Chapter after Jims escape

Jim woke up to the sound of horse's hooves clipping and clopping,

echoing down the alleyway.Sitting up a million thoughts poured into
his head. Jim was wondering if theyd figured out that hed left or if he
would starve to death.

Meanwhile at the workhouse Mr Scissons had realised Jim had

escaped so he was giving the carpet beaters quite the telling off.
WHY DID YOU LET HIM GO!!!! screeched Mr Scissons.
We didnt know we thought he went back inside with the others!
answered the carpet beaters innocently. YEAH RIGHT,YOU BETTER
START LOOKING FOR HIM!! added Mr Scissons FINE yelled the
carpet beaters.
Back at the alleyway the sun had risen and Jim had gotten up and
was ready to get moving. He brushed himself off and started to limp
out of the alleyway.Suddenly he heard a BANG behind him.Cautiously
he spun around there he saw a WILD DOG!

Levelling the Writing

Narrative

Criteria

Level 2

Level 3

Level 4

Sentence
Types

Mainly simple
sentences with some
compound
sentences.

Mainly simple and compound

sentences and some complex
sentences.Questions and
speech used.

A good range of sentences used.

Complex sentences used to link
paragraphs and steps with
punctuation (commas) usually
accurate.

Sentence
starters

Most sentences start

similarly either with
the proper or pronoun
eg Jim or he

A range of different starters in

including adverbial phrases to
give reader variety and detail.

Sentences starters are regularly

recrafted to add variety. Adverbial
phrases are added selectively for
effect. Some deleting occurs at
recrafting stage.

Punctuati
on,
Grammar
(Editing)

Some fullstops and

capital letters present
in wrong places.
Sentences often with
grammatical errors

Capital letters and fullstops

mostly accurate.
Speech punctuation accurate
with variety. Some other
punctuation present eg ! ? ,
;

A good range of punctuation used

including colons, questions marks,
dashes and most commas to mark
clauses in complex sentences are
accurate. Risks taken with advanced
punctuation eg semicolon

Organisat
ion

Ideas grouped
loosely

Paragraphs used to separate

character description, time
and places etc

Ideas clearly organised. Most

paragraphs open and closed clearly.
Good flow between paragraphs.

Vocabula
ry

Some specific word

selections.

A range of ambitious words

used to add interest. Some
use of figurative language eg
simile and metaphor.

Words and phrases regularly

upgraded and/or deleted to add
variety. Selectivity happening. I will
add this word here because it will

Detail /
Elaborati
on

Mainly a list of
actions of characters.
Little description and
emotion.

Some detail added to support

clear picture for the reader.
Character emotion included

Carefully selected detail added which

includes dialogue, description of
setting and character emotion shown
not told.

Structure
&
purpose.

Basic opening with a

middle and ending

Clear structure An opening

with a deliberate hook. Some
build up to a climax and
resolution.

An engaging and exciting opening

that enables the reader to be
interested in what they are reading. A
range of hooks used throughout.

Language
features

Some inconsistent
tense and person eg
present and past
tense.

Mostly accurate tense and

person.
3rd person / present tense.

Tense and person is consistent

throughout and sometimes
deliberately different. Flashbacks
included