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OET Letter Writing PDF
OET Letter Writing PDF
Ms
Sarah
Hutchinson
Southside
Physiotherapy
Centre
87
Trout
street
Carina
Date:
10-04-2008
Re:
George
Arthur
Bacon
Date
of
Birth:
14-11-1940
Dear
Ms
Sarah,
Comment: Replace with: Dear Ms
Huchinson (if you dont know her)or Dear
Sarah (if she is a well known colleague)
I
am
writing
to
refer
Mr
George
for
a
home
visit
following
left
total
hip
replacement
surgery
see below for details
on
3/04/2008.
He
has
been
on
physiotherapy
treatment
till
date
and
insists
on
early
Comment: Incorrect title. You have 4
discharge
to
care
for
his
wife
who
is
suffering
with
early
stage
Alzheimers
disease.
choices, & 1 & 2 are best
1. I am writing to refer Mr Bacon
Mr
Georges
activities
were
restricted
since
last
year
by
grinding
pain
in
the
left
hip
and
he
2.I am writing to refer this patient
3.I am writing to refer George
has
had
difficulty
in
climbing
and
descending
stairs.
Following
surgery
his
X-ray
reports
are
4.I am writing to refer Mr George Bacon
normal.
Comment: This sounds casual, Replace
His
physiotherapy
treatment
following
surgery
is
as
follows:
with: since surgery
He
is
able
to
walk
with
a
walking
frame
to
the
shower,
and
walks
without
limp
with
the
aid
Comment: Present perfect required here,
of
walking
stick
(07/04/08).
He
can
ascend
and
descend
stairs
with
the
aid
of
walking
stick
replace with: have been restricted
For more details follow this link:
and
completes
exercises
regularly
which
include
active
hip
and
knee
bending.
Yesterday
he
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was
educated
to
do
self-
exercises,
and
transport
and
home
help
was
arranged.
This
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paragraph
is
a
bit
repetitive
Comment: An article is required for parts of
Mr
George
is
a
retired
school
teacher.
He
lives
in
10
Foundation
street,
Carina.
the body. For more details follow this link:
http://oetonline.com.au/mod/assignment/view.
His
Phone
number
is
39760753.
(subject
required)
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I
would
like
you
to
continue
with
his
assessment
and
exercise
management.
Please
do
not
Comment: You need to add a subject after
hesitate
to
contact
me
for
further
queries.
and as it is different to the subject of the first
clause
1. First Clause: Georges activities
Yours
Sincerely
2.Second clause: George
See below for more details
Physiotherapist
Comment: No apostrophe required, Replace
with: Yours sincerely
The OET centre uses the assessment criteria below when assessing
referral letters
Overall task fulfillment The letter structure is quite good but the information does
not flow smoothly. Refer to the model letter for this task
for an example of how to make your letter more organised.
Word length is better at 179 words.
Comprehension of You have included the key points, but the information during
stimulus is not summarised clearly. At times you have written almost
directly from the case notes. Remember the case notes are
in short form and often have verbs and subjects omitted. It
is up to you to put the subjects and verbs in when you
create sentences, and it is much better to summarise the
overall situation rather than lots of specific facts.
Appropriateness of Better paragraphing this time, with a strong introduction.
language However paragraph 3 and the conclusion could be improved.
Refer to the model letter below for this task for an
example of how to do this.
Control of linguistic
features In this letter you made some errors of verb tense, articles
and sentence structure. These are important parts of
referral letters so work hard to gain a good knowledge of
tenses. Refer to the information below, the useful websites
on the course page and the Grammar and Vocabulary Clinic
and study the rules, as you need this knowledge to approach
the exaam with confidence.
Control of presentation A few errors with titles and the closer, otherwise good
features