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LiuYuxi:21SongofBamboo
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HereisanotherlovesongfromanothergreatTangmaster.Hopeyouenjoy
it.

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indexofmyHKEJpoetry
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LiuYuxi(772842):SongofBambooTwigs1of2(1Green.Ogreenis
thewillow...)
1Green,Ogreenisthewillow,placid,peacefultheflow,
2HarkandIhearontheriver,songsfrommylove,mybeau.
3Totheeast,thesunisup,tothewest,drizzlespersist
4Thoughtheysaythesunisnaught,tome,thesunisaglow.
TranslatedbyAndrewW.F.Wong(HuangHongfa):
30thOctober2008(revised3.11.085.11.0817.11.0816.12.0825.2.09
28.4.09)
Translatedfromtheoriginal:21(1...)

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*Theoriginalpoemisin7characterlines.ThisEnglishrenditionisin
hexameter(6metricalfeet).TherhymeschemeisAABAasintheoriginal.

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*Line1:IhadconsideredGreen,serenebuthavedecidedthatGreen,O
greenisbetterforbeingmorefaithfultotheoriginal.

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*Line2:Followinglove,thewordbeaushouldbetakentomeanloveror
suitoronly,andnotdandyorfop.
*Line4:ThemaindifficultyinthislineisthatinChinese,(meaning
sunny)and(meaninglove,affection)havethesamesound,thus
creating,with(no/not)and(have/is),adoublemeaningof
and.Ithinkmyrenditionhascovereditwell,particularlyhaving
writtensongsfrommylove,mybeauinline2.Iftome,thesunisaglow
isconsideredtoosubtle,anexcellentalternativeisforme,mysunis
aglow
.

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4comments:
TravelLoksaid...
ForusnotschooledinChineseliteratureandpoetry,Iprefer
thealternativeyousuggestinLine4"forme,myloveis
http://chinesepoemsinenglish.blogspot.com/2009/04/liuyuxisongofbambootwigsi.html

YueFei:ManJiangHong(The
RiverAllRed)
MaZhiyuan:TianJing
Sha"AutumnThoughts"
LiuYuxi:21Songof
BambooTwigs1of2(1Green,Ogreenis
thewillow...)
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aglow",whichmorequicklyevokestheromanticnatureof
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May22,2009at8:36PM
fishsaid...

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DearUncleFat,

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Here'smy"sandygall"attemptbasedonyourgreat
translation:

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December(1)

Greenisthewillow,placidtheflow
Overtherivercomesongsfrommybeau
Theeastisfine,thewestindrizzles
Yeornay,theglowflickersso.

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Mustbeterrible,Iknow.Hopeyouwouldn'tmind.

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October31,2010at5:02PM
AndrewW.F.Wongsaid...

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ofBambooTwigs1of...

DearTravelLok,Thankyou.Youhavemadeupmymindfor
me.Itwillbe"formemyloveisaglow"then.

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Dearfish,Ithinkby"sandygall"youmean
"bold/brave".Yoursisanexcellentattempt,butthelast,line
isabittooweak.
December9,2010at10:49AM
AndrewW.F.Wongsaid...

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DearFish,IjusthappentorevisitthispoemandfindthatI
shouldhavesuggestedtoyouanalternativeline4as"Say
ayeorno,theglowglowsso".Apologies.

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