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Personalreflection
Personalreflection
Caylie Shelton
Ms. Sanchez
ERWC, Period 1
17 May 2017
Extreme Changes
For my reflection letter I have chosen the Racial Profiling essay, the Juvenile Justice
essay, and the Bullying essay for my three strong essays. For the process work, I chose the Into
the Wild Journals, the outline of the problems with food and the Brave New World Lit Circle
Sheet. From this work, I will reflect on what I learned about the structure of essays, the
the year. I will evaluate my strengths of using figurative language and MLA format, and also my
weaknesses by explaining what I need to work on. I will address new skills I have learned by
showing the improvement of evidence supporting the thesis, as well as focusing on having strong
commentary. My weaknesses mainly focus on ethos, pathos, and logos. These particular essays
will show my improvements throughout the year as they are written in chronological order.
Throughout the year, I wrote three strong essays that showed my strengths and my love
for writing, and those were the Racial Profiling essay, the Juvenile Justice essay, and the
Bullying essay. The first essay, written in First Semester towards the beginning of the school year
was the Racial Profiling essay. Since I had a strong opinion on this topic, I was motivated and
ready to take on the challenge of expressing my opinion, yet also using the correct evidence to
back up my claim. Throughout the Racial Profiling essay, I used parallel structure in order to
help with the structure of the paper, and also to aid with the sentence flow. As shown in the essay
when I continuously used repetition of the word to in order to portray the importance of all of
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the verbs in the sentences. Also, I used a wide range of vivid vocabulary words such as violent
and irrational to completely point out the fact that racial profiling is wrong and certain races
should not be targeted solely based on the color of their skin because it alienates individuals and
unfortunately degrades their self worth (Shelton). Overall, this essay was one of my strongest
because of the importance and the drive I showed towards this certain topic as well as the
strengths I portrayed. The next essay I chose for my personal reflection was the Bullying Essay.
This topic is something I take extremely serious. In this essay, I mainly focused on the
wrongdoings of cyberbullying in which I then shared the use of snapchat, facebook, and ask.fm
to help show the extreme circumstances each of those social media accounts can have on a
childs life. I shared my opinion on this subject by explaining how teens can easily hide behind
a computer screen, as well as be completely anonymous which then gives the bullies more
ammunition to harass their victims more (Shelton). I expressed the effects of cyberbullying
which can most likely lead to suicide which is an extremely dark topic that most people do not
want to deal with. The lasting effects that bullying can leave on a childs life is insane and the
fact that cyberbullying is so consistent and seeming to be never-ending, it makes it difficult for
teens to get away which can lead to consequences of possible suicide (Shelton). The last essay I
chose was the Juvenile Life Without Parole. This essay was one of the last ones written in second
semester, so it shows my complete improvement. Even though this essay took much thought and
preparation due to the fact that I had no real opinion, it forced me to do research in order to
understand the topic better. I came to conclusion that juveniles should not be sentenced to life
without parole and should be given the opportunity to grow up and rehabilitate (Shelton). In this
essay, I used a wide variety of evidence as well as counter evidence to help support my thesis. I
also portrayed the many alternatives and the life changing events that could have caused the
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child to do something so horrific. While murder is no excuse, juveniles should be given the
opportunity to change their life around. Throughout the Juvenile Justice essay, I used vocabulary
with bad connotation towards juveniles being sentenced in order to persuade and force the reader
Not only did my improvements throughout the year help me with the writing of the
essays, the process work had a significant impact as well. The Into the Wild Journals, the outline
of the problems with food, and the Brave New World literary circle discussion charts, assisted
me into getting the grade I did on each of the essays. The Into the Wild Journals were extremely
helpful when writing that specific essay especially since it was an in-class timed write and that
was the only tool we had to use. In the Journals, I wrote different quotes, in which they were
color coded to show the wide variety of adjectives that Chris McCandless conveyed. Also, I
separated the quotes into chronological to show the series of events throughout the novel. Next, I
chose to show the outline of the problems with food in 2017 because it truly shows the issues
that people all over America have with anorexia, bulimia, orthorexia, and binge eating. These
diseases are deadly and often go unnoticed, therefore, my group and I presented this to our class
to really show the importance of healthy eating and the symptoms and effects those disease could
leave one with. This helped me understand the topic better and forced myself to research and
then educate my peers. Lastly, I used the literary circle discussion charts to convey the
importance of the quotes throughout my Brave New World essay. I mainly used the Literary
Luminary when it came to quotes because I focused on how their dystopian world is different
from our world and government in America. Doing these lit circles every day in class helped
with the writing of the essay and made it easier to find quotes because some of them were
Through all the work that was previously discussed, I made major improvements when
creating thesis, finding evidence to support my claims, and using proper sentence structure.
Throughout my course in ERWC, I have also learned how to effectively integrate quotes as
shown in the Bullying essay, where I stated that twitter is another well-known social media site
where 15,000 bullying tweets [are] shared daily, according to the Huffington post (No
Bullying). This shows improvement on quote integration because it flows and does not simply
state, the author said. Another improvement I made was finding evidence to support my claim.
Not only did I use strong evidence with the proper vocabulary, I used statistics to show the exact
evidence. In the Bullying essay, I started of by stating that 92% of teens report going online at
least once a day which means with an increase in online activity, there is more room to witness
or be a victim of cyberbullying (Rawhide). This shows that I used my skills to research and
The strengths I succeed in the most are MLA format as well as the thesis that is the
backbone for the whole paper. Throughout my extensive use of MLA format, I have never run
into an issue formatting my paper to MLA, with 12 point font in Times New Roman, keeping the
correct distance on the margins, double spaced, and correctly citing the author's last name and
page numbers. I am capable of constructing a clear and powerful thesis when it comes to writing
essays and I am able to find the correct evidence to constantly reference back to the thesis
throughout the essay. I am able to state the position I take on the situation as well as keeping my
own personal opinion and pathos out of the essay. However, one of my weaknesses is the ability
to differentiate between ethos, logos, and pathos, as well as integrate and use them into the essay
itself. Another weakness I have is my commentary. I need to work on making sure it is longer
than the quote, and therefore, providing insightful information to the reader.
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After completing the Into the Wild process word, I learned how to effectively create and
construct a thesis that was the backbone for the whole paper. I carefully highlighted each of the
adjectives that described Chris McCandless and it helped me to choose the best possible
description of him. Also, it helped me analyze my quotes in order to prove my thesis correct. For
example, Surprisingly, Instead of feeling distraught over this turn of events, moreover,
McCandless was exhilarated: He saw the flash flood as an opportunity to shed unnecessary
baggage (Krakauer 29). This demonstrates how he was an outcast and it perfectly identifies the
During the course of ERWC this year, my ability to write on the spot has improved
tremendously. I have always had a love for writing, however, this year it has grown drastically. I
have improved on the timed writes given in class and the prep work that has to be done before in
order to create a strong essay under a time constraint. Obviously, there is always room for
improvement.
All in all, ERWC has taught me many helpful skills that will be carried about and used
throughout my life. I am able to easily find and integrate quotes into my essays. Not only did this
help me in ERWC, it helped me in my Government class when having to write DBQs and
provide supporting evidence and site where it was pulled from. Based on what I have heard from
previous ERWC students, it will help me in college and with my future career.