Proposal Part 1

by Keldan Campbell

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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

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Comment 1
Great design, but MAN is this wordy. See if you can shorten it while still communicating meaning
ef f ectively

Comment 2
it's great that you bold the "T o" line.

Comment 3
nice detail!

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Comment 4
T his comes late in the document, and it's not quite clear enough yet. You need to make sure
that by the end of the f irst graf , the audience knows what you're proposing.

Comment 5
Great question and perf ect place f or it. you need to address this sooner rather than later in the
document.

Comment 6
lower case i!

Comment 7
needs a period!
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Comment 8
Accessibility is commonly connected with disability and making something accessible f or people
with disabilities or a wide range of abilities. Are you using it in this way here? If not, change the
term, or explicitly re-def ine it. If it is, make that clear.

Comment 9
T his is on the same page. :(

Comment 10
Nice re-design!