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Rip Essay Final Draft
Lyndon Liang
Professor Crosby
10 December 2017
My love letter to my girlfriend serves to show her that I love her. I demonstrate my love
to her by appealing to her emotions and discussing how we express our love to each other. I also
discuss my true feelings by boosting my credibility through honesty. My piece pushes the limit
for what qualifies a piece as travel writing by redefining the exploration of otherness. As a
whole, my love letter encourages my girlfriend to love me the way I believe I do by convincing
her that we are meant to be together by means of an expression of my love for her.
I wrote my love letter as a wholly pathos appeal to my girlfriend to inform her of my love
for her. Because my letter is based on my thoughts and emotions regarding my relationship with
her, it is heavy with pathos elements. I crafted my letter such that it discusses my love for her
and makes multiple attempts to make that pathos appeal successful. Originally, my love letter
consisted of a few short-lived attempts to accomplish the goal of the love letter. For my final
draft, I expanded my paragraphs to show more passion and added more of them to strengthen my
argument. I added the paragraphs that begin with Before I met you, I was looking for someone
who suited me just as you do, and To me, falling in love is a new concept, because these form
strong arguments that could potentially be very rewarding to my love letter as a whole in
fulfilling its purpose of informing my girlfriend of my love for her and convincing her to think
My letter is very direct to its audience in its structure and language. One love letter
writing guide calls for writers to Share your real feelings...Remember to say I love you!
(Brown). Following this advice, my letter begins with a straightforward I love you. This
immediately establishes that the rest of the piece will surround what I love you means to me by
discussing how I do so. The conclusion also begins by stating To me, you are a godsend,
indicating that I, the writer, very strongly (and nearly absolutely) affirm my thoughts and
emotions that I write in the love letter. By being extremely direct in language and structure, the
letter strikes a formal, firm tone, and thus attempts to build up my credibility as a lover through
an ethos appeal.
better articulated through written words than spoken ones are. With a love letter, there are a
couple of conventions that my letter satisfies to be considered a love letter. Primarily, the
substance of the letter must deal with the subject of love and the goal is to communicate the
writers thoughts and feelings to a loved one. Manifestly, love is the broad topic of all love
letters. Secondary qualities include elegance, complimentary close, and telling the loved one that
you love him or her (Biguenet). My letter, consisting of all of these qualities, would be
Since there are no individual words to describe the way people feel love other than the
word love itself, I must find a way to describe it in my own personal way. The body of the
love letter collectively forms a pathos appeal, as that is the purpose of the letter. For example,
my letter asserts that we share so many interests and come from similar backgrounds, which
implies that my girlfriend is someone suited for me. This implication and its following
explanation notes to my girlfriend that I really believe that we should be together in an attempt to
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convince her to think the same way. When I state in my letter that my girlfriend and I go
together like barbecue sauce and beef brisket, I intend to reproduce the same effect, this time
through a metaphor; however, my metaphor puts the emotional buildup from the beginning at
jeopardy. Another love letter writing guide advises to use a comparison or metaphor to Food is
a good choice, but be careful when discussing food by analogy, since food may be more
attractive on the plate than on the page (Biguenet). Because the barbecue sauce and beef
brisket comparison may come off as strange, the letter has the potential to spoil the emotional
appeals that precede it. I also explain to my girlfriend in detail how I love her; the letter states
that I look forward to seeing you every day and that Im extremely grateful that youre my
girlfriend to inform her of the ways that I do so. My letter also states Though we havent been
together for a long time, I can imagine spending a future with you to express her strong
emotional impact on me as a way to appeal to her emotional side. I continue by listing her
attractive qualities, such as [being] so understanding and forgiving, being so kind, so genuine,
and so caring, and [giving] me emotional support that I otherwise would have to make a call
home to get. By listing these positive, attractive qualities, the letter makes a mixed appeal of
pathos and logos to my girlfriend by getting on her good side. Through all of these primarily
pathos-based appeals, the letter reassures my girlfriend that I do truly feel love for her and
Finally, my love letter ends with my complimentary close with much love to the edge of
the universe and back. Since the complimentary close of a love letter should be extravagant, I
came up with the phrase in order to express my love extravagantly, but not with punctilious
formality (Biguenet). I took the common saying love you to the moon and back and stretched
to the moon to the most extreme, literal length to add this rhetorical extravagance to my love
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letter. This flair adds one last pathos appeal to my girlfriend, which informs her of the extent of
to be my audience because I want to inform her of my love for her and to convince her to love
me back the way I do. To effectively communicate my love for her, I must write eloquently and
pay attention to [my] words; for example, [she] doesnt smell good, but her fragrance
is enchanting (Biguenet). Because I would not want to spoil the emotional atmosphere that the
letter provides, I crafted my piece carefully such that I avoided words that had the potential to
she is either in a bad mood or has a negative opinion regarding our relationship, which would
make her a hypothetically hostile audience. To cover this unintended audience, I added the
paragraph reminding her that I dont know how somebody could be so understanding and
forgiving as [she is] as a logos appeal to use logic to reason her out of a hostile perspective
towards my letter.
My piece is written in the context of modern love, in which people are taking a more
progressive, deeper emotional perspective of love. The letter is also part of a collective free
love movement, which advocates for peoples freedom to love individually (Poldervaart).
Because I am free to express my love in my own way, loosely from traditional love, I express
myself as honestly as I can and format my love letter in my own image. Because of this, I did
letter. My love letter is therefore a contribution to a larger-scale discussion regarding love in the
modern age.
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My love letter fits the working definition of travel writing. My piece explores a sort of
movement through space and time under the influence of love. I write in my piece about how I
felt over time asx I fell in love with my girlfriend. I heavily explore otherness when I discuss
how I feel differently from being in a relationship compared to how I felt when I was not. For
example, I state in my letter that Months ago, I had no idea what it felt like to fall in love with
someone to serve as a starting point for a discussion regarding how I feel and act differently
when in love. After this, I discuss how I gained a new perspective as a result of my newly-found
love. Because I am now in love, Meeting [my girlfriend] allowed me to learn about how to love
the way we do and to explore the wonderful things love does to us. This shows how I have
learned new information about falling in love through the exploration of love. Because my
love letter meets these standards, it satisfies the requirements that qualify the working definition
of what it means for rhetoric to be considered travel writing; thus, my piece fits in the genre of
travel writing.
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Works Cited
Biguenet, John. A Modern Guide to the Love Letter. The Atlantic, 12 Feb. 2015,
www.theatlantic.com/entertainment/archive/2015/02/a-modern-guide-to-the-love-letter/3
85370/.
Brown, Laura M. Heres How NOT To Write A Love Letter. Huffpost, 16 Apr. 2014,
www.huffingtonpost.com/laura-m-brown/love-letter-writing_b_5155402.html.
Poldervaart, Saskia. The Recurring Movements of Free Love. International Institute of Social
www.iisg.nl/womhist/polder.pdf.