Day 3

Annotated bibliographies
Writing summaries
Shifts
student presentation -
capitalization
Introducing the Annotated
Bibliography
What is an annotated bibliography?
A bibliography is a list of sources used for research
(Works Cited, References)
An annotation is a summary and/or evaluation

An annotated bibliography includes a summary
and/or evaluation of each of the sources
Annotations can
Summarize
Assess
Reflect
What is the purpose of an annotated
bibliography?
Forces to read each source more carefully and
critically
Help one gain a good perspective on what has and
is being said about topic
Helps clarify issues, current arguments, and develop
personal view
Helps other researchers
What does an annotated bibliography
look like?
Bibliographic information of source follows either
MLA or APA style guides

Annotations for each source are written in
paragraph form

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/owlprint/614/


Guiding Questions for Annotations
Paragraph 1: Summarize
What are the main arguments?
What is the point of this book or article?
What topics are covered?
Paragraph 2: Assess
Is this source useful?
How does it compare with other sources in our
bibliography?
Is the information reliable? How?
Is this source biased or objective? Why?
What is the goal of this source?

Guiding Questions for Annotations
Paragraph 3: Reflect
Was this source helpful to you?
How does it help you shape your argument?
How can you use this source in your research
project?
Has it changed how you think about your topic?

Annotated Bib discussion
Read the samples
1. Is it formatted correctly? What is wrong?
2. Is the citation information given in the correct order?
3. Read the first paragraph after citation #1. Does it summarize the
source by answering the guiding questions (What are the main
arguments? What is the point of this book or article? What topics
are covered?)?
4. Read the second paragraph after citation #1. Does it adequately
asses the source by answering the guiding questions (Is this
source useful? How does it compare with other sources in our
bibliography? Is the information reliable? How? Is this source
biased or objective? Why? What is the goal of this source?)?
5. Read the third paragraph after citation #1. Does it provide a
reflection about the source by answering the guiding questions
(Was this source helpful to you? How does it help you shape your
argument? How can you use this source in your research project?
Has it changed how you think about your topic?)

Eng 102BC
Summarizing
Paraphrasing
Summarize the following sonnet:
Let me not to the marriage of true minds
Admit impediments. Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove:
O no! it is an ever-fixed mark
That looks on tempests and is never shaken;
It is the star to every wandering bark,
Whose worths unknown, although his height be taken.
Loves not Times fool, though rosy lips and cheeks
Within his bending sickles compass come:
Love alters not with his brief hours and weeks,
But bears it out even to the edge of doom.
If this be error and upon me proved,
I never writ, nor no man ever loved.
How to write a summary
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Paraphrase
Before summarizing, what must sometimes be done
first?
What is a paraphrase? Is it longer,
the same length, or shorter than an
original passage?
Puts passage into own words
Same length or longer than an original passage
Might be longer when attempting to clarify difficult
language or text
WATCH OUT FOR PATCHWRITING!!!
Summarize the following sonnet:
Let me not to the marriage of true minds
Admit impediments. Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove:
O no! it is an ever-fixed mark
That looks on tempests and is never shaken;
It is the star to every wandering bark,
Whose worths unknown, although his height be taken.
Loves not Times fool, though rosy lips and cheeks
Within his bending sickles compass come:
Love alters not with his brief hours and weeks,
But bears it out even to the edge of doom.
If this be error and upon me proved,
I never writ, nor no man ever loved.
Is a summary longer, the same
length, or shorter than an original
passage?
Shorter than an original passage
Sometimes must paraphrase before writing a
summary in order to understand passage
WATCH OUT FOR PATCHWRITING!!!
Read sample summary essays
1. Does the essay follow MLA format? What is incorrect or
missing?
2. What is the thesis of the summary?
3. What is the title and who is the author of the reading?
4. What are the stages of thought (divisions) in the body
paragraphs?
5. What can be omitted to increase the summarys brevity?
6. What is missing from the summary that keeps it from
being complete?
7. Where is the summary biased or objective?
8. Where are the grammar and mechanical errors? Think
capitalization, run-ons, fragments, appropriate language,
exact words, wordiness, passive verbs, to be, shifts
Rank essays in order from best to worstwrite on board
Shifts
English 102BC
Eliminate distracting shifts
These distract or confuse readers
Point of view
Verb tense
Mood or voice
Indirect to direct questions/quotations (statements to
questions)





Make the POV consistent in person
& number
First person emphasizes writer
Good for informal letters and writing based on
personal experience
Second person emphasizes reader
Good for giving advice or explaining how to do
something
Third person emphasizes subject
Best for formal academic and professional writing





Make the POV consistent in person
& number
Our class practiced rescuing a victim trapped in a
wrecked car. We learned to dismantle the car with
the essential tools. You were graded on your speed
and your skill in freeing the victim.
Our class practiced rescuing a victim trapped in a
wrecked car. We learned to dismantle the car with
the essential tools. You were graded on your speed
and your skill in freeing the victim.






Maintain consistent verb tenses
When writing about literature, use present tense
(especially fiction)
The scarlet letter is a punishment sternly placed on
Hesters breast by the community, and yet it was a
fanciful and imaginative product of Hesters own
needlework.
The scarlet letter is a punishment sternly placed on
Hesters breast by the community, and yet it is a
fanciful and imaginative product of Hesters own
needlework.








Make verbs consistent in mood &
voice
Three moods in English
Indicative is used for facts, opinions, questions
Imperative is used for orders or advice
Subjunctive is used to express wishes or
conditions contrary to fact
The counselor advised us to spread out our core
requirements over two or three semester. Also, pay
attention to pre-requisites for elective courses.
The counselor advised us to spread out our core
requirements over two or three semester. She also
suggested that we pay attention to pre-requisites
for elective courses.








Make verbs consistent in mood &
voice
Each student completes a self-assessment. The self-
assessment is then given to the teacher and a copy
is exchanged with a classmate.
Each student completes a self-assessment, gives it to
the teacher, and exchanges a copy with a
classmate.








Avoid sudden shifts from indirect or
direct questions or quotations
Indirect question: We asked whether we could visit
Miriam
Direct question: Can we visit Miriam?
1. I wonder whether Karla knew of the theft and, if so,
whether she reported it to the police.
2. I wonder whether Karla knew of the theft and, if so,
did she report it to the police?
1. I wonder whether Karla knew of the theft and, if so,
whether she reported it to the police.









Avoid sudden shifts from indirect or
direct questions or quotations
1. The patient said she had been experiencing heart
palpitations and could the doctor please run as
many tests as possible to find out whats wrong.
2. The patient said she had been experiencing heart
palpitations and asked me to run as many tests as
possible to find out what was wrong.
2. The patient said she had been experiencing heart
palpitations and asked me to run as many tests as
possible to find out what was wrong.









For Thursday
Read Behrens Chapter 2 (critical
reading and critique)
Write a one or two paragraph
summary for each of your sources