It was not apparent where or even if I had a counterargument.

Another change that I had to make

was better including in-text citations for the information that I used for my essay. My thesis gave

a plain explanation of what I was going to write about; it was a too plain and not specific enough,

so I needed to revise it so that I may also give a reason for why Owen wanted to give the view

that he did through his poem. Some of the information that was included in the first and second

body paragraph would have been better in the introduction instead of having them divert

attention from the purpose of my essay.