AEC Chart for Online Submission

(THE CHART MUST BE WRITTEN IN PHRASES AND/OR BULLETS! NO COMPLETE

SENTENCES! DOUBLE SPACE EVERYTHING!) Once created, you will be required to
use our little colored half sheet to assist you on your commentary development

State Take # and color code it and date

Take 1: 9/10/16 BABCOCK TAKE 1

Take 2: 9/12/16 BABCOCK 2

Take 3: 9/15/16 BABCOCK 3

Take 4: 9/18/16 BABCOCK 4

Take 5: 9/21/16 BABCOCK 5

Take 6: 9/27/16

Take 7: 9/29/16

Take 8: 10/3/16

Thesis Information:

Author: Abraham Lincoln

Prompt Name: Gettysburg Address

Rhetorical Mode: Persuasive

Subject: The Civil War

Audience: Soldiers of Union side

Occasion: Battle of Gettysburg

Tone: Imperative

Shifts: Past shifts from Present to Future

Purpose: To provide reasoning and a call to action for the Union to unify for the
cause in which the soldiers of Gettysburg died

SQ: It is rather for us to be here dedicated to the great task remaining before us

-Abraham Lincoln, Gettysburg Address line 14-15 less than 5-7

sentences; cite CITE - LIKE PROVIDE LINE NUMBERS - I DONT NEED HIS
NAME OR THE PIECE TITLE SINCE HE IS THE ONLY AUTHOR AND THIS IS THE
ONLY PIECE WE ARE LOOKING AT. IF THIS WAS A PAIRED PASSAGE, THEN
YOU WOULD NEED THAT INFO.
Why: Represents the call to action Lincoln presents

Within Abraham Lincolns persuasive speech titled The Gettysburg Address

regarding the Civil War just after the deadly Battle of Gettysburg and directed at the
civilian citizens of America and the Confederacy, Lincoln shifts from past to present
and finally to the future in order to prove that the civilian citizens of the two
separate entities of America must band together once again and so that YOURE
MISSING AN ARTICLE HERE [democratic]government shall not perish from the
earth,<-CUT SQ DOWN TO 5-7 WORDS because the preservation of the of a
democratic government is the final goal. motivation for unification. is the most
important call to action Lincoln wishes to deliver. REVISE THE ENDING AFTER
GOVERNMENT

Within Abraham Lincolns persuasive speech titled

The Gettysburg Address regarding the Civil War
just after the deadly Battle of Gettysburg, and
directed at the civilian citizens of America and the
Confederacy, Lincoln shifts from THE past to THE
present and finally to the future in order to prove
that the citizens must band together once again TO
ENSURE THAT THE and [democratic]government shall
not perish from the earth, CITE because the
preservation of the of THE NATION democratic
government is of the utmost importance.
Assertion 1 Concept: Unification of the People

Author: Abraham Lincoln

Assertion Concept: Unification of the People
To/by Statement: To justify
Lincoln wished to prove to the people the importance of unifying the nation in the
name of what the Gettysburg soldiers were fighting for I JUST WANT A SYNONYM
FOR TO PROVE
Purpose/why: To bring to light real issue at hand at what needed to be done,

Assertion Sentence: Lincoln attempts <-USING THE WORD ATTEMPTS

DEMONSTRATES UNCERTAINTY/DOUBT IN YOUR ARGUMENT AND CLAIM -
CHOOSE A MORE CONCRETE VERB to persuade the civilians and members of his
country to become unified by personifying the country and its government as a
virtuous child. YOU WERE SUPPOSED TO WRITE YOUR SENTENCE REVISE AND
REWRITE BELOW
Lincoln endeavors <-WC SHOWS DOUBT - YOU DONT WANT TO EXPRESS
DOUBT WITHIN YOUR WRITING to persuade the civilians and members of his
 country to become unified by WHY ARE YOU PUTTING A DEVICE IN YOUR
ASSERTION? personifying the country and its government as a virtuous child. <-
THIS SHOULD BE THE PURPOSE ; REWRITE BELOW THE CHART
YOU WERE TO GIVE ME 3 OF THE LEFT BOXES (3 DEVICES/3 QUOTES/3 ADJ)

ADJ + DEVICE + TEXTUAL COMMENTARY:

EVIDENCE:*****
1. perish WEIRD ADJ Asyndeton highlights and emphasizes the purpose
2. asyndeton of not letting the three aspects of government
3. government of the perish HOW DOES ASYNDETON DO THAT? . This
people, by the people, allows Lincoln to reach his audience on a direct
for the people, shall way and emphasize his purpose and objective of
not perish - Abraham the Gettysburg Address. This is because an
Lincoln, Gettysburg omission of a conjunction allows the series to flow
Address and emphasis to be placed upon each clause in the
sentence.<-CONNECT TO PURPOSE AND TO
4. THIS IS YOUR YOUR ASS (STOP SAYING THIS IS BECAUSE -
SQ...IT CANNOT BE STOP WRITING IN COMPLETE SENTENCES)
YOUR Lincoln wants the goal to be for all three of these
EVIDENCE. I missions to be accomplished by the American
changed my SQ people and his military, not just one or two that
9/15/16 may lie in front of a nonexistent conjunction like
and. WHERE IS YOUR DISCUSSION OF THE
BABY DEVICES??? WHERE IS THE
CONNECTION TO THE ASSERTION AND THE
PURPOSE - YOU NEED TO CONNECT THE
DEVICE TO THE ASS AND PURPOSE
HOW? WHY?
how - by not distracting audience with filler
words and conjunction frivolously
why - to better achieve his addressing of the
goal
-WHAT DOES THE ASYNDETON DO?
I NEED, LIKE, A LOT OF MEANINGFUL
COMMENTARY - ENOUGH TO WRITE 5-7
STRONG SENTENCES..LETS GO BLAKE; WE
BOTH KNOW YOURE BETTER THAN THIS
MEDIOCRITY
baby device - epiphora - also highlights the
simplicity and conciseness of Lincolns cause
in the address.