Inthismodernage,Somepeoplesaythatitisunnecessarytoteachchildrentheskill

ofhandwriting.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?

TodayNowadays,itseems thatyoungpeoplearelesslikely towrite bypens and

pencilsthanlikeouroldgenerationsdidbefore.However,whetheritisstillimportant
toteachchildrenhowtowritedocalligraphyhascausedaheateddebate.Regarding
this issue, I think it is definitely important to teach young generations some
handwritingskills.

Ontheonehand,ifschoolscancontinuetoteachstudentshowtowrite,itwillhavea
positiveimpacton(ourthepreservationof)cultures.Itistruethathandwritingskills
are an indispensable part of cultures. For example, Chinese characters have been
changed in the past 5 thousand years, which is a part of history of this country.
Therefore,ifstudentscanlearnhowtowrite,theymight gainaninsight

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pointsintheparagraph.)Also,hopefullythiscanstimulatestudentstodigintotheir
cultures.

However,somepeoplearguethatitisawasteoftimetoteachchildrenhandwriting
skills.Thisisbecausemanypeopletodayliketomaintaincontactswiththeirfamily
members andfriends withtelecommunications, whicharesoconvenient andtime
saving.Thisisparticularlythecaseforthoseyoungpeoplewhorarelyputpens to
papertoday.//Inaddition,somestudentsnowliketodoassignmentsortakenotesby
computersinthelecture.//However,thatdoesnotmeanthattheskillofhandwriting
isnolongerimportant.Moreimportantly,whatwe
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writewordsorsentencesifourcomputers gotcrushed.Itistruethathandwriting
skillswere,areandwillawaysbeimportantinoureducationsystemsnomatterhow
theworldischanging.
(Good use of vocabulary, but unfortunately you have too many points in this
paragraph, and the argument seems really unclear. Please break the points into
differentparagraphsandgivesupportingevidencesforeach.)

Inconclusion,althoughhandwritingskillsseemtobelessimportanttoday,thereisno
waythatsuchskillswillbereplacedbytelecommunications.Infact,ascomputersare
gettingmorepopular,governments,teachersandparentsshouldpaymoreattentionto
handwritingskills.
TaskResponse56
Makeyourpositionclear,anddonotsitonthefence(meansAgreeandDisagree
atthesametime)
Focusonthekeywords:Handwriting.Characterisonepartoftheculture,butitcan
alsoberepresentedinotherforms,suchasaprinteddocument,andthereforeitisnot
equivalenttothehandwriting.Toputitsimpler,wecanusecharacters,andcharacters
areimportantforculture,butwedonothavetowriteitbyhand.Inthis sense,you
havenotaddressedthequestion.
Give detailedexamples, i.e. Wheredo weuse handwritinginreal life? Signthe

contract,writealoveletterorverifythecreditcard,etc.
Coherence&Cohesion6
Keeponepointineachparagraph
LexicalResources7
Goodvocabularies,butyouneedtostayontopic
GrammaticalRange&Accuracy78
Theaccuracyisgenerallyspeakingfine.