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Professor Batty
English 101
REFLECTION
I wasn't pleased with the grade I got and there's much editing that can be done . First of all for my
introduction I will add more background information from the book . I will make my my paragraphs
always come back to the main character Darrell and how each point connects to him. My third
paragraph needs revision on connecting the point of sports and grudges onto how I would like to
connect it to the point . Fix conclusion , the so what factor add more. I think the points I have in my
essay are very good, it's just the matter of fact where I have failed to either relate them to Darrell, or
they aren't as clear that I would like to make for the reader to understand. The so what factor should
be focused on more, the main topic that can be seen here is the audience and who the essay is
toward . And I think that this can be fixed and I do believe there is an audience in today's time that
may need to understand. I did use the articles, but I think I need to talk about the book a bit more.
Something I may be looking to do is give a summary or some history of the life of Darrell, so that the
person reading this knows why i'm making my argument that Darrell is saintlike. I would like to fix my
works cited page page I noticed my citing in the essay wasn't where it was suppose to be, as well as