Fatima Arriola

Professor Batty

English 102

7 December 2017

Reflection on Drama Analysis Essay

The essay I chose to revise is the Drama Analysis essay. According to the graded essay, I didnt

do that well on my thesis. My thesis wasnt clear enough, and everything was not well

structured. I think thats true because my thesis doesnt have a clear argument on what the

prompt is about. For my revised essay, I will change my thesis and will mention about the

subverts binaries because thats something I left out on my graded essay. I also received a low

score on developing my scholarly sources. For the revised essay, I did the quote sandwiches, so

it can be clearer to the reader. I also added a new reference to my first paragraph because the one

I had before made no sense. I also organized all my paragraphs because they werent that

arranged for my graded essay. I had some sentences that were unnecessary to have, so I got rid of

them. On my graded essay, my introduction was a little too confusing, so I rewrote it and

rearranged some sentences for my revised essay. I agree that my paragraphs were filled with

multiples spelling grammars and thats something I have fixed on my revised essay, so you

wont have a tough time reading it. Overall, I think that my graded essay was a little out of place,

so it made it hard to understand in some way. I did a lot of sentences changing and focus more

on the actual prompt this time.