Erick Castro

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I focused on Rhoda and the way she is described as a killer but failed to fully grasp the

idea that she is there to represent something more than just a killer. I focused too much on her

character and didnt state that she is a representation of the underlying fear that results from

uncertainty and how this affects almost every human. I should instead try to further explain the

concept of fear and then tie in how the story portrays these fears. I also failed to explain my

quotes and should work on how I present the information I get from external sources. My

introduction and conclusion need more work so I can properly showcase my argument and tie

everything together once I have given both examples and evidence to support my thesis. Some of

the information that I discuss in my body paragraphs can also be moved to the introduction rather

than taking away some of the focus from my main points.