IELTS WRITING TASK 2

31-01-2015
Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild
animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

It is argued that protecting wild animals and birds is drawing too much concern and too many resources
of the society. Personally, I totally agree with this point of view.
There are two main reasons why I think people have paid too much attention to the protection of
animals. One reason is that many non-governmental organizations have been established in order to
protect animals all over the world. However, they take too much care of animal-related activities in
many parts of the world. For example, it is unreasonable that PETA, an animal-protecting organization,
accused Katy Perry of using tigers and elephants in her own music video Roar for commercial purposes
while she did not. Furthermore, news about wild animals can be shared rapidly on the Internet. If a bear
is imprisoned somewhere, this news will be widespread on social networks such as Facebook on a large
scale immediately.
In addition, people have also spent too many resources protecting wild birds. Firstly, a great deal of
money is required to carry out any project to protect wild birds, in which infrastructure and research are
the two most expensive. The more difficult research to preserve the DNA of wild birds is, the more it
costs. Secondly, the expenditure for this protection is quite unnecessary to some extent. While funds
should be raised to improve the living standards in some regions, investment into bird protection
appears to be a waste of money.
In conclusion, it seems to me that both concern and resources are overspent on the protection of wild
animals and birds in this modern world.
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Written by Qun (lp t2-t5 thng 2/2014)
Nhn xt:

u tin, mi ngi nhn vo cu bi. phn ch in m l nhng t kha m mnh ngh mi ngi
nn ch trc khi lm:
Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild
animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

Written by Ngoc Bach

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Comment [A1]: t tt hn -> "attracting" (dng

"drawing" khng sai )
Comment [A2]: B "the". Dng vi ngha
uncountable s tt hn. Xem t in ti y:
http://www.oxfordlearnersdictionaries.com/definiti
on/english/society?q=society
Comment [A3]: "However, they care too much
about ...." hoc "However, they are too concerned
about...."
Comment [A4]: Thng s dng noun hn thay
v ing form. -> "...an animal protection
organization..."

Comment [A5]: in

Comment [A6]: Khng spend concern c ->

"...both concern and resources are focused too
much on the protection....."

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y, bn Qun tho lun animals vi birds ring. (phn thnh 2 kh, mt kh cho birds, mt kh cho
animals). Mi ngi cng c th chn phn kh theo "attention/resources" (mt kh cho attention,
mt kh cho resources) cng c
2 hng ny u ok. min l bi vit a ra c cc h tr lin quan. V bi vit ca bn Qun
lm c iu ny. Cc cu topic sentence u nu c trung tm ca on vn, h tr cho cu tr
li phn Intro. Cc h tr cho topic sentence u lin quan (mt s c s dng v d gii thch)
T vng trong bi s dng lin quan n ch v phn ln chnh xc (xem cc li sa phn trn).
Ng php s dng ng, c cu iu kin, c mnh quan h, c bit verb tenses dng a dng,
phong ph

D kin cc cu bn c th hi sau khi c xong bi vit

1) Bi ny sau khi cha xong bao nhiu im ?
Rt nhiu bn khi c 1 bi vit hay quan tm n im bi c bao nhiu ? Th mnh lun tr li
th ny:
iu ny ch c gim kho ielts mi chm chnh xc c. (Ngoi ra cn c chnh gia cc gim kho.
Gim kho ny 8.0, gim kho khc c th 7.5..)
Anw, c nhn mnh tin rng sau khi sa cc li trn -> Bi tt t band~8.0.
2) C phi hc xong lp Writing ca mnh s vit c bi th ny ?
Rt tic l KHNG. Phi ni lun l mnh ch nh hng v ch ra phng php tip cn tng dng cu
hi trong ielts writing. Thng ng php cha tt, mi ngi hc xong im vit s tm band 6.0~6.5.
Vit c nh trn, nn ng php t u phi tt, vn t vng tng i.
3) Anh Qun l anh no ? C p trai khng ? C bn gi (bn trai) cha ?
Lik fb: https://www.facebook.com/mike.odonnell.131289?fref=ufi&pnref=story
Theo mnh bit l ang FA :(

Chc mi ngi hc tt :D
-Ngc Bch-

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