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Kevin Cabrera

Ms. Batty

English 101

May 30,2017

Reflection

In my writing for my essay on Still water since I wanted to see the adjustments I could

make to make my way of writing more clear and stronger. For my reflection I wanted to change

how to paraphrase the intro. The intro had different styles of writing that didn't fit well with my

style. By doing that I wanted my thesis to be of my words and for her to compare to my

character some readers will better understand my essay from the start. To change my words, I

want the reader to maybe have an explicit thought and imagination so when really they could

see The story unfold in their minds. To better represent my dear towards this I should have used

my way of expressing and making words be better understandable for myself as well as for the

readers. My placement for my articles and reliable sources was out of place or not involved for

its credibility that I used. A big error I made it was not crediting the sources I was using, I didn't

use quotations and explore the relation the article had to my character. To improve these errors,

I made I went back to my sources and added work experiences or evidence sure why Perla can

be affected to being a healer, having a sterile husband, and discriminated toward her work and

life. I wanted to better understand my sources that I chose so I can involve myself to give a

reason examples why the sources are the most credible. For the most important part of my

essay was not organizing the topics the correct way. Each paragraph I wanted percentage to
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flow instead of discussing the same thing over and over. The more I explained the better the

reader will understand my concept and my character. I don't want to drive the reader a different

direction.