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Descriptive Writng Example
Descriptive Writng Example
My first experience with a carnival ride was a Ferris wheel at a local fair. Looking at that Ferris
wheel, I was dumbstruck. It was big and intimidating. Ever since that first impression a long
time ago, these rides have reminded me of something to be afraid of. Even the engines sound
scary.
Rewrite with a sensory details, figurative language, and vivid action verbs
My first experience with a carnival ride was a Ferris wheel at a local fair. Looking at
that looming monstrosity spinning the life out of its sardinecaged occupants, I
was dumbstruck. It was huge, smoky, noisy and not a little intimidating. Ever since that
initial impression became fossilized in my imagination many years ago, these rides
have reminded me of mythical beasts, amazing dinosaurs carrying off their
screaming passengers. Even the droning sound of their engines brings to mind the
great roar of a firebreathing dragon with smoke spewing from its exhaustpipe
nostrils.
Goal: Descriptive writing vividly portrays a person, place, or thing in
such a way that the reader can visualize the topic and enter
into the writer’s experience.
Characteristics: The general characteristics of descriptive writing include:
• showing, rather than telling through the use of active verbs and precise
modifiers