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Review For Zhan Wangs Essay
Review For Zhan Wangs Essay
In this essay, you did a great job in defining and explaining the concept of
language community. Your explanation is very thorough and you incorporated the
references from the textbook in your explanation, which has some good sides and
used is quite academic. Then given a closer look, I realized the majority of your essay
focuses articulating the concept of language community while lacks the explanation
of strategies and examples that you used in writing an informal register. At the
beginning of your writing, you mentioned you chose using WeChat as an example to
But later in your writing, you failed to give further explanation on how to connect
The good side of referring too much content from the textbook to explain the
concept of language community is that readers can have a very detailed and all-
around comprehension about the concept. However, the downside is that you didnt
use appropriate required MLA citation. Also, it would be better if you are able to
provide more explanatory and supportive examples when analyzing how language
community affects human communication and life and how WeChat can be used as an
There are minor grammatical errors in your essay but they do not affect much on
the understanding of the essay. In my own opinion, I think the language of the essay
overall is too wordy. It could be better if you can keep it more succinct, accurate and