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Rough Draft - Short Report
Mary,
Good work overall on your rough draft. It is focused and presents interesting and
relevant information regarding gender equality in China. I marked grammar and
content throughout much of your paper. As you revise, proofread carefully for
grammar errors and places where you want to revise the content of your report.
One area of concern is that there are many areas in your paper where you simply
copied from a source and didn't attempt to paraphrase. This is unacceptable and will
result in a failing grade for this assignment if it persists in the final draft.
Remember that whenever you use ideas from other sources, you need to paraphrase
them. If you use direct quotations (the same words, unchanged), you must place them
in quotations to show that you are using the exact words that your source used.
One issue with your use of sources is that you seem to have copied another persons
paraphrase of a source and then cited the original source. In other words, you are
copying secondary sources and citing the primary sources. This is doubly problematic,
since you are in essence taking credit for someone elses paraphrase.
See the Turnitin report on your draft to help you see where this is happening in your
paper. Then, rewrite any sections that have quoted material by paraphrasing, quoting,
and citing the sources.
Chinas male preference has a long history. Until at least the 1950s, men offered main
financial support to the family, while women were doing chores at home. The
safety net for women, such as medical insurance and fringe benefit, was relatively
weak.
Do things change in the 21st century? This report evaluates womens status in China
general, China hasnt achieved gender equality. Despite the fact that women has
reached a much higher status than in the old times, China seems to be stuck on a kind
Economic Independence
Although China is the second largest economy in the world, Chinese womens
economic participation and opportunity are much less than mens, and hasnt show
any improvement in the past years. According to the World Economic Forum (2016),
the female/male earning ratio is now about 64.9% and has kept at that level for at least
3 years. This implies that most women earn less than two-thirds of what men earn for
similar work. You may owe this to the so-called low level of womens work.
However, female professional and technical workers is actually about 1.07 times of
male workers ( the World Economic Forum [WEF], 2016). This resonates Fang et
men. Apparently, theres still a long way to go for Chinese gender equality in the
labor market.
Education
Whats most striking about Chinese gender gap in education is that more women are
enrolling for tertiary education than men - the female/male ratio was 1.16 in 2016,
ranking the first in the world (WEF, 2016). Its a great achievement which will not
only improve womens social status but also benefit their childrens education.
Nevertheless, it was not the case decades ago. Only in recent years has the country
Of note is that the tuition fees and other costs of sending a child to college can be 20
or more times higher than per capita income of a family in poverty (Liu et al., 2011),
and its common in China for poor families to sacrifice daughters education because
of the traditional preference for sons (Chan et al., 2002). This can explain the low
Chinese womens health always ranks low in WEFs reports. Although Chinas
economy has grown extremely fast in the past decades, womens health level hasnt
improved that much. For example, accounting for 29% of the worlds total, 100000
new cervical cancer cases are recorded in China every year (Guo & Lin, 2012). This
may result from the difficulty in providing health care for the large population in
China, especially for women in remote rural areas. Still, its surprising to find that
Chinas gender equality in health always ranks lower than 114 among 144 countries in
Women are no worse than men when it comes to mental power which is more and
more valued in todays world. However, gender inequality still prevails and prevents
women from fulfilling their potential in most part of China. Women are not equally
paid for the same work as men, not given the same opportunity for education and not
Works Cited
Chan, C. L. W., Yip, P. S. F., Ng, E. H. Y., Ho, P. C., Chan, C. H. Y., & Au, J. S. K.
http://www.nber.org/papers/w18189
Guo, & Lin. (2012). Women's health in rural china. Fresenius Environmental Bulletin,
25(1).
42(2), 275-299.
Liu, C., Zhang, L., Luo, R., Wang, X., Rozelle, S., & Sharbono, B., et al. (2011).
Early commitment on financial aid and college decision making of poor students:
The World Economic Forum. (2016). The Global Gender Gap Report 2016. Retrieved
from http://reports.weforum.org/global-gender-gap-report-2016/