Riley Truong

Mrs. Mulvey/Parrot

Eng. IP/ Per. 2

17 March, 2017

Collection 4 summative writing assessment

A pair of star crossed lovers take their life doth with their death bury their parents strife.

the literary work Pyramus and Thisbe by Ovid the reader is introduced to two lovers who Commented [1]: Capitailzation

separated by their families feud. In the play Romeo and Juliet by Shakespeare the author show

the readers how love conquers all. This play tells the story of two star crossed lovers Romeo and

Juliet there family feud kept they showing their love. When they got married in secret things

only got worse for them to where they both killed each other. The text describes love that

Pyramus and Thisbe had for each other. They to also had a family feud that kept them from

seeing each other, they set a rondevu see each other when at the end of the story they each other.

Love conquers all. Commented [2]: Missing a thesis statement.

In Romeo and Juliet it shows examples of pain. The text states Shes dead, deceased,

shes dead Alack the lay(Shakespeare IV/v/236). This example explains that her family felt

emotional pain when Juliet faked her death. This is important because the example shows plain. Commented [3]: You need to explain HOW/WHY your
text evidence shows pain in your matters sentence.
In addition Pyramus and Thisbe also shows examples of plain. The text states Dear boy you

died by your own hand your love has killed you(Ovid 131-132). This example explains that

Thisbe showed emotional pain when she show that Pyramus the love of her life had died by his
hand. This matters because Thisbe felt pain when she saw that Pyramus was dead. In conclusion Commented [4]: this is a better matters sentence

these are the examples of pain in Romeo and Juliet and in Pyramus and Thisbe.

In the literary work Pyramus and Thisbe shows examples of conflict. The text states

O jealous wall why do you block our path? Oh wouldnt it be better if you let our bodies join

each other fully(Ovid 26-28). This examples explains conflict because the conflict between the

two families it is keeping them from seeing each other face to face. This is important because it

shows that there was some conflict with in Pyramus and Thisbe. On a similar note there also Commented [5]: How does this example show
conflict?
some conflict in Romeo and Juliet. In the play Romeo and Juliet also shows that there were

some conflict. The text statesUncle this is a montague our foe; villain that is hither come in

spite to scorn at our solemnity this might(Shakespeare I/v/60). The example explains that the

conflict between the montague and the capulet almost got Romeo killed when he went the party. Commented [6]: capitalization

This is important because it shows that there are conflict between the two families keep Romeo

and juliet apart. In conclusion these are the examples of conflict in Romeo and Juliet/Pyramus

and Thisbe.

In the play Romeo and Juliet shows examples of joy. The text states But soft! What light

through yonder window breaks. It is the east and Juliet is the sun. arise fair sun and kill the

envious moon. Who is alright sick and pale with grief. That thou her maid art far more fair than

she(Shakespeare II/ii/2-6). This means that Romeo feat joy when he saw Juliet out on her porch.

This is important because this example shows joy in Romeo and Juliet. In addition to joy in

Pyramus and Thisbe also shows an example of joy. The text states The flame that loved burred

in both of them fire acquires still wore force(Ovid 13-16). This means that the amount of joy

in both of them is too strong to keep them apart. This is important because this example shows
joy in Pyramus and Thisbe. In these are the examples of joy in Romeo and Juliet/Pyramus and

Thisbe.

In Romeo and Juliet/Pyramus and Thisbe both showed that love conquers all. In Romeo

and Juliet/Pyramus and Thisbe showed different examples of joy, conflict, and pain. In

conclusion Romeo and Juliet showed how love conquers all because even by death they will still

be to gather. Also in Pyramus and Thisbe showed that love conquers all because their families

and a crack in the wall didnt keep them apart. Commented [7]: You have some very good ideas in
your essay. You need to work on going deeper when
explaining in your matters sentence. Your matters are
very basic right now. You need to work on going
deeper in explaining HOW/WHY the quote your choice
proves/supports your thesis. You did not include a
thesis, but I was able to figure out what facets of love
you were focusing on. Don't forget your thesis
statement, that should be the basis of your entire
essay. Also, work on integrating quotes, try to get away
from always saying "the text says." Good Job! 75/100