tremendously.FMS ensures

interaction not only within the batch mates to motivate me to preform to my utmost potentialbut
with strong alumni-network as well. thus it becomes conducive for me to enhance social circle &
keep abreast with latest corporate knowhow.
aggrndized ? preform ? potentialbut ?
Whats going on here ?
4)AWESOME PLACEMENTS-MANAGER IS AN ASSET to an organization as he is loaded

with skillsets required to accomplish goals.& thus the price-tag is obvious & fms has since its
inception (1954)spearheaded in PLACEMENTS.
pricetag ? You want to tell that to an MBA college ? That they have a pricetag on the managers ?
Plus you want to tell them that a "manager is an asset.......loaded with skillsets......."
SOP115rr
"Learning"is an ongoing process, it has no destination but miles to achieve!I visualise myself as
a successful manager-5 years down the line .As a "manager", I have to be abreast with various
business processes, value-addition techniques and their corresponding applications as well.I seek
to persue this as a dream.
Technical experience as a Graduate-trainee in LML Ltd. has rendered me a strong grounding in

technical nuances of rapidly growing automobile industry. I have gained an excellent insight into
the concept of "GLOCALIZATION" and into the working-conditions of manufacturing
sector.Besides, I have further honed my inter-personnel skills,team-playing and working-under-
stress capabilities.By working with EKTAPATH- an ngo dedicated to promote sanitation and
social equality-I have furthered my social responsibility .
FMS is the appropriate LAUNCH-PAD for my dreams to materialise.Its relatively smaller batch-
size and a very flexible curriculum ,fascinates me .The committed faculty at FMS has always
shouldered the responsibility to instill "RIGHT MINDSET"- an indispensable asset to a manager
. The case-study approach accompanied by unique "learning by doing process" focuses at
understanding of subtle-nuances of corporate sector. Its "Strong ALUMNI ASSOCIATION" and
interaction with various departments in DU is bound to offer a broader perspective of
management education.
SOP115rrr
"Learning"is an ongoing process, it has no destination but miles to achieve!I visualise myself as
a successful manager-5 years down the line .As a "manager", I have to be abreast with various
business processes, value-addition techniques and their corresponding applications as well. I
seek to persue this as a dream.
1. why do people have these sudden technicolor dreams ? business processes, value-adds,
applications.. :huh: i am sure these are just the buzzwords which are popular nowadays. with
rime, they might even grow obsolete. the point is, that thse are just the tools that you use. to take
an example, you would like to be an uber-gamer rather than dream about the kind of machine
that you will buy. similarly, these are just the processes. what really drives you here ?
Technical experience as a Graduate-trainee in LML Ltd. has rendered me a strong grounding in

technical nuances of rapidly growing automobile industry. I have gained an excellent insight into
the concept of "GLOCALIZATION" and into the working-conditions of manufacturing
sector.Besides, I have further honed my inter-personnel skills,team-playing and working-under-
stress capabilities.By working with EKTAPATH- an ngo dedicated to promote sanitation and
social equality-I have furthered my social responsibility .
ok. pretty good intro about yourself. covering most of the points anyway. however, you could
quantify the amount of time you've worked for in LML. instead of just saying "insights", you
could just point out some lacunae. anyway..just suggestions :)
FMS is the appropriate LAUNCH-PAD for my dreams to materialise.Its relatively smaller batch-
size and a very flexible curriculum ,fascinates me .The committed faculty at FMS has always
shouldered the responsibility to instill "RIGHT MINDSET"- an indispensable asset to a manager
. The case-study approach accompanied by unique "learning by doing process" focuses at
understanding of subtle-nuances of corporate sector. Its "Strong ALUMNI ASSOCIATION" and
interaction with various departments in DU is bound to offer a broader perspective of
management education. ...
frankly, too much space is being allocated to describe the institute. instead of telling the adcom
what the B-school offers you, better tell them what you want from the b-school. info about the
insti is already there in the brochure, right? so, just pick the parts that you think are important
and present them as your convictions/desires/needs
SOP116 - FMS
Being an engineer, the cultic figure of my boyhood dreams, is a decision of my heart, which my
mind readily followed considering the good career prospect.
Presently I manage the maintenance activity in a critical machine line at Tata Motors. With time
I realised here that the maintenance job is confined into a very small domain of overall plant
activity. My interest now spreads out to the science behind running a plant, the nitty-gritty of
operations - the wider horizon of understanding the business, which moves the plant. Two years
in a management institute would help me develop this awareness.
Understanding business calls for expertise in finance besides operations. In schooldays I
marvelled both in science and accountancy. My boyhood dream dragged me into the world of
engineering. An MBA study would allow me to understand the finance problems, which I was
once fond of doing.
My goal in life is to manage an entire plant successfully on my own. Using cutting-edge
technology, building people, understanding the market force - I want to lead this business
process.
FMS with its unique advantage of prime location, affordable course fee, favourable teacher
student ratio, high student empowerment and 50 years old alumni network emerges as my dream
management institute which would catapult me in the right direction to fulfil my aim.
SOP117 - FMS
“Great dreamers’ dreams are never fulfilled: they are always transcended “.Being an
aeronautical engineer, my dream, my vision, had always been to establish an aeronautical
industry in our country and to use my knowledge for the betterment of the society and the
country. This vision calls for the best of the management and decision making skills that can be
demanded .A masters in business administration is the first step that will supplement my efforts
in attaining this goal.
Presently pursuing my final year in aeronautical engineering from the Madras Institute of
Technology, Anna University, I have exhibited my organizational skills at various levels, apart
from a very good academic track record. My appointment as the Students Secretary of the
Computer Society of our college only reiterates this. A strong foundation in my chosen field,
with a never dying passion for the flying machines, is what drives me constantly towards my
goal.
FMS, with its time perfected course, an excellent corporate interface, top of the class faculty, and
an eclectic mixture of students, is the right choice to pursue my MBA,as this ensures that when I
take the first step towards my dream , I put my best foot forward.
SOP117r
“Great dreamers’ dreams are never fulfilled: they are always transcended “.Being an aeronautical
engineer, my dream, my vision, had always been to establish an aeronautical industry in our
country and to use my knowledge for the betterment of the society and the country. This vision
calls for the best of the management and decision making skills that can be demanded .A masters
in business administration is the first step that will supplement my efforts in attaining this goal.
1. this is not a speech..remove either dream or vision
2. what does "an aeronautical industry" mean? try to be as specific as possible in areas where u
can give specific answers.
3. logically complete ur analogy of the first para..how would u transcend ur dream?
Presently pursuing my final year in aeronautical engineering from the Madras Institute of
Technology, Anna University, I have exhibited my organizational skills at various levels, apart
from a very good academic track record. My appointment as the Students Secretary of the
Computer Society of our college only reiterates this. A strong foundation in my chosen field,
with a never dying passion for the flying machines, is what drives me constantly towards my
goal.
1. u talked about a very-very tech-oriented field (aero) in the first para. so when u are introducing
yourself..try justifying ur interest or showcasing ur tech calibre.
2. just say that you have enjoyed responsible positions in college.
3. thats something that even pilots would say...so u want to be a pilot ??
FMS, with its time perfected course, an excellent corporate interface, top of the class faculty, and
an eclectic mixture of students, is the right choice to pursue my MBA,as this ensures that when I
take the first step towards my dream , I put my best foot forward.
1. insufficient generics here. this para can be written to describe any college.
SOP118 - FMS
"Advertisements..be it print or TV commercials, they have always caught my fancy.It not only
fascinates me but also propels me to work towards a high-flying career in the field
of advertising and marketing. Having completed my graduation in economics from delhi
university, one of the most revered institutions in India, it endowed me with a good foundation
as well as developed my interest in the field of consumer market and behaviour.
Apart from regular courses, owing to my personal interests, I chose to study something out of
the realm of my academic curriculum like web designing,so that i could get to learn the nuances
of managing a website. But marketing will always remain close to my heart and I wish to
embark upon a fulfilling career in this field. For this, I need to back my graduate degree with a
MBA programme from a top-class college so that I can enter the corporate world fully
equipped with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex
business environment with confidence. FMS, with its eminent faculty and diverse real life
projects has been my first choice. I am sure with FMS, I can actualize my dreams in my
chosen area. "
SOP118r
"Advertisements..be it print or TV commercials, they have always caught my fancy.It not only
fascinates me but also propels me to work towards a high-flying career in the field of advertising
and marketing.
fair enough opening. :) but advertising is not marketing, it represents a small portion of
marketing..so if u want a marketing major, rather than an advertising one, you better make a
better choice of words :mg:
Having completed my graduation in economics from delhi university, one of the most revered
institutions in India, it endowed me with a good foundation as well as developed my interest in
the field of consumer market and behaviour. Apart from regular courses, owing to my personal
interests, I chose to study something out of the realm of my academic curriculum like web
designing,so that i could get to learn the nuances of managing a website. But marketing will
always remain close to my heart and I wish to embark upon a fulfilling career in this field. For
this, I need to back my graduate degree with a MBA programme from a top-class college so that
I can enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid
me in facing the complex business environment with confidence.
hey pretty good. must say that this SOP dont need no editing :mg:
FMS, with its eminent faculty and diverse real life projects has been my first choice. I am sure
with FMS, I can actualize my dreams in my chosen area.
the SOP is as good as ready..you could send it right away.
SOP119 - FMS
"I am an engineer/food technologist working with coca cola inc.the one year training program at
the company provided insight into the manufacturing and also into cross functions vi z.
Sales,finance, HR,Logistics,Information Syatems.Having undertaken various improvement
projects helped in gaining extensive technical knowledge.I want to incorporate the same with
managerial skills and contribute better to the industry as my full potential would be realised.
In order to achieve the above i want to take up a management course with a focus on(now i am
hell confused as to go for operations or finance) and work in the food/allied sector.
FMS with its unique profile centric program,world class infrastructure,extensive industrial
interface and wide alumni network wil help me achieve my goal.
SOP119r
"I am an engineer/food technologist working with coca cola inc.the one year training program at
the company provided insight into the manufacturing and also into cross functions vi z.
Sales,finance, HR,Logistics,Information Syatems.Having undertaken various improvement
projects helped in gaining extensive technical knowledge.
1. be specific about ur cross-functional exposure
2. were there any learnings fom your projects..if there were, what were those ?? write them here.
I want to incorporate the same with managerial skills and contribute better to the industry as my
full potential would be realised.
In order to achieve the above i want to take up a management course with a focus on(now i am
hell confused as to go for operations or finance) and work in the food/allied sector.
1. u are one confused dude (assuming u are a dude :mg: ) finance in food sector ?? whats the
reasoning behind it. and what is operations in food sector? is it raw food or finished & packaged
good? write something dude
FMS with its unique profile centric program,world class infrastructure,extensive industrial
interface and wide alumni network wil help me achieve my goal.
1. which profile centric program ??
2. generic lines which can suit any college.
SOP120 - FMS
"I hail from a medical family. From early in life, my parents have inculcated in me values of
sincerity, perseverance, and social responsibility. But most importantly being independent
professionals themselves, they have always inspired me to strive for excellence.
During my undergraduate studies at Delhi College of Engineering, I have excelled at academics
and balanced that with a plethora of extra curricular activities. Organizing technical festivals,
student industry meets, entrepreneurial development programs have helped me refine my
leadership & interpersonal skills, and develop as a team player. Most importantly, they have
helped me develop into a confident person and define my long term goals. My ambition is to
start a retail venture and build it into a global business enterprise. My desire to make it big
generates a great deal of energy, enthusiasm and a keen willingness to learn. I was one of the 40
students from Asia who were selected for the Asia Pacific Student Entrepreneurship Society
(ASES) Summit at Stanford University, in April 2005. I am also actively involved in the
establishment of the ASES chapter in my college.
MBA from FMS will help me greatly to crystallize my ambitions into tangible goals. With its
expert faculty, and a vast network distinguished alumni, FMS provides a consummate learning
environment none other. Studying amongst the best students in the country will provide me with
the most appropriate platform to develop my core competencies and will empower me to realize
my full potential. I believe success at any task is a direct function of the aspirations, proper
guidance, and the endeavors put in to see our goals come to fruition and an MBA from this
institution will be the brightest guiding light for my dreams."
SOP120r
I hail from a medical family. From early in life, my parents have inculcated in me values of
sincerity, perseverance, and social responsibility. But most importantly being independent
professionals themselves, they have always inspired me to strive for excellence.
1. pretty good opening :) you talk about values, upbringing and the works.
During my undergraduate studies at Delhi College of Engineering, I have excelled at academics

and balanced that with a plethora of extra curricular activities. Organizing technical festivals,
student industry meets, entrepreneurial development programs have helped me refine my
leadership & interpersonal skills, and develop as a team player. Most importantly, they have
helped me develop into a confident person and define my long term goals.
1. too verbose. use discernible acronyms like DCE. plus, why qualify the extra-currics with
"balanced that with a plethora of extra curricular activities". you have already written about them
in the next few lines.
2. not sure, but a long term goal making strategy doesnt always work. i dont know the amount of
conviction that you have for this project of yours, but it can be a serious drawback in interviews.
My ambition is to start a retail venture and build it into a global business enterprise. My desire to
make it big generates a great deal of energy, enthusiasm and a keen willingness to learn. I was
one of the 40 students from Asia who were selected for the Asia Pacific Student
Entrepreneurship Society (ASES) Summit at Stanford University, in April 2005. I am also
actively involved in the establishment of the ASES chapter in my college.
1. you could start ur SOP with this as the first line and then continue with the rest of the SOP. if
u are so focussed on something, why hold it back till the end of the SOP. probably, the framing
could be different like " to build a global retail venture is a goal that i intend to achieve".
2. you talk about ASES for about 4 lines. do u realize that you havent said anything about what
ASES does? i mean, i might be an ignoramus here, but thats likely about the adcoms as well. tell
us what u achieved rather than what you did/were selected for.
MBA from FMS will help me greatly to crystallize my ambitions into tangible goals.
1. totally totally wrong statement to make. no insti will ever crystallize ur ambition. it means that
the ambition is nebulous at present. going with a sop like yours, which sounds extremely
focussed, this is quite a letdown. thats why i put it in a separate line. FMS/ any other b-school
will only provide you with the tools that you feel are necessary for success. basically, you want
to go into an endeavor and what to give it your best shot. frame it that way.
With its expert faculty, and a vast network distinguished alumni, FMS provides a consummate
learning environment none other. Studying amongst the best students in the country will provide
me with the most appropriate platform to develop my core competencies and will empower me
to realize my full potential. I believe success at any task is a direct function of the aspirations,
proper guidance, and the endeavors put in to see our goals come to fruition and an MBA from
this institution will be the brightest guiding light for my dreams."
1. the reaction that i get after reading this para gives me the impression of flowery language and
no substance. coming from a series of quite focussed sentences that you ave written ealier, this
seems like an eyesore. AFAIK, this is no better than any other bit written about FMS. if you have
the time, read some of the earlier comments specifically on this part of the SOP.
overall..quite ok..but marred by the language at the end
SOP121 - FMS
The foundation for a management career was laid early in my life. Staying away from home
since the past five years has made me independent and enabled me to take crucial decisions of
my life on my own.
Interacting with people from various parts of the globe having diverse backgrounds, at my
college (NIT Calicut) and later at TCS, has equipped me with interpersonal skills essential for
good team work.
My roles as the Placement representative and an executive member of Students Parliament have
imbibed in me many values and lessons. Organizing various events in college gave me an early
insight into the intricacies of management.
The lessons I learnt in this period, are being put to test at TCS Ltd., where I lead of team of
developers who support mission critical applications for General Electric.
I feel this is the right time for the transition from a technical expert to a business leader.
To achieve this objective, I need to equip myself with theoretical and practical skills which will
prepare me to face any challenge with confidence. FMS, with its rigorous MBA program, highly
acclaimed curriculum, excellent faculty and fellow students, can certainly arm me with the
necessary management skills and practical business knowledge. FMS can provide me the right
platform for this major step-up in my career.
SOP121r
The foundation for a management career was laid early in my life. Staying away from home
since the past five years has made me independent and enabled me to take crucial decisions of
my life on my own.
1. come to think of it..around half of the graduates in this country can say this :) howwever, if u
took some really crucial/independent decisions write them here...like When my father told me to
join a medical college, i said that i would rather have a fulfilling life in management than in
medication :mg: :mg:
Interacting with people from various parts of the globe having diverse backgrounds, at my
college (NIT Calicut) and later at TCS, has equipped me with interpersonal skills essential for
good team work.
1. too generic lines. nothing wrong, but nothing special either :wink:
My roles as the Placement representative and an executive member of Students Parliament have
imbibed in me many values and lessons. Organizing various events in college gave me an early
insight into the intricacies of management.
1. why write down such formal sounding designations when they do nothing but eat space.
The lessons I learnt in this period, are being put to test at TCS Ltd., where I lead of team of
developers who support mission critical applications for General Electric.
1. which lessons..specify
2. which applications..mission critical i.e.
I feel this is the right time for the transition from a technical expert to a business leader.
1. loaded..loaed staement to make. use this only if u are totally sure about ur tech knowledge.
To achieve this objective, I need to equip myself with theoretical and practical skills which will
prepare me to face any challenge with confidence. FMS, with its rigorous MBA program, highly
acclaimed curriculum, excellent faculty and fellow students, can certainly arm me with the
necessary management skills and practical business knowledge. FMS can provide me the right
platform for this major step-up in my career.
1. i'll CCP some of my earlier comments for this one as well : frankly, too much space is being
allocated to describe the institute. instead of telling the adcom what the B-school offers you,
better tell them what you want from the b-school. info about the insti is already there in the
brochure, right? so, just pick the parts that you think are important and present them as your
convictions/desires/needs
SOP122 - FMS
A goal becomes reality only when you strive for it and I feel that FMS provides me with the right
impetus to accomplish this. My long-term career goal is to be an innovative leader running a big
corporate house. Since my childhood the works of many great leaders like Mahatma Gandhi,
Sam Pitroda and Narayanamurthy to name a few has inspired me and I have always envisioned
to be one in the future. In this pursuit I feel that an excellent managerial program like the one in
FMS is essential to hone my leadership and managerial abilities.
I will be graduating with a Bachelor’s degree in Electronics and Communication and my astute
thinking and strong analytical skills have helped me to be among the top 10 percent in my
department. Over and above my academic performance I have also actively participated in many
quizzes and other cultural events. Sport is another field where I have performed well and have
even captained my department football and school volleyball teams. I got the opportunity to
shoulder responsibilities as a leader in organizing the events in the inter college national level
symposium held at my college. Also being the department’s placement coordinator provided me
with ample opportunities to organize the recruitment process in the college with an achievement
of 80 percent placements for my department.
In my quest to achieve my goal I am drawn towards FMS because of its unique concept of
encouraging its students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership. Also with its
flexible curriculum, highly acclaimed faculty and a vast alumni network it will be the most
befitting business school for me to shape my future in the right way.
SOP123 - FMS
My ultimate career goal is to be a successful entrepreneur and business leader of tomorrow’s

world. It is this dream of heading a corporate organization which made me take up commerce as
my subject. Now when I have the base I need to broaden my horizon by acquiring an mba
degree.
FMS will be my canopy till I m growned in the latest technicalities of management skill. Under
the guidance of skilled and updated experts of this field of knowledge that FMS will provide I
will excel in the answering, ethics, integrity, and strength to face the competitive world.
FMS one of the India’s premier b –school will help me to acquire exceptional business acumen
and skills in order to gain a competitive advantage in the business arena. At FMS I will b able to
equip myself with modern management theories which will enable me to know what’s, when’s,
and why’s of management.
FMS is no doubt one such fountain head which will help me to grow and achieve my dreams.
SOP124 - FMS
Edward Young once said, “Too low they build who build beneath the stars.”
I have got my goals set beyond the stars. My Degree in Engineering from Netaji Subhas Institute
of technology, one of the pioneer institutes in India, was the first step towards achieving my
vision of becoming an entrepreneur to reckon with in the Software Development industry.
While doing my Engineering, I was always fascinated by the software world. Working in Xansa
(I) Ltd. has helped me in gaining an insight into the functioning of the software industry. It has
also helped me to develop into a good communicator as well as a team player.
business acumen. Studying with a small batch and with a unique pedagogical approach of FMS
of providing a right blend of fieldwork and case studies will facilitate free flow of information
and ideas among some of the best minds. It will also inculcate in me the right kind of
competition that will motivate me to perform to my utmost potential.
I believe that in FMS, I will learn ways of managing in today’s radically unpredictable business
environment and the ways to innovate, communicate and respond in real time and to move ahead
with control, confidence and agility.
SOP124r
Edward Young once said, “Too low they build who build beneath the stars.”
“Too low they build who build beneath the stars.” - Edward Young
I have got my goals set beyond the stars.

Are yaar.. hawa mein baatein kyo? This is the reason you not able to reduce the SOP to
appropriate lenght... and this sentence serves nothing....
My Degree in Engineering from Netaji Subhas Institute of technology, one of the pioneer
institutes in India, was the first step towards achieving my vision of becoming an entrepreneur to
reckon with in the Software Development industry.
Wow...what a complex way of saying something very simple...
I believe that my engineering degree from Netaji Subhas Institute of Technology, is the first step
towards becoming an entrepreneur in the software industry.
Dont make things complex...noone likes to read complex sentences/strucutre....
While doing my Engineering, I was always fascinated by the software world.

useless sentence....tells me nothing...
Working in Xansa (I) Ltd. has helped me in gaining an insight into the functioning of the
software industry.
Okay...
It has also helped me to develop into a good communicator as well as a team player.
How? Why? Give details...did you worked with clients...did you worked in a team of 100
ppl....how can I (FMS faculty) believe that you really have developed these skills.....
business acumen. Studying with a small batch and with a unique pedagogical approach of FMS
of providing the right blend of fieldwork and case studies will facilitate free flow of information
and ideas among some of the best minds.
Sentence ko complex kar diya...make it simple...break it in two sentences...
It will also inculcate in me the right kind of competition that will motivate me to perform to my
utmost potential.
A bland statement...but thik hai...
I believe that in FMS, I will learn ways of managing in today’s radically unpredictable business
environment and the ways to innovate, communicate and respond in real time and to move ahead
with control, confidence and agility.
An extremely bad sentence structure... reread it and you will realise .... I again say...dont try to
write long sentences...its easier on eyes and brain to read small, to the point and crisp
sentences....why make things complex?
SOP125 - FMS
Being the one with an analytical bent of mind, I was always inclined towards the sciences for
they provided the answers to almost every question that cropped in my mind. This
inquisitiveness routed me towards an engineering degree from the Delhi College of Engineering,
where I learnt the nuances of team work, coordination and the importance of effective
communication. Evidently, being the President of the college Dramatics society, I was blessed
with some of the required skills in the real-world, namely social and presentation skills. After
representing India for the first time in an international car design and racing competition, Mini
Baja, held in South Africa, I joined HCL Technologies for a first hand insight in the workings of
an Indian MNC. There and then, working in teams, I witnessed the amalgamation of the
technical know-how with the team-work and the decision-making process. I realized I wanted to
be a part of the decision making, whereby, I could influence the lives of many a people and work
towards the betterment of the industry, and hence, the country as a whole.
As, “With great decisions, come great responsibilities”, and more importantly, come great risks, I
want to be fully equipped with all the tools and resources I might require for attaining my goal.
FMS, with its academic excellence, innovative pedagogy of learning and unique relationship
with India’s finest university, presents the right platform for me to realize my potential and
showcase my talents. I share the vision with FMS to make Indian schools world class which is
possible if we provide the opportunities to the deserved.
SOP126 - FMS
Right from childhood, the passion to work in a team and to lead it has always been present
within me. From organising fun-fairs and annual days to at school to being part of teams of
various sport events at inter as well as intra college levels, the ability to get accustomed to their
various demands along with different people has been easy for me. The passion to achieve
individually has always been there but to guide a group of people and to succeed is something of
a challenge which I would love to do. During my graduation in electrical engineering from
Gujarat University, I learnt from friends and peers alike, of how things were being mismanaged
at various levels of an organisation. There is a need to inculcate the qualities of a successful
manager and to teach the technicalities and skills required to achieve what is being lacked today
in various organisations – good managers. (Being in groups and relating to people has never been
a problem for me right from childhood). FMS through its programmes being taught by very
eminent faculty along with its alumni association and infrastructure will certainly help me
achieve my dream of becoming a good manager and heading a very successful team.
SOP126r
Right from childhood, the passion to work in a team and to lead it has always been present
within me.
Okay...but can you be more specific...which kind of team? which industry? which domain? This
becomes too generic statement....
From organising fun-fairs and annual days to at school to being part of teams of various sport
events at inter as well as intra college levels, the ability to get accustomed to their various
demands along with different people has been easy for me.
Okay you wanted to talk about some of your qualities which you gained from particicapting in
these events...right? But why you are being vague... "accustomed to their various
demands"..."their" ?? whose? what kind of demands? What do you mean by "along with different
people"... It is not clear as to what kind of qualities you want to talk here...be crystal clear... use
short sentences....whenever a sentence spans more than three lines...cut it down....makes easy on
reader....
The passion to achieve individually has always been there but to guide a group of people and to
succeed is something of a challenge which I would love to do.
Dont you think you are being repetative....this has been stated as your primary goal....isnt it? why
you are wasting space here then?
During my graduation in electrical engineering from Gujarat University, I learnt from friends and
peers alike, of how things were being mismanaged at various levels of an organisation.
Now this sentence has no place here.... what do you mean by "learnt from friends and peers"...
what was your experience...that is more relevant...an experience is always subjective...also how
can you learn about any organizational mismanagement during your gradutaion? What
responsibilities you held to know about this? Were you involved in college administration? Then
simply being a studnet wont give you an overall picture....also dont write something which you
would regret during your PI :mg:
There is a need to inculcate the qualities of a successful manager and to teach the technicalities
and skills required to achieve what is being lacked today in various organisations – good
managers.
Wow...you talk like you have worked all your life in various organizations and realise the things
which are lacking....What are the experiences which made you realise that there are very few
good managers....you just putting impersonal statements.... SOP is about you...your experiences,
what you learn, whats your goal, how you wnat to achive it...its all about YOU....
FMS through its programmes being taught by very eminent faculty along with its alumni
association and infrastructure will certainly help me achieve my dream of becoming a good
manager and heading a very successful team.
Bad sentence structure...correct the grammer....
BTW where is the logic which tells why you want to do MBA? Do you think MBA is essential
to become a good manager?
SOP127 - FMS
I strongly believe that Education inherently implies cultivating one’s strengths, learning self-
discipline, listening, and desiring to learn. At this point of time, I can confidently say that I have
learnt to learn. In fact I feel that learning a Degree is more important than Earning a Degree.
Apart from being a meritorious student throughout my educational career, I have also been a
leader. Being School Captain for two successive years and then an active member of the
Organizing Committee of a National Symposium gave me opportunity to interact with different
kinds of people. These activities have helped me refine my leadership & interpersonal skills, and
develop as a team player.
I am driven by the need to make a mark in the corporate world and to lead an organization
successfully is my dream. Studying in a premier academy like FMS will help hone my leadership
skills, and my understanding of the world of business and finance. FMS provides a challenging
environment, giving students freedom to display their skills and develop their innovative
minds.FMS, with its rich history, commitment to thought leadership, corporate interaction
through live projects, is an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream.I hope
my credentials are considered worthy of admission.
SOP127r
I strongly believe that Education inherently implies cultivating one’s strengths, learning self-
discipline, listening, and desiring to learn. At this point of time, I can confidently say that I have
learnt to learn. In fact I feel that learning a Degree is more important than Earning a Degree.
Not clear why you wasting so much space... what you want to tell here are purely impersonal
useless sentences in an SOP....talk about YOU buddy....
Apart from being a meritorious student throughout my educational career, I have also been a
leader. Being School Captain for two successive years and then an active member of the
Organizing Committee of a National Symposium gave me opportunity to interact with different
kinds of people. These activities have helped me refine my leadership & interpersonal skills, and
develop as a team player.
Okay...correct some minor setence structure errors
I am driven by the need to make a mark in the corporate world and to lead an organization
successfully is my dream. Studying in a premier academy like FMS will help hone my leadership
skills, and my understanding of the world of business and finance. FMS provides a challenging
environment, giving students freedom to display their skills and develop their innovative
minds.FMS, with its rich history, commitment to thought leadership, corporate interaction
through live projects, is an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream.I hope
my credentials are considered worthy of admission.
Remove last line....it is up to them to decide your credentials.... otherwise an okay SOP... but
frankly...no punch at all...just another run-of-the-mill SOP.....
SOP128 - FMS
An idea has the potential to change the life of millions.

It has been an ardent desire of mine to be involved in the decision making and planning
processes of an organization involved in delivering path-breaking technologies. This interest of
mine led to my graduation in electrical engineering. However, during my study, I realised that
many existing beneficial technologies have still not reached the masses because engineers, not
managers, are managing the companies. Apart from the technical knowledge, what is required is
to have a good managerial aptitude and shrewd business acumen.
This is where, FMS as an institution comes in. The knowledge gained at FMS, besides helping
develop my managerial skills, will help me in fostering my overall personal as well as
professional growth. I wish to benefit from scholarly peers and knowledgeable teachers. The
vibrant and active alumni network will provide me with deep insights on the paths they have
treaded. In addition, the excellent infrastructure, vibrant student activities and the
locational advantage makes me even more interested in joining FMS.After my two-year stint at
FMS I shall have the right knowledge, which will help me realize my dreams.
SOP128r
An idea has the potential to change the life of millions. It has been my ardent desire to be
involved in the decision making and planning processes of an organization delivering path-
breaking technologies. This interest led me to pursue my graduation in electrical engineering.
However, during my undergraduate studies, I realised that many existing beneficial technologies
have still not reached the masses because engineers, not managers, are managing the companies.
Apart from the technical knowledge, a good managerial aptitude and shrewd business acumen is
essential to successfully implement technology.
Hence an MBA from FMS comes as a natural choice to me. The knowledge gained at FMS,
besides developing my managerial skills, will help me in fostering my overall personal as well as
professional growth. I wish to benefit from scholarly peers and knowledgeable teachers. The
vibrant and active alumni network will provide me with deep insights on the paths they have
treaded. In addition, the excellent infrastructure, vibrant student activities and the locational
advantage makes me even more interested in joining FMS.After my two-year stint at FMS I shall
have the right knowledge, which will help me realize my dreams.
Good one indeed.... Go ahead...send it....Best Luck.
SOP129 - FMS
"we are what we repeatedly do.Excellence,then,is not an act,but a habit." - Aristotle
That is why I want to pursue an M.B.A degree from FMS.They have been at the pinnacle of
business education for about half a centuary now,and given the ever changing bussiness and
management scene,it is not an easy task.I am sure that FMS will enhance my leadership,decision
making and managerial skills.All of this coupled with the excellent analytical skills I cultivated
during my engineering will ensure that I stay ahead of the pack in the corporate jungle.
Engineering taught me the nuances of the electronic world,but management is whole new ball
game,as I learnt while organising my departments national level symposium commet'04 and
commet'05.The experience lit a flame in me,and thats when I decided to do an M.B.A.With an
M.B.A I get the best of both the worlds and with that the power to change the entire world.This
will ultimately help in fulfilling my long time dream,to start a company utilising cutting edge
technology,use it to make the world a better place to live in and leave an indelible mark in the
sands of time.
SOP129r
"we are what we repeatedly do.Excellence,then,is not an act,but a habit." - Aristotle

That is why I want to pursue an M.B.A degree from FMS.
No clear...what reason?
They have been at the pinnacle of business education for about half a century now,and given the
ever changing bussiness and management education scene,it is not an easy task.
About whom you are talking? Atleast write something which makes sense.... Do you imply
FMS? are baba....SOP is about YOU and not FMS....the faculty know much more about FMS
than you.... talk about yourself...
I am sure that FMS will enhance my leadership,decision making and managerial skills.All of this
coupled with the excellent analytical skills I cultivated during my engineering will ensure that I
stay ahead of the pack in the corporate jungle.
What the heck "stay ahead of the pack"... you writing some novel or what? no coherence with
what you wrote earlier...stay ahead in what sense?
Engineering taught me the nuances of the electronic world,but management is a whole new ball
game, as I learnt while organising my departments national level symposium commet'04 and
commet'05.
The choice of words is not very good..."whole new ball game" etc is a colloquial term... not
usually used in business writing....
The experience lit a flame in me,and thats when I decided to do an M.B.A.

Okay.... so you dont have any clear reason for doing MBA...what do you mean by "lit a flame"...
With an M.B.A I get the best of both the worlds and with that the power to change the entire
world.
Doesnt make sense...disconnected...which two worlds you talking about...it seems you copied
various sentences from various SOPs posted here... is that true?
This will ultimately help in fulfilling my long time dream,to start a company utilising cutting
edge technology,use it to make the world a better place to live in and leave an indelible mark in
the sands of time.
Oh...finally something about you...your dream...phew!! ....
SOP130 - FMS
My experiences have taught me that life is to dwelt with at different levels at different times.To
me each and every moment is worth nurturing.
My graduation degree(which is literature)will help me in not losing the perspective of
life.Having an ingenuous mind,a business school's rigorous handlings will provide the apt
environment to broaden my vision to a more pragmatic one.Therefore,an MBA will not only help
me in realizing the different sets of hurdles at an early age but also make a stronger and better
person out of me.It will be a rehersal of what there is to come.
FMS is the best choice to actualise my dreams because of the enriching environment provided by
a helpful alumni(this doesnt sound perfect to me,all other things sounded really cliche').With
FMS,it will be a healthy growing experience of my life.
SOP130r
My experiences have taught me that life is to dwelt with at different levels at different times.To
me each and every moment is worth nurturing.
Could not understand the idea of including the above sentences.... I feel these are not needed...
My graduation degree(which is literature)will help me in not losing the perspective of life.

How? Why? Relevance? BTW You can rather write "My gradutaion degree in literature" ...
Having an ingenuous mind,a business school's rigorous handlings will provide the apt
environment to broaden my vision to a more pragmatic one.
What do you mean by pragmatic? In what sense pragmatic? This sentence tells me nothing about
YOU ....Give examples to tell that you have ingenuous mind.... :mg: .. BTW are you sure
"ingenuous" is the word you were looking for?? :mg:
Therefore,an MBA will not only help me in realizing the different sets of hurdles at an early age
but also make a stronger and better person out of me.It will be a rehersal of what there is to
come.
My god!!! Is this the reason you want to do MBA? I am truly amazed !! Dont you realise that
MBA is not a panacea to all your problems...
FMS is the best choice to actualise my dreams because of the enriching environment provided by
a helpful alumni(this doesnt sound perfect to me,all other things sounded really cliche').With
FMS,it will be a healthy growing experience of my life.
Dreams?? Which dreams? Did you talked about your dreams somewhere ?? enriching
environemnet by alumni?? wow... alumni dont reside in the campus... so what kind of enriching
experience....the majority of exp you can gain from your peer groups and not alumni...
"Healthy growing experience of life "?? :wow:
I suggest you to rewrite your entire SOP.....
SOP131 - FMS
In this era of rapid globalization, we can feel corporate management permeating into almost all
facets of life. Any process in life must involve a certain degree of management in order to ensure
a profitable success. I was and still am inspired by the lives of great entrepreneurs like Bill Gates
and Steve Jobs who have shown exceptional skill in the area of management. As my
undergraduate degree in engineering draws to a close, I am won over by the idea of pursuing an
MBA degree to hone my managerial skills.
I feel that my engineering background has helped me to develop a keenly adaptive and analytical
approach to problem solving. I envision myself working in the forefront of a large corporation
where my skills would be properly utilized. I am particularly interested in marketing as I feel it
offers me a lot of scope to explore myself and the world on a first hand basis.
FMS, with its awesome infrastructure and amazing faculty would help me realize my goals.
Studying at FMS would prove really beneficial for me as it has a great history of producing path
breaking managers for over 50 years which in turn has resulted in the establishment of a brand
equity of its own.
SOP132 - FMS
“Yesterday is but a dream, and tomorrow is only a vision; But today, well lived, makes every
yesterday a dream of happiness and every tomorrow a vision of hope.”
The wisdom of myriad realms has been condensed in these verses by Kalidasa.
The limitless potential of technology never ceases to mesmerize me. I have always cherished a
dream of one day pioneering and leading a company affianced in the use of the state-of-the-art to
make available products - like the ‘Windup Radio’ pioneered by Trevor Baylis in Africa to
spread AIDS-Awareness – an ingenious and yet economical idea that can change the lives of the
unfortunate across the world.
Juggling between academics, which have always been my forte, and extra-curricular activities,
I’ve strived for excellence. As General Secretary, Student Council, I’ve been leading, innovating
and inspiring everybody around. Organizing and managing an array of events, I’ve nurtured my
communication skills & creative faculties.
To realize my dreams, I need to have sound rudiments of technology and management. An

engineering background has given me a strong insight into the technical nuances of things. Only
an MBA from the most prestigious institutes can impart the vital theory and practice sought and
be a springboard towards a highly didactic experience in the enigmatic corporate world.
One of the oldest and sovereign business schools, FMS will be my beacon. The master craftsmen
of the art of management & the dynamic & competitive milieu of FMS will mould my
managerial skills & business acumen. FMS’s ‘strong’ alumni network and vibrant student
activity, & small batch size will ensure a high level of camaraderie between us.
Swami Vivekananda’s words echo in my being: “Awake, arise and stop

not till the goal is achieved.”
SOP133 - FMS
My ultimate career objective is to be known as a good business leader heading an organization of

international repute. I believe that working at a managerial-level position in a top company will
provide me with the necessary practical experience and expertise required in order to meet my
objective. Hence I would like to start off my career at such a position.
I decided to pursue Engineering in the Computer Science stream primarily because of an avid
interest in computers. However, an Engineering degree alone is not sufficient in order to obtain
the position I yearn for. A formal education in the principles of Business Management is required
to achieve the same. I am sure, therefore, that pursuing an MBA is the ideal choice as it will
provide with me such an education.
FMS, widely recognized in the student as well as the corporate world to be among the best
business schools in India, is a dream destination for any MBA aspirant and I am no different. It’s
well-qualified faculty, a smart and dynamic student community, an active and well-formed
alumni network and extremely affordable cost of education are some factors that set it apart from
most other institutes and make it the school of choice for me.
I am confident, therefore, that completing my MBA from FMS will provide me with the right
knowledge, which will help me achieve my goal.
SOP133r
My ultimate career objective is to be known as a good business leader heading an organization of

international repute. I believe that working at a managerial-level position in a top company will
provide me with the necessary practical experience and expertise required in order to meet my
objective. Hence I would like to start off my career at such a position.
There is a slight confusion between a beacon bearing leader (which is what you aim to be) and an
operational manager. But I think this should not matter too much. You have mentioned your long
term goal, your short term goal and finally how you want to get there. Why don't you say that an
MBA will helpe me get there ?
I decided to pursue Engineering in the Computer Science stream primarily because of an avid
interest in computers. However, an Engineering degree alone is not sufficient in order to obtain
the position I yearn for. A formal education in the principles of Business Management is required
to achieve the same. I am sure, therefore, that pursuing an MBA is the ideal choice as it will
provide with me such an education.
Hmm.....see this is like a ladder. Doing an MBA will help you jump a couple of rungs but
essentially everyone has to use the same ladder. So say that it will help you reach the point X
faster or something to that effect. So knock off stuff like "A formal education in .....blah blah is
reqd to be a manager" crap :mg:
FMS, widely recognized in the student as well as the corporate world to be among the best
business schools in India, is a dream destination for any MBA aspirant and I am no different. It’s
well-qualified faculty, a smart and dynamic student community, an active and well-formed
alumni network and extremely affordable cost of education are some factors that set it apart from
most other institutes and make it the school of choice for me.
I am confident, therefore, that completing my MBA from FMS will provide me with the right
knowledge, which will help me achieve my goal.
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It's is abbreviation for It is NOT the possessive Its which you mean here.
Last sentence is bland. Make it more cogently appealing.
SOP134 - FMS
i believe technical expertise and management aptitude within an organisation go hand in hand. i
belong to an academic family which taught me that determination always pays off. through my
life I have been sincere and goal oriented i participated in a no. of events particularly in college,
where i was team leader in model making and technical paper presentation. during this course i
recognize certain skills inherent within me
which led me to believe I require a broader platform to enhance the same.To work in an
organisation so as to grow individually as well as to assist others in realizing their dreams.
Service sector is the new age management that requires effective leadership of knowledge
workers, to enhance human potential and collective growth.FMS high student faculty ratio
provides me an environment of diverse interest and experiences. its faculty
Which has a strong and diverse induatrial interface , as well as their involvement in research
work will provide me a platform for enhancing my knowledge base and broadening my outlook.
It will help me in complementing my strength and ionizing what ever weaknesses of youth and
inexperience , thus enabling me to justify this natures gift
called life.
SOP135 - FMS
My goal is to work towards a career in the field of finance viz. corporate banking, investment
banking, etc. I have done commerce in my higher secondary school and currently pursuing
B.COM (Hons.), I have always been interested in dealing with numbers and money matters have
been my area of interest. It has helped to develop my analytical skills.
MBA degree from a top B-school will provide me two different kinds of benefits: the personal
benefits (how the degree will help me grow as individual), and the intellectual benefits (what I
will be able to learn). It will help me to build strong communication and interpersonal skills.
MBA program will also help in developing my quantitative and management skills.
During my school days and currently at my college level I have been introduced with the basic
knowledge of management task and functions on one hand and fundamental exposure to the
concepts, theories and practices in the field of management on the other. (MBA program will
further on add to my knowledge.)
I am applying to FMS because it provides a fine tuned education in an environment that
encourages students to extend their leadership capabilities. It enables students to gain broad
managerial skills and develop specialized expertise in the business discipline that best suits their
career aspirations.
FMS with its distinguished faculty and diverse real life projects will help me in entering the
corporate environment with confidence. An excellent placement record will further make
accomplishment of my goals more realistic.
SOP135r
My goal is to work towards a career in the field of finance viz. corporate banking, investment
banking, etc. I have done commerce in my higher secondary school and currently pursuing
B.COM (Hons.), I have always been interested in dealing with numbers and money matters have
been my area of interest. It has helped to develop my analytical skills.
1. already implied in b.com reference

2. numbers and money matters arent necessarily the same, u know :)
3. how has it develpped ur analytical skill? isnt it supposed to be the other way round..good
analytical skills leads to better judgement while dealing with money matters.
MBA degree from a top B-school will provide me two different kinds of benefits: the personal
benefits (how the degree will help me grow as individual), and the intellectual benefits (what I
will be able to learn). It will help me to build strong communication and interpersonal skills.
MBA program will also help in developing my quantitative and management skills.
1. good beginning..but then you fall under the twin evils of communication & interpersonal skills
:mg: see here..thses things are definitely not taught anywhere..the point is that we learn this
naturally rather than through a spoon-fed program of daily communication. u need a bit more of
introspection on the "personal" and "intellectual" benefits of this program.
During my school days and currently at my college level I have been introduced with the basic
knowledge of management task and functions on one hand and fundamental exposure to the
concepts, theories and practices in the field of management on the other. (MBA program will
further on add to my knowledge.)
this para says nothing at all
I am applying to FMS because it provides a fine tuned education in an environment that

encourages students to extend their leadership capabilities. It enables students to gain broad
managerial skills and develop specialized expertise in the business discipline that best suits their
career aspirations. <too verbose>
FMS with its distinguished faculty and diverse real life projects < do you know of any? > will
help me in entering the corporate environment with confidence. An excellent placement record
will further make accomplishment of my goals more realistic.
1. you've never mentioned that placement is a goal of yours anywhere else.
drastic re-editing required. a step-by-step approach is ok..but then you need to give answers
which are intelligible and which can be integrated together. think about that :)
SOP136 - FMS
I contemplated a lot over my future plans during my graduation days. Only two things kept
occuring to me time & again, "hotel" and "business". I wanted to straight away go in for hotel
management as suggested by many. But I realised that for establishing a business, it is essential
to acquire a holistic perspective of running and managing it at various stages of development. So
“business” management was my obvious choice. With the desire to get myself acquainted with
corporate world I landed at a job in Satyam computers where I got a lot of opportunities to work
in a team, and to hone my communication and time management skills. Frequent interactions
with the client helped me in understanding their business requirments. Also, my managers’
effective and efficient handling of business and client requirements inspired me and heightened
my desire to pursue management.
Now, in order to achieve my goal I need to learn the nuances of managing a business effectively.
FMS with its highly experienced and erudite faculty will surely provide me with the complete
understanding of all the business related processes. Further through the live projects, summer
internships at highly reputed firms and case studies of various business scenarios, I am sure of
equipping myself with all the skill and experience required to manage and run a business
successfully.
SOP137 - FMS
My keen interest and excellence in areas like science and mathematics made up mind to select
engineering as a career option.My four years of engineering contributed for my strong
foundation in technical and analytical skills and also honed up my leadership skills through the
various activities I involved. My first job was trainee engineer in Bajaj Auto Ltd where I got
wide opportunities from production line to management decisions. This taught me the language
of business i.e. how to handle people effectively. It also taught me how large business manages
their sourcing, manufacturing and distribution functions. To move ahead in my area of interest I
joined TCS a leading software firm. The various roles I performed there inspired me to become
technology consultant and hence pursue a degree in management.
I am confident that FMS is right fit for my ambition because of its academic excellence,
international reputation and alumni network. I plan to capitalize on its strengths by taking course
in system management. After this I hope to join a strategic consultation firm to gain more
experience. Ultimately I will seek a leadership position in a global corporation where I can fulfill
my dream of becoming a leader in technological change.
SOP138 - FMS
Through my experience as a software developer, I have come across numerous instances where a
management consultant has made a huge impact in the client's business. A Fraud Management
system for Tata Teleservices Ltd. which helped to boost the firm's revenue, a change from
perpetual to subscription licence
model for Synopsys which resulted in a more predictable revenue model were all masterminded
by consultants. My dream is to be associated with a renowned consultancy firm.
My innate strengths are to: view a problem from different perspectives, develop a pragmatic
approach to the problem, have a tendency to help others and honor commitments. Additionally
from my work experience, I have learnt to: work as a team towards a goal under time and
resource constraints, communicate clearly and efficiently with geographically distributed teams,
encourage contrarian thinking. An MBA at this stage will help me to groom my personality,
hone my leadership skills in a structured way, gain knowledge about the nuances of the
management, network with an eclectic peer community, thereby making a consummate
consultant in me.
FMS, with a good student faculty ratio, unique avenues like Consulting Club for peer-learning,
electives like "Government Business Interface", "Strategic Management of Information
Technology" embracing the current economic trends, excellent industry interface and an
affordable fee will be the ideal launch pad to kick-off my dream career. I see the next 2 years of
my life away from work as a great investment for lifetime.
SOP139 - FMS
William Arthur Ward has said," If you can imagine it, you can achieve it. If you can dream it,
you can become it." And I dream of being a significant player in the Indian Corporate Sector. I
wish to lead a giant firm, manage individuals with high ambitions and serve the society by
creating wealth of opportunities.
During my B.E. internship for construction of Road-over-bridge, I got to learn the nuances of
management while leading different teams over the various assignments through the experiences
which included negotiating and condescending with the workers and acting as an important link
of communication between them and the ones placed high in the corporate ladder. Besides, the
experience that I have gained in the highly competitive environment during my tenure at Infosys
has helped me hone my time-management skills and acquire a quality-oriented mindset towards
every work that I do.
The skills that I have acquired so far, coupled with a thorough understanding of the principles of
management, can transform my vision into reality. FMS, with its rich history, commitment to
though leadership, corporate interaction through live projects, and a strong alumni network, has
been my first choice. I am sure its an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my
dream.
SOP139r
of communication between them and the ones placed high in the corporate ladder.
I am sure you dint mean what you said. Folks, these are stuff you need to take care of before
posting on this thread.You would be helping Ketan/Arun/QE just as much as you would be
helping you. :)
Since college days I've been aspiring to be placed high up the corporate ladder where I can be
part of planning and decision making processes
Err....Like I had said before, me no expert, but this definitely sounds..err...patronizing....You
might have to put this in a more subtle manner....
A switch to a two member project with minimal external support provided me the challenge or
rather the opportunity to manage the project on my own. This includes pre- planning and spacing
of smaller deadlines to achieve the final target.
A challenge when overcome, becomes an opportunity for growth, else a constraint....It can't be a
challenge or opportunity...I get your intent, but it somehow felt outta place :mg: And I am also
not sure if throwing a question back at the adcom is a good idea (like u did at the end of the
essay)..
@tanmay ...Phew...That was some heavy-duty stuff ;)
My dream in life is to have a business venture of my own (some day).For this reason a post
graduate degree in Management is a must
Why??
I think an MBA from a reputed institute as FMS would help me to develop entrepreneurial and
managerial skills, which would be necessary to run a successful enterprise. An MBA degree
from FMS could be the catalyst in achieving my dreams.
Two things....Entrepreneurial skills??? What are those...Don't use words for the sake of using
them. And yea, If you feel the FMS MBA "could" be a catalyst, that means you yourself aren't
sure...Why should the adcom be? ;)
Though I pursued a technical degree, monetary matters have always interested me and I desire to
be someone who is a decision maker in critical times, one who applies all his strategic and
analytical abilities to tackle issues related to the same
Whoa !! Monetary, decision maker, strategy, analytical....What jargon have you spared?? ;)
SOP139rr
of communication between them and the ones placed high in the corporate ladder. Besides, the
experience that I have gained in the highly competitive environment during my tenure at Infosys
has helped me hone my time-management skills and acquire a quality-oriented mindset towards
every work that I do.
management, can transform my vision into reality. FMS, with its rich history, commitment to
though leadership, corporate interaction through live projects, and a strong alumni network, has
been my first choice. I am sure its an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my
dream.
SOP139rrr
Good start...
And I dream of leading a giant firm, managing individuals having high ambitions and serving the
society by creating wealth of opportunities.
During my B.E. internship for construction of Road-over-bridge,
Can you be more specific? Where? When? Project name?
I got to learn the nuances of management while leading different teams over the various
assignments through the experiences which included negotiating and condescending with the
workers and acting as an important link of communication between them and the ones placed
high in the corporate ladder.
Boy boy...you just messed up here... why you want to go for loooooooonnnnnnnng sentences...
break this one in 3-4 sentences which would be easy on reader and would effectively conveys
what you learned...
Besides, the experience that I have gained in the highly competitive environment during my
tenure at Infosys has helped me hone my time-management skills and acquire a quality-oriented
mindset towards every work that I do.
Good..
management, can transform my vision into reality.
transform my dream into reality [you talked about your dreams right??]
FMS, with its rich history, commitment to though leadership, corporate interaction through live
projects, and a strong alumni network, has been my first choice. I am sure its an ideal place to
take the first step towards realizing my dream.
Ok-ish....
SOP140 - FMS
Since college days I've been aspiring to be placed high up the corporate ladder where I can be
part of planning and decision making processes. Being part of the editorial team of the college
Technical magazine, hunting for sponsors and organizing National level technical symposiums
turned out to be fun yet educative.
After joining WIPRO being part of a large fresher team taught me how to be a team player. A
switch to a two member project with minimal external support provided me the challenge or
rather the opportunity to manage the project on my own. This includes pre- planning and spacing
of smaller deadlines to achieve the final target.
With good reasoning skills and work experience, I believe I am now qualified to undergo a
formal management training that would help me achieve great heights in professional life and
help me contribute to the society. It is my belief that "The best of one's ability comes to the fore
in the company of the best people". What other institute could be more suitable for this than
FMS which attracts the cream de la crème across the country, provides well-qualified staff and
has a vibrant Alumni Network?
SOP141 - FMS
I have completed my graduation in management studies (B.M.S) from the University of Mumbai
with specialization in Finance and International Finance. I plan to pursue a career in Finance and
so I feel that an MBA will develop the necessary skills in me to make me a complete manager.
During my undergraduate days, I was an active participant in various extra-curricular activities
of the college. I have won several chess tournaments at the inter-collegiate level in 2003 and
2004.
An MBA would be a logical extension to my graduation studies. An MBA, through its practical
approach to learning, would polish my skills and help in my overall development as a manager.
Being part of a challenging and competitive corporate environment is what i look forward to and
i believer that Faculty of Management Studies (FMS) will help me gain the knowledge and instill
in me the skills required to fulfill my objectives. The unique approach adopted by FMS witha
strong emphasis on conceptual learning through a melange of fieldwork and case studies will
help me in becoming a successful manager.
SOP142 - FMS-MS
‘VASUDHEV KUTMBAKAM’ [the whole world is my family / the whole world under a single
roof (umbrella governing body)] a Vedic slogan, a vision propagated by
Dr. Rajendra Prasad , is my inspiration. I too believe that unison and co-operation is the solution
to most of the world’s problems. And thus I intend to devote my life in the spread of this
message & development of a united world.
This I mean to accomplish through a public sector org., an NGO or established body like UN.
What ever be the path but to accomplish the goal , the first thing I need is to learn to manage
resources and market the notion efficiently . FMS with it's close interaction with various
departments of DU, is bound to offer a broader perspective of management education. Moreover
FMS provides a global business perspective through its emphasis on learning through live
projects,collaborative and exchange programmes with international institutions etc. , which
perfectly aligns with my aspirations.
My goals may seem tall , but similar is the motivation and commitment . A School house
Captain, co-founder of the college wall magazine which perhaps was the beginning of a creative
movement in a 50 yr. old college; and presently the coordinator of the executive committee of a
national level tech-cult festival to be held in our college after 10yr , I have honed my skills as a
leader and an entrepreneur ; apart from being a meritorious student throughout my educational
career among other things.
I see life as a privilege rather than a gift . it will be an honour to have a unique course such as
MBA(MS) at FMS as my beacon as I embark upon my path in public service sector
SOP143 - FMS
I have completed my Bachelor’s degree in Aeronautical Engineering from Punjab Engineering

College, Chandigarh. Where I have been able to develop as well as hone my analytical and
logical skills.
I have good academics coupled with excellent extra curricular activities. My leadership qualities
came to forefront when I helped setup India’s first collegiate chapter of Aeronautical Society of
India (AeSI) in our college. Also I was chosen Student’s Secretary for the same. I have also
received the College Appreciation Award for my work done as the founding member of the
society. I have also been an active member in organizing intra and inter college festivals for our
college.
My dream in life is to have a business venture of my own (some day).For this reason a post
graduate degree in Management is a must. FMS is one of the oldest and finest institutes in the
country withan amazing student-faculty ratio and an excellent curriculum. I think an MBA from
a reputed institute as FMS would help me to develop entrepreneurial and managerial skills,
which would be necessary to run a successful enterprise. An MBA degree from FMS could be
the catalyst in achieving my dreams.
SOP144 - FMS
Play to win". Something that has been imprinted on my mind always. That combined with my
passion and tendency to be a perfectionist has always driven me to be
one of the best, whether it has been a football field or a classroom, and I have achieved that..
Always encouraged by my parents, ofcourse for morally correct and
legal aims, my interests have been diverse giving me an oppurtunity to experience and handle
pressure in numerous aspects of life.
A B.E from Mumbai University, advanced my technical know-how. It also honed my time
management and analytical skills and, though it seemed impossible, taught
me to work harder. Following my graduation, I was placed with Patni Computer Systems.
Seventeen months with Patni made me face up to daunting challenges, and
tested me greatly, be it my adaptability, my knowledge, my decision making or my inter-
personal skills. It also exposed me to the ERP package, and gave me insights
to the workings of a business.
Though I pursued a technical degree, monetary matters have always interested me and I desire to
be someone who is a decision maker in critical times, one who
applies all his strategic and analytical abilities to tackle issues related to the same. I believe that
FMS with its emphasis on concepts, stimulating teaching techniques,
excellent summer placements and efficient feedback mechanism is an ideal institution to teach
me the necessary skills to become an indispensable component of an
organisation's machinery.
SOP145 - FMS
“No matter how good you get you can always get better and that's the exciting part. “
Tiger Woods.
This quote, coming from one of the most inspiring men of our times, has been a spurring
motivation that I live by. For me, life has always been a struggle, to get the best out of me. And
that is precisely what has driven me towards seeking a MBA at the prestigious FMS, with its
high quality teaching and unique pedagogy. The stress on learning, the excellent opportunities
for students and the flexibility offered by FMS are truly unparalleled and offer the maximum
leverage in making a winner out of each and every student.
I intend to become an entrepreneur, an effective leader; who takes his organization to global
levels of excellence. Excellence, foremost, in terms of character. My inherent strength has been
my integrity and character and I believe that FMS, with its focus on a sustained overall
development of a manager, will provide me with the power to succeed as a manager par
excellence.
SOP145r
Seems to me as good and neat.... send it :gm:
Just replace "manager" in last line with "leader"
SOP146 - FMS
The Olympic motto goes: “Litius, Altius, Fortius” (Faster, Higher, and Stronger).
True to this world of constant transition where in the one who is Faster, aims Higher, and
emerges Stronger in the face of tough competition is the one who wins.
The desire to motivate people and drive them towards achieving excellence, to turn every
experience into a lesson learned, to adventure into new ideas and to lead a organization towards
newer heights is a my constant aspiration.
Juggling academics and extra curriculars, during school and college, has helped me hone my
skills of time-management and prioritizing. My experiences in participating in various team
events such as Science Projects, Robotics competition, Basketball Tournaments, Group Songs
and Dance etc. have given me a useful insight into team spirit, group functioning and cross-
functional exposure.
My technical background has provided me with a strong analytical foundation and reasoning
skills along with instilling the importance of hardwork and self-discipline. My current training at
L&T (Sargent-Lundy) has proved to be an immense learning experience. A highly competitive
and dynamic work atmosphere and a diverse and extremely talented peer group has incorporated
in me the urge for perfection and delivering my best. Working as a project team has taught me
the basic rules of efficient group functioning.
I believe a well-structured MBA course will go a long way in further enhancing my soft skills.
And FMS, with its history of producing world class managers, for half a century, offers the
unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its strong alumni base, along with a
highly effective and flexible curriculum and a diverse, multi-cultured student community and
erudite faculty and hence is is an ideal institution for pursuing my MBA.
SOP146r
The Olympic motto goes: “Litius, Altius, Fortius” (Faster, Higher, and Stronger).
True to this world of constant transition where in the one who is Faster, aims Higher, and
emerges Stronger in the face of tough competition is the one who wins.
How about "changes to situations/circumstances faster"/ "aims for blah blah higher and emerges,
in the face of tough competition, stronger." This kinda looks nicer.
The desire to motivate people and drive them towards achieving excellence, to turn every
experience into a lesson learned, to adventure into new ideas and to lead a organization towards
newer heights is a my constant aspiration.
As Ketan mentions in almost every other post. Hava mein baatein. Tell something concrete and
back it up with some example of what you have done.
Juggling academics and extra curriculars, during school and college, has helped me hone my
skills of time-management and prioritizing. My experiences in participating in various team
events such as Science Projects, Robotics competition, Basketball Tournaments, Group Songs
and Dance etc. have given me a useful insight into team spirit, group functioning and cross-
functional exposure.
Exactly what the doctor ordered :mg:
My technical background has provided me with a strong analytical foundation and reasoning
skills along with instilling the importance of hardwork and self-discipline. My current training at
L&T (Sargent-Lundy) has proved to be an immense learning experience. A highly competitive
and dynamic work atmosphere and a diverse and extremely talented peer group has incorporated
in me the urge for perfection and delivering my best. Working as a project team has taught me
the basic rules of efficient group functioning.
I would say the rest sounds good but knock off the "My technical background has provided me
with a strong analytical foundation and reasoning skills " though it might be true we have seen it
a billion times in this thread already. The FMS SOP readers will faint :mg:
I believe a well-structured MBA course will go a long way in further enhancing my soft skills.
And FMS, with its history of producing world class managers, for half a century, offers the
unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its strong alumni base, along with a
highly effective and flexible curriculum and a diverse, multi-cultured student community and
erudite faculty and hence is is an ideal institution for pursuing my MBA.
Just enhance your softskills ? Im sure you might want to add a couple of more adjectives there.
Doesn't it give you the tools to realize your dream ? BTW that reminds me you have not
mentioned your goals/dreams/aspirations so far. Maybe it can go into the first para (hawa mein
baaton waala :mg:)
Also, GMS mein erudite faculty sounds creepy. Try replaceing it or knock it off completely.
SOP147 - FMS
Having done my graduation in Mass Media specializing in Advertising, I wish to pursue a career
related to Marketing. In the marketing domain, I would like to function as a Brand Manager as I
am enamored by the concept of branding. A structured and focused learning about the marketing
domain will further strengthen my knowledge base and provide me with the necessary tools to
excel in this stream. FMS has a long tradition of imparting relevant education and equipping its
students with a sense of confidence and belief that puts them on the threshold of a successful
career. Also I shall have the opportunity to network with the best brains amongst my peer group
and also develop under the guidance of the professors.
SOP148 - FMS
Harold Taylor has said "The roots of true achievement lie in the will to become the best that you
can become."
During my college days working in marketing division for SPIC-MACAY IT-BHU Chapter I
realized my way for life and since then marketing has been close to my heart. I wish to embark
upon a fulfilling career in this field.
After completing my B.Tech from IT-BHU, one of the most revered institutions in India and the
experience that I have gained during my tenure at Infosys has given me a good foundation in
technical and analytical skills. Achievement of Infosys Quarterly Award in the very first year of
joining the company is a testimony to that. Apart from robust technical and analytical skills I
need a thorough knowledge of business aspects.
FMS with its rich history, commitment to thought leadership, corporate interaction through live
projects and a strong alumni network, in addition to an excellent faculty, is an ideal place to take
the first step towards realizing my dream
SOP149 - FMS
"If you can imagine it, you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it."
-William Arthur Ward
I believe business organizations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and I envision playing an
important role in such an organization.
My graduation at IIT- Bombay has not only provided me a strong technological focus, but also
helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement
An internship at IIM-Bangalore gave me an exposure to the field of Management. The

International exposure by working at Czech Technical University, Prague has given me
experience in implementation and management of a technical project and also an opportunity to
work in a global cross cultural environment.
I believe that a thorough understanding of the principles of management is essential in the

advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its alumni network as well as
cross disciplinary expertise from the DelhiUniversity in addition to the excellent faculty, is an
ideal institute for the education I seek.
SOP149r
"If you can imagine it, you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it."
-William Arthur Ward
I believe business organizations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and I envision playing an
important role in such an organization.
My graduation at IIT- Bombay has not only provided me a strong technological focus, but also
helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement.
Boy ! IIT-Bombay haina ? So write strong stuff like - drive/verve/passion for technology, an
environment that was a teeming with activity apart from just studies, competition stiffer than
getting a place to sit in the 7am Virar fast.......:mg:
An internship at IIM-Bangalore gave me an exposure to the field of Management. The

International exposure by working at Czech Technical University, Prague has given me
experience in implementation and management of a technical project and also an opportunity to
work in a global cross cultural environment.
"field of management" bahut bada hai bhai. Be specific what exactly did you do in management.
How did it help.
I believe that a thorough understanding of the principles of management is essential in the

Okay.
advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its alumni network as well as cross
disciplinary expertise from the DelhiUniversity in addition to the excellent faculty, is an ideal
institute for the education I seek.
I would say, and I could be terribly wrong. You have a very strong focus with the IIT-B tag and
international exposure and IIM-B internship. So keep the Why FMS story to just a 1-line. Say
that its one of the oldest and hence strong alum network which will help you in building your
business. Apart from say great faculties who will equip you with the necessary tools (you know
tech now you need to know the language of business - eco/finance/acc etc.). Get the gist ?
SOP150 - FMS
The importance of good decision-making,problem solving and interpersonal skills were revealed
to me as early as my school days when I was the captain of the cricket team. Imbibing such
values are of paramount importance not just on a cricket pitch or a corporate office but for every
other aspect of day to day life. The concept of managementdegree is something that is in demand
not just for the perks that it offers but for the sheer completeness it offers to an individual.
Management is important not just at the highest level of a corporate office but at every single
stage of an institution. In the present day scenario, no single individual is a complete professional
without good managerial ability.It is for this very reason that I have chosen to pursue an M.B.A.
from F.M.S.I believe that apart from the quality of education that FMS imparts and the values
that it inculcates into students(such as importance of team work,dynamicism and
responsibility),a degree from one of India's oldest and most prestigious institutions will also add
to my brand value.An Engineering degree has honed my analytical and technical skills and I
believe that an MBA degree will give me the edge of being a complete professional.
SOP150r
The importance of decision-making,problem solving and good interpersonal skills were revealed
to me as early as my school days when I was the captain of the cricket team.
"The importance of making right decisions, thinking on ones' feet and strong interpersonal skills
were revealed to me early as the captain of my school cricket team."
Imbibing such values are of paramount importance not just on a cricket pitch or a corporate
office but for every other aspect of day to day life. The concept of management is something that
has been growing in demand not just for the perks that it offers but for the sheer completeness it
offers to an individual. Management is something that is of prime importance not just at the
highest level of a corporate office but at every single stage of an institution. In the present day
scenario, no single individual is a complete professional without good managerial ability.
Quitting talking in the air (hawa mein baatein karna literally translated :mg:). What is it about the
previous 3 sentences that talk about you. Even I could have written it and it would have been
correct. So just say that these are important qualities that are required to succeed in the corporate
world - though I have imbibed this I think I need to equip myself with the right tools to use them
in a managerial capacity - something to this effect.
It is for this very reason that I have chosen to pursue an MBA from FMS. I believe that apart
from the quality of education that FMS imparts and the values that it inculcates into
students(such as importance of team work,dynamicism and responsibility),a degree from one of
India's oldest and most prestigious Management school will also add to my brand value.
Sentence is too long and convoluted. Also since when have *you* started having a brand value,
one which you hope to increase after your MBA ? :mg: Keep it as either couple of shorter ones
or take out a point or two. FMS chaps won't be unduely worried if you praise them less :mg:
Having been through the rigours of an Engineering degree which has honed my analytical and
technical skills, I believe that an MBA degree will allow me to broaden my horizon and give me
the edge of being a complete professional.
As mentioned elsewhere this is extremely cliched: analytical and technical skills part. But then
what the heck ? Its okay.
SOP151 - FMS
It’s a difficult task, trying to sum up the purpose of my education and the direction of my life in
such few words. At first glance it seems to belittle my goals and aspirations, to subject them to
such brevity. But in reality it is even more arduous a task, elaborating my skills and my
personality into a few hundred words. These are things ingrained within my life and my persona
and I’ve never believed in expressing them in any other way except through my actions.
A certain line by Ayn Rand sums up the purpose of my life. This unique philosopher of
objectivism states that, “A creative person is motivated by the desire to achieve, not by the desire
to beat others.” Although quite contrary to the education system and academic lives we have all
led as children and adults, it is, however, something I want to keep striving to accomplish.
Before retiring, my father was a senior manager at a nationalized bank, transfers were therefore a
regular feature in my life. While annoying as a child to move around making new friends every
few years, it is this exposure that gave me such a diverse and broad perspective in life. It’s no
mean feat either, adjusting into a new school, a new circle of friends every few years and yet
continue to achieve a certain level of success.
I excelled as a student in all my schools and achieved several commendations in academic and
extra-curricular activities. I took part in a variety of events like public speaking, quiz, essay
writing, dramatics, sport events and achieved success in all of them, having several certificates
and awards to show for it.
I gave my major school examinations in Ahmedabad, Gujarat and I am pursuing my bachelor’s

education in the field of Information Technology from Government Engineering College in
Gandhinagar. The engineering education has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills.
It’s given me the ability to think about any problem and tackle it in the best way, to get to a
resolution in the most efficient way.
During my college years I again participated in several extra-curricular events. Apart from this, I
also successfully organized and hosted several school and college events. My major
accomplishment in the past year was succeeding in the Gujarat state Times of India Public
speaking contest. Being recognized as the best among several hundred participants was
flattering. But what was even more satisfying was that feeling of expressing my beliefs and
convictions in front of several thousand people.
Always being in the thick of action made me realize how much I enjoy communicating and
interacting with people. Combined with a burning desire to succeed, MBA thus seemed
inevitable after a point. I apply today to your esteemed institute to further this cause. I believe
there are few institutes today that mould better managers and individuals than FMS does. I look
forward to a lasting relationship with an eminent and experienced faculty and students from
varied backgrounds. A management degree from an institute like FMS would ensure that success
continues to be a friend of mine all my life. More significantly, I’m positive that an academic
experience from your institute would help me stand by my convictions and principles and
inculcate them eventually into my professional life.
SOP151r
It’s a difficult task, trying to sum up the purpose of my education and the direction of my life in
such few words. At first glance it seems to belittle my goals and aspirations, to subject them to
such brevity. But in reality it is even more arduous a task, elaborating my skills and my
personality into a few hundred words. These are things ingrained within my life and my persona
and I’ve never believed in expressing them in any other way except through my actions.
Okay I guess the reason you are not able to squeez this huge SOP into the stipulated 200 words is
because you are assuming your SOP to be "You talking in front of FMS faculty".... which is not
the case....you are not supposed to write in a fashion you would go on describing during a tete-a-
tete. Keep that for PI...saying something like "Oh.. Its difficult for me to squeze my
skills/achivements in just few words is impossible and blah blah blah...."
This entire paragraph doesnt give me an iota of hint as to why your applied to FMS, what you are
seeking for in an MBA degree, What skills you possesss.... Nothing at all....
A certain line by Ayn Rand sums up the purpose of my life. This unique philosopher of
objectivism states that, “A creative person is motivated by the desire to achieve, not by the desire
to beat others.” Although quite contrary to the education system and academic lives we have all
led as children and adults, it is, however, something I want to keep striving to accomplish.
Again the same thing... you are not having a conversation with them... come straight to the
point... again nothing in this para which I might call useful or to the point....
Before retiring, my father was a senior manager at a nationalized bank, transfers were therefore a
regular feature in my life.
SOP is about you.....no point in writing a statement like this...keep your focus on you..
While annoying as a child to move around making new friends every few years, it is this
exposure that gave me such a diverse and broad perspective in life. It’s no mean feat either,
adjusting into a new school, a new circle of friends every few years and yet continue to achieve a
certain level of success.
A single statement could have said the same thing....
With my father having a transferrable job, I had to acquire early on the skills of adaptability and
flexibility to adjust to newer and newer environments year after year.
I am NOT saying that this is the sentence you should add...I am just trying to give you a flavour
of the precise and to the point sentences you need to frame...it is about you and your
skills.....read it and compare... you will realise the difference..
I excelled as a student in all my schools and achieved several commendations in academic and
extra-curricular activities. I took part in a variety of events like public speaking, quiz, essay
writing, dramatics, sport events and achieved success in all of them, having several certificates
and awards to show for it.
Again a looooooooonnnnnnnnng sentence for something you could have written in few words...
the essence is not to "show off" ... but to talk about your learnings... there are people who have
been national players/champions applying to FMS...so college level certificates/awards would
not be something which would impress the faculty... so just talk about what you learned from all
these extra-curricular activities....
I gave my major school examinations in Ahmedabad, Gujarat and I am pursuing my bachelor’s

education in the field of Information Technology from Government Engineering College in
Gandhinagar.
This has already been talked in your application form..why repeat it...wastage of space...
The engineering education has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills. It’s given me
the ability to think about any problem and tackle it in the best way, to get to a resolution in the
most efficient way.
Now you are on track...this tells me something about you.... good
During my college years I again participated in several extra-curricular events. Apart from this, I
also successfully organized and hosted several school and college events. My major
accomplishment in the past year was succeeding in the Gujarat state Times of India Public
speaking contest. Being recognized as the best among several hundred participants was
flattering. But what was even more satisfying was that feeling of expressing my beliefs and
convictions in front of several thousand people.
Didnt you wrote similar things in your FMS form... dont waste SOP space for it....write it in the
form....
Always being in the thick of action made me realize how much I enjoy communicating and
interacting with people. Combined with a burning desire to succeed, MBA thus seemed
inevitable after a point.
Why? How? Not clear why MBA is inevitable?? What are your goals...how does MBA fits into
the scheme??
I apply today to your esteemed institute<replace by FMS> to further this cause. I believe there
are few institutes today that mould better managers and individuals than FMS does.
No conversation please... talk to the point... why FMS? Dont compare it with other institutes...
I look forward to a lasting relationship with an eminent and experienced faculty and students
from varied backgrounds. A management degree from an institute like FMS would ensure that
success continues to be a friend of mine all my life.
Cmmon buddy...no poetic statements like this....you need to write razor-sharp and crisp
statments which shoots the target....directly...
More significantly, I’m positive that an academic experience from your institute <FMS> would
help me stand by my convictions and principles and inculcate them eventually into my
professional life.
SOP152 - FMS
Learning is an ongoing process and must never stop. I have always been fascinated by
knowledge and this zeal has prompted me to go for higher studies. I have always wanted to be in
a good and respectable position in industry where, people recognize me by my name for the
quality of work I do, and this is possible only if I study and learn more and gain enough
knowledge to fulfill my dreams. My failure to gain a promotion in my last job on basis of lack of
a good qualification to back my hard work also has inspired me to go for higher studies.
FMS, being one of the best and premier institutions in business teaching in India, can provide me
with this opportunity to fulfill my dreams. Its reputation in Indian industry has always been a
stepping stone to success of its students and this platform will surely provide me with an
opportunity to prove my ability and enhance my performance. Moreover it’s renowned faculty,
strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my business school of choice.
SOP152r
Learning is an ongoing process and must never stop. I have always been fascinated by
knowledge and this zeal has prompted me to go for higher studies. I have always wanted to be in
a good and respectable position in industry where, people recognize me by my name for the
quality of work I do, and this is possible only if I study and learn more and gain enough
knowledge to fulfill my dreams. My failure to gain a promotion in my last job on basis of lack of
a good qualification to back my hard work also has inspired me to go for higher studies.
Fascinated ranks among the top 10 all-time fav words of FMS SOP writers.
I can see a story here but am not sure that you can build on it inside 200 words. I really am not
able to figure out how you can best utilize it to your advantage.
FMS, being one of the best and premier institutions in business teaching in India, can provide me
with this opportunity to fulfill my dreams. Its reputation in Indian industry has always been a
stepping stone to success of its students and this platform will surely provide me with an
opportunity to prove my ability and enhance my performance. Moreover it’s renowned faculty,
strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my business school of choice.
"reputation in Indian industry has always been a stepping.........its students" is crappy.
Coming back to the earlier point. You have solid reason - was looked over for promotion
because you did not have an MBA. Believe it or not, I can relate to this as I have faced
something similar which motivated me to think of an MBA myself. But you need to write more
than what you have written. But sorry I am not able to think beyond this. Shall edit my post if I
am able to think of a better way to put it (in the given constraints of words and time).
SOP153 - FMS-MS
I have always been fascinated by knowledge and this zeal has prompted me to go for higher
studies. I have always wanted to be in a good and respectable position in industry where, people
recognize me by my name for the quality of work I do, and this is possible only if I study and
learn more and gain enough knowledge to fulfill my dreams.
Being from the hospitality background with bachelor’s degree in hotel management, FMS MS
should prove helpful for me to gain a reputed place in service industry. It’s a unique program of
its own kind and hence should be very handy for candidates of service industry. And FMS being
the pioneer institution to start this course along with business teaching can provide me with this
opportunity to fulfill my dreams. Its reputation in Indian industry has always been a stepping
stone to success of its students and this platform will surely provide me with an opportunity to
prove my ability and enhance my performance. Moreover it’s renowned faculty, strong alumni
network and vibrant student activity makes it my business school of choice.
SOP154 - FMS
It has always been my dream to start a company which is at the cutting edge of technology that
makes a difference to lives of people around me. As computers fascinate me the most I chose to
pursue computer engineering at my UG level. This has given me a strong grounding in the
technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. But during my time in the
engineering college and also during my summer internships, I realized that just being at the
forefront of technology does not guarantee success in today’s world. It is because success is
guaranteed only when we sell what we create. Since then I have been trying to inculcate in
myself the various qualities needed to be a successful leader. My experiences in organizing and
conducting various competitions from software programming to trivia quizzing, have given me
very useful insights into managing a diverse team, tackle pressure, sell idea and manage time.
This was even recognized when I was elected the President of the Association Of computer
engineers (ACE) which further strengthen my leadership skills. I believe FMS with its world
class faculty, infrastructure, competitive environment and flexible curriculum is the place for me
and doing an MBA at FMS will be my first step towards realizing my dream.
SOP155 - FMS
I am currently pursuing my Bachelor of Management studies degree, which has provided me a

strong foundation in the field of Business Management. It has also helped me build my analytical
and soft skills through various case-presentations, and strategy competitions that I have
participated in.
I aspire to reach the top echelon of the corporate organization where I would be able to make
strategic decisions and contribute towards the success of my organization. I love challenges and
managing a company is one big challenge that excites me.
MBA is not only a logical extension to the skills and the knowledge that I have acquired, but also
a medium to enter the dynamic corporate world and fulfill my aspiration of reaching the top
management . In today’s world, the importance of flexibility and adaptability cannot be
overemphasized. MBA course enables one to assimilate, practice and enhance those skills. This
is what makes MBA a must-do for me.
FMS, which is one of the best known MBA colleges, with its brand name , infrastrucure, learned
faculty and a strong alumni network , will provide me the right environment to broaden and
consolidate my learning through a combination of classroom and on-field activities. I look
forward to be a part of FMS MBA student community.
SOP156 - FMS
I have always gravitated towards roles of high accountability that require strong communication
and interpersonal skills. Moving forward, I want a career as a multi-faceted management
professional, with a wide range of skill sets that can be applied across domains.
In my alma mater, I successfully balanced academics with a keen involvement in extra curricula
activites ranging from: being the secretary of the IEEE chapter of our college to co-ordinating
Finance and sponsorship activites for our Inter and Intra collegiate festivals. These among other
experiences brought to the fore my love for inititiating, organizing and executing activites and
being at the heart of the action. My current role as a Software Testing Engineer enables me to
study concepts and impementations of Quality control.
I would like to continue this journey of learning at FMS as well. With a strong alumni network,
encouragement of industry interaction and a pro active student body will not only widen my
horizons, but also help me embark on my goals.
SOP157 - FMS
If you can imagine it you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it…."
I dream of starting and leading an institution which provides knowledge and training using
scientific techniques/methods, promoting creative thinking and spreading education in rural areas
where the need and scope for improvement is tremendous.
Having an analytical and creative bent of mind, I was always fascinated by the sciences as it
answered most of my questions and this inquisitiveness lead me to engineering. There I learned
about formulating an idea, teamwork and coordination. As a result of this exposure I realized that
though technology is important for change, also imparting these skills and imbibing the skill sets
through a sound education is almost pivotal.
I joined the knowledge industry, got hands on experience in teaching, content development and
planning. I was touched by the love and respect I got from the students and a deep sense of
satisfaction on their success. In order to understand the nuances of the various business processes
involved and their real time implications, MBA is the logical next step towards my goal.
With emphasis on learning through live-projects, flexible curriculum, and impetus towards ' self-
discovery' and experimentation, combined with eminent faculty, highly driven students and
strong alumni, FMS will provide me the requisite knowledge and training essentials for the
realization of my dreams.
SOP158 - FMS-MS
My career goal is to gain enough experience to start my own enterprise preferably in the service
sector. I believe that India needs more of job creators than job seekers.
Doing my four year B.Tech in Electronics and Communications has honed my analytical skills
and developed my ability to visualize situations and arrive at a practical solution. Having studied
at a self financing engineering college in Kerala has taught me to make the most of frugal
resources.
In an MBA (MS) from FMS (South Campus) I look for theoretical and practical knowledge in
areas like finance, economics, marketing, operations and everything else to help me in my future
endeavors. I believe having a globally recognized brand like FMS associated with me can open a
lot of closed doors. I also look forward to the quality exposure to the industry which FMS is
famous for. Moreover being located at Delhi, the capital city with a bustling economy, will give
me ample opportunity to observe and learn from, the economic, political and corporate faces of
India.
SOP159 - FMS
“A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step”- a step I took right after my
matriculation by taking up summer projects in sales and marketing divisions of ‘Chetna Arts’
and ‘Dukens Coffee Mfg. Co.’ for 6 months each. This was the beginning towards realizing my
long term goal of establishing a diversified consultancy firm.
My keen technical and financial interests coupled with leadership and time management
workshops helped me hone my skills in event and stocks / portfolio management and be chosen
as Class Representative for 4 semesters. This was additional to excelling in my engineering
exams, emerging as the ‘University Topper’.
Even after college my zest was not dampened. My work experience not only includes 16 months
of work in embedded systems for Wipro Technologies, but also in tasting the bitter-sweet
teething phase of establishing my own firm ‘Akshaya Consultancy Services’.
An MBA at FMS, a revered institute having 5 decades of academic excellence, vibrant alumni
network, live industrial projects, multicultural environment and brand equity as its USP, will
complement my current skills with solid fundamentals .Using them I will lay my career layer by
layer, proving to be an instrumental manager in an MNC in the short-term and then eventually
accomplish my long term goals.
SOP160 - General
Ques: How a management degree fits into your personal goals for future? ( 400 words)
ANS: Most of the engineers are created in their early teens.It becomes a natural destination for
the ones who awe about the way scientific principles are implemented.I was no exception.Keen
interest in natural sciences and a fliar for mathematics led me to the career of mechanical
engineering.
In my academics I was always above average, that helped me in getting an off campus placement
as a trainee piping engineer with a reputed consultancy in chennai.During my stint as a piping
engineer for 3 years,not only I came across the technical nuances of piping but also about how a
project is being executed.
My grooming as a piping engineer included Meeting deadlines, Technical negotiation with
clients, Making Presentations and motivating my subordinates.
I started as a team member just contributing the work assingned to me but in course of time I
graduated to more responsibilites and at the time of resignation I was the right hand of my
project lead.
Though I relish the challenge of being a piping engineer,may be before an year or so I started
thinking about having an MBA.I would like to visaualise myself as a master motivator,trainer
and thinker.
Down the line I want to pursue a career in consulting, research, teaching and perhaps even
writing.For opening doors to all my dreams I find a postgraduation in management an obvious
step.Before venturing into my longterm goals I need to
understand the way an organisation works,economic implications of a decision,budjeting,strategy
management,HR practices etc in a formal atmosphere.
From an MBA like this which is targeted to experienced people I definitely expect a great
amount of peer to peer learning.When you interact with persons from diverse backgrounds your
vision and outlook about life as a whole broadens.
My shortterm goal after this MBA is to work with a organisation for a span of 7-8 years.I want to
apply the knowledge and skills I earned through the course and my past experience fruitfully in
my next move.Also I would like to be a parttime faculty in some of the good Bschools.Then I
would like to do my doctorate in management when I am able to meet both the family and
financial commitments.After that I would like to move to a full fledged career in academics and
consultancy.
In a nutshell
My short term goal-A job with more responsibility and financial security
My long term goal-A Challenging rewarding career as an academic with industry experience
An MBA I feel is a stepping stone for both of these goals.
SOP161 - IIFT
Limit = 100words
"If you can imagine it,you can achieve it,If you can dream it,you can become it"
I dream of expanding my family business beyond the realms of local comptetion to
competing at national and international level. In this era of globalization where the
difference between domestic and international markets is fast disappearing, skills
and knowledge realting to International Business become extremely important.
IIFT with its focus on International Business will help me in undestanding global
business trends and markets and help me in acquiring the skill set which will take me
towards my dream of taking a domestic company beyond national boundaries.
SOP162 - IITKgp
"The entrepreneur is essentially a visualizer and an actualizer. He can visualize something, and
when he visualizes it he sees exactly how to make it happen." - Robert L. Schwartz
I have a vision – a vision to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in an organization
which is at the cutting edge of technology and makes a difference to the lives of people around
me. My quest for technology made me pursue electronics and communication engineering. But
during my learning period, I realized that just being at the forefront of technology does not
guarantee success in today’s world.
Shaping a great idea into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills, a
sound knowledge of business fundamentals and a comprehensive understanding of the
functioning of an organization.
I believe I possess some of the diverse range of skills required for being an entrepreneur. By
being the school captain at school level and by being the class representative at college, I
acquired the skills of leadership. By organizing an industrial tour for my batch mates, I realized
the importance of coordination, management and control. By developing a library management
system for a private engineering college, I realized the importance of teamwork and acquired the
necessary team skills. But, I feel that only a thorough understanding of the principles of
management will help me develop the core competencies needed to realize my dream and at the
same time, enhance my innate qualities.
In order to understand the nuances of the various management principles involved and their real
time implications, MBA is the next logical step towards my goal.
Professionally, an MBA degree will begin my journey towards my goal. My short term goal after
an MBA would be to work with an organization for a span of 6 to 7 years. This would give me
the opportunity to apply the knowledge and skills I would have learnt through the course. The
experience thus gained would help me in realizing my long term goal – my vision to be an
entrepreneur.
Thus an MBA from VGSOM, IIT Kharagpur will equip me with sound management practices
would be the first step in achieving my goals. I believe that VGSOM, with its world class
infrastructure, richly experienced faculty, excellent career development facilities and its stress on
industry-specific knowledge and a thorough process-level understanding can help me in facing
the real industry with aplomb and confidence. In VGSOM, I find an avenue which can unleash
my leadership qualities and hone them to help me in managing business with a positive attitude
and confidence and ultimately help me in making my vision come true.
SOP162r
Okay...
I have a vision – a vision to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in an organization
which is at the cutting edge of technology and makes a difference to the lives of people around
me. My quest for technology made me pursue electronics and communication engineering. But
during my learning period, I realized that just being at the forefront of technology does not
guarantee success in today’s world.
The sentence structure does not fit properly... few pointers
a) vision is something on a much higher platform... the correct word here would be aspiration.....
b) organization "which is at the" cutting edge.. nope.. doesnt sound appropriate...may be you
wanted to say "organization working on the cutting edge technology"
c) Why lives of people "only" around you..
d) This is a vague statement.. "success" is really a subjective thing... and it is not clear what kind
of thing defines "success" for you... You can probably club this sentence with the first line of
next para below...
But during my learning period, I realized that Shaping a great idea into a reality and making it
successful requires a diverse range of skills, a sound knowledge of business fundamentals and a
comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization.
Just added from above...
I believe I possess some of the diverse range of skills required for being an entrepreneur. By
being the school captain at school level and by being the class representative at college, I
acquired the skills of leadership. By organizing an industrial tour for my batch mates, I realized
the importance of coordination, management and control. By developing a library management
system for a private engineering college, I realized the importance of teamwork and acquired the
necessary team skills.
Okay... It seems childish that by being "school captain" or "college respresentative" you learned
all the "leadership skills/team skills" etc etc... make it sound like that you understood the
importance.. rather than projecting yourself as expert in all these skills......
But, I feel that only a thorough understanding of the principles of management will help me
develop the core competencies needed to realize my dream and at the same time, enhance my
innate qualities.
Oh.. how everyone hates "MBA jargons" ... why cannt people use simpler language... what do
you mean by "develop the core competencies" ... make it simple buddy...
time implications, MBA is the next logical step towards my goal.
Okaish... BTW everything said above seems to answer "Why MBA?" and NOT "personal /
career goals"... so just give a thought wehter you are going on right track or not....[assuming
career golas post MBA]
Professionally, an MBA degree will begin my journey towards my goal. My short term goal after
an MBA would be to work with an organization for a span of 6 to 7 years.
The first line is just seems to be filler line.. what is the essence of that line... BTW what is the
idea of writing 6-7 years.. they didnt ask how much you will work in your first company? :mg:
This would give me the opportunity to apply the knowledge and skills I would have learnt
through the course. The experience thus gained would help me in realizing my long term goal –
my vision to be an entrepreneur.
okay..
Thus an MBA from VGSOM, IIT Kharagpur will equip me with sound management practices
would be the first step in achieving my goals.
Re-read and correct the structure...
I believe that VGSOM, with its world class infrastructure, richly experienced faculty, excellent
career development facilities and its stress on industry-specific knowledge and a thorough
process-level understanding can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence.
In VGSOM, I find an avenue which can unleash my leadership qualities and hone them to help
me in managing business with a positive attitude and confidence and ultimately help me in
making my vision come true.
Why you want to burden your reader.. why not write simple and neat sentences... what is the
need of wriitng "lenghty" senteces.. this essay is NOT TO show off your literary skills.. but
rather to get the reader interested in you...... common sense tells us that small but catchy lines
gets stuck in readers mind... [An example "Just do it" ... you already know which brand we are
talking about]... thats the funda applied here too... write small simple sentences which proivde
the essence...
SOP162rr
I aspire to become an entrepreneur and my aim is to direct and inspire a team of committed
employees in an organization which is working on the cutting edge of technology and makes a
difference to the lives of people. My quest for technology made me pursue electronics and
communication engineering. But during my learning period, I realized that shaping a great idea
into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills, a sound knowledge of
business fundamentals and a comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization.
I believe I possess some of the diverse range of skills required for being an entrepreneur. I
understood the importance of being a good leader by being the school captain at school level and
by being the class representative for three consecutive years at college. By simultaneously
pursuing a diploma in Information Technology alongside my engineering course, I learnt the
importance of time management and I realized the importance of planning, coordination and
control by planning and organizing an industrial tour for my batch mates. But, I feel that only a
thorough understanding of the principles of management will help me realize my goal and at the
same time, enhance my innate qualities.
time implications, I believe that an MBA would begin my journey towards my goal. My short
term goal after an MBA would be to work with a reputed organization which would give me the
opportunity to apply the knowledge and skills I would have learnt through the course. The
experience thus gained would help me in realizing my long term goal – my aspiration to become
an entrepreneur.
Personally, I wish to mingle with different people and get accustomed to new cultures. I have
had many unanswered questions about the quality of education in our country right from my
childhood and I hope to do my part in developing the education field by ensuring a policy of
each employee teaching an illiterate child, in my future organization. The main and only reason
why I want to be an entrepreneur is to make a difference to the lives of people, to create more
and better employment opportunities, to use technology for rural upliftment and to play a role in
promoting education of the masses.
Hence, an MBA from VGSOM, IIT Kharagpur which will equip me with sound management
practices would be the first step in realizing my goal. I believe that VGSOM, with its stress on
blending management with technology can mould and help me in facing the real industry with
aplomb and confidence and ultimately in realizing my goals.
SOP162rrr
I aspire to become an entrepreneur and my aim is to direct and inspire a team of committed
employees in an organization which is working on the cutting edge of technology and makes a
difference to the lives of people
Firstly, "directing" people is radically different from inspiring people....And i am not really sure,
the both of 'em go hand in hand....Forgive me, but the whole theme of making a difference is so
much cliched than even your bollywood lines..and you put it along with high-technology ???
:roll: :roll: To me, thats just an attempt, and a bad one at that, to try and come across as
*sensitive*.....
I understood the importance of being a good leader by being the school captain at school level
and by being the class representative for three consecutive years at college.
How???
By simultaneously pursuing a diploma in Information Technology alongside my engineering

course, I learnt the importance of time management
Again, How??
I realized the importance of planning, coordination and control by planning and organizing an
industrial tour for my batch mates. But, I feel that only a thorough understanding of the
principles of management will help me realize my goal and at the same time, enhance my innate
qualities.
First part convoluted and jargon....Second part....u justifying the need for more jargon ;) :mg:
:mg: And yea, don't "feel" , start "believing" :mg:
time implications, I believe that an MBA would begin my journey towards my goal
Isn't the MBA supposed to be en route to your goal....You backtrack saying you are gonna start
working towards your goal after MBA..When in reality you have earlier said that you would
need an MBA to realize your long-term goal..Contradictory...
Personally, I wish to mingle with different people and get accustomed to new cultures. I have
had many unanswered questions about the quality of education in our country right from my
childhood and I hope to do my part in developing the education field by ensuring a policy of
each employee teaching an illiterate child, in my future organization. The main and only reason
why I want to be an entrepreneur is to make a difference to the lives of people, to create more
and better employment opportunities, to use technology for rural upliftment and to play a role in
promoting education of the masses
Forgive me, but that sounds straight out of one of the year-end reviews that b-mags and other
mags carry out with pearls of wisdom from filmstars or models who believe India is just one
sentence away from all ills plaguing it..... :| You may really feel for it, but this is definitely not
the way of putting it across....The reader should have got a feel for this by now...But my
plugging in so many in a few sentences, i feel the import behind that is lost...
SOP163 - IITD
Through my industry experience as Software Engineer in my current organization, I’ve seen the
technical aspect of the business. The work experience has brought out & enhanced my man-
management, communication & team skills. I am a good team player, initiator & a good listener.
Working as a technical resource has provided me the unidimensional view i.e. the technical
aspect but at the same time shown me glimpses of the other aspects which lie beyond my scope
in particular & a techie in general.
I am drawn towards the organizational, behavioral, functional & financial aspects of the business
& have developed a keen inquisitiveness in them.
Thus to pursue my interest & fully unlock my potential, I’ve chosen a management career.
I need to enhance, channelize/canalize & formalize my soft skills. But more importantly, I need
to acquire specific skills provided by a formal education And this is where an MBA stepped in.
An MBA will equip me with those specific skills & help me in moving to a role which will give
me greater responsibilities. Such a role would allow better utilization of my skills.
A management career will provide me the flexibility & maneuverability in terms of roles in the
industry. Thus I had a long-term perspective in mind while opting for an MBA. My decision was
further vindicated by the experiences of people (both in my organization & society in general)
who are struggling to maintain the pace of their career. An MBA will provide a life-long
momentum to my career.
Undeniably, money too is an important consideration. An MBA will help me in reaching a

position where money will be an outcome.
To add to all these, there is something which has less to do with the business world, management
& money but more to do with me as a person; something very close to my heart. The 4 yrs. of
engineering were not just about the degree/qualification I got. It was a life-time experience &
ironically this realization came more after those 4 years. I am looking forward to a similar
enriching experience at your institute. Meeting new people, making new friends, imbibing the
culture & living another life-experience. It is an irresistible proposition which I’m dying to
accept :smile:
SOP164 - IITs
If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now
put the foundations under them.
-Henry David Thoreau
To say that I always wanted to get into a business school would be incorrect. All through my
formative years I was interested in science, a sense of amazement and curiousness showing the
way for me in my pursuits. These factors were what i think lead me to take up engineering as a
natural choice for my Bachelors degree.
But alongside this,I also began to take an active interest in Business and Management, such as
understanding Business terms and news. The fact that i am an avid reader, coupled with my
enthusiasm for knowledge, catapulted me into the world of shares and brands - a world where a
single decision can have enormous consequences.
But looking back now, its not surprising that i took such an interest in business - My dad is
managing a business. His business consists of manufacturing and distribution of paints. This has,
in no small measure, helped me a lot in understanding what businees means. I always had a first-
hand look at the process of running a business organisation. During the last couple of years i
transformed from a passive onlooker to an active participant, helping my dad run his business. I
started to appreciate the different nuances of businesses such as Dealer-Company relationship,
bureaucratic and labour hurdles and the like.
All through my education I have been fortunate to study in institutions, which imprinted in my
mind to have a positive outlook on life, which has been my biggest asset. My engineering course
also gave me ample scope for developing my skills. I played a proactive role in all college
activities, including organising inauguration of college fests and programmes like quizzes. My
extra curricular activites like quizzes, mock interviews, mimes and sports has further broadened
my all round skills.
Now that i am about to complete my graduation, i plan to lay a solid foundation to my life by
undergoing a course in MBA. I envision myself, during the coming years, efficently managing a
company, especially the marketing aspect, which I think is my forte. I know that in this
globalised world, you need to be good at everything especially technology-driven innovation. An
MBA from IIT ----- is tailormade for aspiring managers who understand that the coming century
would be driven by technolgy. Given my skills and and aptitude, I hope that I am able to study in
exalted halls of IIT -----.
SOP165 - NMIMS
“You cannot dream yourself into a character, you must hammer and forge yourself into one”-
James A. Froude.
Working in frontline sales is no-one’s first choice for a job but I had to start my career as a
Business Development Executive with an IT infrastructure vendor. Responsible for finding and
creating opportunities and handling the entire sales process for clients which included the
Software MNCs, BPOs and large educational institutes, I learnt the mental, physical and
emotional preparedness required for a hardcore sales job.
Interaction with a couple of NMIMS students enlightened me on the sunrise industry of life
insurance. Very soon, I joined a Leading life insurance company as Unit manager responsible for
recruiting and managing business from Financial advisors who work as freelancers. Training
them on selling skills, underwriting, consumer behaviour, concepts of insurance, sensex
dynamics, taxation aspects and the ethics of selling is an integral part of the profile. Managing
them has improved my people skills, convinced me on the importance of boundaryless bahviour
and taught me to be a mountain of patience.
However, on the personal front I have kept myself involved with my love for theatre,
choreography,fashion-shows,amteur modelling, toastmasters, and association with a School for
the Handicapped and Blind. I have done a world class workshop on Theatre, Voice Modulation
and also on Attitudinal skills and Personality development.
NMIMS with its philosophy of versatile management training and its strategic location, reputed
faculty, enviable reputation and a closely knit alumni network would be an ideal place for me to
equip myself with the requisite skills and pursue my MBA to catapult my career in the corporate
world.
SOP165r
Dude. how can u say "Working in frontline sales is no-one's first choice of job but i had to...."
??? U trying to say u made a heroic sacrifice or are u very bluntly demeaning the profession of
Sales ???
Imagine the adm panel going thru that ?
Fine, maybe it was a 'by chance entry" into the profession but you have gotto atleast project it in
a better light (in fact, u even mention somewhere before that 'it has become a choice'!)
Must say, u hv a very interesting exp profile - but oh "mountain of patience', why do u need an
mba ? the biographical sketch is bit sketchy in that respect - as in, u hv nicely put in ur past &
present - but wot abt ur future goals ? expected profile ?
"catapult my career in the corporate world" sounds really vague in that respect !
SOP166 - IITD
I aspire to become a management consultant in which I can leverage my diverse work experience
across differnt industries. What I enjoy most about the consulting world is being the agent of
change. The diversity of assignments undertaken by a consultant and the opportunity to network
with top corporates of various industrial sectors have aroused in me a great passion for
consulting.
My innate strengths like generating ideas, approaching a problem pragmatically, honoring

commitments coupled with my 3 years of professional work experience have provided a great
platform to launch my dream career. A rigorous MBA programme at this stage shall help in
moulding me into a consummate consultant by grooming my personality, by honing my
leadership skills in a structured way besides inculcating in me the nuances of management.
A great brand name, an excellent industry interface, courses aligning with current economic
trends, the opportunity to be involved in the department's consulting assignments will make IIT
Delhi the ideal place to pursue my MBA. I am confident that IIT Delhi, with its eclectic student
community and high profile faculty, will make my next two years a great investment for lifetime.
SOP167 - IITM
"The secret of joy in work is contained in one word - excellence. To know how to do something
well is to enjoy it. Pearl S. BUCK"
My foremost goal is to enjoy my work and be expert in what I learn from hereon I desire to be in
decision making cadre of an organization and prove myself in long run. I believe that technical
knowledge and managerial skills go together. With a technical degree that I have and
management degree that I am aspiring will help me in becoming a better manager.
I started my career with Godrej & Boyce Mfg. Co. Ltd and saw significant development of my
maturity and markedly improved self-discipline towards. My career goals I strongly believe that
I have some innate qualities to be successful manager I have also been trying to inculcate in
myself the various qualities needed to be a successful manager.
One of distinguishing characteristics is my versatility. I have never been a great performer but
never been a poor performer either. After my school I focused on my personality grooming and
went on to win Prince Lucknow’01 (Congeniality). ). Few months after joining Godrej & Boyce
I was chosen as specialist for a new product ahead of my senior colleagues. I have tried to
revamp current working environment of my division by taking care of dealers’ miseries. I have
been actively focusing on brand building of product for which I have been specialist. I have
passion for traveling and keenness to interact with people from different background, this has
broadened my outlook.
IIT-Madras is a renowned institution with fineness in teaching methodology, superior industry

interaction, world class infrastructure, experienced faculty and excellent research base which go
in hand with my professional dream
SOP168 - General
Please detail the five-year plan for your career including the jobs you would like to have, how
you would leverage your education, and how you would otherwise prepare yourself for this path.
Tell us why your goals make sense given your plan and your background
On passing out in 2004 from the __Engineering College, Mumbai, I was determined to pursue a
career that would give something more than the routine desk job.My search, though frustrating,
was fruitful as I was offered a job as a Senior Officer in ICICI Bank Ltd., the largest private
sector bank in India in its Retail Asset and Product Group.
Making my mark at the bank was going to be a tough ask, as I had little knowledge of the
industry and most of my colleagues were armed with MBA degrees. A training on Basics of
Finance and Banking at Institute of Finance & Management Research, Chennai, set me on my
way and there was no looking back since then. I worked as a Collection Manager in the Credit
Card Department heading the third bucket of delinquency, a portfolio size of over $4 million for
3 regions.
Apart from challenging my analytical and logical skills, this job introduced me to various aspects
of management like people and time management, planning, delegation and multitasking.
Managing a team of 25 executives and 2 collection agencies was a challenge but never a problem
as I had performed jobs with huge responsibilities in the past, as the Finance head of the college
for inter college cultural fests, as the Secretary of IEEE and as the Organizer for inter college
technical fests. Improvising at every step was my motto thus researching for new and creative
ways of performing the required tasks. As I started handling more responsibilities I grew from
strength to strength, improving my decision-making skills, human resource management skills,
public relations skills and understanding organizational psychology and behavioral patterns.
Finance is the lifeblood of business. With a freak encounter with a book ‘Beating the Street’ on
Equity Markets by the legendary Peter Lynch and my own small investments in the financial
markets I started following the markets on a regular basis and then decided to pursue a career in
the Financial Services industry.
A perfect opportunity to begin this transformation arose in the form of a position as an Associate
at Bonanza Portfolio Ltd. Here I worked in the Risk Management Group, monitoring the trading
activities of different branches and taking important risk management decisions. I am also
involved in opening up branches at different locations and ensuring their smooth operations.
Through this assignment I learned a tremendous amount about business, and gained useful
exposure to the world of Finance.
I successfully completed certification programs in Capital Markets, Derivatives Core Module

and Commodities Module offered by the National Stock Exchange, Mumbai. I also went through
various training programs like Technical Analysis and Stock Market operations conducted by the
Bombay Stock Exchange. The very idea of applying my newly acquired knowledge in the
industry excites me. My education and work experience have provided me with an excellent
introduction to business and have sparked my interest in finance. However, a strong foundation
is required before I tread into that territory and thus the need for an MBA- to broaden my horizon
and not restrict myself to any particular domain in the Financial Services industry.
Given that finance drives business, this makes financial specialists integral to every major
business decision. On passing out from (School-name) School of Business, I wish to embark on a
career with one of the leading investment banking firms of global repute. A career in investment
banking is fast, challenging, exciting and extremely demanding. In three to five years, once I
have become adept in financial analyses, drafting prospectuses, preparing business presentations
and other financial advisory work, I will move into a senior associate position. Here I will
develop my abilities to anticipate client needs and to engineer solutions that address these needs.
Its unarguable that different individuals see the world with a unique perspective since every
individual undergoes a unique process of learning and comes from a different background and
the same applies to me. But my academic background, leadership qualities, diverse experience,
ideology, aspirations, career goals and a never-say-die attitude towards learning and improvising
make me a suitable candidate for graduate study at your university.
SOP168r
On passing out in 2004 from the __Engineering College, Mumbai, I was determined to pursue a
career that would give something more than the routine desk job.My search, though frustrating,
was fruitful as I was offered a job as a Senior Officer in ICICI Bank Ltd., the largest private
sector bank in India in its Retail Asset and Product Group.
Instead of frustrating write something which means "difficult"
Making my mark at the bank was going to be a tough ask, as I had little knowledge of the
industry and most of my colleagues were armed with MBA degrees. A training on Basics of
Finance and Banking at Institute of Finance & Management Research, Chennai, set me on my
way and there was no looking back since then. I worked as a Collection Manager in the Credit
Card Department heading the third bucket of delinquency, a portfolio size of over $4 million for
3 regions.
Apart from challenging my analytical and logical skills, this job introduced me to various aspects
of management like people and time management, planning, delegation and multitasking.
Managing a team of 25 executives and 2 collection agencies was a challenge but never a problem
as I had performed jobs with huge responsibilities in the past, as the Finance head of the college
for inter college cultural fests, as the Secretary of IEEE and as the Organizer for inter college
technical fests. Improvising at every step was my motto thus researching for new and creative
ways of performing the required tasks. As I started handling more responsibilities I grew from
strength to strength, improving my decision-making skills, human resource management skills,
public relations skills and understanding organizational psychology and behavioral patterns.
The last para needs a lot of snipping off. Esp stuff to do with college time. Re-read the question
its oriented towards the future - what you want to be and what you want to do etc. While you are
still stuck with the past so far. I understand you are developing "ground" for what you want to
say but still this is way too long.
Finance is the lifeblood of business. With a freak encounter with a book ‘Beating the Street’ on
Equity Markets by the legendary Peter Lynch and my own small investments in the financial
markets I started following the markets on a regular basis and then decided to pursue a career in
the Financial Services industry.
A perfect opportunity to begin this transformation arose in the form of a position as an Associate
at Bonanza Portfolio Ltd. Here I worked in the Risk Management Group, monitoring the trading
activities of different branches and taking important risk management decisions. I am also
involved in opening up branches at different locations and ensuring their smooth operations.
Through this assignment I learned a tremendous amount about business, and gained useful
exposure to the world of Finance.
I successfully completed certification programs in Capital Markets, Derivatives Core Module

and Commodities Module offered by the National Stock Exchange, Mumbai. I also went through
various training programs like Technical Analysis and Stock Market operations conducted by the
Bombay Stock Exchange.
You are talking about your past till *now*. That is waaaaay too much detail. Try preparing a
crisp resume where you put in all the trainings. So you can just remove the details over here. No
one is interested to know the *exact* name of the course and where you did it and stuff. That is
resume stuff.
The very idea of applying my newly acquired knowledge in the industry excites me. My
education and work experience have provided me with an excellent introduction to business and
have sparked my interest in finance. However, a strong foundation is required before I tread into
that territory and thus the need for an MBA- to broaden my horizon and not restrict myself to any
particular domain in the Financial Services industry.
Given the nature of the question your answer should be more tightly bound. And you got a very,
very strong reason (from what I can judge), you are not doing justice to it in this paragraph. Try
reading more sample essays to know hwo you can more clearly articulate what you want to do
with the background.
Given that finance drives business, this makes financial specialists integral to every major
business decision. On passing out from (School-name) School of Business, I wish to embark on a
career with one of the leading investment banking firms of global repute. A career in investment
banking is fast, challenging, exciting and extremely demanding. In three to five years, once I
have become adept in financial analyses, drafting prospectuses, preparing business presentations
and other financial advisory work, I will move into a senior associate position. Here I will
develop my abilities to anticipate client needs and to engineer solutions that address these needs.
I have NFI about IB but could it be possible to give more detials. For example in MC you might
want to say which domain, what type etc. But you are just saying IB. Add more details. More
depth to the job description.
Its unarguable that different individuals see the world with a unique perspective since every
individual undergoes a unique process of learning and comes from a different background and
the same applies to me. But my academic background, leadership qualities, diverse experience,
ideology, aspirations, career goals and a never-say-die attitude towards learning and improvising
make me a suitable candidate for graduate study at your university.
Have they asked you how you would contribute to the class with your exp ? Why answer
somethign that has not been asked in the 1st place ? :)
SOP169 - IITD
“A dream becomes a goal when action is taken towards its achievement – Bo Bennett”.
My medium term goal for the next 8-10 years would be to work for a business consultancy firm
which provides me an ample opportunity to grow as a professional and to do a lot of process
learning. This will help me to work towards my long term goal which is to set up a firm that can
fill the slot in few areas of the rural India besides providing employment to few people and of
course to gain some profit as well. The achievement of these goals would require strong
analytical, business, economy and managerial skills and I believe an MBA
degree would be appropriate to work towards these skills.
The 19 months stint with my current organization has developed in me an inquisitiveness in

knowing the organizational aspects in addition to the technical aspects. I have developed the
qualities like team work, efficient coordination of activities as is evident from my stint in the
Tsunami Relief Camp at Tamil Nadu where I have led a team that took care of activities like
building huts and distributing provisions. An MBA degree will not only help me in acquiring
business knowledge but also helps in enhancing my leadership, planning and managerial skills.
IITD DMS with its fineness in teaching methodology, superb industry interaction, world-class
infrastructure, experienced faculty and excellent research base will definitely provide me a
platform that can give me a head start to achieve my goal. Hence, I find this place worth
investing my two years for gaining strong business knowledge and hence work towards
realization of my goal.
SOP170 - IIFT
"What are your broad career objectives and how does IIFT fit into them"(word limit 100)
My short term goal is to be in the middle managerial level, while in the long run I plan to
become an entrepreneur after gaining adequate experience and garnering in depth knowledge
about the industry. My course at the graduate level i.e. Production & Industrial Engineering has
prepared the necessary foundation for me to acquire a managerial perspective to supplement my
technical knowledge.
Geographical constraints have ceased to exist and India is rapidly becoming a global player in
the economic arena. Thus the need of the hour is for managers with a global perspective. I
believe the well rounded curriculum at IIFT will assist in enablingme to fulfill that need.
SOP171 - IITKgp
Having been brought up by father in a managerial position and a lecturer mom, I have always
experienced a conducive family environment where all-round excellence is a norm. Other than
excelling in academics throughout, I have also won numerous awards in extra curricular
activities and have loved to organize these events at various stages.
I was selected in the very 1st company I applied for in campus-placements and during the
extensive TCS training, I realized my potential in managing and leading people effectively,
which was further recognized by TCS as they awarded me “Outstanding” for life skills &
personality.
In TCS I ve been contributing effectively to my project for US Pharma major “Eli Lilly & Co”
by providing continual enhancements to the system . Direct interaction with the U.S clients &
application of technical skills needed to solve the system issues in a stringent time frame have
added to my self confidence & capabilities to manage demanding situations effectively .
Few years down the line, I aspire to be a part of the senior management in a leading corporate
house & contribute effectively by leading change, applying thought and creative ideas and
setting an example by my excellence. I wish to explore the unlimited dimensions of the corporate
world where I can use my experience in software industry and thus apply technology in
managing challenging situations better.
To achieve my career goals, I need to learn much more about current developments and acquire
hands-on experience of business analysis. MBA at VGSOM will provide me with theoretical
understanding, an in depth idea of practical approaches in aiding managerial decision-making
and research skills to enable me to develop an expertise in the core areas of business strategies
and global corporate operations.
My self confidence, acumen & good communication skills have been my winning edge
throughout. I have the potential waiting to be explored, exploited and polished by a premier
educational institute like IIT-Kgp where I can learn, interact with the best brains of the nation,
get brilliant guidance & use the state-of-the-art facilities to realize my goal.
Personally I wish to strike a perfect balance between my professional & family life, continue to
make my parents proud & live my life with integrity. Also in my own way, I wish to pay back to
the society by some community service to spread smiles all around. Following my passions &
hobbies deeply, I would strive to live my life to the fullest.
The feedback from my acquaintances at VGSOM makes me believe that they are perfectly able
to balance the grilling academic pressures with loads of fun-filled activities leading to an
immense personal growth at an individual level by being surrounded by excellence all around.
SOP172 - IIMK
Q- Why do u wish to go for a managerial career?

Ans. - Attending the Entrepreneurship Development Workshop program in college aroused a
keen interest in me towards the managerial field.I realized that an MBA would give me the
multidisciplinary approach needed to excel in the corporate world.As a manager i would get an
oppurtunity to interact an learn from people with diverse backgrounds.
Moreover it will equip me with new(varied?) ideas,skill sets and help me appreciate different
perspectives to a situation.These are the reasons as to why i wish to for a management career.
Q.2)What alternative careers are you considering and why?
Ans.- Alternatively i would work for a couple of years in the industry and learn the nuances of
everyday working of an organisation.This would go a long way in helping me acquire the
required knowledge,idea needed for the realisation of my dreams which is to start my own
company.
Q.3)Describe your strengths and wewakneses as identified by you.
Ans.- I am a man of initiative.This was best exemplified in me taking the lead in forming the
ISTE Students Chapter in my college.Also i have a good sense of humour and make friends
easily.
I wish i were a little more assertive.
Q.4)What is your most significant accomplishment so far?
Ans. My most significant accomplishment so far, apart from clearing CAT, has been clearing the
SSB interview for admission to National Defence Academy.I secured an All India Rank 129 out
of approximately 75000 students who appeared for this exam.
SOP173 - General
Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. I would take this one step
further and say Shoot for the moon. If you aim well enough you will surely hit it.
That is feeling that drives me. I believe that nothing is impossible to achieve, if you want it bad
enough and are willing to work hard for it.
I started my own business when I was in class XI and had it running on profit after a few months.
It was not easy considering I was just out of school maybe a bit immature, however with true
dedication and pure hard work we were among the top in the
entire city. I continued to study and work at the same time. When I joined Engineering I handed
over the business to my family members and joined Impact Inc. which is a leading advertising
agency in Shillong. During my tenure at the company I learnt many things worked in various
projects, competed with the best in their fields , lost a few and won a few. However the treasure
that I gained was the ton of experience and self confidence.
I got the wonderful opportunity to join Seng Samla, a charitable based NGO in Shillong and as a
volunteer offered my duties to the maximum. I was also
a part of the team that organized and executed relief operations in riot affected Block 1 of
Meghalaya.
At the same time I passed my BE (Information Technology) with an overall percentage of 70.60.
After the completion of my degree I came to Delhi and joined Wipro BPO as an outsourced
technical consultant for Washington Mutual.
This was my first chance to work with one of the big names in IT sector. I got to work learn and
develop soft skills like customer service and how to work in a group. I made the most of this
opportunity and was selected to be a part of a pilot team for a test in quality assurance. I was then
promoted and made an Internal Quality Analyst for the entire process managing a team of about
20 agents.
However now I want to take my learning curve to the next level and develop skills such as good
decision making, leadership along with my academic qualification .A B-School would be the
best place to learn this , since events like group discussions, case studies , group trips are a part
of the daily routine. You get to work in teams and learning groups and get a chance to apply your
theoretical knowledge.
I aspire to get into <institution name> because of <details about B school>.
On graduating from <institution name> I would apply my knowledge in the real life arena and
strive to make my institution proud
SOP174 - IIMB
The importance of good education has always been stressed upon in my family. Also, simplicity,
hardwork and a constant endeavour to try and broaden my horizon of skills and knowledge are
some of the ideals that i have always cherished.
I have always found great thrill in being a part of a team and working towards a common goal.
While in college i participated in a number of team events. But inspite of having a great desire to
succeed we often failed to perform to our true potential.
This made me realise that there are a host of other skills that are required inorder to build a great
team.After finishing my Engineering i started working in my company where interactng with my
colleagues and manager further strengthened my beleifs in the importance of management
education.
I think management education with it's roots in a wide range of social sciences including
economics, psychology, mathematics, statistics etc will give me a fresh perspective towards the
events around me and will further help me devolope myself as a complete and better individual.
SOP175 - IIMB
The opportunity to pursue a management course at IIM Bangalore brings me closer to the
realization of my long term goals – the application of technology for mass consumption. Such a
goal requires a synergy of technology and corporate understanding. The foundations of this have
been laid by the virtue of my family background, strong emphasis on values and motivation to
excel academically. The passion for computers and analytical abilities drove me to pursue
B.Tech. in Computer Science. Apart from academics I forayed into organizing events, forming
technical clubs and participating in sports. I also developed and implemented the softwares
“Online Registration” and “Automated Registration System” for use within MNNIT. Such
activities brought to focus the importance of management techniques and skills thereof. I think a
PGP course would provide me with the right set of tools along with a competitive and learning
environment. This would help in developing an eclectic blend of technology, logic and
management – all packaged into one.
SOP175r
somehow the passion seems to be missing in this one. its got pretty much everything..why u want
to go for MBA, what u wish to do..what you have done etc.. but somehow the zip is missing :mg:
other than that, the sop is pretty much ok. not any holes to poke in. but i recall IIMB has a
questionnaire rather than just a SOP..or have they revised it this year? if its only the "why MBA"
sop, you might wanna put in some more stuff about the career progression..which specialization
etc. if u have ur goals in mind, then use this to ur advantage. most people wouldnt know what
they want to do..on the other hand, you could probably chart out a timeline; which companies
you'd go for..how much time would u typically spend there..which sector woul you be looking
at..when would you break away to do your own thing etc.
SOP176 - GLIM
How a management degree fits in with your personal goal for the future? (450w)
My personal long-term goal for the future is closely related to my dream of becoming a
distinguished academician and much sought-after business consultant. As an academician, I will
have the chance to mentor young leaders and to pursue academic research in my area of
interest.In the role of consultant, I will be associated with the crucial decision-making processes
that would shape the destiny of a firm. I believe that these two roles are complementary since
both require the ability to convert the specific expertise into reality. To chase such a dream, I
need a great deal of experience and a sound footing in the fundamentals.
Thanks to my present assignment as a Piping design engineer, I am well aware of the technical
aspects of a project.In this role I had to meet design deadlines, make presentations and hold
technical negotiations with the clients, motivate my junior colleagues as well as handle the
overall co-ordination of the project. The field assignments at Tamilnadu Petroproducts Ltd(TPL)
and ShRiram Fibres(SRF)have made me adept in dealing with semi-skilled labourers and
commissioning problems. In short, a stint of 3 1/2 years in the field of engineering has given me
the confidence that I can contribute to solving complex real-time problems both as a team
member and as a team leader. Apart from my regular role as Pipng Lead Engineer at IDEA Ltd
and subsequently now at Alstom Projects, I was also involved in mentoring trainee
engineers.Though infact I relish being a technical expert, to pursue my long-term goal I must
enhance my skill sets and acquire more business domain knowledge.
Borrowing words from Great Lakes' brochure, "Post-graduate program in business management
is intended to prepare the students to understand the key interactions among the functional areas
of a business system, appreciate the need to have a cross-functional perspective to analyzing
issues in business systems and apply key concepts in addressing these issues to arrive at
meaningful solutions." Striking a chord, I expect this management degree with my technical
background will facilitate me in accomplishing my long-term dreams. I believe the opportunity
for networking and peer-to-peer learning during a formal management degree would be
tremendous. My short-term goal after this program is to work with an organization for a
considerable amount of time since I want to apply the knowledge and skills I learned through the
course and leverage my experience. Then, after gaining reasonable managerial experience, I
would like to move towards my long-term ambition by pursuing a doctorate in management and
part-time teaching assignments.
SOP176r
My personal long-term goal for the future is closely related to my dream of becoming a
distinguished academician and much sought-after business consultant. As an academician, I will
have the chance to mentor young leaders and to pursue academic research in my area of
interest.In the role of consultant, I will be associated with the crucial decision-making processes
that would shape the destiny of a firm. I believe that these two roles are complementary since
both require the ability to convert the specific expertise into reality. To chase such a dream, I
need a great deal of experience and a sound footing in the fundamentals.
If you really want to be an academician plus industry consultant types you need to have a Phd
from one of the top Bschools of the world. So you need to be very clear about when you want to
do that etc. etc.
Thanks to my present assignment as a Piping design engineer, I am well aware of the technical
aspects of a project.In this role I had to meet design deadlines, make presentations and hold
technical negotiations with the clients, motivate my junior colleagues as well as handle the
overall co-ordination of the project. The field assignments at Tamilnadu Petroproducts Ltd(TPL)
and ShRiram Fibres(SRF)have made me adept in dealing with semi-skilled labourers and
commissioning problems. In short, a stint of 3 1/2 years in the field of engineering has given me
the confidence that I can contribute to solving complex real-time problems both as a team
member and as a team leader. Apart from my regular role as Pipng Lead Engineer at IDEA Ltd
and subsequently now at Alstom Projects, I was also involved in mentoring trainee
engineers.Though infact I relish being a technical expert, to pursue my long-term goal I must
enhance my skill sets and acquire more business domain knowledge.
Hmm.......are you sure you want to put what you have done over here ? This essay should talk
about LA-LA LAND and your plan to get there. You are talking about past. Check if this thing
can be put in any other place (Im sure there are multiple essays)
Borrowing words from Great Lakes' brochure, "Post-graduate program in business management
is intended to prepare the students to understand the key interactions among the functional areas
of a business system, appreciate the need to have a cross-functional perspective to analyzing
issues in business systems and apply key concepts in addressing these issues to arrive at
meaningful solutions." Striking a chord, I expect this management degree with my technical
background will facilitate me in accomplishing my long-term dreams. I believe the opportunity
for networking and peer-to-peer learning during a formal management degree would be
tremendous. My short-term goal after this program is to work with an organization for a
considerable amount of time since I want to apply the knowledge and skills I learned through the
course and leverage my experience. Then, after gaining reasonable managerial experience, I
would like to move towards my long-term ambition by pursuing a doctorate in management and
part-time teaching assignments.
Whoaaa !! You are wasting too much real-estate space on your essays. What value addition is it
when you are quoting something from their brochure ? Is your objective to impress them with the
fact that you have done your research ? Even if yes, then it does not meet the objective.
Okay so you do get to your doctorate plans. But why wait this long, the curiosity is up there and
Im waiting for you to get it. But you do not write even a single line about it !!! That is criminal.
You should be telling exactly what your plans for a Phd is and ALSO why MBA before that and
maybe how many years you want to work before the Phd. Get the drift ?
Also, no one of the stuff you put in the last para actually need to be in this essay. You are talkign
about "Why GLAKES ?" whereas the essay question is not about that.
SOP177 - Nirma
Having an analytical and creative bent mind I have pursued my graduation in electrical and
electronics engineering. The course has improved my analytical skills and developed my ability
to visualize situations and arrive at a practical solution. I have done my final year project in
Embedded systems called “Universal Buffer” which is mainly applied in the field of Biometrics.
I was the team leader in my project and my role was to build the hardware and edit the project
report. My hobbies are listening music, cooking, dancing and watching TV. I stood second at a
dance competition called “Rhythms” held at my college.
My short-term goal is to be in the middle managerial level. After gaining adequate experience
and garnering in depth knowledge about the industry, in the long run I plan to become an
entrepreneur in technology. The achievements of these goals require strong analytical, business,
economy and managerial skills. I believe an MBA degree would be appropriate to work towards
these skills.
Also a MBA would mean an opportunity to interact with a variety of people, coming from varied
backgrounds. As some of my batch mates may have work experience, they can give me valuable
inputs about the industry.
I believe Nirma University with its excellent faculty, infrastructure, course and competitive
environment will help me achieve my career objective.
SOP178 - Nirma
250words
“I am just one
But still I am One
I cannot do everything
But still I can do Something
And just because I cannot do everything
I will not leave the something that I can do”
- Helen Keller
I am driven by a zest to make things happen! I aspire to secure a significant place for myself in
the corporate world so as to be at the helm of affairs and decision making situations. My long
term career objective is to establish and run an indigenous software solutions company that takes
up innovative ideas and converts them into marketable products and services, generating wealth
for its stakeholders and lasting value for its clients.
The first logical step would be to complete my MBA from a reputed institution like the Institute
of management of NirmaUniversity. Through this I would gain knowledge about the various
areas and spheres of management and also harness the requisite skills to run an organization like
the communication as well as analytical skills. I would also benefit from the faculty, industrial
interaction as well as the infrastructure of the institute, so that instead of relying only on intuition
I can leverage my decisions to solve the problems in an organization through a well informed
decision making process.
I come from an educated industrial family and this has helped me truly understand the
importance of management in all spheres of life. I am in the final year of BCA (Bachelor of
Computer Applications). This program has helped me gain the requisite technical knowledge
required in the development of software packages through programming in languages like C++
and JAVA.
Thus I believe that an MBA would act as a catalyst that would give me a head start in the right
direction towards my short as well as long term career objectives.
SOP178r
I am driven by a zest to make things happen! I aspire to secure a significant place for myself in
the corporate world so as to be at the helm of affairs and decision making situations
Phew....Ain't that a tad aggressive attitude?? :roll:
My long term career objective is to establish and run an indigenous software solutions company
that takes up innovative ideas and converts them into marketable products and services,
generating wealth for its stakeholders and lasting value for its clients.
hehe....Replace software with any product and it still makes sense, ain't it....What does that say??
That this sentence has been lifted straight from stakeholder 101 :mg:
The first logical step would be to complete my MBA from a reputed institution like the Institute
of management of NirmaUniversity. Through this I would gain knowledge about the various
areas and spheres of management and also harness the requisite skills to run an organization like
the communication as well as analytical skills. I would also benefit from the faculty, industrial
interaction as well as the infrastructure of the institute, so that instead of relying only on intuition
I can leverage my decisions to solve the problems in an organization through a well informed
Again, Nirma university here could be replaced by any other college's name....And thats a scary
proposition..But you definitely need to customize your SOP with respect to the unique offerings
of a college and how that fits into your long-term/short-term goals.....Why say that the first
logical step is doing MBA....You will be asked back how the thousands of non-MBAs have
succeeded...Why not try to implement and then come back to an MBA so you could structure
your internal processes much better.....
I come from an educated industrial family and this has helped me truly understand the
importance of management in all spheres of life.
How??
I am in the final year of BCA (Bachelor of Computer Applications). This program has helped me
gain the requisite technical knowledge required in the development of software packages through
programming in languages like C++ and JAVA.
So???
Thus I believe that an MBA would act as a catalyst that would give me a head start in the right
direction towards my short as well as long term career objectives.
You haven't touched upon the reasons and you conclude here that MBA is the catalyst.....
SOP179 - Nirma
Born and brought up in a business class family I was always curious about two fundamental
things.
* How things work?

* How to make things work?
To find answer to first of these questions I went for my technical course and completed
Electronics Engineering from Pune University. Now as far as the second is concerned, I think a
MBA degree will help me answer that. Making things work for one needs lot of discipline,
integrity and knowledge about how to manage? Management is the most important part of ones
life be it managing ones time, finances or business. I firmly believe that a MBA degree will help
me learn the principles and fundamentals of management and improve in every sphere of life by
increasing my efficiency and productivity.
Working as a Channel Development Specialist for over one and a half year in DirectI I have been
exposed to various facets of management, but these learnings are only part of what makes a good
manager. Nirma promises to prepare professionals who are effective, socially responsible and
can manage and lead in the increasingly complex and dynamic global business scenario.
Synchronous with this vision of creating world class leaders, I want to be in such a position
myself. The Electronics engineering course and my work experience as a professional has given
me not only technical know how of my subjects but also an opportunity to interact and learn
from highly competitive personnel. Nirma would surely provide even better opportunities
because of the diverse academic background if its students. I believe MBA from NIRMA would
increase my productivity manifolds and provide the right impetus to my career.
SOP180 - IITB
My strengths are my virtues, without which I would not have been in a position where I am now.
I am a person well-groomed with the qualities like hard-working nature, self-motivating,
optimism and strong will power. I look at my life as an opportunity to succeed and also an
esteemed institution to learn from my everyday experiences.
I always believe that technology plays a key role in the growth of an organization and further
through the efficient management of technology, an organization can grow in leaps and bounds
and technological and managerial aspects within an organization go hand-in-hand. My goal has
always been to become a key player in the growth of an organization. The four-year engineering
course at National Institute of Technology, Surat has developed logical and creative thinking
abilities in me. After my graduation, I joined Computer Sciences Corporation, an IT company
where I am presently working as a system support engineer. The 19 months experience in the
company has exposed me to various business related aspects and organizational aspects in
addition to the technical aspects. Moreover, my stints in the past where I was a co-coordinator of
my hostel mess and also leading a team at Tsunami Relief Camp in Pondicherry that took care of
activities like Huts-building and provision distribution made me to understand the importance of
leadership, planning, delegation and time management skills. A techno-managerial profile will
definitely help me to play a key role in the industry. This profile needs a holistic idea of various
business functions and also the skill and knowledge to face the challenges thrown by the ever
changing business environment. I feel an MBA degree will make me equipped with these skills
and knowledge.
SJMSOM, with its esteemed and research focused faculty characterized with versatile areas of
interest, diverse backgrounds and rich industrial experiences, eclectic student community,
excellent academic curriculum with an additional focus on Technology Management and superb
industry interaction can definitely help me to achieve my goal. So, I find this place much worthy
to invest my two years to bridge the gap between where I am and what I want to be.
SOP181 - FMS
My long term career goal is to become the top executive of a firm where I can utilize my
managerial skills and play the lead role in the success of the organisation.
I have always enjoyed handling huge responsibilities and facing challenging assignments
throughout my student life, more so during my professional life. My two years work experience
as a Software suite design engineer in XXX has enabled me to understand the dynamic nature
and various challenges involved in today’s corporate world. It has also made me realize the
necessity of strong leadership for the success of an organization however technologically
advanced the organization might be.
In order to realize my long term goal I believe along with my strong technical background i
should also hone my intellectual and interpersonal skills and have a proper understanding of the
indian and global business scenario. Also I intend to use the B school education to identify and
spread the solutions for our country’s social problems and persuade the entire society to take new
leaps
For achieving my career aim I want to pursue the Management programme in FMS, specializing
in Systems or Operations. I strongly believe FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty
of international standards and corporate exposure will broadbase my ability to handle dynamic,
unpredictable business world and real life situations and help me realize my dream.
SOP181r
My long term career goal is to become the top executive of a firm where I can utilize my
managerial skills and play the lead role in the success of the organisation.
=> Any IDea about which kind/type of organization?
I have always enjoyed handling huge responsibilities and facing challenging assignments
throughout my student life, more so during my professional life.
=> Any examples to supplement this ?
My two years work experience as a Software suite design engineer in XXX has enabled me to
understand the dynamic nature and various challenges involved in today’s corporate world. It has
also made me realize the necessity of strong leadership for the success of an organization
however technologically advanced the organization might be.
=> After using a decent amount of words allotted to you, now you've come up with your point..
Leadership. IF this is the crux of your SOP, then stress it early and strongly. Dont make genreric
statements like "dynamic nature" and "challenegs" and the likes. Use powerful terminology to
get your point across; just dont quote something for the heck of it !
In order to realize my long term goal I believe along with my strong technical background i
should also hone my intellectual and interpersonal skills and have a proper understanding of the
indian and global business scenario.
=> & why is an MBA programme essential for that. Where's the connection pal ?
Also I intend to use the B school education to identify and spread the solutions for our country’s
social problems and persuade the entire society to take new leaps
=> hmm..where does this come from? Out of the blue types. Doesnt gel at all with the rest of the
SOP
For achieving my career aim I want to pursue the Management programme in FMS, specializing
in Systems or Operations. I strongly believe FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty
of international standards and corporate exposure will broadbase my ability to handle dynamic,
unpredictable business world and real life situations and help me realize my dream.
=> generic lines. Pretty ok. Nothing wrong with them But no differentiating factor!!
SOP181rr
My career goal is to become the top executive of a firm where I can capitalize on my managerial
skills and apply various business concepts and strategies learnt during the MBA programme to
the success of the organization and to my own career growth.
As a Software Design engineer in XXX, I worked in a rapidly evolving technology,YYY. During
this work experience, I had the chance to see for myself the dynamic nature of today's market
and competition among various leading MNCs to gain market share. Further, it made me
understand the importance of strong leadership for the success of an organization irrespective of
the brand value of the product or growth of the sector.
The challenges I faced during my professional life made me realize that, in order to achieve my
long term career goal I should hone my business and interpersonal skills and have a proper
understanding of the way the world does business today. Further, since business problems span
multiple domains, its essential for me to have a sound knowledge in various fields like
marketing, finance, human resource, operations, economics etc. in order to successfully handle
them.
Towards achieving my career aspirations, I understand it is imperative to pursue a Management
programme, specializing in Systems or Operations. I strongly believe FMS with its strong
teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards and corporate exposure will broadbase
my ability to handle dynamic and unpredictable real life, business situations and help me realize
my dream.
SOP181rrr
My career goal is to become the top executive of a firm where I can capitalize on my managerial
skills and apply various business concepts and strategies learnt during the MBA programme to
the success of the organization and to my own career growth.
I would still like you to be a bit more objective, however as a 21-year old I guess that's all one
can afford to be objective about :mg: Thoda over the top types sound karta hai. But its okay.
As a Software Design engineer in XXX, I worked in a rapidly evolving technology,YYY. During

this work experience, I had the chance to see for myself the dynamic nature of today's market
and competition among various leading MNCs to gain market share. Further, it made me
understand the importance of strong leadership for the success of an organization irrespective of
the brand value of the product or growth of the sector.
Good.
The challenges I faced during my professional life made me realize that, in order to achieve my
long term career goal I should hone my business and interpersonal skills and have a proper
understanding of the way the world does business today. Further, since business problems span
multiple domains, its essential for me to have a sound knowledge in various fields like
marketing, finance, human resource, operations, economics etc. in order to successfully handle
them.
Good.
Towards achieving my career aspirations, I understand it is imperative to pursue a Management

programme, specializing in Systems or Operations. I strongly believe FMS with its strong
teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards and corporate exposure will broadbase
my ability to handle dynamic and unpredictable real life, business situations and help me realize
my dream.
Excellent !!! You knock the ball out of the park.
Just that the first paragraph sounds too bombastic and doesn't fit into the the clarity and
articulation that you have shown with the rest of the essay.
SOP182 - FMS-MS
Ever since my school days I have a great fascination towards services sector, IT industry in
particular. I have always dreamt of being in a powerful managerial position in an IT or IT related
company.
After having worked as Software suite designer for two years, I believe a MBA course focused
in IT service sector management will be the proper next step in my career. It will enable me to
understand business problems at the highest level and improve my ability to connect technology
to business.
Having a keen business acumen, awareness of technologies and a strong penchant for continuous
learning I believe I have the qualities needed to excel as a manager in the Services sector.
I would like to pursue the programme focused towards service sector in FMS as its one of the
most reputed management institutes in India and also the first one to come up with such a
focused programme
SOP183 - FMS
I want to pursue an MBA programme in Finance to integrate my IT skills with the Domain
knowledge which I will be getting by this program.I have been working in
XXX for nearly one year in finance and securites vertical.Though ,I was very much interested in
finance in general right from the start but my stint at securities vertical in XXX has given a
newdimension to my hobby of following financial markets.During the induction at XXX,I had
undergone a lots of trainings which were helpful in taking this decision of purusuing an MBA in
finance.
Today,technology is being adopted in every sector and most prominently in financial sector.Its
virtually impossible to think of financial sector operating without technology.
.I think with my technology background and having worked in one of india’s top most IT
companies will give me a very goodheadstart in terms of work profile after pursuing MBA in
finance from FMS which will complement my technology specialization.
After working in IT sector for one year,I have noticed that my natural inclination lies towards
domain specialization in finance.So ,the best way forward for me is to do an MBA in finance.I
have selected FMSas one of programmes for simple reason of being its strong background,brand
name,placements and the work profile being offered to students from FMS.
SOP184 - FMS-MS
After spending ayear in IT services sector for nearly one year,I have noticed a storng natural
inclination to integrate my IT skills with domain specialization.I think an MBA(MS) will help in
achieving my long term goal .Today,its time for technology adoption,no sector can remain
immune to this and especially the financial services sector.
The course MBA(MS) is a very niche course which is aimed at growing services sector .This
course will help me in my long term goal of combining my technology skills with my domain
knowledge which i ll be getting thr this course.
SOP185 - FMS
“The person who makes a success of living is the one who see his goal steadily and aims for it
unswervingly. That is dedication.”
This quote by Cecil B. DeMille, perhaps, best sums up me and my life so far. Since childhood,
machines have always fascinated me and with passage of time, it became by dream and passion
to start my own firm, preferably in the manufacturing sector. As a huge step in this direction, I
was fortunate enough to be admitted, by merit, into the department of mechanical engineering of
the prestigious College of Engineering, Guindy in Chennai.
However, during my internship at Hyundai Motor India Limited, I realised that moulding a great
idea into a successful and practically viable project requires a diverse range of skills, revolving
around both technology and management. An engineering background has provided me the vital
technical expertise in my field of study, mechanical engineering, apart from honing my ability to
analyze and reason. However, the nuances of managing my own enterprise can only be learnt
through an MBA. This realisation coupled with my basic penchant for management made
'Marketing management' my first choice, when it was offered to me as an elective in my 7th
semester'
With its excellent infrastructure, experienced faculty and a well established alumni network,
FMS provides the perfect setting for a budding entrepreneur like me to do my MBA. With an
MBA from your institute, I feel, I would possess the business acumen pertinent to undertake a
successful and rewarding career in the highly arduous corporate world.
SOP185r
“The person who makes a success of living is the one who see his goal steadily and aims for it
unswervingly. That is dedication.”
This quote by Cecil B. DeMille, perhaps, best sums up me and my life so far.
Okay !! You are a dedicated guy. Point noted. Wondering to see if the same thread follows in the
entire essay AND you can afford the extra words of the quote.
Since childhood, machines have always fascinated me and with passage of time, it became by
dream and passion to start my own firm, preferably in the manufacturing sector. As a huge step
in this direction, I was fortunate enough to be admitted, by merit, into the department of
mechanical engineering of the prestigious College of Engineering, Guindy in Chennai.
Is it possible to be admitted in Guindy without merit ? If no, then knock off the "by merit" word.
Else its okay. Overall your focus is on the past and I dont know if it really warrants so much
focus.
However, during my internship at Hyundai Motor India Limited, I realised that moulding a great
idea into a successful and practically viable project requires a diverse range of skills, revolving
around both technology and management. An engineering background has provided me the vital
technical expertise in my field of study, mechanical engineering, apart from honing my ability to
analyze and reason. However, the nuances of managing my own enterprise can only be learnt
through an MBA. This realisation coupled with my basic penchant for management made
'Marketing management' my first choice, when it was offered to me as an elective in my 7th
semester'
Viable means practical. So "practically viable" is redundant. Also, if its successful then its
obviously practical. So just keep it as "a successful project".
Otherwise its a very good paragraph. I liked the idea that you have mentioned you took a course
in Management. Something definitely that merits a mention in the SOP to show your interest, not
in the resume.
With its excellent infrastructure, experienced faculty and a well established alumni network,
FMS provides the perfect setting for a budding entrepreneur like me to do my MBA. With an
MBA from your institute, I feel, I would possess the business acumen pertinent to undertake a
successful and rewarding career in the highly arduous corporate world.
Fine, but frankly this paragraph looks like - you read one and you read 'em all :mg: However
there is nothing much you can do. Even if I were to write something it would similar so don't
sweat :mg:
My feedback:
In retropsect the "dedication" waala quote seems out of place as I do see the thread in the essay
that you are but nothing to substantiate such an opening line. Neither does it give you any food
for thought. So knock it off.
Para 1 dwells too much in your childhood. Anyone in India will say that people rarely get the
ephiphany fairy to visit them at such an early age. So I would put it frankly and say that I was
good in studies and very focussed and hence managed to get a seat in Guindy in my preferred
branch or something like that.
Para2 is the strongest point in your essay, whereas Para3 suffers from having very commonly
used words. Maybe its a good idea to use a thesaurus and replace some words such as - "a
successful and rewarding career in the highly arduous corporate world."
SOP186 - FMS
My Long term career Goal is to lead an organization of dynamic professionals to success in

every endeavor. From early on I realized an innate leadership capability as is demonstrated by
series of appointments in positions of responsibility ever since school days (Class
Representative, Student Council Member, Debating Society, Computer Society President Etc).
My experience in positions of responsibility has taught me how much I love to lead people, for
instance, recently as the Chief Student Coordinator of my college’s National Level Techfest.
I excelled in my engineering studies (including topping the college) which gave me a technical
grounding and helped me in developing a problem solving ability. However, I realize that the
solution to most problems is seldom purely technical.
During my internship at PricewaterhouseCoopers I was impressed by the clarity and razor-sharp

insight demonstrated by my MBA Bosses. My second internship in a startup exposed to greater
variety of functions – An experience I thoroughly enjoyed. I therefore concluded that
Management Education is a correct stepping stone for a career in industry. I foresee myself
leading a team of highly motivated professionals trying to solve exciting problems by leveraging
technical and managerial talent. I believe in innovation, excellence and entrepreneurship.
FMS is known to attract some of the best talent in its student and faculty. I have a passion for
learning and have always tried to be around smart people so that I may learn from them. I believe
that I will grow in such an exemplary environment. FMS is also reputed to have a very rigorous
academic program and coupled with its excellent industrial associations is an ideal starting point
of my journey.
SOP186r
My Long term career Goal is to lead an organization of dynamic professionals to success in

every endeavor. From early on I realized an innate leadership capability as is demonstrated by
series of appointments in positions of responsibility ever since school days (Class
Representative, Student Council Member, Debating Society, Computer Society President Etc).
My experience in positions of responsibility has taught me how much I love to lead people, for
instance, recently as the Chief Student Coordinator of my college’s National Level Techfest.
"how much i love to lead people" kinda stuck me as odd. You sound like Hitler re-born.
"lead an organization of dynamic professionals to success in every endeavour" Ouch !! Lets clear
the air a bit and bring in Mr.Objectivity :mg: Seriously though, you might want to be specific
what you want to do. This statement is empty and on the verge of being too idealistic. A true
leader might not have "dynamic" professionals all the time :mg:
I excelled in my engineering studies (including topping the college) which gave me a technical
grounding and helped me in developing a problem solving ability. However, I realize that the
solution to most problems is seldom purely technical.
Good enough. You might want to cut the redundancy by stating either you "excelled" or you
"topped the college".
During my internship at PricewaterhouseCoopers I was impressed by the clarity and razor-sharp

insight demonstrated by my MBA Bosses. My second internship in a startup exposed to greater
variety of functions – An experience I thoroughly enjoyed. I therefore concluded that
Management Education is a correct stepping stone for a career in industry. I foresee myself
leading a team of highly motivated professionals trying to solve exciting problems by leveraging
technical and managerial talent. I believe in innovation, excellence and entrepreneurship.
".....exposed to greater variety of functions – An experience ..." awkward sentence construction.
"Management Education" why the camel caps ?

"correct" stepping stone ?? Its a stepping stone or its not. There is nothing like an "incorrect"
stepping stone :mg:
"career in industry" ?? With a technical qualification you cannot have a "career in industry" ?
"I foresee myself leading a team of highly motivated professionals trying to solve exciting
problems by leveraging technical and managerial talent." Again sounds too bombastic. Without
being clear and objective.
"I believe in innovation, excellence and entrepreneurship." Why introduce this now? You are
sounding more like Anil Ambani :mg:
FMS is known to attract some of the best talent in its student and faculty. I have a passion for
learning and have always tried to be around smart people so that I may learn from them. I believe
that I will grow in such an exemplary environment. FMS is also reputed to have a very rigorous
academic program and coupled with its excellent industrial associations is an ideal starting point
of my journey.
"have always tried to be around smart people so that I may learn from them." ?? And what
happens if you need to lead a team of dullards? The underlying theme seems to be that you hate
idiots like me :mg:
Very bland last paragraph. QE might know better but I wouldn't rate FMS as a "rigorous
academic program".
Overall here is my take:
Keep the overall structure, be more objective. You come across as someone who is dazzled by
the power of an MBA and wants to be associated only with "smart" people. Can you throw some
light into what you want to do post-MBA? How about something less lofty like saying project
management to begin with and going on to being an CxO with cross-functional skills that an
MBA would provide you. Be clear to articulate both your short-term and long-term goals.
SOP106rr
My Long term career Goal is creating and leading a world class enterprise of dynamic
professionals focusing on innovation, cutting edge technologies, excellence and
entrepreneurship.
From early on I realized an innate leadership capability as is demonstrated by series of
appointments in positions of responsibility ever since my school days, for instance as Class
Representative, Student Council Member, Debating Society Member, Computer Society
President and most recently as the Chief Student Coordinator of college’s National Level
Techfest.
Excelling in my engineering studies (including topping the college) has given me a good
technical grounding and a problem solving ability. During my internship at
PricewaterhouseCoopers the clarity and razor-sharp insight demonstrated by my mentors with
management background greatly impressed me. My second internship in a startup exposed me to
the many functional aspects of business, of which I had very limited knowledge and experience.
I therefore concluded that management education would be a vital aid in achieving for my goal. I
believe working as a Project Manager / Leader after my MBA for a few years would give me the
adequate experience before starting out on my own.
FMS is known to attract some of the best talent in its student and faculty and has a history of
producing world-class business leaders for the past 50 years. FMS is also reputed to have a very
rigorous academic program with innovative teaching methodology and coupled with its excellent
industrial & academic associations as well as a strong alumni network is an ideal starting point of
my journey. I have a passion for learning and believe that I will grow in such an exemplary
environment.
SOP106rrr
My Long term career Goal is creating and leading a world class enterprise of dynamic
professionals focusing on innovation, cutting edge technologies, excellence and
entrepreneurship.
I don't think its still very focussed. Say that you want to lead a enterprise which focuses on
"innovation, cutting edge technologies" leading dynamic professionals towards "excellence".
From early on I realized an innate leadership capability as is demonstrated by series of

appointments in positions of responsibility ever since my school days, for instance as Class
Representative, Student Council Member, Debating Society Member, Computer Society
President and most recently as the Chief Student Coordinator of college’s National Level
Techfest.
Good enough.
Excelling in my engineering studies (including topping the college) has given me a good
technical grounding and a problem solving ability. During my internship at
PricewaterhouseCoopers the clarity and razor-sharp insight demonstrated by my mentors with
management background greatly impressed me. My second internship in a startup exposed me to
the many functional aspects of business, of which I had very limited knowledge and experience.
I therefore concluded that management education would be a vital aid in achieving for my goal. I
believe working as a Project Manager / Leader after my MBA for a few years would give me the
adequate experience before starting out on my own.
Good.
environment.
Good.
Great improvement from your last attempt. This one looks good to go.
SOP187 - FMS
The markets are moving towards an ever-increasing need for change makers. This has placed a
dramatic premium on those who take the time to properly equip themselves with the required
skills. I foresee my own career moving towards people management. This foresight along with
my entrepreneurial bent and affinity for technology will play a large role in the evolution of my
career. For me, the FMS programme is a significant component of this training.
I have discovered that an MBA provides a distinct advantage over those without. There is an
analytical nature inherent to MBA, which I believe is duplicable only by committing 2 years to
the academic study of business. It’s a preparation before embarking on a real thing. FMS
presents a right opportunity for this preparation with its career development facilities of world-
class infrastructure, a high quality team of pedagogy, excellent industry interaction and a very
competent environment.
With my hands on experience of working with people under different conditions like organizing
various technical symposiums or leading my college Chess team successfully in various
tournaments, I believe that I have learnt more in trying to understand people and overcame
certain misconceptions. My achievements are obvious as is indicated in the other sections of this
application. But if I could lay claim to my greatest achievement, it would be the understanding of
the people. ”Put yourself in their shoes and act accordingly ”. I learnt my lessons.
MBA, for me, would be a source of ‘practice, practice, practice’ before stepping onto the field,
life included. Based on my observations of FMS MBAs in action and the reputation of the
school, a FMS MBA would be a ‘perfect training’, so to speak.
SOP187r
The markets are moving towards an ever-increasing need for change makers. This has placed a
dramatic premium on those who take the time to properly equip themselves with the required
skills. I foresee my own career moving towards people management. This foresight along with
my entrepreneurial bent and affinity for technology will play a large role in the evolution of my
career. For me, the FMS programme is a significant component of this training.
"Change management" and "People Management" are 2 different (though inter-related concepts).
So though your starting talks about the former, the latter comes across as a dampner.
Otherwise, kinda okay. I might want to reduce the first 2 sentence into one for brevity.
I have discovered that an MBA provides a distinct advantage over those without. There is an
analytical nature inherent to MBA, which I believe is duplicable only by committing 2 years to
the academic study of business. It’s a preparation before embarking on a real thing. FMS
presents a right opportunity for this preparation with its career development facilities of world-
class infrastructure, a high quality team of pedagogy, excellent industry interaction and a very
competent environment.
How did you "discover" that MBA provides that advantage? The second sentence looks good but
frankly i'm confused. I know the "purpose" of this paragraph but feel you need to bring it out
with better words.
With my hands on experience of working with people under different conditions like organizing
various technical symposiums or leading my college Chess team successfully in various
tournaments, I believe that I have learnt more in trying to understand people and overcame
certain misconceptions. My achievements are obvious as is indicated in the other sections of this
application. But if I could lay claim to my greatest achievement, it would be the understanding of
the people. ”Put yourself in their shoes and act accordingly ”. I learnt my lessons.
How did you overcome the "misconceptions" ? As before, if you cannot tell a story then spare
the "bait" words. I think you have touched upon the quality of "empathy" very well. You can tell
a short story to drive the point home. It will gell well with your starting para as well, when you
attempted to talk something about people skills.
MBA, for me, would be a source of ‘practice, practice, practice’ before stepping onto the field,
life included. Based on my observations of FMS MBAs in action and the reputation of the
school, a FMS MBA would be a ‘perfect training’, so to speak.
Good point. Somehow, the nitpicker is worried about the intracasies of the choice of words and
sentence construction, but don't bother too much.
Overall its good but you need to be more crisp.
SOP188 - FMS
Growing up in a business family has exposed me to the intricacies and complexities of business
dynamics. I found that running a business was not only challenging but also highly satisfying and
rewarding. Hence I aspire to be a successful entrepreneur.
To acquire sound technical knowledge I did my engineering in Electronics and Communication

.I always strive for excellence in whatever I do and this is reflected in my academic records in
which I have consistently secured distinction. My enthusiasm to learn new things and explore
new ideas led to my presenting a paper in the National Conference on Image Processing held at
Indian Institute Of Science, Bangalore. I have won prizes in a number of inter-college and
intramural chess tournaments. Juggling between academics and extra-curricular activities has
taught me effective time management, multitasking and prioritizing. Organizing technical events
at the college level has helped me hone my organizational ability. These qualities I believe are
essential in the making of a successful business person.
In addition to the technical knowledge and right skill set, a formal management education will
equip me to face the challenges of the business environment and take decisions confidently. As I
have wanted to do my management studies in the best institute, FMS is my natural choice. The
presence of faculty of international standards, small batch size, and strong alumni network make
FMS unique. With its emphasis on excellence and leadership and innovative courses which
match my interests I believe that FMS will help me achieve my career goals.
SOP188r
Growing up in a business family has exposed me to the intricacies and complexities of business
dynamics. I found that running a business was not only challenging but also highly satisfying and
rewarding. Hence I aspire to be a successful entrepreneur.
Very good opening lines. Crisp and to the point. Immediately piques the interest of the reader.
To acquire sound technical knowledge I did my engineering in Electronics and Communication

.I always strive for excellence in whatever I do and this is reflected in my academic records in
which I have consistently secured distinction. My enthusiasm to learn new things and explore
new ideas led to my presenting a paper in the National Conference on Image Processing held at
Indian Institute Of Science, Bangalore. I have won prizes in a number of inter-college and
intramural chess tournaments. Juggling between academics and extra-curricular activities has
taught me effective time management, multitasking and prioritizing. Organizing technical events
at the college level has helped me hone my organizational ability. These qualities I believe are
essential in the making of a successful business person.
I cannot believe that I still don't have any flaws to pick. Excellent.
In addition to the technical knowledge and right skill set, a formal management education will
equip me to face the challenges of the business environment and take decisions confidently. As I
have wanted to do my management studies in the best institute, FMS is my natural choice. The
presence of faculty of international standards, small batch size, and strong alumni network make
FMS unique. With its emphasis on excellence and leadership and innovative courses which
match my interests I believe that FMS will help me achieve my career goals.
Hats off !! This SOP is perfect.
SOP189 - TISS
The MBA program of TISS provides the perfect training to achieve my entrepreneurial
ambitions. I am currently pursuing my bachelors in computer science engineering from XXX and
enjoy acquiring new skills and information, which help me to adapt to the fast-changing world,
as well as pique my interest in innovation.
My goal is to acquire skills and work in IT-enabled services companies or management
consultancies in a challenging environment. I feel that a business school would balance theory
with real world application and such a program would deepen my expertise and broaden my
perspectives. It would add value to my skill set and give a direction to my career.
I value the fact that learning does not stop at classroom level but rather continues through
fieldwork and extra-curricular activities. I have actively participated in workshops and hosted
events at school and college level apart from serving as the Joint Secretary of IEEE-Student's
chapter at our college. I was also the Head Prefect of my school. All these have given me
insights into management. Apart from listening to music and reading books, I also enjoy
watching sports like Formula 1 and have represented my school in CBSE zonal basketball
matches. I love meeting new people and making new friends.
SOP189r
The MBA program of TISS provides the perfect training to achieve my entrepreneurial
ambitions. I am currently pursuing my bachelors in computer science engineering from XXX and
enjoy acquiring new skills and information, which help me to adapt to the fast-changing world,
as well as pique my interest in innovation.
You talk about (a) Why MBA (b) Why TISS (c) Entrepreneurship (d) Innovation (e) Your
current undergrad (f) What you like in a whirlwind 2 sentences. 10 on 10 for brevity but a 0 on
10 for getting your point across.
Take it slowly. What is the introduction you want to start with? Focus on one point and take it
ahead.
My goal is to acquire skills and work in IT-enabled services companies or management

consultancies in a challenging environment. I feel that a business school would balance theory
with real world application and such a program would deepen my expertise and broaden my
perspectives. It would add value to my skill set and give a direction to my career.
Frankly, this second para is a lot better. I might be cynical if I say it sounds very hackeneyed but
I think its pardonable :mg:
I value the fact that learning does not stop at classroom level but rather continues through
fieldwork and extra-curricular activities. I have actively participated in workshops and hosted
events at school and college level apart from serving as the Joint Secretary of IEEE-Student's
chapter at our college. I was also the Head Prefect of my school. All these have given me
insights into management.
Very good. Though you might want to cut down the details a bit.
Apart from listening to music and reading books, I also enjoy watching sports like Formula 1 and
have represented my school in CBSE zonal basketball matches. I love meeting new people and
making new friends.
Isn't this mentioned in your resume. Even if no, then this looks incomplete. You might want to
merge it with some other part of the essay. Not like a coccyx.
SOP190 - FMS
I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand.My
endeavour has always been to become a successful manager occupying a significant position in
an organization where i utilize and use my knowledge to guide a team of individuals in achieving
the team goal and thereby driving my firm to new heights of success.
Having completed my bachelors in Information Technology from XYZ, this field has always
fascinated me. After my degree studies, I started working with ABC. This opened up a totally
new and fascinating world of science and technology to me. The flat orgranizational structure of
ABC provided me with some crucial insights on how various business decisions are taken in an
organization. I could easily realize that I need a comprehensive academic program to develop the
necessary management skills in myself.
In my view a leader can be successful only when he exhibits abilities like vision, strategy
management, risk management and most importantly belief in himself. He should be able to
effectively comprehend the current
business requirements and should have the vision to analyse direction of changing business
requirements in future.When i explored the PGDBM program in FMS, i could feel that this
program can quench my thirst for a degree in business administration.
FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards,corporate exposure
and rich alumni network can develop and enhance my abilities to handle the ever-changing and
unpredictable business world.I believe that together with the knowledge i acquired in my
undergraduation and with the new skills, thinking and knowledge i would gain at FMS, i can lay
down a stable foundation for myself to succeed in my dream role.
SOP190r
endeavour has always been to become a successful manager occupying a significant position in
an organization where i utilize and use my knowledge to guide a team of individuals in achieving
the team goal and thereby driving my firm to new heights of success.
Very generic but then sounds pretty okay.
Having completed my bachelors in Information Technology from XYZ, this field has always
fascinated me. After my degree studies, I started working with ABC. This opened up a totally
new and fascinating world of science and technology to me. The flat orgranizational structure of
ABC provided me with some crucial insights on how various business decisions are taken in an
organization. I could easily realize that I need a comprehensive academic program to develop the
necessary management skills in myself.
"Having completed my bachelors in Information Technology from XYZ, this field has always
fascinated me. After my degree studies, I started working with ABC" is redundant as its already
found in your resume.
"totally new and fascinating world of science and technology to me" = what were you doing all
the while in college then :mg:
Good point on the flat structure part.
In my view a leader can be successful only when he exhibits abilities like vision, strategy
management, risk management and most importantly belief in himself. He should be able to
effectively comprehend the current business requirements and should have the vision to analyse
direction of changing business requirements in future.When i explored the PGDBM program in
FMS, i could feel that this program can quench my thirst for a degree in business administration.
"business requirements" repeated twice, doesn't look good.
Your view of the leader blah blah is all fine. But thats exactly why you don't need an MBA -
because these are skills you can never gain in 2years :mg: So you might want to put something
else before you say "When i explored the PGDBM program in FMS, .... blah blah"
Good finish.
My feedback:
Generally nothing glaringly "wrong" except for the last but one para.
SOP191 - FMS
"Play to win". Something that has been imprinted on my mind always. That, combined with my
passion and tendency to be a perfectionist has always driven me to be one of the best, whether it
has been a football field or a classroom, and I have achieved that. My diverse interests have
given me an oppurtunity to experience and handle pressure in numerous aspects of life.
management and analytical skills and taught me to work harder. Following my graduation, I was
placed with Patni Computer Systems. Following that, I joined Capgemini India Pvt Ltd. Two and
a half years in the software industry made me face up to daunting challenges, and tested me
greatly, be it my adaptability, my knowledge, my decision making or my inter-personal skills. It
also exposed me to the ERP package (SAP) which gave me an insight to the workings of a
business.
Though I pursued a technical degree, monetary matters have always interested me, and I desire
to acquire a management degree in the field of Finance. This makes it ridiculously easy to aim
for FMS, which would be the unanimous first choice of every MBA-Finance aspirant. The
excellent summer placements are evidence enough to prove that "emphasis on concepts, and
efficient feedback" are more than mere claims, and I am sure that an MBA from FMS is a trump
card in todays market.
SOP191r
"Play to win". Something that has been imprinted on my mind always. That, combined with my
passion and tendency to be a perfectionist has always driven me to be one of the best, whether it
has been a football field or a classroom, and I have achieved that. My diverse interests have
given me an oppurtunity to experience and handle pressure in numerous aspects of life.
How are you the "best" ? Quantify it ? Have you always stood 1st in each exam you have taken
right from the childhood ? Have you played football for India at the highest level? How do you
say you are the "best" ? You are passionate and like what you do is a different thing, but to say
you are the "best in everything you have done" is an overstatement. The opening lines is very
arrogant and shows that you cannot be a good team-player.
management and analytical skills and taught me to work harder. Following my graduation, I was
placed with Patni Computer Systems. Following that, I joined Capgemini India Pvt Ltd. Two and
a half years in the software industry made me face up to daunting challenges, and tested me
greatly, be it my adaptability, my knowledge, my decision making or my inter-personal skills. It
also exposed me to the ERP package (SAP) which gave me an insight to the workings of a
business.
Club the 1st 2 setences into one. "A B.E .... advanced my ..., honed my ... and taught me to work
harder"
There seems to be a disconnect between Patni and Capgemini. I presume you quit early. I am
rephrasing it for you: "I have worked in companies such as PCS Capgemini which has made me
face daunting challenges - be it testing my adaptibility, my knowledge, my decision making or
my inter-personal skills"
"It exposed me to ERP (SAP) which ....."
Though I pursued a technical degree, monetary matters have always interested me, and I desire
to acquire a management degree in the field of Finance.
Aap pair pe khuladi nahee maar rahe ho but khuladi pe pair maar rahe ho :mg:
Just say that you need to have a holistic view of how business works and for that its imperative
that you know the financial side of things.
This makes it ridiculously easy to aim for FMS, which would be the unanimous first choice of
every MBA-Finance aspirant. The excellent summer placements are evidence enough to prove
that "emphasis on concepts, and efficient feedback" are more than mere claims, and I am sure
that an MBA from FMS is a trump card in todays market.
"Ridiculously easy" ?? Extremely casual.
"unanimous first choice of every MBA-finance aspirant" ?? So if you had a choice between IIM-
A fin and FMS Fin you would choose the latter?? Who are you trying to kid? :mg:
"The excellent summer placements" are evidence that your reasons to do an MBA are f***ed up
:mg:
SOP192 - FMS
__ Henry David Thoreau
Acquiring an MBA will be an important step towards laying the foundations under my airborne
castle i.e. my goal of becoming an entrepreneur.
I foresee my own career moving in the direction of Indian as well as in the international business,
initially from a managerial post to a leadership role within a manufacturing entity, preferably a
startup venture.
The first step which I took in the pursuit of my goal was to join an Engineering course. I learned
several things while pursuing my Diploma and Bachelor’s in Mechanical Engineering and then
working as a trainee Engineer in RaychemRPG. While being a Mechanical Engineer has made
me analytically strong, the short stint at RaychemRPG introduced me to the real world of
manufacturing.
Though both my experiences first at college and then at work were vastly different, the one
common thing that I learnt was the importance of being well versed with the management
aspects for running a business.
In light of my entrepreneurial bent there is no doubting that FMS with over fifty years of vast
experience of shaping managers into leaders is quite appropriate for my purposes.
I believe that an MBA provides a distinct advantage over those without. There is an analytical
nature inherent to MBA’s which is duplicable only by committing two years to the academic
study of business. With my inherent skills and the unique program structure at FMS, it is my
belief that I shall ultimately succeed in laying a strong foundation under my airborne castle.
SOP192r
__ Henry David Thoreau
Acquiring an MBA will be an important step towards laying the foundations under my airborne
castle i.e. my goal of becoming an entrepreneur.
I foresee my own career moving in the direction of Indian as well as in the international business,
initially from a managerial post to a leadership role within a manufacturing entity, preferably a
startup venture.
Managerial to Strategic role sounds better.
The first step which I took in the pursuit of my goal was to join an Engineering course. I learned
several things while pursuing my Diploma and Bachelor’s in Mechanical Engineering and then
working as a trainee Engineer in RaychemRPG. While being a Mechanical Engineer has made
me analytically strong, the short stint at RaychemRPG introduced me to the real world of
manufacturing.
You are wasting too many words talking about stuff in your resume. Best way to get it down to
250.
Though both my experiences first at college and then at work were vastly different, the one
common thing that I learnt was the importance of being well versed with the management
aspects for running a business.
In light of my entrepreneurial bent there is no doubting that FMS with over fifty years of vast
experience of shaping managers into leaders is quite appropriate for my purposes.
You talk about entrepreneurship and then jump to manager/leadership thingy that FMS is doing.
Seems disconnected. Talk about some famous entrepreneurs who have passed out of FMS.
I believe that an MBA provides a distinct advantage over those without. There is an analytical
nature inherent to MBA’s which is duplicable only by committing two years to the academic
study of business. With my inherent skills and the unique program structure at FMS, it is my
belief that I shall ultimately succeed in laying a strong foundation under my airborne castle.
Why is FMS having a "unique program structure" ? I don't know if it has.

Good point is the way you have ended - with a reference to the quote.
Overall my feedback is that, it has a lot of good elements, but lacks a cohesiveness. So a person
reading it will end up wondering "who" you really are and what you want to do.
SOP193 - FMS
I completely believe in the powerful adage "If you keep doing what you've been doing you'll
keep getting what you've been getting". My objective in life is to grow in every aspect – be it
personal or professional. In the next few years I see myself high up the corporate ladder and to
achieve this objective I want to continously upgrade myself by learning from every oppurtunity.
The various roles and responsibilities I assumed like that of ‘House Prefect’ in school or ‘Class
Representative’ in junior college or organizing events like ‘Concepts’ (National Level Techfest)
helped me to discover my innate leadership qualities. Working as college Magazine Secretary
and more recently leading a team of fifteen members for a social cause of collecting funds
amounting to 1.5 lakhs to donate to Army Paraplegic Rehabilitation Centre in Pune gave me a
brief experience of managing a team.
After my degree studies, working with the IT firm of HSBC group, one of the largest banking
and financial services organizations in the world, a thoroughly learning experience of working in
a truly global environment. My job gave me an opportunity to travel to the USA that gave me a
first hand experience of interacting with the customers. During this period I realized that apart
from having strong leadership qualities and good communication capabilities, which I definitely
possess, a manager must have an in-depth understanding of utilizing technology efficiently and
thorough domain knowledge in order to lead and execute global projects. An MBA from FMS,
through its various well-designed courses will teach me the nuances of management and gain
precious domain knowledge as well as enhance my capability to face challenges.
I am sure, FMS with its world class faculty, strong alumni network and a highly competitive peer
group would bring the best out of me and help me to realize my dream of reaching the highest
echelons in the industry.
SOP193r
I completely believe in the powerful adage "If you keep doing what you've been doing you'll
keep getting what you've been getting". My objective in life is to grow in every aspect – be it
personal or professional. In the next few years I see myself high up the corporate ladder and to
achieve this objective I want to continously upgrade myself by learning from every oppurtunity.
Okay !! But you need to quantify it. What do you want to do ? "high up the corporate ladder"
sounds juvenile.
The various roles and responsibilities I assumed like that of ‘House Prefect’ in school or ‘Class
Representative’ in junior college or organizing events like ‘Concepts’ (National Level Techfest)
helped me to discover my innate leadership qualities. Working as college Magazine Secretary
and more recently leading a team of fifteen members for a social cause of collecting funds
amounting to 1.5 lakhs to donate to Army Paraplegic Rehabilitation Centre in Pune gave me a
brief experience of managing a team.
Why mention all this here ? Isn't it there in your resume ? Also I think you are exceeding the
word limits.
After my degree studies, working with the IT firm of HSBC group, one of the largest banking
and financial services organizations in the world, a thoroughly learning experience of working in
a truly global environment. My job gave me an opportunity to travel to the USA that gave me a
first hand experience of interacting with the customers. During this period I realized that apart
from having strong leadership qualities and good communication capabilities, which I definitely
possess, a manager must have an in-depth understanding of utilizing technology efficiently and
thorough domain knowledge in order to lead and execute global projects. An MBA from FMS,
through its various well-designed courses will teach me the nuances of management and gain
precious domain knowledge as well as enhance my capability to face challenges.
Good enough. Nice that you mentioned your US travel here.
I am sure, FMS with its world class faculty, strong alumni network and a highly competitive peer
group would bring the best out of me and help me to realize my dream of reaching the highest
echelons in the industry.
Why again talk about FMS when you have already done so in the last sentence of the previous
paragraph ?
SOP194 - FMS-MS
During my two year stint with HSBC-GLT, one of fastest growing software firm dedicated to
work for the HSBC group I realized my liking towards IT services industry. I wish to continue a
career in the IT industry with special emphasis on financial sector. I also realized that while
working in an IT company it is just not enough to be able to write thousands of line of code. We
need to have strong interpersonal and communication skills. We need to able to make full use of
technology and be ready to adapt to the latest technical innovations. We also need thorough
domain knowledge of the sector we are catering to. An MBA would help me to have a 360
degrees approach before suggesting a solution to a problem. An MBA-MS from FMS with
specialization in IT & ITES along with functional specialization in Finance would empower me
with what it takes to reach the top in the IT industry.
SOP194r
Well written. Short and to the point.
BTW, change the sentence "thousands of lines of code" - sounds too flippant.
Also "We need to have strong interpersonal and communication skills" is something I really
don't think you are going to do an MBA for. So drop it.
SOP195 - FMS
Being brought up in a business family I naturally wanted to be a successful entrepreneur like my

maternal grandfather who was my idol.
Staying in his vicinity for years I gathered that even for people with talent a strong desire to
succeed combined with the necessary dedication is a must for being successful. Even in my
childhood I tried to inculcate these attributes in me. Fortunately I cannot I cannot recall a year in
senior school when I didn’t excel in studies. Apart from that I was always active in various co-
curricular activities and I was the House Captain for three consecutive years and also the
Secretary of Science Club for two consecutive years. My analytical abilities and rational thinking
led me to pursue physics at Presidency College Kolkata arguably the best basic science college
in India. I then went on to do my master’s from none other than I.I.T. Kanpur. Having completed
my Master’s I wanted to work towards my dream of being an entrepreneur.
But before starting off on my own I wanted to gain the requisite experience and competence .I
therefore wanted to be a part of the driving force of a company which has strong growth
potential.
However in spite of my innate leadership and strong analytical skills I felt I needed the grooming
from a good B-school to be a successful manager. Hence I wanted to pursue a general MBA
program from one of the premier B schools in India.FMS Delhi with its five decades of
reputation in the corporate world, excellent faculty and small batch size provides the perfect
learning oppurtunity fits the bill. Hence I strongly believe that will help me mould myself into a
successful manager and ready to live my dreams.
SOP196 - FMS
"An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come"- Victor Hugo
Idea and imagination is the driving impulse for mankind. Having believed in this right from
childhood, I always had the zeal to learn new things, formulate and realize new ideas . A degree
in electronics engineering gave me a good platform during which I took part in national level
paper presentations, hardware designs & project exhibitions where I showcased my innovative
ideas in the fields of telemedicine & circuit electronics and won many awards. Add to this, a
meritorious record in academics and as a student representative and an organizing member of
technical events, student meets viz., I ve developed interpersonal skills, eloquence and leadership
qualities proving my versatility.
Even after college my zest for learning did not dampen. As a software developer in XXX, I
worked on a rapidly evolving technology where I learnt the mantra of developing an idea into
business and how critical is teamwork, leadership and management skills for the success of an
idea & Organization. Now back into family business , I have deveoped and marketed a new
brand product fostering profits and brand value of my firm. This diverse work experience has
helped me understand the nuances of business both at corporate and grass root levels.
My long term career goal is to become the head of an organisation that is driven by ideas and
innovations where I can utilize my managerial & technical skills to play the lead role in the
growth of the firm. To realize this goal an MBA @ a revered institute like FMS is an imperative
and a logical first step. MBA is more for giving structure to your thoughts. . With over 5 decades
of academic excellence, a wide industry interface, renowned faculty and vibrant alumni network,
FMS will give me a rich source of wisdom and a well needed foundation to enhance my abilities
to handle the unpredictable and never stagnant world of business.
SOP196r
"An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come"- Victor Hugo
Anyway..to ur admitted CCP'ed SOP ;)
Idea and imagination is the driving impulse for mankind. Having believed in this right from
childhood, I always had the zeal to learn new things, formulate and realize new ideas .
nice old stole lines

A degree in electronics engineering gave me a good platform during which I took part in national
level paper presentations, hardware designs & project exhibitions where I showcased my
innovative ideas in the fields of telemedicine & circuit electronics and won many awards.
Consider making this sentence shorter, eh ! hard to believe that there is only a sentence which is
staring up at us right now. Secondly, Which awards ? Unless you won some seriously nice stuff,
it could backfire
Add to this, a meritorious record in academics and as a student representative and an organizing
member of technical events, student meets viz., I ve developed interpersonal skills, eloquence
and leadership qualities proving my versatility.
fair enough
Even after college my zest for learning did not dampen. As a software developer in XXX, I
worked on a rapidly evolving technology where I learnt the mantra of developing an idea into
business and how critical is teamwork, leadership and management skills for the success of an
idea & Organization.
mantra of developing an idea into business..are you sure about this ? Nothing wrong in claiming
this, ofcourse. But thoda sa humility would be nice
Now back into family business , I have deveoped and marketed a new brand product fostering
profits and brand value of my firm. This diverse work experience has helped me understand the
nuances of business both at corporate and grass root levels.
brand product, eh ? wazzat ?? and how is this diverse workex ?? Unless ur family firm is not into
software..
My long term career goal is to become the head of an organisation that is driven by ideas and
innovations where I can utilize my managerial & technical skills to play the lead role in the
growth of the firm.
Whats stopping ur current biz from being that organization. You can utilize whatever
managerial/tech skill et al you want to
To realize this goal an MBA @ a revered institute like FMS is an imperative and a logical first
step. MBA is more for giving structure to your thoughts. .
How is the underlined line relevant to the point of discussion ?
With over 5 decades of academic excellence, a wide industry interface, renowned faculty and
vibrant alumni network, FMS will give me a rich source of wisdom and a well needed
foundation to enhance my abilities to handle the unpredictable and never stagnant world of
business.
Dude, creative writing nahi hai. Do write something which is nice, sensible, logcial &
BORING..but not this. its a SOP, take it seriously ;)
SOP197 - FMS
In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a creative original thinker unless you can also
sell what you create." David M. Ogilvy
I, first realized the significance of these words while assisting the sponsorship secretary during
my college fest. With proper marketing and presentation, one can easily convert a good idea to a
successful idea. And this is what I plan to learn by doing MBA from FMS.
In today’s world of outsourcing, most of Companies/individuals want to outsource whatever they
are not skilled at. Beit a big event like organizing All India competitions ora small marriage
function by an individual. And this is where I see a tremendous potential. In long term I want to
own an event management company.
My four years of engineering helped me gain the necessary academic potential. The second
phase started with the application of the potential and building a foundation for management by
interacting with clients and managing team members. With this strong groundwork I think I am
ready to move into the third phase of learning managementand FMS provides the perfect setup
for it.
FMS, with all its advantages...........(blah blah blah... some stories abt FMS)...........Thus,FMS
emerges as my first choice B-school.
SOP197r
In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a creative original thinker unless you can also
sell what you create." David M. Ogilvy
I, first realized the significance of these words while assisting the sponsorship secretary during
my college fest. With proper marketing and presentation, one can easily convert a good idea to a
successful idea. And this is what I plan to learn by doing MBA from FMS.
Good starting. To the point and crisp.
In today’s world of outsourcing, most of Companies/individuals want to outsource whatever they

are not skilled at. Beit a big event like organizing All India competitions ora small marriage
function by an individual. And this is where I see a tremendous potential. In long term I want to
own an event management company.
Good. Don't start a sentnece with a conjuction "and"
My four years of engineering helped me gain the necessary academic potential. The second
phase started with the application of the potential and building a foundation for management by
interacting with clients and managing team members. With this strong groundwork I think I am
ready to move into the third phase of learning managementand FMS provides the perfect setup
for it.
Good.
FMS, with all its advantages...........(blah blah blah... some stories abt FMS)...........Thus,FMS
emerges as my first choice B-school.
If you dont have the time to write a decent SOP ending then I dont have time to review it.
Overall - very well written. Short and crisp and definitely very different than others. Notice how
you have not mentioned any points from your resume here. A definite plus.
SOP198 - FMS
I perceive myself as a ‘Problem Solver’. From an early age problems of all sorts, be it a complex
problem involving multiple dimensions or a simple matter of crossing a road in Delhi, have
interweaved me and drive me towards finding a solution. I am happiest when I have a problem at
hand that needs a solution.
To satisfy this need in me, that is, to understand problems and to device solutions for them, I had
pursued engineering degree and after that joined Infosys Technologies Ltd to understand
technology as a tool for the same. However, after 4 years pursuing my degree and over a year
working, I have come to realize that the most compelling issues faced by the world today cannot
be solved by Technology alone. What is required is an ability to leverage technology effectively
to attack a problem in an organized and efficient manner. What my technical background has left
me with is a set of highly efficient tools but limited knowledge about the multiple facets
involving a problem.
To help bridge this gap between being a tool and becoming a complete entity, I feel a formal
course in a premium management institute like FMS could be a great push in the right direction.
With its great blend of strong basic fundamentals and the ability to utilize them in a ever
changing world, I feel FMS would prepare me for any situation that I might face, be it on a
professional or personal front.
Keeping in mind my interests and career goals, FMS would be a great place for me to grow
intellectually as well as personally. With an international standard faculty, strong alumni network
and highly energetic students as peers, I would have a huge knowledge base to draw upon to
achieve my goals in life.
SOP199 - FMS
Right from my childhood I always dreamt of making it big in life. Being brought up in a business
family I naturally wanted to be a successful entrepreneur like my maternal grandfather who was
my idol.
Staying in his vicinity for years I gathered that even for people with talent a strong desire to
succeed combined with the necessary dedication is a must for being successful. I always tried to
inculcate these attributes in me. Fortunately I cannot recall a year in senior school when I didn’t
excel in studies. Apart from that I was always active in various co-curricular activities and I was
the House Captain for three consecutive years and also the Secretary of Science Club for two
years at a stretch. My analytical abilities and rational thinking led me to pursue physics at
Presidency College Kolkata arguably the best basic science college in India. I then went on to do
my master’s from none other than I.I.T. Kanpur. Having completed my Master’s I wanted to
work towards my dream of being an entrepreneur.
But before starting off on my own I wanted to gain the requisite experience and competence .I
therefore wanted to be a part of the driving force of a company which has strong growth
potential.
However in spite of my innate leadership and strong analytical skills I felt I needed the grooming
to be a successful manager. Hence I wanted to pursue a general MBA program from one of the
premier B schools in India. FMS Delhi with its five decades of reputation in the corporate world,
excellent faculty and small batch size thereby providing perfect learning oppurtunity, fits the bill.
Apart from that being a part of the Numero Uno Delhi University gives a chance to interact with
pupils of various disciplines enabling one to have a holistic view of this world. Hence I strongly
believe that a general MBA program from FMS will help me mould myself into a successful
manager and make me ready to live my dreams.
SOP200 - FMS
“For others management is a course, for me it is a way of life”.

Truly speaking, I have been a manager since my childhood days where I have been organizing
and leading teams effectively. While maintaining excellent academic record, I have loads of
extra curricular activities in my basket. Managing people was more of a habit, then a hobby.
Moreover the five months of work experience at IBM has further made me realized that a
complete knowledge of business helps understand the functional details better and accelerates
decision making process. All these experiences have made me realize my goal in life-to lead an
organization driven by ideas and innovations where I can utilize my managerial and technical
skills to play the lead role in the growth of the firm. I desire to attain a top notch position in an
industry where I can boost the decision making process and enhance its productivity thereby
enabling my company to become the market leader.
I believe given a platform, I can enhance my skills better and achieve my goals. I understand that
my true potential will get utilized where I can tune my management skills from an institute like
FMS, which “believes in pushing the boundaries”.
business acumen. Also at FMS, with its emphasis on teamwork between the students, faculty
staff and alumni, I will have the opportunity to be a leader and a team player. It is with this in
SOP200r
“For others management is a course, for me it is a way of life”.
Whose quote is this ? If it is someone elses say who it belongs to. If its yours it sounds desperate.
Knock it off.
Truly speaking, I have been a manager since my childhood days where I have been organizing
and leading teams effectively. While maintaining excellent academic record, I have loads of
extra curricular activities in my basket. Managing people was more of a habit, then a hobby.
Arrey bhai - what you have done? You sound over the top when you say "Managing people was
more of a habit, then a hobby". Matlab aapke saath raho toh aap mujhe bhi "manage" karne lago
ge :mg: Scary thought :mg: (BTW its "than" not "then" :wink:)
Moreover the five months of work experience at IBM has further made me realized that a
complete knowledge of business helps understand the functional details better and accelerates
Boring but finally you are atleast sounding SOP-istique !! :mg:
All these experiences have made me realize my goal in life-to lead an organization driven by
ideas and innovations where I can utilize my managerial and technical skills to play the lead role
in the growth of the firm. I desire to attain a top notch position in an industry where I can boost
the decision making process and enhance its productivity thereby enabling my company to
become the market leader.
"All these experiences" = which ones ? You have not quantified them
"Top notch position in an industry where I can ........" = reeks of immaturity and lack of clarity.
So please be more specific - which industry, why.
I believe given a platform, I can enhance my skills better and achieve my goals. I understand that
my true potential will get utilized where I can tune my management skills from an institute like
FMS, which “believes in pushing the boundaries”.
business acumen. Also at FMS, with its emphasis on teamwork between the students, faculty
staff and alumni, I will have the opportunity to be a leader and a team player. It is with this in
Its not a "stint at FMS".

"teamwork between students faculty staff and alumni" = I think you got something wrong here.
Or maybe I didnt understand how.
Overall my feedback is that this SOP lacks two essential components - CLARITY and
OBJECTIVITY. So what you do is rework on coming up with atleast a relatively clear post-
MBA goal. I think then things will fall into place.
SOP201 - FMS
“A dream becomes a goal when action is taken towards its achievement.” – Bo Bennet.
A graduation in Electrical and Electronics engineering has given me a strong foundation from
technical side. It has also honed my interpersonal skills like leadership qualities and team
management by providing me opportunities to be a chairman of a national level technical
symposium and secretary of Social service league.
Being a part of Global Consulting Practices (Infrastructure Services) group in TCS for the past
one year has helped me develop my interpersonal skills, team management skills and ability to
handle pressure. My experiences with consulting assignments for the past six months have made
me realize that technical knowledge and business knowledge are cross functional. The first
logical step to acquire domain knowledge would be to pursue an MBA.
Having a vision of starting an IT services organization in the next 7-8 years and developing it
into a successful one, I have to learn the management principles and methods to apply them. An
MBA in systems or operations would help me understand the nuances of management and guide
me acquire good business knowledge to convert my dream into goal.
I believe that FMS with its world class faculty and Infrastructure offers me a unique opportunity
to learn the management principles and give me relevant experience and interaction with
competitive and dynamic people. An MBA from FMS would provide me the necessary
foundation to prepare myself to enter into the corporate world with confidence and exposure.
SOP201r
“A dream becomes a goal when action is taken towards its achievement.” – Bo Bennet.
A graduation in Electrical and Electronics engineering has given me a strong foundation from
technical side. It has also honed my interpersonal skills like leadership qualities and team
management by providing me opportunities to be a chairman of a national level technical
symposium and secretary of Social service league.
Okay.
Being a part of Global Consulting Practices (Infrastructure Services) group in TCS for the past
one year has helped me develop my interpersonal skills, team management skills and ability to
handle pressure. My experiences with consulting assignments for the past six months have made
me realize that technical knowledge and business knowledge are cross functional. The first
logical step to acquire domain knowledge would be to pursue an MBA.
You have not addressed How its made you. Maybe you want to put some specific, quantifiable
things you have done in TCS - but outside the scope of your resume.
Having a vision of starting an IT services organization in the next 7-8 years and developing it
into a successful one, I have to learn the management principles and methods to apply them. An
MBA in systems or operations would help me understand the nuances of management and guide
me acquire good business knowledge to convert my dream into goal.
Good shows atleast you are focussed on what you want.
I believe that FMS with its world class faculty and Infrastructure offers me a unique opportunity
to learn the management principles and give me relevant experience and interaction with
competitive and dynamic people. An MBA from FMS would provide me the necessary
foundation to prepare myself to enter into the corporate world with confidence and exposure.
Yaada yaada ........ :mg:
Overall, its okay. Ready to go.
SOP202 - FMS
“I will act as if what I do makes a difference”- William James
Business and entrepreneurship has always inspired fascination in me. Apart from the exciting
and challenging prospect of starting and running ones own business, the aspect of
entrepreneurship that appeals to me the most is that it provides a great opportunity to put ones
ideas and principles into practice, make a difference in ones own way, in short ‘to matter’.
Entrepreneurship, I feel, is my calling and my career goal in the long term.
While doing engineering from the prestigious Netaji Subhas Institute of Technology (NSIT),
Delhi, I have been introduced to the world of technology, which is integral to most businesses
today. However, along with my strong academic education, I consider a significant part of my
learning to have come from interactions with my peers, seniors and teachers in college. Being
involved in group project taught me the virtues of discipline, dedication and team work.
Organizing events in college fests have taught me vital people skills. These qualities, along with
many others, are essential for business leadership.
I now wish to pursue formal MBA education to augment my skills further and attain a thorough
understanding of the nuances of business and corporate world. I believe education to be a
continuous process of learning that can be best achieved in an intellectually congenial
environment FMS with its world-class faculty, infrastructure, and with a history of attracting the
best minds in the country, is thus a natural choice of mine for doing my MBA. I feel convinced
that undertaking an MBA program in FMS will be a step in the right direction for my goal.
SOP202r
“I will act as if what I do makes a difference”- William James

Business and entrepreneurship has always inspired fascination in me. Apart from the exciting
and challenging prospect of starting and running ones own business, the aspect of
entrepreneurship that appeals to me the most is that it provides a great opportunity to put ones
ideas and principles into practice, make a difference in ones own way, in short ‘to matter’.
Entrepreneurship, I feel, is my calling and my career goal in the long term.
You are very crisp in your begining.
While doing engineering from the prestigious Netaji Subhas Institute of Technology (NSIT),
Delhi, I have been introduced to the world of technology, which is integral to most businesses
today. However, along with my strong academic education, I consider a significant part of my
learning to have come from interactions with my peers, seniors and teachers in college. Being
involved in group project taught me the virtues of discipline, dedication and team work.
Organizing events in college fests have taught me vital people skills. These qualities, along with
many others, are essential for business leadership.
"While doing Engineering" while suffice. Very well written.
understanding of the nuances of business and corporate world. I believe education to be a
continuous process of learning that can be best achieved in an intellectually congenial
environment FMS with its world-class faculty, infrastructure, and with a history of attracting the
best minds in the country, is thus a natural choice of mine for doing my MBA. I feel convinced
that undertaking an MBA program in FMS will be a step in the right direction for my goal.
Excellent !!
Overall, a very well-written essay. You have a way with words, and Im pretty sure you know that
:wink:
SOP203 - FMS
"We have a hunger of the mind which asks for knowledge of all around us, and the more we
gain, the more is our desire; the more we see, the more we are capable of seeing", remarked
Maria Mitchell. I have always believed in the power of learning. A successful academic jaunt
with XX % in Bachelor of Technology and an active participation in extra-curricular field, which
included being part of the college YYY team, have sublimated their own set of values and
lessons. I have learnt a lot on my present job as a software developer in ZZZ where I have been
consistently rated amongst the top 10% talent pool.
Working in a knowledge based industry I realized that there is a small demarcation line between
generation of thoughts and transforming them into reality and in order to implement my ideas
taking into account the profit motive of an organization, I need a better understanding of the
various facets of management; the interlinks between different functional areas and between
different business entities. Presently it has not been possible for me to get the vast knowledge
about specific business and technology - related issues.
I believe that FMS with its faculty of international standards, international exposure, excellent
infrastructure and corporate interaction can provide me with the skills and knowledge, required
to fulfill my objectives. I am confident that my learning capability and corporate experience will
help me understand and correlate the theoretical aspects better to deliver innovative solutions in
the competitive business environment.
SOP203r
"We have a hunger of the mind which asks for knowledge of all around us, and the more we
gain, the more is our desire; the more we see, the more we are capable of seeing", remarked
Maria Mitchell. I have always believed in the power of learning. A successful academic jaunt
with XX % in Bachelor of Technology and an active participation in extra-curricular field, which
included being part of the college YYY team, have sublimated their own set of values and
lessons. I have learnt a lot on my present job as a software developer in ZZZ where I have been
consistently rated amongst the top 10% talent pool.
Can't you put all this in your resume ? Why put it in your SOP ?
Working in a knowledge based industry I realized that there is a small demarcation line between
generation of thoughts and transforming them into reality and in order to implement my ideas
taking into account the profit motive of an organization, I need a better understanding of the
various facets of management; the interlinks between different functional areas and between
different business entities. Presently it has not been possible for me to get the vast knowledge
about specific business and technology - related issues.
Presently means something that will happen in a short while i.e. "the speaker will be arriving
presently". Currently means happening now which is what you intend.
More importantly the last line is too casual, general and doesnt fit in. Just say that you want to
connect the dots or see the forest instead of the trees or some other stuff like that.
I believe that FMS with its faculty of international standards, international exposure, excellent
infrastructure and corporate interaction can provide me with the skills and knowledge, required
to fulfill my objectives. I am confident that my learning capability and corporate experience will
help me understand and correlate the theoretical aspects better to deliver innovative solutions in
the competitive business environment.
Overall it is decent. Ready to go with some minor changes.
SOP204 - FMS
Success is a journey – a journey of destinations. There are several goals on the road to success.
The intent is not to stop; the intent is to move ahead and reach the next milestone with ever
greater enthusiasm. My long-term career objective is to become a successful business
entrepreneur who is ready to face the complex and dynamic business environment efficiently and
effectively.
Numbers have always fascinated me and I want to pursue a career that will give me an
opportunity to work with numbers. I did my graduation in Commerce from SRCC, Delhi
University, which gave me a good foundation in the field of finance. After completing my degree
studies, I entered the corporate world, and learnt the various subtle nuances that go into the
functioning of an organisation. However, as I go higher up in the corporate ladder, I will have the
responsibility of building strong teams, making critical decisions, and coordinating with other
team members to work towards a common goal. For this, I need to strengthen my graduate
degree with formal management education.
The key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business
fundamentals. FMS, with its diverse student community, highly acclaimed curriculum,
exceptional faculty, and a strategic location, offers a unique opportunity to enrich myself with
numerous perspectives. Graduating from here with flying colors is something that I have
dreamed of and hope to achieve through my hard work and dedication.
As Confucius said, "I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand." I strongly
This learning and listening is what I seek from FMS.
SOP204r
Success is a journey – a journey of destinations. There are several goals on the road to success.
The intent is not to stop; the intent is to move ahead and reach the next milestone with ever
greater enthusiasm. My long-term career objective is to become a successful business
entrepreneur who is ready to face the complex and dynamic business environment efficiently and
effectively.
Good start. shud try to make it a bit crisp though. me feel ur using too many words describing
success. (and it's even in place of ever.)
Numbers have always fascinated me and I want to pursue a career that will give me an
opportunity to work with numbers. I did my graduation in Commerce from SRCC, Delhi
University, which gave me a good foundation in the field of finance. After completing my degree
studies, I entered the corporate world, and learnt the various subtle nuances that go into the
functioning of an organisation. However, as I go higher up in the corporate ladder, I will have the
responsibility of building strong teams, making critical decisions, and coordinating with other
team members to work towards a common goal. For this, I need to strengthen my graduate
degree with formal management education.
OK. First things first. Im an engineer, so i shud be the one asking u this.... is commerce just
about nos., well surely an mba in finance isn't. May be the NINJA cud
help.http://www.pagalguy.com/forum/../cat...ons/icon10.gif
Also me think this is the para were u can keep a check on the word limit.
How abt "My immediate career goal is to become a proffesional (U might write something like a
consultant or investment banker, depends on interest) in the field of finance. To pursue this end, I
did my graduation in Commerce, which equipped me with the basic starting tools. On it's
completion, I entered the corporate world and learnt the various nuances (me think subtle
nuances is not proper, and vaisa speaking, wasn't nuances the trademark word of THE Simba,
grrrrr) that go into the functioning of an organisation. However, I believe that the ability to work
in a team and to think critically are the ones which matter the most in today's global busines
scenario. To inculcate such abilities in me, I feel that a formal education in management is a
must."
See.... u can cut around 15 words here. That brings it round to 265.:satisfie: hehe... that's a more
acceptable wordcount, isn't it. Ofcourse u might not like the above para, and u shudnt. It's ur
SOP, how can an engg. nerd decide what u wanna write, right?:sly: OK, kiddin. But i hope u got
what i meant!!!
The key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business
fundamentals. FMS, with its diverse student community, highly acclaimed curriculum,
exceptional faculty, and a strategic location, offers a unique opportunity to enrich myself with
numerous perspectives. Graduating from here with flying colors is something that I have
dreamed of and hope to achieve through my hard work and dedication.
As Confucius said, "I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand." I strongly
This learning and listening is what I seek from FMS.
The start of the para doesn't seem to be connected to the previous one. U cud start with "I believe
that the key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business
fundamentals acquired from a globally recognised business school. FMS,...."
Also what has FMS' strategic location got to do with unique oppurtunities coming ur way. arre
sister, fms mumbai mein bhi hota toh bhi same oppurtunities atte. (Although then I wud have
been able to see my dream college with my eyes.)
Also, according to me the confucius quote has been added just to make the conclusion eye-
catching.:twisted: Wrong approach. Me think it sounds better if u end it at the penultimate para.
Overall, me thinks that ur SOP will be ready when u have added my
suggestions:twisted::twisted::twisted: hehehe..... but still give it a read and if it sounds good, well
i can only say that i don't believe in the copyright crap.:sly: although do wait for
Psychoninja's:twisted: comments. Well that's it. OKYDOKY
SOP205 - FMS
My long term goal is to reach the higher levels of the managerial ladder of a company and make
it grow using my skills and learning.
How FMS can help me in realising my goal can be related as follows:
The true leader
During my graduation days at XYZ(one of the NITs) I was drawn towards organising various
college and department level activities. From this, the most critical realisation for me was the
importance of a leader. If a leader leads from the front by being dedicated and motivating then
these qualities tend to rub on to the people following her/him. This leads to an efficient execution
of the plan. The same lesson I learnt while working under inspiring managers at ABC(company i
work for).
How does FMS help me in honing my leadership skills? Being a part of FMS can make me shine
my leadership qualities by giving me exposure, to the various extra curricular activities at FMS.
Since, FMS attracts people from all over India with varied backgrounds and experience, I can
learn from there experiences as well
Global awareness
While working for ABC company and serving a world recognised client, ASDF(very well know
software company) gave me a feel of the dynamics in global business.
FMS with its well tailored curriculum and international exposure will help me in learning the
global corporate behaviour in a better way.
The need to keep updating yourself

Being in the software industry for the past 16 months I realised the importance of learning and
updating myself with the latest information.
Again, being at FMS with its highly acclaimed and quality conscious faculty and curriculum,
will be the right exposure for me on this front.
All these are the very basic fundamentals of being a manager. But, to achieve my goal I require
in depth knowledge and exposure to the corporate mechanims. FMS being the fore runner in
providing quality management education in India and having intensive coroporate linkages is the
answer to all my needs in achieving my goal.
SOP206 - FMS
“No business can succeed in any great degree without being properly organized.”
James Cash Penney
I have always been a firm believer of Penney’s words. The importance of organization and
management skills in all walks of life cannot be overemphasized. An inquisitive character led me
to earn a Bachelor’s Degree in Electrical Engineering from VNIT Nagpur. Organizing an Inter
Collegiate cricket tournament Krikmania has helped me to understand the nature and purpose of
organisation goals and how they are integrated into organisational activity. My interpersonal
skills developed as a result of participation in various team and individual competitions like
Kung-Fu, Cricket and Software Competitions. I’ve developed a considerable control over
emotions and stress level during my training in Kung-Fu which eventually helped me to earn a
black belt. My present job at Bristlecone India Ltd. has helped me to understand that a workplace
is the best teacher in one’s life. I’m sure I’m going to learn many corporate skills like client
communication, decision making, etc. in due course of time.
Being a son of a Chartered Accountant, I’ve always been fascinated by Management and
Economics. I’ve always aspired to become a successful entrepreneur and be an integral part of
the Economic Revolution that India is going through instead of just being a witness to it. I am
sure the excellent pedagogy, abundant resources, industry strong alumni network and a proven
track record of FMS together with its continuous run towards perfection will eventually help me
to make a mark in the corporate world.
SOP206r
“No business can succeed in any great degree without being properly organized.”
James Cash Penney
I have always been a firm believer of Penney’s words. The importance of organization and
management skills in all walks of life cannot be overemphasized.
My first thoughts WTF is James Cash Penny :mg: But I guess it fits in with your starting.
An inquisitive character led me to earn a Bachelor’s Degree in Electrical Engineering from

VNIT Nagpur. Organizing an Inter Collegiate cricket tournament Krikmania has helped me to
understand the nature and purpose of organisation goals and how they are integrated into
organisational activity. My interpersonal skills developed as a result of participation in various
team and individual competitions like Kung-Fu, Cricket and Software Competitions. I’ve
developed a considerable control over emotions and stress level during my training in Kung-Fu
which eventually helped me to earn a black belt. My present job at Bristlecone India Ltd. has
helped me to understand that a workplace is the best teacher in one’s life. I’m sure I’m going to
learn many corporate skills like client communication, decision making, etc. in due course of
time.
For starters this seems abrupt when you are discussing how companies should be run and then
you jump to talk about yourself.
Can you snip off collegestuff a bit and talk more about your workexp. More about why its imp
for a teacher to do an MBA, what qualities you bring to the table etc. etc.
Being a son of a Chartered Accountant, I’ve always been fascinated by Management and
Economics. I’ve always aspired to become a successful entrepreneur and be an integral part of
the Economic Revolution that India is going through instead of just being a witness to it. I am
sure the excellent pedagogy, abundant resources, industry strong alumni network and a proven
track record of FMS together with its continuous run towards perfection will eventually help me
to make a mark in the corporate world.
My dad is a CA too, and trust me its not about Management and Economics. So being inspired
by a dad is different. To quote him as being a CA doesn't make sense.
My feedback on the SOP is overall its okay but you need to be more specific about your goals,
you need to add stuff which talk about what tangible skills you bring to the table. You have a lot
of "fluff" stuff in the SOP which can be cut down e.g. "become a successful entrepreneur and be
an integral part of the Economic Revolution that India is going through instead of just being a
witness to it"
SOP207 - FMS
My long term career objective is to become a successful top executive in an organization and
make the most of my managerial and leadership qualities to contribute significantly towards the
success of the organization.
Being the Event Coordinator for the XXX (XXX Society of India) Student Chapter of my
engineering college as well as an organizing committee member for XXX03-XXXNational
Student Convention gave me a number of learning opportunities to nurture and hone my inter-
personal, managerial and leadership skills.
My work experience as an Associate Systems Analyst at XXX Infotech Services Ltd. (formerly
AAA), one of whose major clients is the NSE, has given me a chance to ameliorate my
knowledge in the financial business domain. Having obtained a practical insight into the
challenges confronted by the corporate world has made me realize the crucial role played by
management towards the successful accomplishment of any activity.
In order to achieve the in depth understanding of the diversified domains such as marketing,
financial services, Operations, Economics etc. and to develop the ability to apply such learning
to business decision-making and formulation of strategies, I understand it is imperative to pursue
a Management program. I strongly believe that pursuing the MBA program at FMS would
provide me with the necessary exposure and the right atmosphere for intellectual growth and
self-development. The highly experienced faculty, the network of distinguished alumni and the
collaborative exchange programs offered through the international associations reaffirm my
belief in FMS to be the Business School of choice.
SOP207r
My long term career objective is to become a successful top executive in an organization and
make the most of my managerial and leadership qualities to contribute significantly towards the
success of the organization.
Some objectivity please.
Being the Event Coordinator for the XXX (XXX Society of India) Student Chapter of my
engineering college as well as an organizing committee member for XXX03-XXXNational
Student Convention gave me a number of learning opportunities to nurture and hone my inter-
personal, managerial and leadership skills.
Hmm......
My work experience as an Associate Systems Analyst at XXX Infotech Services Ltd. (formerly
AAA), one of whose major clients is the NSE, has given me a chance to ameliorate my
knowledge in the financial business domain. Having obtained a practical insight into the
challenges confronted by the corporate world has made me realize the crucial role played by
management towards the successful accomplishment of any activity.
You should drum this up more. This should be the reason why you need to do an MBA.
In order to achieve the in depth understanding of the diversified domains such as marketing,
financial services, Operations, Economics etc. and to develop the ability to apply such learning
to business decision-making and formulation of strategies, I understand it is imperative to pursue
a Management program. I strongly believe that pursuing the MBA program at FMS would
provide me with the necessary exposure and the right atmosphere for intellectual growth and
self-development. The highly experienced faculty, the network of distinguished alumni and the
collaborative exchange programs offered through the international associations reaffirm my
belief in FMS to be the Business School of choice.
Bland and too generic but atleast you are playing it safe.
Overall, it was okay. I don't know maybe after reading all these essays I just had a sense of deja
vu.
SOP208 - FMS
As a pass out of NSIT, Delhi, I think my engineering in Information Technology has not only
provided me good technical knowledge but also given me the zeal to learn more, to learn
whatever I can,that's why I have always participated in extracurricular activities at the college
.Mixing academics with responsibilities of being a coordinator, in college fests, has helped me in
learning time management skills, ability to manage individuals, prioritize things and stick to
schedules which are a must for a management course. While working as a Software Engineer at
Aricent I am getting the exposure to the ambience of corporate world, learning how to work in a
professional team of experts, how to understand the requirements of our clients and how to fulfill
their needs.
My long term goals includes developing myself more as an individual, to create differences for
the organization I would be working in, to become a successful manager in three or four years
from now, to play a major role in the decision making process of my organization. I think that a
good knowledge of management skills is must for achieving these goals Technical knowledge in
software coupled with a good knowledge of management skills will help me achieve my goals.
As one of the leading management institute in India, that has been producing world class
managers for more than half a century, having a rich alumni network that has been spread over
different organizations network, I see FMS as an institute providing its students with one of the
best carrier developing facilities to explore, to be bold, to be creative and to learn as much as
they can. FMS will provide me with both skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives.
FMS will play a key role in developing my managerial skills.
SOP208r
As a pass out of NSIT, Delhi, I think my engineering in Information Technology has not only
provided me good technical knowledge but also given me the zeal to learn more, to learn
whatever I can,that's why I have always participated in extracurricular activities at the college
.Mixing academics with responsibilities of being a coordinator, in college fests, has helped me in
learning time management skills, ability to manage individuals, prioritize things and stick to
schedules which are a must for a management course. While working as a Software Engineer at
Aricent I am getting the exposure to the ambience of corporate world, learning how to work in a
professional team of experts, how to understand the requirements of our clients and how to fulfill
their needs.
Not having a quote looks like a refreshing change :mg:

"exposure to corporate world" not "ambience of corp world"
My long term goals includes developing myself more as an individual, to create differences for
the organization I would be working in, to become a successful manager in three or four years
from now, to play a major role in the decision making process of my organization. I think that a
good knowledge of management skills is must for achieving these goals Technical knowledge in
software coupled with a good knowledge of management skills will help me achieve my goals.
Good
As one of the leading management institute in India, that has been producing world class
managers for more than half a century, having a rich alumni network that has been spread over
different organizations network, I see FMS as an institute providing its students with one of the
best carrier developing facilities to explore, to be bold, to be creative and to learn as much as
they can. FMS will provide me with both skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives.
FMS will play a key role in developing my managerial skills.
Good again.
I see this SOP might be slightly below the "best" but it is good because it sounds geniune. And
you are objective at places and more importantly sound honest.
SOP209 - FMS
Success means having the courage, the determination, and the will to become the person you
believe you were meant to be”-george sheehan
I did my graduation in bcom(hons), Delhi University, which gave me a good foundation in the
field of finance.The world is changing rapidly and the more i learn, the more i will be able to
adapt to the changes
understanding of the nuances of business and corporate world so that I can embark upon a
fulfilling career in this field. I believe education to be a continuous process of learning that can
be best achieved in an intellectually congenial environment. My long-term career objective is to
become a successful business entrepreneur who is ready to face the complex and dynamic
business environment efficiently and effectively. The key to being a successful entrepreneur lies
in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals
and its inter-disciplinary environment and most importantly its relatively small batch size. I feel
convinced that undertaking an MBA program in FMS will be a step in the right direction for my
goal.
Graduating from here in flying colours is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve
through sincere hard work and decication.
SOP109r
Success means having the courage, the determination, and the will to become the person you
believe you were meant to be”-george sheehan
Please don't give quotes just for the heck. It has no relevance to your resume. This is not an email
signature to not have any significance to the content.
I did my graduation in bcom(hons), Delhi University, which gave me a good foundation in the
field of finance.The world is changing rapidly and the more i learn, the more i will be able to
adapt to the changes
understanding of the nuances of business and corporate world so that I can embark upon a
fulfilling career in this field. I believe education to be a continuous process of learning that can
be best achieved in an intellectually congenial environment. My long-term career objective is to
become a successful business entrepreneur who is ready to face the complex and dynamic
business environment efficiently and effectively. The key to being a successful entrepreneur lies
in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals
Put it this way - first list down the gaps that you identified without an MBA then say why an
MBA would fill that gap. You are mixing both of them here. So start with saying you want to be
an entrepreneur, then go on to say why an MBA can help you there.
and its inter-disciplinary environment and most importantly its relatively small batch size. I feel
convinced that undertaking an MBA program in FMS will be a step in the right direction for my
goal.
Graduating from here in flying colours is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve
through sincere hard work and decication.
Remove the last line in blue font. Its funny to say the least.
Rest fine.
SOP210 - FMS
Since my young age , I have always been fascinated by the way the world around me has
evolved with advent of science and technology . My admiration led me to develop a natural
affinity to the field of engineering and I landed in at N.S.I.T. , D.U. ; pursuing B.E. in
Manufacturing Processes & Automation Engineering .
During the course, I have acquired vital skills of team work and independent thinking which
have greatly influenced my style of thinking and personality as a whole. Now as I look to join
the corporate world after my studies , I feel the need to acquire the necessary skills required to
excel in a world where corporations constantly deal with incessant change and respond to various
technical and global challenges. My long term goal is to be able to head such a corporation after
gaining the necessary expertise in the field.
With this in mind I wish to enroll for an MBA program which will enable me to get a holistic
perspective on business and industry. I am confident that an MBA from FMS , comprehensive
with excellent faculty and opportunities to interact with diverse disciplines in the university will
develop a global outlook and future readiness at a time when Indian economy is opening up to
fresh challenges and opportunities . I am confident that my involvement and commitment would
stand me in good stead to the academics challenges and high expectations at FMS.
I am certain that FMS with its distinct brand equity and a history of producing distinguished
alumini , will enrich my opportunities of being in the right place , at the right time with the right
skills.
SOP211 - FMS-MS
Why do you want to pursue a programme focused towards service sector?(150 words)
India's movement towards global economy and an unprecedented explosion of free trade and
exchange have brought about immense opportunities in service sector. The sector provides a
challenging work environment and great scope of growth .Progress in manufacturing sector and
the advent of BPO, IT & ITES sectors has created demand for trained technical professionals
with analytical and mangement skills.
I , therefore believe in addition to my technical background (B.E. ,NSIT), a masters degree in
service management will provide a good theoretical understanding and an in depth idea of
practical approaches of managerial decision making along with the required people skills.I hope
my ability to work in teams and familiarity with computer applications coupled with a strong
commitment will prove to be assets in the course.
I am confident that FMS with its pioneering approach and outstanding track record will help me
build a strong foundation for my career.
SOP212 - FMS
endeavor has always been to become a successful manager occupying a significant position in an
organization where i utilize my knowledge to guide my team in achieving its goals and thereby
driving the organization to new heights of success.
After engineering, my decision of joining not so large organization proved to be the right step for
me towards my goal.The flat organizational structure of ABC provided me with some crucial
insights on how various business decisions are taken in an organization. Working in a small team
in the organization taught me to handle big responsibilities. In our regular team meetings i
learned that how the team leader was planning and organizing different tasks by prioritizing
them. I could now realize that I need a comprehensive academic program to develop the same
necessary management skills in myself to achieve my goals.
In my view a leader can be successful only when his thoughts are structured and planned. He
should possess the sense of vision so as to analyze the direction of ever changing business
requirements in the future.When i explored the PGDBM program in FMS, i could feel that this
program can quench my thirst for instilling management skills in myself.
SOP213 - FMS
The world of Computers and management fascinated me from my school days. So I choose to
pursue B.Tech in Information Technology from the famous ‘ XXX of Engineering ‘, XYZ. My
involvement in the technical and cultural events at the graduation always improved my talents as
a good team player, organizer and event coordinator.
Following my graduation I joined ‘ ABC Technologies ‘ as software Engineer. My experience
with ABC improved my technical, analytical and time management skills. I learned how critical
is teamwork, leadership and management skills for the success of an organization. My ultimate
career objective is to become a successful business entrepreneur in the IT industry who is ready
to face the complex and dynamic business environment effectively and efficiently.
Since the technical degree alone is not adequate to achieve my goal, I need formal education in
the principles of Business management to achieve my goals. After MBA at FMS working at a
managerial position in a Multi National company will provide me with necessary practical
experience and expertise required to meet my ultimate Objective.
With over 50 years of academic excellence, world class faculty, wide industry interface, flexible
curriculum and with vibrant alumni networks FMS will enrich my source of wisdom and will
sharpen my skills to create an extra edge needed for the highly competitive business world. I
believe that FMS with over fifty years of experience in shaping managers into leaders is the best
institute that I can afford for achieving my Goal.
SOP213r
The world of Computers and management fascinated me from my school days. So I choose to
pursue B.Tech in Information Technology from the famous ‘ XXX of Engineering ‘, XYZ. My
involvement in the technical and cultural events at the graduation always improved my talents as
a good team player, organizer and event coordinator.
"world of computers" would suffice. Management ko abhi beech mein mat laao bhai. No one is
going to say "You were not interested in management from school days ? Bah ! No MBA for
you!!" :mg:
Also tell how your technical expertise in computers has helped you grow. Yeh organizer,
coordinator waali cheez baad mein rakho.
Following my graduation I joined ‘ ABC Technologies ‘ as software Engineer. My experience

with ABC improved my technical, analytical and time management skills. I learned how critical
is teamwork, leadership and management skills for the success of an organization. My ultimate
career objective is to become a successful business entrepreneur in the IT industry who is ready
to face the complex and dynamic business environment effectively and efficiently.
Yeah, now tie in the fact that though you always knew that being a teamplayer was important
from school time, your workexp further solidified the same.
Also, "learned how critical is teamwork" is wrong grammar. "I learned how critical teamwork, ...
is"
Otherwise good. Atleast you are hitting the nail on the head.
Since the technical degree alone is not adequate to achieve my goal, I need formal education in
the principles of Business management to achieve my goals. After MBA at FMS working at a
managerial position in a Multi National company will provide me with necessary practical
experience and expertise required to meet my ultimate Objective.
Don't write a negative i.e. "Since....." start with "I feel to achieve my goal, I need formal...."
Rest good. I like your objectivity.
With over 50 years of academic excellence, world class faculty, wide industry interface, flexible
curriculum and with vibrant alumni networks FMS will enrich my source of wisdom and will
sharpen my skills to create an extra edge needed for the highly competitive business world. I
believe that FMS with over fifty years of experience in shaping managers into leaders is the best
institute that I can afford for achieving my Goal.
Yaaawn :mg:
Okay, otherwise one of the better written SOPs.
SOP214 - FMS
To will is to select a goal, determine a course of action that will bring one to that goal, and then
hold to that action till the goal is reached. The key is action
Believing and following this philosophy has helped me achieving goals in my life.
To work in any organization in this ever changing and shrinking world where people from
different regions of world are working together for a common goal of organization, it is
necessary to understand the Principles of management and the models and philosophy that
various successful organizations have followed. And to understand these principles an MBA
from a good Business School is necessary.
I have done schooling at Kendriya Vidyalaya No.3 Jaipur, being a part of such school helped me
in knowing people of not only different cults but also people from families of different
professional background.
After schooling being an average student, I worked hard to get into National Institute of
Technology. Atmosphere there, once again gave me an opportunity to work with people of
different states countries, and cultures. During four years of engineering, I learned different
aspects of Mechanical Engineering, ranging from Automobiles, Mechanics, Structures,
Metallurgy and Design.
As I got selected in campus interviews in final year and since then working for Essar Steel Ltd.
Being a part of a progressive organization which is acquiring facilities abroad and some joint
ventures in the line, I realized that after 4 -5years, I need not only to manage technical aspects,
but also to build teams, coordinate with different departments, communicate with customers
from different geography and culture. As I am interested in Project management and this will
require knowledge of various other aspects like Budgeting, Resource Utilisation, and Logistics.
An institute like FMS, having associations with reputed universities and business schools of
world like Harvard Business schools, University of California, Berkeley, USA will not only
provide me the academic knowledge of different aspects of management, but also the other
inputs, that I will gain during interaction with the experienced faculties there and discussion with
students of different background will be a great value addition.
SOP215 - FMS
I Am What I Am.
This line from rebook defines & signifies that one should be aware of what one is and be proud
of it. At the cost of sounding a little arrogant I am total agreement with the statement. As a
graduate in commerce I started working from 3rd year of my graduation as grad. was a
correspondence course from D.U. In the past 4+ years I have been able to carve a place for
myself where I have the knowledge and standing in my workspace. The goal is to be the best in
what I do and achieve it by either being a successful leader or entrepreneur. More importantly
my goal is to be a successful human being. Success is a elative term and for me it means to
progressively grow as a professional and human being. The burgeoning economy has given the
option for today’s generation to chart their own path of success and I have found my calling in
the field of Sales and marketing. An MBA degree from FMS shall help put in perspective my
learning’s of the professional world. Being one of the oldest MBA programmes in the country,
FMS has an exemplary record in churning business leaders. Being at FMS can help me
understand not just the technical but also the social and humane aspects of management. I look at
FMS MBA as a programme which shall prepare me for the future challenges by pedagogic
approach through which I can relate my experiences and take the learning’s for future.
SOP215r
I Am What I Am.
This line from rebook defines & signifies that one should be aware of what one is and be proud
of it. At the cost of sounding a little arrogant I am total agreement with the statement.
Though I think I can guage what you are trying to say the structure of the sentences makes it
hopeless difficult for anyone to understand what you are trying to say. Or maybe the problem is
with me. Read it to your dad. If he understands then go ahead else change it :mg: (The dad
thingy works a lot for me. Many a times when I am labouriously doing some word-smithing I
shoot it across to him. His replies are usually terse "Ok" or "??". I get my job done :mg:)
Also, why would you be "arrogant".
As a graduate in commerce I started working from 3rd year of my graduation as grad. was a
correspondence course from D.U. In the past 4+ years I have been able to carve a place for
myself where I have the knowledge and standing in my workspace. The goal is to be the best in
what I do and achieve it by either being a successful leader or entrepreneur.
I understand the workexp part. Knock off the last line. I really didnt understand it.
More importantly my goal is to be a successful human being.

Yeh human being kahan se aa gaya. Im lost yet again.
Success is a elative term and for me it means to progressively grow as a professional and human
being. The burgeoning economy has given the option for today’s generation to chart their own
path of success and I have found my calling in the field of Sales and marketing.
Quit all the blah blah and put this "The burgeoning......." thing high up there so people know your
area/goal. After this put the entrepreneurship waala funda.
An MBA degree from FMS shall help put in perspective my learning’s of the professional world.
Being one of the oldest MBA programmes in the country, FMS has an exemplary record in
churning business leaders. Being at FMS can help me understand not just the technical but also
the social and humane aspects of management. I look at FMS MBA as a programme which shall
prepare me for the future challenges by pedagogic approach through which I can relate my
experiences and take the learning’s for future.
"learning's" ?? Also in the earlier para I saw "elated". So please run it through a spellcheck. Also,
what is "humane" ?? Rest (of whatever left) is fine.
SOP216 - FMS-MS
Services sector today is the largest contributor to the national income. As with all the developed
economies the phase of growth sees the share of services increasing same is with India. On the
threshold of economic supremacy the Indian economy has shown a strong growth esp. in the
services sector such as finance, IT, ITES etc. With 4+ years of experience exclusively in the
services sector I feel that studying this course is the next logical step in my career path. With the
world looking at India especially in the services sector thanks to our well-educated and youthful
generation the services sector is where the action would be. This course should serve as the
platform from where I can leverage my learning in the corporate sector and become a better
professional and a human being.
SOP216r
I see everyone who writes this essay does a lot better than the "FMS general" essay. So is the
case with you.
No changes here. Send it off as it is. Don't use abbreviations like "esp." as I said run a spell-
check.
SOP217 - FMS
“The freethinking of one age is the common sense of the next”
Knowledge is supreme especially in the globalized world where actions of one spell
consequences for the other. Resources are scarce and knowledge is the key to using them
optimally. Hence it is augmenting my knowledge base is what I aspire for the next two years so
that I can have a successful foray in the corporate world henceforth.
I have been exposed to dynamic disciplines of Business Economics, International business and
International Marketing alongside many others during my Graduation and Post graduate diploma
from the University of Delhi. The understanding of the world from the perspective of these
subjects and holding various posts of responsibility during my student life has widened my
domain of thinking and helped me acknowledge the things that are of cardinal importance for my
growth into a thorough professional and a future leader.
I expect to learn more and widen my horizon further at F.M.S given the legacy of its magnificent
reputation and quality of education from the last 52 years. Being strategically located in the
Delhi University, F.M.S offers a fantastic resource base that entails state of the art infrastructure
and a very experienced and competent faculty that can shape me to become a better professional.
Also the batch diversity that a batch in general has at F.M.S in respect of distinct student profiles
promotes inter-cultural learning that is a very important attribute for the omnipresent
multinationals operating in distinct cultural environments. Taking all these factors into account
F.M.S poses to be the most appropriate choice for continuing my education in the field of
management studies.
SOP217r
“The freethinking of one age is the common sense of the next”
Knowledge is supreme especially in the globalized world where actions of one spell
consequences for the other. Resources are scarce and knowledge is the key to using them
optimally. Hence it is augmenting my knowledge base is what I aspire for the next two years so
that I can have a successful foray in the corporate world henceforth.
Very well indeed !!
I have been exposed to dynamic disciplines of Business Economics, International business and
International Marketing alongside many others during my Graduation and Post graduate diploma
from the University of Delhi. The understanding of the world from the perspective of these
subjects and holding various posts of responsibility during my student life has widened my
domain of thinking and helped me acknowledge the things that are of cardinal importance for my
growth into a thorough professional and a future leader.
"along side many others" = why do you want to mention that. Otherwise its good.
I expect to learn more and widen my horizon further at F.M.S given the legacy of its magnificent
reputation and quality of education from the last 52 years. Being strategically located in the
Delhi University, F.M.S offers a fantastic resource base that entails state of the art infrastructure
and a very experienced and competent faculty that can shape me to become a better professional.
Also the batch diversity that a batch in general has at F.M.S in respect of distinct student profiles
promotes inter-cultural learning that is a very important attribute for the omnipresent
multinationals operating in distinct cultural environments. Taking all these factors into account
F.M.S poses to be the most appropriate choice for continuing my education in the field of
management studies.
(a) 52 years ? Someone said 50 just a couple of posts ago
(b) Strategically located in DU ? Is DU like Silicon Valley ? It could be in Chinchpokhli for all
that it matters
(c) Diversity ? I can only see fresh-out-college-no-where-else-to-go guys (with due respects to
QE - I think he knows what I mean :mg:)
So apart from the last paragraphs which has many potential things which might bomb,
everything else looks good.
SOP218 - FMS
"Great players do not necessarily make great managers". Being a passionate football player
myself, I have heard commentators use this line on numerous occasions. The game also makes it
evident that a good manager makes his top-level players deliver well, but a great manager is one
who brings out the best even in an average 'Joe'. It isnt hard to draw a parallel between the sport
and the corporate world.
Having been in the industry for more than two years, I have also realised, that though hard work
pays exceptional dividends, it is essential to possess the necessary specialisation to be able to
derive the most out of any oppurtunity. Working closely with managers and interacting with
clients led me to believe that an academic thrust is imperative to succeed in today's highly
competitive market.
A technical degree and further work experience has enhanced my capabilities and added much to
my profile. To be an active participant in the emerging business environment, I find it mandatory
to equip myself with an MBA.
FMS has a history of producing world-class business leaders for the past 50 years. The reputed
academic program coupled with its excellent industrial associations as well as a strong alumni
network make FMS the ideal institute to impart the training I need, to mould me from a player
into a great manager.
SOP218r
"Great players do not necessarily make great managers". Being a passionate football player
myself, I have heard commentators use this line on numerous occasions. The game also makes it
evident that a good manager makes his top-level players deliver well, but a great manager is one
who brings out the best even in an average 'Joe'. It isnt hard to draw a parallel between the sport
and the corporate world.
Very good opening. Very fresh and innovative. Though I dont know if you have time to "play
around" when the word limit is 250 words
Having been in the industry for more than two years, I have also realised, that though hard work
pays exceptional dividends, it is essential to possess the necessary specialisation to be able to
derive the most out of any oppurtunity. Working closely with managers and interacting with
clients led me to believe that an academic thrust is imperative to succeed in today's highly
competitive market.
Do a spellcheck I can see some typos. Again you need to be specific "WHY MBA" you are
beating around the bush. Since I won't review it a 3rd time, ensure that your final version has
atleast 1 sentence by this time which clearly articulates what you want to do post MBA and how
an MBA will help you fill the gap.
Also, what is an "academic thrust" ?
A technical degree and further work experience has enhanced my capabilities and added much to
my profile. To be an active participant in the emerging business environment, I find it mandatory
to equip myself with an MBA.
Aha !! I was wondering when it was coming :mg: Copy paste this before the start of 2nd
paragraph after the 1st sentence and there will be no loss in continuity. I still don't know the
"Academic thrust" ? Sounds fun though :mg:
FMS has a history of producing world-class business leaders for the past 50 years. The reputed
academic program coupled with its excellent industrial associations as well as a strong alumni
network make FMS the ideal institute to impart the training I need, to mould me from a player
into a great manager.
Yadda Yadda :mg:
Looks good to go !!!

SOP219 - FMS
My analytical skills and a strong foundation in accounting and mathematical skills have showed
me a light in me to pursue a career for myself. My B.com (Hons) degree helped me recognize my
potential and has strengthened my basic knowledge. I was also awarded with a scholarship after
my graduation for being a rank holder.
After my graduation, I pursued Post Graduation in Foreign Trade from Pune University for a
year, which gave me an insight on how the international market works and also about India’s
Economy. After PGDFT, an MBA will provide me with theoretical understanding and an in-
depth idea of practical approaches in aiding managerial decision making and to develop an
expertise of myself. I need training and education in terms with an organization which will help
me become a successful manager and also a successful person. Your esteemed institution with
small batch size, excellent infrastructure and the diversity of students with respect to their
educational background and work-ex would provide the right impetus to my career.
As a person anything I do, I always give it my all. I am passionate about reading and I enjoy
cooking and playing tennis a lot. I believe that “Effort is important, but knowing where to make
an effort in one’s life makes all the difference.”
SOP219r
My analytical skills and a strong foundation in accounting and mathematical skills have showed
me a light in me to pursue a career for myself. My B.com (Hons) degree helped me recognize my
potential and has strengthened my basic knowledge. I was also awarded with a scholarship after
my graduation for being a rank holder.
First sentence is a dampner. What do you mean by that? Agar yeh do nahee hote toh tumhara
career nahee ban paata ? :mg: Start from your "My BCom" degree wala
After my graduation, I pursued Post Graduation in Foreign Trade from Pune University for a
year, which gave me an insight on how the international market works and also about India’s
Economy. After PGDFT, an MBA will provide me with theoretical understanding and an in-
depth idea of practical approaches in aiding managerial decision making and to develop an
expertise of myself. I need training and education in terms with an organization which will help
me become a successful manager and also a successful person. Your esteemed institution with
small batch size, excellent infrastructure and the diversity of students with respect to their
educational background and work-ex would provide the right impetus to my career.
Is PGDFT a one-year course or are you leaving it midway ? If the latter then this is good.
Knock of "esteemed institution" and put in FMS instead.
As a person anything I do, I always give it my all. I am passionate about reading and I enjoy
cooking and playing tennis a lot. I believe that “Effort is important, but knowing where to make
an effort in one’s life makes all the difference.”
Put it up there after your PGDFT thingy and before why FMS.
SOP220 - FMS
[not reviewed]
From my past experience working as a Planning Engineer in Hydel & Nuclear Projects in L&T, I
realized that technical and management aspects of life are cross functional and are conjoint
entities and only strong technical background synergistically with good project management
skills, is the success mantra to climb up the ladder to the top in the corporate world - And this is
my goal.
My first step in the pursuit of my goal was to join Thapar Institute of Engineering and
Technology, which has given me a good technical grounding and a problem solving ability. As a
Class Representative at school level, Member Student Consultative Committee at college level or
a Finance Convener of an event held at college, I have always demonstrated innate leadership
capabilities. It’s the time to put another step forward and therefore management education would
be a vital aid in achieving for my goal. I believe this would help me working as a Project
Manager / Leader after my MBA.
environment.
SOP221 - FMS
[not reviewed]
"Citius, Altius Fortius": Faster, Higher, Stronger - Olympic motto
In the contemporary business world this is what every organization and professional aims for and
so do I. Since a young age entrepreneurship and business have fascinated me. I feel that running
ones own business is not only challenging but highly rewarding and satisfying. Hence I aspire to
become an entrepreneur, an effective leader; one who can take his organization to global levels
of excellence.
In this dynamic and technology driven world, I feel it is essential to have a basic knowledge of
technology and thus I pursued engineering from the prestigious Netaji Subhas Institute of
Technology, Delhi University. Here apart from enhancing my technical skills, I have also learnt
virtues such as dedication, perseverance and team work. Organizing events in the college fests
have taught me vital people skills. Doing the summer internship at Maruti Udyog Ltd. gave me
first hand understanding of technological as well as management aspects of a large enterprise.
These skills and qualities, along with many others, are essential for achieving my goals.
I now want to augment my skills with the vital theoretical and practical business knowledge. I
want to learn skills such as marketing, finance and people management which will help me
become a successful entrepreneur. Towards this end I wish to pursue an MBA course from FMS.
FMS, with its rich history, innovative style of teaching, world class infrastructure and a strong
alumni network, in addition to excellent faculty, is my natural choice. I feel convinced that an
MBA program in FMS will catapult me in the right direction towards my goal.

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The Art of Writing SOP

Chapter 1 Websites related to writing SOPs

Chapter 2 General guidelines for writing an SOP

FMS specific guidelines

The FMS SOP structure should follow :

I foresee myself as a global entrepreneur in the future.

SOP4 – Any Bschool

It is said "Any sufficiently advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic." I agree

Etc etc… Make it a lil personal.. let ur dreams/ heart talk….okie????!!!!

To manage you need to learn and listen.

SOP11 - SJPIMR Template

My bachelor studies in ‘Information Technology’ have provided me adequate technical know-

I am specifically interested in doing my course at TAPMI because of the Holistic Approach

The cultivation of interpersonal skills during the course of pregraduate (shld it be

I am specifically interested in doing my course at TAPMI because of the Holistic Approach

"I am seeking, I am striving, I am in it with all my heart." - Van Gogh.

"Though I am a commerce graduate with a modest educational background I lack some

The begining lines are very good.

3) Nope...a perfect fit

4) Bad start ..change it

The second sentence is a repetition

Make it a more meaningful sentence by changing the structure.

And WHO THE HELL IS ANON ?? :mg::mg::mg::mg::mg:

What will I get at FMS

“Things haven’t changed much here for few thousand years”

“Things haven’t changed much here for few thousand years”

1)“Death Equalizes Life” – At end irrespective of ones material possessions, enjoyments,

An urge to be an entrepreneur, to successfully marry science with a commercial enterprise,

An urge to be an entrepreneur, to successfully marry science with a commercial enterprise,

(f) learning "though" rather than "besides"

(g) drop the technical college thing........steer clear of negatives

When I joined the Industrial Engineering course at College of Engineering, Thiruvananthapuram

Cross-functional knowledge of different aspects of management is my forte.Hailing from a

(a) Cut out the 1st sentence........start with "As a child....."

A good one. Crisp and to the point.

A few things you can look into for improvement

1) Is it possible for you to break it in two equally lengthy sentences?

My technical undergraduate studies have been an integral part of my intellectual development.

“Life is growth, and, after some time, growth is life”.

Otherwise everything else sounds good !

To want to be what one can be is purpose in life – Cynthia Ozick.

To want to be what one can be is purpose in life – Cynthia Ozick.

"Our generation has had no Great Depression, no Great War.

"Prediction is difficult, especially the future" - Niels Bohr.

"Prediction is difficult, especially the future" - Niels Bohr.

Few suggestions for improvement

"Being a child of a successful investment consultant, attracted me towards a similar disciplines

2) Doesnt convey appropriately.... replace it by

"to prusue my undergradutaion in engineering studies."

3) replace by "equip myself"

4) replace by "To achieve this"

5) Unclear due to improper sentence construction

1) Appreciating the imporatnce of interpersonal skills, team building which r essential

Wheew !! You are not giving me an opportunity to nitpick ! :gm:

Okay dude, say something wrong so I can nitpick :mg:

Okay so finally you gave me some work :gm:

3) Break it into two sentences

4) The structure of sentence is wrong...you can re-word it something like this

6) Spruce up this sentence

Having completed my Bachelors of Engineering in Electronics and Telecommunication and

"What I am today is a consequence of choices I made yesterday; what I

I strongly believe that the course of one's life is determined by the

IIT Delhi, with a Management course focusing on systems & especial

IIT Delhi, with a Management course focusing on systems & especial