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Ms. Cook

Composition

October 1st, 2017

I Have a Dream... That I Cant Remember

Picture this: a man standing before thousands of men. His voice booming, reaching every

corner of the globe. Sweat clinging to his brow as he delivers one of the single greatest and

momentous speeches of all time. This man is Martin Luther King Jr. the civil rights activist that

laid down the foundation on how we view and treat each other as people. His speech hits many

different aspects of literature such as similes and metaphors to create strong images in the

audience's minds. He also effectively uses ethos pathos and logos to give himself credibility by

demonstrating moral, passionate, and logical thinking.

Let's start with ethos. Using ethics to establish credibility is a popular tool amongst

writers and public speakers. MLK Jr. uses this tool to argue against the discrimination between

the black man and the white man. Its ethically and morally wrong to segregate certain peoples

based on their race. Throughout his speech MLK Jr. talks about oppression, segregation, police

brutality, and many other morally wrong things in this world:;

There are those who are asking the devotees of civil rights, "When will you be satisfied?"

We can never be satisfied as long as the Negro is the victim of the unspeakable horrors of

police brutality. We can never be satisfied as long as our bodies, heavy with the fatigue of

travel, cannot gain lodging in the motels of the highways and the hotels of the cities. *We

cannot be satisfied as long as the negro's basic mobility is from a smaller ghetto to a

larger one. We can never be satisfied as long as our children are stripped of their self-
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hood and robbed of their dignity by signs stating: "For Whites Only." We cannot be

satisfied as long as a Negro in Mississippi cannot vote and a Negro in New York believes

he has nothing for which to vote. No, no, we are not satisfied, and we will not be satisfied

until "justice rolls down like waters, and righteousness like a mighty stream. (MLK Jr. I

Have a Dream)

MLK Jr. list all of these moral injustices and tells his audience that they will never be satisfied

until something is done about this. MLK Jr. also directly references the constitution, which at the

time did not protect all of its citizens, to further emphasize the discrimination between the blacks

and the whites:; I have a dream that one day this nation will rise up and live out the true

meaning of its creed: "We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal,

(MLK Jr.). So to briefly summarize, MLK Jr. effectively establishes credibility in his work using

ethics and morals to argue his cause. He will also use logic and emotions as powerful weapons of

persuasion.

Up next is pathos, using emotion to connect with an audience and try to win them over.

MLK Jr. pretty much nailed this one. His way of speaking was already full of emotion and truth.

Couple that with his thought out metaphors and symbolisms and King is able to rally a crowd in

any place. No matter if it's 20 degrees in the late winter night or a very hot Aaugust day, King

finds a way to connect.

I have a dream that one day this nation will rise up and live out the true meaning of its

creed: We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal."I have a

dream that one day on the red hills of Georgia, the sons of former slaves and the sons of

former slave owners will be able to sit down together at the table of brotherhood.I have a

dream that one day even the state of Mississippi, a state sweltering with the heat of
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injustice, sweltering with the heat of oppression, will be transformed into an oasis of

freedom and justice. I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a

nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their

character. I have a dream today!I have a dream that one day, down in Alabama, with its

vicious racists, with its governor having his lips dripping with the words of

"interposition" and "nullification" -- one day right there in Alabama little black boys and

black girls will be able to join hands with little white boys and white girls as sisters and

brothers. I have a dream today! I have a dream that one day every valley shall be exalted,

and every hill and mountain shall be made low, the rough places will be made plain, and

the crooked places will be made straight; "and the glory of the Lord shall be revealed and

all flesh shall see it together, (MLK Jr.).

Kings famous line I have a dream is famous for a reason. That single repetition, that single

phrase make Kings crowd roar that day. And every repetition of it the crowds collective roar

only grew. King was a very emotional speaker, and that greatly influenced his speeches into

becoming more powerful and persuasive. Also with every repetition his voice got louder,

stronger. His voice resonated throughout the audience calling to them. Calling for action, for a

change. And the change he seeks is the only logical solution.

The last literary tool King uses throughout his speech is logos. Using logic to support an

argument or claim. Logical is a critical tool that we make use of in our everyday lives. And most Commented [2]: fragment

people use logic as reason for what they believe or but their faith in. And King knew this. He

knew that when he delivered his speech if it was logical, if it made sense to the public, people

would put their faith in him.;

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But there is something that I must say to my people, who stand on the warm threshold

which leads into the palace of justice: In the process of gaining our rightful place, we

must not be guilty of wrongful deeds. Let us not seek to satisfy our thirst for freedom by

drinking from the cup of bitterness and hatred. We must forever conduct our struggle on

the high plane of dignity and discipline. We must not allow our creative protest to

degenerate into physical violence. Again and again, we must rise to the majestic heights

of meeting physical force with soul force (MLK Jr.).

King argues that it is only logical to fight this injustice with non-violent protest. If you fight a

fire with another fire you are liable to get burned. Instead, King argues, find the solution that

allows the flames to die out. King is able to effectively tie logic into his argument thus making it

a stronger and more effective speech.

So in conclusion King is able to clearly demonstrate a basic understanding of ethos,

pathos, and logos as shown in his speech I Have a Dream. His speech is able to persuade an

audience that change is inevitable, and that it is the only logical solution for the injustices they

have faced are persevered.

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Works CitedCitations

King, Martin Luther. I Have a Dream. Martin Luther King I Have a Dream Speech - American

Rhetoric, www.americanrhetoric.com/speeches/mlkihaveadream.htm.

Martin Luther King Jr. Biography.com, A&E Networks Television, 29 June 2017,

www.biography.com/people/martin-luther-king-jr-9365086.

McGill, Sarah Ann. Martin Luther King Jr. 2017. Commented [3]: When were these incorporated in the
essay?

Rubric rating submitted on: 10/14/2017, 6:33:16 PM by danielle.cook@redstreaks.org

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Comments:
Total: 22.5/25 x 4 = 90/100

Your essays are always so easy to read because they're unique and have their own voice. You
always do a great job with style. This essay offers a very good analysis of MLKJ's speech.
You've organized your points very well and supported each one sufficiently. You do an excellent
job explaining each piece of evidence and how it supports your point. There were some minor
errors with punctuation. Also, you should lead into your quotes instead of consistently tacking
them onto the end of a thought. This is okay to do on occasion, but almost every quote was
done this way. The works cited page should also be titled appropriately. The biggest error is that
you don't incorporate any additional sources into your analysis. They're on your works cited
page, but I don't see any mention to them in your essay. Make sure you fully respond to the
prompt and that you only cite sources actually used in your essay on your works cited page.