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Hannah Jacobson
4/24/12 10:09 AM
. [1]As June 11, 1962 arrives rolls around the three men are ready and fully equipped for anything thrown at them during the escape.
Hannah Jacobson
4/24/12 10:15 AM
I
know
that
I
wanted
to
keep
this
section
brief,
and
just
as
background
but
elaborating
a
little
gives
more
background
so
that
when
I
mention
this
later
my
reader
will
be
able
to
recall
this
from
earlier
making
it
easier
to
make
connections
throughout
my
paper.
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and onto the roof, from the roof they went down to the water, where they got on the crude raft with life vests on and set off into the horrific bay to freedom.
Hannah Jacobson
4/24/12 10:20 AM
One of the aspects of my paper that I am working on is empty wording. I felt that the sentence continued to run on and on and said the same thing continuously. I want my paper to be concise yet descriptive so I needed to take out the empty wording and replace it with something more useful.